"Get back to Rohirrim?" The Rohirrim are the people of Rohan nor a place.
Eomer was Third Marchal not a general.
Orcs and goblins are the same creatures, goblins are just the ones that live in the misty mountains.
Why would Theodred be thinking of Eowyn as though he had a crush on her, Eowyn was his first cousin! Theodwyn, Eomer and Eowyn's mother was Thoeden's sister.
The boys name was Eothain no ...othain.
The belief in Rohan was that when you died you went to the Halls of your ancesters who dwelt with Eru and Bema not the 'heaven' we belive in.
This story is not bad all those Teela is very MS. However, you either need to bring the story back to cannon or include a warning that its quite AU in your summary because you are twisting cannon, alot. I mean movie cannon not book cannon.
For example Eomer was not with Theodred at the Battle of the Ford's of the Isen where in the cannon story Theodred fell.
Please don't feel bad about the above comments I'm a purist and I tend to look for more accuracy to what Tolkien wrote then what most authors are will to put the effort into researching.
Author's Response: Ouch! jeez i apoligies for my impurities as you said. And by the way, i did write Eothain. For some odd reason, it censored it to be ...othain. I mean what kinda name is that, i am not that dumb to type that as a name. When i said Heaven as if in "Halls of the Ancestor" my thining Heaven is certainly not yours...so i once again apoligies for my lack of proper details. "Teela is very MS" - you said, i yet to find what that means. you want AU in my summary? ok i make sure i put that in there. My summary clearly stated it a movie-verse, off topic, so according to the movie (and i mean purely sticking to the movie) no one has any idea where Eomer was...All you see is he galloping inside Eodras with the Prince on his lap. So one can assume that he was with the him in a big fight and he also didn't mention about his whereabouts. Now my above statement may sound like "As if i have not read Tolkien's Trilogy" - not true... when i said "movie-verse- i meant it... I said that the last thing that came to the prince mind was Eowyn - and does that mean he was having a "Crush" on her? - haha you think so. It may have been a random thought, or a in a very friendly way or in a very sisterly way...my line so plain. It didn't state any paticular emotions. "Please don't feel bad..." - Hmm ok, i not feeling bad right now, i am actually happy. You took your time to read my story and critized (Wrong sp?) it, thats very nice of you. I am glad! "I'm a purist and i tend to look for more accuracy to what Tolkien..." - i once again apoligies for my "Attachements" to the movie. Of course the movie is not the exact copy of the books, so my fic will not be the more "Purist" (As you may put it) way. Ciao
Just one question, where are you coming up with these name for they are neither Queyian nor Sindarin, Rohirric nor of the tongue of Numenor.
Author's Response: A very good question: I regret to announce that, none of my names are from Middle earth. All of them are normal names, which are converted into Elvish...Most of them are homage to my brothers and my friends! For example; Nosteruion = is an elvish name for "NOEL" (And thats my name) Cofniben = is an elvish name for "LOGAN" Calanon = is an elvish name for "Aaron" Teela is just a simple name as you can tell. Raina = is an elvish name for Ann And many more... ...So yea these are just elvish names for common household names. No offense, after all i am not claiming my people to be from Gondor, Rohan or elfwoods...these characters are from my own fictional land, that lie in the south of Middle earth. I hope i answered your question!
it's really interesting..
makes me wanna read more.. MUAHAHHA
Author's Response: Thank you once again! Right now i have finsihed Chapter nine and seriously working on Chapter 10 (Trying to give a big finale). And i have just updated 4 chapters, just in order to see the reveiws (You know, just to know whether people like it or not) Since your feedback is so nice i will continue to update it! :-) And on a side note, this is first Fanfic, so if you find any problems please feel free to point it.
i mean woah..
you are good..
that is so good!
you are so good at writing..
i know i know..
being annoying here..
Author's Response: Thank you very much...You made me to feel so good :-)
Pardom me for bothering you again. I'm not PhantomMusic13, that was my name in another fanfiction website i'm in. I'm PhantomsDaugher13, I tend to get them confused sometimes! *Slaps hand on forhead* I love your story, please update soon!
Author's Response: Oh ok! lol I will rememeber that! Thanks...
This is very interesting, and original. Please do continue it. I can very well understand your want for feedback, as I myself never get any. =) But that which I lack, I try and give to others.
Author's Response: Thank you very much Princess Kalen, that was really sweet. Don't worry i will read all of your stories and submit a review, just give me some time to read it :-)
Wow, what a great start! I'm PhantomMusic13, I joined this site less than a month ago, and It's great. Welcome, and I hope you enjoy yourself!
Author's Response: Hello PhantimMusic13, Thanks for that warm welcome. Yeap i am a newbie, but after your review i feel right in home! Thanks once again for taking your time to read my story!