Title: Eryn Lasgalen Reviewer: Luna Signed
Wow, so many updates in such a short amount of time! Yay! Thank you for deciding to post this chapter even without your beta. I didn't find any problems in it and really enjoyed the following: the joke about the use of the geese feathers, Taeniôn thinking about adopting (to me love is love, and I appreciate you giving that perspective with those four characters), background on what happened to Elaura's fam when she left them, the twins beating up Maglor and Legolas (HILARIOUS!!), Elaura using magic to give us the babie's perspectives, the babies being able to see/do magic, and some more background on the Castle place.
Woo! That's a lot of things to like I guess :)
As for you earlier comments on my last reviews, thanks. You're right about the Mary Sue thing and authors identifying with their characters. To be honest, I never really thought about it until I got into reading fanfiction and saw so many people demonizing it. But I am certainly learning the difference between a ‘bad' Mary Sue and a ‘good' one.
Yes, please be sure to check in on my story :) It's funny... I only meant it to be a drabble to get my brain back into writing but I've become unexpectantly dedicated to it... I'm up to 28 chapters now and over 50,000 words. Funny thing is not only is it already longer than expected, but I have a while to go until my major plotline gets resolved so it will be pretty long if I can finish it!
As always, thank you for continuing to write. I am happy to see them reach Legolas' home and I am interested where you plan to leave off Book 3 and how the twins will develop. I am enjoying seeing the soft version of Elaura and the cute things with the babies, but I miss her warrior side!! Oh, and I cannot wait until the begetting day celebration!! My favorite moments are when everyone (Fellowship and Elaura's other friends) are together.Author's Response: Oh and now imagine my utter embarrassment at just stopping there! I'm glad you enjoyed it all. It was a fun chapter to write and I truly had no intention of it being the last one for over a year! I'm a bad, bad person. I really am sorry. Life got in the way, but now I'm feeling a bit more on an even keel and I'm ready to continue the saga. Of course I intend to finish this book, then write the story of Amlug, but there are two more books in the series that will be posted, too. [/p]
I had that same conversation about Mary-Sues with my niece. She was caught up in the backlash against the TWilight series and I had to explain to her that writers don't write with a movie deal in mind. They write what they feel like writing and whether or not it becomes a best-seller or a hit movie is not up to the author, nor a true reflection of his or her talent. It's a reflection of what the market wants at that time. Most artists are unappreciated by the masses until long after they've passed on. Art is made first and appreciated much later. If you happen to become a legend in your own time, you've won the lottery. Enjoy![/p]
Thank you for taking the time to review.[/p]
P.S. I will keep your expectations in mind, I promise.
Very good chapter, I just love the babies, the little bear suits are just adorable. I'm excited about them getting to the palace, and Elaura meeting her people. I hope all is well with you, and give my best wishes to your mum, I hope she recovers soon.
Author's Response: Thank you. I know I'm a terrible author for leaving you hanging for over a year, but life has a way of telling you when you need to take a break, and I sorely needed one. I'm back on my feet now and intend to get this book wrapped up. If you're still interested, the next book should cover Amlug, but it isn't the last of the saga, by far.
Thanks for the review!
sorry about the delay in reviewing.
another great chapter, i love how the parents are bringing out all the baby stories, especially loved the one with legolas and oropher! the description of rhosgobel is amazing, i've never given much thought to the beornings before, i like how they are a big part of your story. the cubs with the pillows and legolas were adorable and amazingly written, i wish i had half your imagination.
i liked the quote from lion king, that bit always makes me laugh, i think lion king was the vey first film i saw in the cinema, ah the memories :)
thanks for what you said about my artwork, it means alot as i dont get many comments on them and am usually too shy to show them off in person. i'm glad you liked the dresses, i've got loads of them that aren't up on deviantart, i've always liked designing clothes.
say thanks and get well to your mum
thanks for writing as always to you!
Author's Response: Okie dokie. I'm going to answer each of these reviews one at a time, in order, so I don't miss anything. I'm sorry if I'm reading old news. I've had a few life-changing event which are not settled, but there is light at the end of the tunnel.
