The fact that you made up your own language is just awesome. And the poem matches it perfectly. I could *feel* what the words meant.
Author's Response: It's funny cause as I was writing they just came to me. I have no idea what they mean.
Well, it is quite a nice poem. The imagery you have used is beautiful, and it flows very well. However, I'd probably stick to using real languages. Or Elvish, you could always use Elvish! Made-up languages are generally very confusing to everyone except the inventor. Just a thought...anyway, I did like this.
Author's Response: thanks for the advice! I'll remeber that in the future. iggybaby