Its been a loooong time since you've updated. I hope things calm down in RL and you are able to update again soon. This is such a good story, it would be a shame for it to remain unfinished. I hope things get better for you soon (and not just so you can update).
This is certainly a good story idea, but it would be a much more pleasant experience if it was formatted better (more paragraphs instead of blocks). Also, I could beta read for punctuation for you if you'd like :) I always like to help.
Basically, though, it was a good start. :D
Oh, that's a conversation that's bound to go well... Whatever secrest Erestor knows, I can't wait to see Glorfindel's reaction. That should be just lovely. I'm also quite fond at how you depict him as being annoyed at thinking about her. It's such a delightful way of saying-without-saying. Very nice chapter, as ever. Love the irony of timing.
Oh, I quite like it. Your character development of all three of them is truly delightful. I'm still not sure what to make of Kestral, but amusing she most definately is! A mute elf-maid prisoner...very intriguing idea. And amnesiac, to boot! I love it, I can't wait to find out what both her past and future hold. However, you need to work more on the mechanics of writing, misplaced commas especially, but the words themselves are usually well chosen and arranged. All you need is a bit of technical practice. I quite like the style it's written in, and you have a good balance of details, horrors, and humor. Very nicely done indeed.
NOW Kestrel should burn the book, to set the score with Glorfindel!
Author's Response: oh that book will one day get itself on the crispy side but not just yet! Her memories are slowly returning and she will need to get her own questions answered before she burns that book lol
hi my troublesome writer! ; ) write soon on ne of your storys and ill smile big and happy lol write soon thanks chara
Author's Response: personal problems, college and writer's block have been driving me insane, but i hope to get at least 2 stories updated per week if not all three! i just updated Blood Thorns and have chapter 11 almost complete. Hellfire's next chapter should be up by the week end so i hope you enjoy they both!
Thank you for the new chapter. It really helps me to clear my thoughts when i have something to read. And another vote of thanks for the violence! I love the instances during which Kestrel and Glorfindel are at odds with each other.
Author's Response: Oh they will be at odds for quite a while! LOL They are both used to getting their own way and are totally stubborn LOL A new chapter should be up tomorrow !