Delay in reviewing? How about a year to reply? I'm so far past bad, I should have my own lily-pad in a flaming lake.
I'm so glad you enjoyed the Beornings. They were a lot of fun to write about. I finally figured out why I wrote this story. There were always things I wanted to know more about in Middle Earth and I figured the only way to find out was to write it myself. Now I know. Soon, I will continue writing, post my other two stories I've been working on and if I have any readers left, they will know "the rest of the story" as well.
I've always like that monkey!
As for your artwork: I think you have great talent and you should not be afraid to show it. You probably have too much emotional attachment to do it the way I did. Of course my "post it and damn what anyone else thinks" attitude has changed since I became emotionally attached to my writing . . . but it worked well in the beginning. :D
Well, from the looks of it, I'm going to be replying to reviews until my fingers fall off, so I better get to the next one. Thanks again! I am just about ready to finish up book three and write the story of Amlug. My characters have enjoyed their rest, but now it's time to get back to work.
I have actually been following your story for a long while, I read the whole thing and then waited impatiently for you to update. Checked every day, actually. I was rather disheartened when it took a while, and when you finally updated it made my day. And yet I didn't review, which I feel was wrong of me. If someone liked a story I wrote so much, I would dearly like to know. So I thought I should write this, and try and convey just how much I appreciate your writing. When I checked today and realized you had updated and started reading, I realized I had actually really missed you. I think you are a truly talented and amazing lady. And I certainly hope you will continue your good work for a long time to come.
ps. The new chapters are fantastic.
Author's Response: As I've said before, I love to hear from new reviewers! Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to review. I know exactly how you feel when an author leaves you hanging in the middle of a story. My only excuse it that when I write and I'm either rushed or the story isn't flowing, it's even more disappointing when it just goes bad. Reviews do keep me going during the bad patches and I appreciate them very much.
I'm deeply touched that you missed Elaura. Thank you for being so complimentary. I won't stop writing, I promise. I think this has been the longest time between posting and I hope it remains the longest. I'm afriad I've already lost some of my readers and I'm truly sorry for that.
I've decided to go ahead and post 127 without my 'copy editor' reading it; please forgive any typos and let me know if you find them. Hope you enjoy it.
Another Feast, Bear Style Reviewer: Luna Signed
Legolas playing with teddy bears- how cute. Really, all the scenes involving the little bears was adorable. And interesting to look into what it must be like for a bear-child to start to change limbs into human limbs. That *would* be a difficult process. I also liked how Eluara said something to Thranduil about the clothing issue. Honestly, Legolas is 2,000 years old and doesn't need a mommy after all. lol
Once again, I am saddened that I have reach the end (for now) of your story. Sorry to hear that life is rough; I hope you overcome whatever is going on. Regardless, it is in my humble opinion you have really created a work of art in this story. I thoroughly enjoy going through Elaura's journey and getting to know all aspects of Middle-Earth through her eyes. Also, thank you for showing me a different kind of Girl in Middle-Earth story- Since I started reading this story (starting in Feb?) its gotten me thinking about storywriting and you've helped inspire me to throw some creative thoughts out and begun creating my own story (also GIME but it features an OC from the Buffy the Vampire Slayer universe). But your character really got me thinking about how to avoid common Mary Sue pitfalls . So thank you! Your time and effort into this story is greatly appreciated. I hope I will see more updates soon. In the meantime, take care!Author's Response: Yes, and we think human adolescence and pre-adolescence is hard! Yes, Legolas doesn't need a mommy, but he sure needs a wife.
Not to worry, life is good as long as it doesn't end abruptly. I really appreciate your kind words and I'm so glad you've found something in my style you are able to use in your own writing. Keep in mind, by the strict definition, most heroes and heroines of literature are Mary Sue's and Gary Stu's. For example, Agatha Christie undoubtedly identified with Miss Marple, Arthur Conan Doyle probably put a lot of himself into Sherlock Holmes. The same can be said for James Bond and even Superman. There is nothing wrong with it; maybe someone like J.K. Rowling can write books about being a teenage boy in wizard school (something she clearly has never experienced) but most writers stick with what they know and you know yourself better than anyone. I'll be sure to check in on your story, I've always like the Buffy stories.
