I like this! You are certainly correct that it sounds like a ME lullaby.
Could I suggest the name " the world lies grey and wondrous," taken from the text?
It would seem less cheesy than making up an original name, and thus avoid off-putting readers.
Wow... none of it really rhymes but it still goes together. Adjectives painted the pictures.... I love it. Great job, and the only thing I had trouble with was typing 1000 instead of one thousand. Heh... my teacher got on my class for doing that and now it bothers me if someone does it. But that is the only thing. I like this a lot, please write more. Love it! :) I think I'll add it to my favorites... Great job!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks a lot, so glad you like it! :D *does a little dance* Hehe, I never really know when to write "7" or "seven" or which is correct in which context (am German). Are there any rules? Oo Eitherwho, thanks again and I´ll definitely write more (if the muses kiss me^^). :)