I would suggest you find a beta reader or at least reread this yourself and make some edits. I think the biggest problem with it, is it is done in first person which is hard for an experienced author to pull off! Perhaps changing to third person would help. NiRi
Author's Response: I have gotten addicted to first person and can't do it any other way, i'll try to see what i did with the sentences though. Thanks!
Fantastic chapter! I love the way you are portraying Ryko. I feel so sorry for him. Ooh...so now Aragorn gets involved as well? Interesting.
This is such a great story! I really love it, I am officially addicted! Please update!
Awesome first chapter! I loved it! Keep up the great writing! :)
Author's Response: Hannon le... I think we are both on here right now... but glad you liked it. Thanks so much for reviewing and I hope you like the rest!
That is a really beautiful poem! Loved how it flowed. Is it about the story? Guess I'll find out.
Author's Response: Heh... I made it for the story... so unless I have a major plot bunny... yep! :) Hannon le mellon nin!
Great first chapter! Really thrilling. Why was it all in italics, though? Anyway, it was fantastic and I love it. Can't wait for the rest!
Author's Response: Hannon le! It was in italics because it's the prologue and more things would be clarified in the next chapter. Kinda confusing, i might change that part. Thanks for your praise... it makes me feel all happy inside, lol.