As always, thank you for reading and reviewing.
Rhosgobel Reviewer: Luna Signed
What an interesting chapter; getting to know the bears! I am not that familiar on the Beornings so thank you for the pieces of information (I know some of it is your own thoughts but I love how you explore more of Arda with each chapter. Please keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks! If I had any plan at all when I started writing, it was to explore the different aspects of Tolkien's works that he didn't go into great detail about. I really appreciate the feedback.
P.S. in my last reply, I meant 'waiting for' not 'eaiting'. However, Mom isn't feeling well tonight and I'm trying to decide whether to re-read and post 127 anyway and just fix any errors reported to me after the fact, or wait. Any preference?
Double the pleasure, double the fun Reviewer: Luna Signed
Yay!yay!yay! 3 updates! How delightful! You have made my week. I enjoyed reading about Radagast's wife and the 3 of them (Her, Galadriel, Elaura's mom) were a fun get-together and her mom's joke about Maglor- Freaking amazing, I loved it!
Author's Response: I have to say it is a good feeling that my writing makes you so happy! Thank you very much for the review. I am currently eaiting for my beta reader (Mom) to wake up so I can edit and post 127. Things are picking up and my characters are speaking to me again . . . a lot. Hopefully they will keep the writers' block at bay!
Double the pleasure, double the fun Reviewer: elfenears Signed
I'm so glad you have updated, i've missed my favourite story these last few months, i know how real life can muck up any writing though, i've not written anything for the last few months, been really busy!!!.
great chapter, i like how we are seeing the twins personality already. legolas smoking gave me a giggle, i kept getting him with a cigar in my head not a pipe :)
off to read and review the next two chapters! thanks for writing, it is very much enjoyed x
P.s please check out my art pages, i've added some new stuff and would love you to look at it. i've added the link to my profile on here to make it easier.
Author's Response: Hello lady! Life goes in those kinds of cycles; sometimes there's plenty of time and sometimes the days are just too short. I can picture Legolas with a cigar better than I can a pipe, actually. Thanks for the review.
Abi, I did finally check out your art and pointed my mom there as well. Of course I love your rendition of Maglor! It's hard to pick out my favorites. You have an incredible eye for fashion; I'd love to wear some of those dresses. The horses, Witch King, and serpents are so detailed, as well as the architecture of Rivendell and Barad-dur. Clearly your skill isn't limited to any particular subject matter. May I suggest you take an anatomical art class if you have the opportunity? I'm positive that with the attention to detail you display, you could do amazing work with the humanoid form. The one titled "A Different kind of Beauty" shows you already have talent in this area. If I had to choose one, I think the Balrog would be my favorite, but it's like choosing a particular flavor of ice-cream . . . I like it all!
Oh, Mom said to tell you she's very impressed too. Also, there was one of your favorites: "Elven path" by ~wrednawiedzma. She said that's how she pictures Elaura riding through Mirkwood with Alfroval and Rhuinsell. That's a mother for you, she sees what she wants to see.
The Mysteries of the Bloodstone Reviewer: Atlantian Signed
Like I said I love this story, I was glad to find out there were three new chapters and they were great. Thank you for welcoming me as one of your writing followers:)I can’t wait for more, hopefully many more books will follow. I hope that everything works out in real life for you. I review again when you update, I will be back!
Author's Response: Thanks! Oh yes, many more books to follow. My mother and I were discussing Elaura's distant future and the one thing we can't agree on is just how long she'll live. Mom wants it to last as long as possible, but I am, unfortunately, constrained by Tolkien's inescapable timeline. Luckily, it gets kind of hazy after the fall of Sauron and gives me wiggle room.
That said, things are looking up for me, thank you for the well wishes. I'm currently waiting for my beta reader (Mom) to wake up so I can edit and post chapter 127.
As always, I greatly appreciate you reading my story and taking time to review!
The Mysteries of the Bloodstone Reviewer: Atlantian Signed
i love this story! It toke some time to read everything but i have done it. Please write more:)
Author's Response: Well hello there! It's always nice to hear from a new reader. Thank you for reading and taking the time to review. Don't worry, there's lots more to come. I've just been experiencing a rather nasty confluence of unfortunate events that all seem to be working themselves out. I look forward to hearing from you again!
