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Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/02/09 - 03:05 pm Title: The Wizards’ Duel

Such detailed desription of the surgery, it always plays out like the camera on a CSI autopsy where they go through the bodies but much more involved as the patients are not dead yet lol. i like the little mention of namo in this chapter and how elaura reacted to the energy drain, good thing gandalf intervened before she hugged every citizen of gondor. the battle was good, much fluffier than i had imagined before i read it. though gandalf was going to be lynched by elaura's family when he used the pregant warrior thing against her.
thanks for updating, hope you are well, i'll go read the next chapter x

Author's Response: Thank you! As I've said before, the story writes itself. I know some folks might have been hoping the Wizards' duel would be more exciting, but I expect there will be enough opportunities for the magic feathers to fly in the future. Personally, I'm hoping Elaura doesn't have too many more opportunities to ply her craft in surgery, though as you'll find in Chapter 115, that is unlikely. ;)

Funny about the pregnant warrior thing, I think Elaura is finally coming to understand she shouldn't take things at face value in Middle Earth; now it's time for everyone else to get with the program.

As always, thank you for taking time to review and thanks for reading. I've posted 115 and I'm proofing 116 now. Take care!

Reviewer: Luna Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/02/09 - 05:36 pm Title: ¿Cómo se llama su llama?

I adore that Macavity shows up. I'm curious- Why did you name him that? Is it pronounced Mac- Cavity???

Author's Response: Macavity, pronounced ma-ca-vi-ty with the emphasis on the second syllable, is based on a stray cat that wandered into my folks' house one day and claimed them as his staff. The original Macavity in T.S. Eliot's poem "Macavity, the Mystery Cat" and the Broadway musical "Cats" based on Eliot's works was ginger colored and a bit more dastardly than the long-haired white Macavity of my books and his short-haired, black and white namesake.

They are all, however, classic examples of the feline race. Proud, mysterious, and sometimes downright criminal in their ability to get into leftovers, steal things to hide for later play, assault and battery with thier razor-sharp claws, and utter vandalism in the form of clearing a tabletop of fragile keepsakes.

My parents' cat just appeared one day and made himself at home among their five dogs. He cleared the grounds of all manner of vermin, including mice, rats, and snakes. He was also one of those rare pets that displays a level of intelligence that is almost preternatural.

Unfortunately, he wasn't smart enough not to play in the road and came to a premature end. His spirit lives on in my books and also in a pair of kittens we now share our farmhouse with. Maybe someday, they'll make it into the story as well.

Thanks for asking, Luna. If you've never read T.S. Eliot or seen the musical "Cats", I highly recommend them.

Reviewer: DarkDreamer Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/02/09 - 07:47 pm Title: Paradise Interrupted

I'll never get enough of this! I love it so much!

As I've said before, you are an excellent writer and I can't wait until you update! I hope you have doing good, it's been a while since we talked.

Author's Response: Ah, great to hear from you again! Everything is going well here. I've managed to keep my back from spasming for almost two months, so I think I've finally learned (after 38 years) how to pick things up and what exactly 'too heavy' is. I certainly hope your life is happy and healthy!

Thanks for taking the time to review; it's good to have you back. I'm working on splitting up the next three chapters. 113 is good, but needs a title. 114 is too short and 115 is too long, so I need to figure out where to re-cut them. Those last two need titles as well. I'll probably stay up late tonight and get them proofed and posted. It's a coffee night, that's for sure.

Take care and let me know how you're doing.

Reviewer: Luna Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/02/09 - 03:07 am Title: An Eye for an Eye Socket

Greetings Elaura! I looked over the review per your request and I have no trouble reading your story- it is separated well by paragraphs.

I will say, some fanfics with Legolas falling in love with a modern woman can be very silly and poorly written. Yours is not. Its interesting... I am usually very skeptical about fanfics and how storylines go, but for whatever reason, yours works. I get it.

I was even thinking "Why do I love this story so much and spend whatever free time I have reading it? In many ways, the plot could be silly and annoying. Everyone loves the main character. She bagged the hottest elf. She's super awesome at everything..." But you have written this story, thus far of what I've read, very well. I believe it. Elaura is not annoying. She slowly became good at things and there were struggles. Events are tied in extremely well to Tolkien's books. The characters are simply brought to life in a different way through your words. You've done a great job. I almost wish you hadn't done a great job & I thought of all this first ;) lol

As always, I look forward to continuing reading! I'm interested in Maglor, what further use the Vala will have for Elaura, when she'll finally end up meeting Legolas' fam in Mirkwood, Arwen showing up, and babies! Of course, I have no idea how far you have written, but you do have a hell of a lot of chapters!

