Reviews For A Father's Worries
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Reviewer: Charli800 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/11/08 - 06:58 am Title: Paladin Took

Typo: "digest what was going on as slowly he had learned" Um . . . what?

Other than that, it was great. I think your conflict resolution was a little speedy, but the end result was quite believable.

I think I detected a bit of "modern" in Saradoc's dialogue, but nothing major.

Happy writing,
Charli

Reviewer: Charli800 Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/11/08 - 06:42 am Title: Saradoc Brandybuck

Nicely done: I enjoyed this! You convey Saradoc's emotions well. My only nitpick is to query the necessity of the italics. They're difficult to read and I think we could tell that we were hearing his thoughts.

On to chapter two, now!

Reviewer: Bein_Fuin Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 28/09/06 - 04:09 pm Title: Saradoc Brandybuck

wow...

Author's Response: *bows*

Reviewer: Syril Silverleaf Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/07/06 - 06:39 pm Title: Paladin Took

This is really book-verse. No one really remembers the happenings while still in the Shire, for there are not many fics written about it. Good job, again.

Author's Response: You will rarely find something movie-verse in my stories... though character's looks and maybe some settings are certainly influenced by them.

Reviewer: Syril Silverleaf Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/07/06 - 06:33 pm Title: Saradoc Brandybuck

i like this. with all the hiobbit fics i have read, they always make Saradoc out to be a very mean and sick hobbit. This is refeashing to have him be nothing more that the worried father. Good Job!

Author's Response: Thank you. I have never pictured Saradoc anything but a worried father - and a proud Master. He makes an appearance in some of my stories.

Reviewer: Wyn Telemnar Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/05/06 - 07:50 pm Title: Paladin Took

Fatherly love. Sweet to my ears, if MY brother went off somwhere my dad would blow a vessel.

Author's Response: *LOL* Yes, fathers can be quite unpredictable at times - especially where their children are concerned.

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