Elaura’s Trip gets Trippier Reviewer: elfenears Signed
Cant remember if i reviewed this chapter or not when i read it the first time, ive read it twice now and still finding new little things i love about your writing :)
Please update soon, i'm getting withdrawel symptoms here!!! please please for my birthday (puppy dog eyes) lol,
hope you are well!!!! x
Author's Response: * hangs head in shame* I missed your birthday; I'm sorry. I have been spending my spare time on the story, though. Fixing typos and continuity issues and thinking about what is to come. Thanks for hanging in there! I have promised before I wouldn't leave you hanging, and I won't. Unless death take me and my mother can't figure out how to post what I have already written, it WILL come.
Elaura’s Trip gets Trippier Reviewer: Luna Signed
Elaura & Legolas not remembering each other- I was not expecting that. But their reunion was so cute.
I love that the Ent fruit made the babies be born! I was wondering how soon it would be until we'd see them! Loved the whole setting of the birth and its circumstance.
Elaura's mom being there- Wonderful! So sweet. As to how/why she is there, very creative. I didn't know if you would transport her into Middle Earth like Elaura, but the 'death' and Gandalf delivering the journals was a great concept.
As always, I love this story. Looking forward to upcoming chapters!Author's Response: You know nothing ever happens in Elaura's life as she expects! Can't you just picture Gimli wanting to knock Legolas over the head and drag him out of there? Thanks for your support with the little twists and turns. I do try not to get out of the realm of belief. Thanks again for reviewing. More to come . . . much more!
So What if Elaura Can’t Knit? Reviewer: Luna Signed
I enjoyed Eowyn's sense of humor as much as Elaura :)
And I'm quite pleased to see there is still danger and battle in Elaura's future... I really dislike the idea of her knitting haha. I'm SO glad she gave that up!Author's Response: Hi Luna! LOL @ knitting. It just isn't her style, is it? Yes, there shall be more adventures to come. Thank you for reading and reviewing and please forgive me my tardiness in responding and posting.
Elaura’s Trip gets Trippier Reviewer: lilyoftheval5 Signed
Thank you very much. For writing this. For surprising me yet again with the 'memory forgotten' thing. For having those babies finally delivered.
Author's Response: I appreciate your patience and your review. I'm sure Elaura was getting pretty anxious, too. I'm glad you liked Elaura and Legolas' memory lapse. In such blessed times, it's kind of hard to keep things interesting, you know? Not to worry, I'm back. I'm sorry I didn't respond sooner, but life here has been less than conducive to writing. It's looking up, though. Hope you and yours are well and happy.
Storytime Reviewer: Luna Signed
Aw, I do find it adorable that Elaura is more 'feminine' and how everyone is reacting to her. Admittingly, I don't like the idea of ever becoming pregnant and dealing with all the negatives that go with it, but you do present a blessful side to it.
I know its been a while since I've been on this site, but I am so happy that you are continuing to write! I will continue to read and may take you up on that offer to e-mail you and ask for your draft... Thank you for being an awesome author!!!Author's Response: That's sweet, thank you. You needn't apologize; as you can see, I've been away a while myself. Real life has a way of getting between us and our passions. I appreciate very much the fact you are reading and have taken the time to review. I'm still writing, I hope you will continue to read.
Elaura’s Trip gets Trippier Reviewer: Sarifina Signed
Great chapters! I'm glad the babies are finally here.
I hope this doesn't mean that when Elaura does die that Legolas will forget her again though. That would be kinda sad.
Look forward to reading more! Update soon!Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you. No, by that time this effect should be in the distant past. However, it will keep them from taking chances along the way. I'm truly ashamed at how long it's been. I should have at least responded to your review before now, but things are looking up in my world and I hope to keep the flow going. Now to worry, I have NOT abandoned you, Elaura, or the Series. Not by a long shot!