Many many thanks for the time you put into this!

Author's Response: Hello again! Thank you for checking on that paragraph thing for me. I guess I'll have to wait until mps clarifies to figure out why it doesn't look right to him/her.

I appreciate your detailed critique; it's very nice to know the work I've put into the story wasn't in vain. Of course, that's not to say I don't get affirmation from all of my reviews, even the negative ones are extremely helpful. I consider those very aspects you mentioned about the plot and characterizations constantly as I write. I think my mom gets tired of me asking her after each chapter, 'is it believable?' 'Is Elaura coming off whiny?' or too smart, too talented, too confident?

I'm glad how much work Elaura has done to come into her talents is apparent in the story; I never wanted her to appear as if everything was just handed to her on a silver platter. Most importantly, I am honored you think I'm doing justice to Tolkien's original works. Sometimes being tied to his timeline is a little challenging, as readers (and me for that matter) are ready for what comes next and we all still have to wait for the day to arrive.

You came across the story at a good time. All of your expectations are in the chapters that are already posted, except she hasn't made it to Mirkwood yet. The most recent chapter I've written and intend to get posted tonight, has the funeral procession on its way to Rohan. Sadly, the end is in sight for this book, but I have a lot of book four written already.

Thanks for all of your insights and compliments. I look forward to keeping my readers satisfied for a while. Wish me luck.

Reviewer: Luna Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/02/09 - 05:56 pm Title: The Longest Day

Oh this was such a great chapter! It even almost makes me wanting to cry, knowing they will not be parted! Ah, I have no words to describe my utter happiness with this story :)

Author's Response: Aww, you're making me blush! It's good to hear from you again. Hey, if you get the chance, could you look over mps' review and let me know if you are seeing what he/she is? The last thing I want is for the story to be hard to read.

I do appreciate your insight on that particular chapter, too. As I mentioned in one of your previous reviews, a lot of folks have a definite aversion to Legolas falling in love with anyone, especially a modern woman dropped into Middle Earth. I'm really glad you are enjoying it. Thanks again for taking the time to let me know what you think of my story! Keep reading, there's a lot more to come.

Reviewer: mps Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/01/09 - 10:31 am Title: The Mysteries of the Bloodstone

i love this series. it is so much better than most other "dropped in middle earth" fics.

but please, please, paragraphs! it is hard to read.

Author's Response: Thanks! I love to hear from new readers. I don't understand what you mean about the paragraphs, though. I'm trying to keep it as readable as possible. Can you explain a little better? SInce it looks okay to me, and I haven't heard of this problem before, tell me what skin you're using and whether you use Internet Explorer, Opera, Firefox, or another browser and I'll try to reproduce the problem you're having. I'll do my best to fix any errors, if you tell me what and where they are. Thanks for the review, hope to hear from you again.

Reviewer: Devonshirelass Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/01/09 - 06:03 pm Title: Paradise Interrupted

Hi,
Thanks for the swift update! I'm soo glad Eowyn is okay! Poor Hilda! I loved this chapter and look forward to reading the next. Until then cheerio!

Author's Response: Thank you! I couldn't leave you all hanging very long. Naturally I couldn't resist a little suspense, but my mother would have killed me if I hadn't written the rest immediately. As always, I love the feedback and I'll have the next few chapters up soon.

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/01/09 - 03:38 pm Title: Paradise Interrupted

hannon le for this chapter. it started of great with the breakfast then poor hilda, ive seen this problem in big dogs and its not nice at all, glad you made her all better.
i love how you write the girls getting together in this, you make them have fun while still retaining elveness.
cannot wait to see more of the contest, do we get to see more ellyn hotness, can you have elrond and celeborn fight it out - that i'd like to see.
thanks for writing and updating this x

Author's Response: Ohh, I don't think I covered anything between Elrond and Celeborn . . . maybe I'll write a little vignette just for you, since you're such a loyal reader. Your reviews are great too, they give me wonderful ideas.

Believe me, keeping the Ladies in character when they're drinking is a challenge, I appreciate you letting me know I'm on the right track.

I felt bad putting Hilda though all that, but she needed some face time . . . or rather muzzle time. I really can't imagine what the orderlies must have thought, seeing their king wiping a dog's rear.

