The answer to your question: It is because they're Mary-Sues. Interesting story by the way.
Author's Response: What Question?
Author's Response: Ah i see. Yes i am fully aware that i'd because they are Mary Sue's, I was actually wondering what the constant attraction towards the same old character was. Personally, I like Orlando, but i do get sick of hearing about his bluer than blue perfect eyes.
I think you are doing a good job at making this story very realistic. Do not feel obligated to make it into a romance unless you feel that is the direction it should take. Otherwise you almost have to "force it" when you're writing, if you know what I mean.
In regards to the romance department though, I can see where an elf would be attracted to someone who fell into middle earth, even thought human, simply because of the fact elves live so long and it is probably very rare that they would come across anyone different, if you know what I mean. It would be a shocker to discover they haven't seen it all. Other races don't live as long and therefore probably don't have that been there, done that attitude the elves radiate. Who knows if curiousity would generate lovey dovey feelings, but hey, you never know. As far as not many people writing stories where the girl falls for a random Gondorian soldier, or one of the hobbits, I think many a teenage girl is living out her own fantasy through the story, and let's face it, Legolas has quite the fan club out there.
nevermind I get it now..:)
Author's Response: It can get abit confusing, I sat there and memorised each name and what went with who. Only problem is now i refer to them as their Westron names all the time.
Poor Natalie. Well, awesome story so far. Continue, please.
Author's Response: Yeah I'm writting it as I go cos the damm computer is being stupid. So good news for you guys you get a new section every five mins to read. It would be good to know what your oppinions are about my new fellowship, so I know if I'm on the right track.
Well while we're on spelling.."comfortable"...that's it..I swear...I'm sounding arrogant now..;)
Author's Response: Haha, don't worry, I need to be told! I swear I went back and changed the spellings. It must be a subconsious thing to keep doing it wrong.
I am looking forward to seeing how your characters develop in this story. I like how you are taking the time to set things up before racing relationships forward. I can hardly wait to read what happens after the rude awakening incident!
Author's Response: I've added some more to chapter 6 by the way, the what happens next bit :)
"She had in her eyes, it seemed, the secrets to the entire world and everything in it. It was like the sun, the moon, the stars and the earth all came under that gaze."
oh minor note..don't mean any disrespect cause frankly I think you're very good but it's "conversation"
That's all I've got to say that's negative
Author's Response: Oh no thanks, the more people that correct my spelling the better! :)