Elaura’s Trip gets Trippy Reviewer: elfenears Signed
loved this chapter, but when do i not love any chapter of this story :) wasent expecting the twist of having elaura forget legolas. all the elves were really worried and she was quite happy wandering around in the middle even witha big hole in her memories.
off to read chapter 123, thanks for writing xx
Author's Response: That concept didn't start out so good. I argued with my mother about how severe it should be. Originally it was to be a bit more dark and sinister, so I'm glad you like how it turned out. Thanks for the review! I'm off to answer the next one! :)
Man may work from sun to sun, but Wizard’s work is never done.* Reviewer: elfenears Signed
a great chapter, lots of goodbyes and explanations. i loved how you put the old lady who helped elaura way back, it was so sweet and yet sad how she still believed her son to be writing too her. love the chapter title as well, i've found when writing that titles can be the hardest thing to think of lol x off to read the other chapters, thanks for writing x
Author's Response: No kidding! I'll sometimes go through twenty titles until I find one that fits. I'm glad you liked the part with the old woman. I had originally thought she might be Yavanna in disguise, but all kindness doesn't have to be one of the Valar. The story, after all, is not about them. I'm really sorry for taking SO FREAKING LONG to respond and post. I feel like I should be flogged, but the alternative, unfortunately, is forcing it. As a writer, yourself, I'm sure you know you can't force it. When you try, it turns out rotten.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing. It's people like you that keep me from chucking the whole project when I have writer's block.
Aww this is lovely! At last they have their family!!! A beautiful chapter I loved it and cant wait for more! THe babies sound adorable! I loved the way ELaura's mother came into the story, and had fun thinking of Gandalf riding on a huge bike! Hehe!! Fantastic!
Author's Response: Thanks again. I've found a cute little pic online that has the look of Telperion and Laurelin. I'd be happy to send it along, but since it's of a real person I feel a little funny posting it. I hope all is well with you and yours.
Midges, coming through, Party of Millions Reviewer: Devonshirelass Signed
This chapter was brilliant, I especially thought it was hilarious when I was reading about the males with the insect bites, just the images your words described in my minds eye made me giggle! Absolutely fantastic, i'm off now to read the next chapter! Cheerio!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate the fact you have continued to read this story and continued to review, despite my irresponsible lack of posting as of late. I hope you continue to enjoy it. I'm very much looking forward to posting the next book in the series, but there are a few more chapters left of this one to finish, first.
Midges, coming through, Party of Millions Reviewer: Luna Signed
I was looking through my my reviewed stories list to find a story to finish reading when I saw you had update!!! I have no idea how I missed that!
*squeels with joy* Thank you!
I just love how you make Gandalf and Radagast speak... It really does sound like things they would say. I have no idea how you do it.
I'm looking forward to the next two chapters but I'm going to attempt to not devour them s rapidly. Thank you for commenting on my last review and telling me a little bit about the future! I appreciate it :) Happy to hear your working on a story that takes place 40 years in the future! I would love to read it sometime and hope you post it when you're finished!
Have a wonderful weekend!
Author's Response: Can you still sign up to receive emails for updated stories? I signed up a long time ago and still get them. You can opt for particular authors as well as specific stories.
As for how the characters stay in character, I have to have my mom proofread for me. If anyone says something she thinks they wouldn't, or in a way that isn't right, she sets me straight.
I will definitely post both of my other stories, but the future story will have to wait until after book four, because there are definite spoilers. The other one will come before book four as there is a lot of backstory in it for the Battle of Castle Amlug. Book three should end soon after the party arrives in Eryn Lasgalen so the end is nigh, but I won't leave you hanging.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing, I hope you enjoy the chapters I posted today.
another great chapter, i love the use of shrek as a fairytale to share with the others, but now you have the "welcome to duloc" song in my head and i shall have to find an equally annoying tune to displace it :)
i like the way you blend humour in with more serious topics and how you have elaura slowly adjusting to giving up her role as a knight as her preganancy continues.
from a few of your replies i've got the idea that the birth of the twins will be different, i hope you dont let elaura and legolas miss out on some elements of it
keep up the good work xx
Author's Response: I actually had to look up the plot for Shrek before I wrote that. My memory had mashed the three movies into one and it was a surprise to find Farquaad did not live in Far, Far, Away, as I had originally thought. And then there was Prince Charming, who didn't even show up in the first picture. Next time you get a song stuck in your head, try the "Mnah, Mnah" song from Sesame Street; it works for me every time. Just don't go for "The song that never ends" That one is more annoying than "Henry the Eighth" by Herman's Hermits. (hope you have them all in your head now ~weg~)
Not to worry, nobody will miss out on any of the fun stuff, but that's all I'll say, otherwise I might ruin it. Thanks for the review. I wonder where Aelfwine has been hiding lately?