Thanks for the review, keep on reading!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/01/09 - 03:28 pm Title: Blinded by the Light *

great chapter, glad you didnt have eowyn get injured or die, she is one of the best characters especially the way you write her. i like how you have everyone react differently and eowyn learn from her fights as well as the untried soldiers.
poor elaura blinded by the daz whiteness of gandalfs mind, made up for it with the end bit there, thaks for writing

Author's Response: Thank you! I suppose if a glance at Sauron's mind could make Pip catatonic, a look into Gandalf's couldn't go unpunished either. I did used to put on a blindfold when I was little, just to see if I could get around. Never tried it with romance, though.

I appreciate your feedback about Eowyn, too. In my mind, all of the Ladies of Middle Earth got short changed by Tolkien in the character development department. I thought you knew me better than that, though. I would never ruin Aragorn and Arwen's wedding festival!

Thanks again for reading and reviewing. I'll have a few more up soon.

Reviewer: Devonshirelass Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/01/09 - 12:31 pm Title: “If You Can Keep Your Head . . . ” *

Oh my goodness! Eowyn... I hope Elaura can help! You big meanie, leaving the chapter on a cliffie like that! - I hope the next one won't be far away! Needless to say I enjoyed every bit of this chapter as I do the others, and because I have not long ago read the one before this, I can't get the image of Maglor in leather out of my head! Hehehehe! I look forward to reading the next one, so until then, you take care!

Author's Response: Hee-hee. At least I didn't leave you hanging for long. The mental image of Maglor in his fighting clothes is hard to shake, I'll admit. Well, I need to go work on chapter 112, now. Thanks for reading and the feedback. I'm really glad you are enjoying my story.

Reviewer: Devonshirelass Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/01/09 - 11:37 am Title: The Contest

Hi, How's your back? I had a fantastic Christmas thx, hope yours was wonderful too?

I was reading this, and the first thing that I loved was the mental image of Maglor wearing tight leather trousers! A sight to behold! Hehehehe! - Wouldn't mind seeing that!
I am also desperately curious to find out who is behind these poisonous vapoured berry attacks., and Gimli's threat to hit Pippin with Elaura's staff made me giggle especially when he informed Pippin that he would hapily pick up Frodo and hit him witht he staff, this was funny! Hehehehe! I pictured this in my mind so vividly!
I wouldn't mind tasting some of that glittery dust! I look forward to reading more, especially about Elaura's birthday party!
(And what's a Sasquatch?)
I hope you have a wonderful New Year, Take care, until next time!

Author's Response: Well, the name "Sasquatch" originates with the Salish "Indians" of British Columbia and roughly translates as "wild man of the woods." Also known as Bigfoot and probably better known in Europe as a Yeti. For reference, try this wikipedia link: Bigfoot

Since the mental image most people have is related to local folklore, here's a pic of what Sasquatch looks like to me:

Hope this clears things up? Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm off to work on chapter 112.

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/01/09 - 10:48 am Title: “If You Can Keep Your Head . . . ” *

What a cliffhanger, but we know eowyn cannot die, i hope. cannot wait to see how it all ends in the next chapter and how elaura fits in.
i liked the interragation of the grain killer :) though somehow it feels like thats not finished and he is hiding something, maybe thats only to me though.
thanks for updating, i look forward to the next one!

Author's Response: One never knows . . . I'm glad you enjoyed it. I imagine Methlagor will continue to be a thorn in the King's side for years to come. Civilized societies never really have figured out what to do with the criminally insane. I'm sorry the next chapter is a little short, but I found a good endpoint and wanted to get it up because of the cliffhanger in the last one. I'm proofing chapter 112, now. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/01/09 - 07:58 am Title: The Contest

hey i'm glad youre back and didnt lose your files, i remember that kinda thing happening to my, only mine was a college essay that i lost, in my case it was thank the lord for memory sticks :)

great chapter with some lovely interaction between characters. galadriel still checking out celeborn nice!!. i would love to be in a place with scenery like that.
its good to see the ladies working together to solve a problem and the males being the cover for once. eagerly waiting for the next chapter, thanks for this chapter x

Author's Response: Thanks much! Glad you liked 109! I hope you don't mind cliffhangers too much. I know I don't do it very often, but chapter 110 wrote itself that way. Anyway, after chapter 110, I still have two more written. I'll get 111 up as quickly as possible so as not to keep you in suspense too long. *weg* Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Devonshirelass Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/12/08 - 09:14 pm Title: Ever wonder where the phrase ‘Drunk as a Lord’ came from?

