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Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: LegolaslilsisThenidiel Signed
I love the story!! It's really good and I hope you add more soon!
Date: Jan 31 2011 12:26 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: LadyofLight Signed
I really like this story. Please continue!
Date: May 16 2006 08:00 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Wyn Telemnar Signed
Ohhh, blackmail! Treachery and treason! Ah-well, you want reviews, so here they are.
First of all, do you have someone editing this? I am a real addict to grammer, spelling, and such, therefore my story(s) are perfectly spelled and so forth, (my reviews are in need, though:), but are lacking in plot and those finer elements. ;)
Anyway, I would be happy to beta for you and so forth, if you would like. However, I am realtivly new to computers(our old one, *rude verb*!),so I am still learning.

I think your moving to fast in the storyline, but all my fav storys are as least 2000 pages long (I read fast as you can guess:). The deaths happen too quickly.

"I love you very much, goodbye!", were her last words.

Maybe (You can hit me w/ a brick AFTER I'm done :) would sound better thusly:

"I love you very... much!", she gasped as her sight began to fade, " sweet." Her last words were a mere whisper, breathed with her final breath, and all her love.

Okay, so I'm a drama-ist, but it is more real to the reader.

So, is this long enough? I can continue if you want.

Author's Response: HAHA
Date: May 16 2006 07:59 pm [Report This]
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