So What if Elaura Can’t Knit? Reviewer: Sarifina Signed
I just finished reading the latest chapters. WOW that bit with all of the guys discomfort with the bug bites was hilarious!!
I'm glad that everyone is being so considerate and dropping in to keep her company too.
You have such a creative imagination and balance drama with comedy so well, it truly is a joy everytime I see you have posted a new chapter.
Hope to see more soon, and I am very excited about these other two books you are working on!!
SarifinaAuthor's Response: Thank you! I guess boys will always find some way to get in trouble, no matter how old they are. As for the other two books, I need to start in on breaking them up into chapters. I've just been writing them straight through and it's going to be a chore thinking up chapter titles. My mother actually asked me to write synopsis for each chapter, too. I told her, "go ahead, let me know when you're finished." She laughed; she knew it would be quite a task. Maybe I'll hire someone to do it?
Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I hope you like the three chapters I posted today. Check out the chapter notes on 123 for my (poor) excuse for taking so long with them. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Midges, coming through, Party of Millions Reviewer: elfenears Signed
Glad to see more chapters from you elaura, they always make my day. the oh sussanna bit made me laugh, me and my friends are always making up silly lyrics in church and sometimes have to go out of the hall because we are laughing so much.
i always love the way you write the interactions of the ladies in this, it kinda makes me feel as though i'm there and listening to their advice, only a few writers have managed to do that so be proud :)
awww poor guys bitten by the midges, though some of them still showing their stubborn sides by not asking for help or taking aules water. i fell into a patch of nettles while camping once and that was bad enough, so i feel for them as it was all over their bodies.
i'm off to read the next chapter, thanks for writing x
Author's Response: I meant to annotate that too, but I forgot. I'll have to go back and do it today. I know it's been a while, but as I said in the chapter notes for 123, I have to be careful about posting while the site is undergoing changes.
I appreciate the encouragement, especially about the ladies. Interestingly enough, I learn from them, too. Hopefully, Elaura's mother will have some more sage advice when the time comes. Hope you enjoy the three chapters I just posted! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
A Gift for the Drúedain Reviewer: Luna Signed
Oh dear... I finally made it to your latest chapter. I am SO sad that, like Elaura, I must employ patience and wait for your latest greatest chapter.
Hmmm... I wonder what will happen next? The trip to Rohan will continue, then Theoden's funeral, then possibly Eowyn & Faramir's wedding? Do you plan on Elaura's story continue one day at a time or will it eventually skip to the birth of the twins and then skip to Book 4 where we fnd out about that Castle? ughhhhh... I *so* want to know!
Fantastic job, by the way. I feel like I never have any real criticism for you and I know as a writer that can be mildly frustrating since you want to hear what you can improve on, but I really just lovte everything :)
Author's Response: Oh dear is right! You caught up with me! The plan is . . . mind you, the characters may have other ideas . . . the plan is to take them to Rohan, have the funeral, a *few* weddings, and the negotiations with Dunland. I *intend* to do some plot hopping at that point and get Thranduil and his party on the road to Eryn Lasgalen. In truth, I never really meant to do the trip day-by-day, but things keep happening. When and *where* the babies are born should be a bit of a surprise to everyone, including Elaura, but I won't say more about that or else I'll spoil it. I'm on my way to getting the next three chapters posted within the next couple hours.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. Thank you also for your patience. Every so often my other two books take me away from this one. One is about the Moriquendi and the other is about Elaura's family about forty years after the War of the Ring. Naturally, I have to go back and forth occasionally to keep things on track.
Hope everything is going well in your life, wish me luck!