Aww the babies sound so cute! Aww! Makes me kinda broody all over again! Lol!

Author's Response: I think every time Elaura shows them off, another Elf couple decides to have a baby. In the time I've spent away from writing, I've managed to work out how and when they will be born. It's quite a way down the road (so to speak) but it should be fun and interesting. In the meantime, I hope you enjoy chapter 109; I'll be posting another very soon. Thanks again for reading and reviewing. Hope you had a lovely holiday season!

Reviewer: Sarifina Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/12/08 - 05:19 am Title: The Hunter Becomes the Hunted

Another great several chapters!!! There are so many things that I loved I hardly know where to begin!! And though I am a dog person myself I loved the interaction with Vardo!
I am greatly looking forward to seeing how the tournament goes, drawing out the murderer as well as the wizards duel!!
You just have so many great things happening!!

Hope you are feeling better and that your health is improving, I can see that it certainly hasn't affected the quality of your writing!!

Hope you can update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you very much, for the well-wishes and the compliments. We'll see a little more of Hilda soon. You've echoed my mother's sentiments . . . she reads and wants to talk to me about something in particular, and then something up comes up and distracts her. I guess that's a good thing! I don't know how traditional authors get along without reviewers, you all really keep me going and give me some great ideas! Thanks again!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/12/08 - 09:08 am Title: The Hunter Becomes the Hunted

once again a wonderful chapter, cannot wait to see the tournament and how it draws out the killer. i like how you have the wise ones competing, i like to imagine them having fun especially celeborn and elrond. loving all these updates, waiting in anticipation for the next one, cannot wait to see the wizards duel x

Author's Response: Thank you! I think you'll enjoy chapter 109. ;) The Wizards' duel is still a chapter or two away. Lots to keep you interested in between though (I hope). Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/12/08 - 06:44 am Title: Landscaping with Legolas

a wonderful chapter, i loved the scene with macavity and elaura's new name, poor aragorn i think he will have to bow to this prince if he wants peace with arwen. keep up the good work and thanks for writing x

Author's Response: Especially if he wants to keep his dangly bits. Macavity is a busy little bee and modeled after several cats I have known and two that have claimed my family and me as their staff currently. Thanks for taking the time to review. Hope you like the coming chapters!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/12/08 - 02:55 pm Title: Revelations

another great chapter loving all the conversations between the characters especially with the rivendell elves and the hobbits. you have given each and every one of the smaller characters a piece in the stpryline not just as background. ive never read a story where i feel such affection for additional people such as dinethor, edwen, and rawnel, even the animals. anyway keep up the good work :-)

Author's Response: It helps to have my folks asking me 'where's so and so? we haven't heard from him/her in a while.' Thanks for the review, there's more to come. If you want to know why it's been so long (this time) have a look at my bio. All is well now, though. Hope you had a lovely holiday season!

Reviewer: elfenears Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/12/08 - 06:28 am Title: Nurn

Jumps around like gollum with the ring seeing your updates, well not quite but i as very glad indeed. sorry to read you have been unwell and i hope and pray you will be fully recovered soon.
loved the chapter and all the mind play, really interesting to see the different types of mind going, i like the image of the honeycomb of aragorns mind. hmmm i wonder what gimli's would be like or thranduil's?. i loved the descriptions of widgits reaction to gwaihir so many little details that make this a delight to read. i've said it before and you're probably bored of my reviews but i love your story and it makes my day to read your work. off to read the next one, thanks for writing x

Author's Response: It's always something! Thanks for the well-wishes, my back is still a little twingy now and then, but, strangely enough, not having a computer for a little while seems to have helped. I'm going to start setting a timer and get up to move around more often.

I'm so glad ti hear you are still enjoying the story and the details. Believe me, I never get bored with reviews. While I was waiting to hear if my files were lost, I would read them and re-read them on my mom's computer. I didn't want to answer any reviews until I knew one way or the other . . . I guess you can see it all turned out well. I need to get back to proofing! Take care and thanks again!

Reviewer: Sarifina Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/11/08 - 06:10 pm Title: Revelations

Great chapters! I'm really looking forward to reading more. I loved your descriptions of how the different characters minds work. I love the imagry of Aragorn's mind working like a behive.

Author's Response: Thank you! Sorry for the long absence. The Holidays weren't my only distraction, but I have everything I need to get back on track . . . knock on wood. Thanks for the review. Look for more soon.

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