okay. i noticed that a few of your paragraphs where in present tense, while others were in past tense. i myself get confused with these tenses so what i sugest is get a friend orfamily member who knows their stuff or get a beta-reader. It's great so far! but will solaris continue with the fellowship?
I don't like that you're making Aragorn the bad guy here. Also, you're upsetting the power balance in Middle-Earth. Solaris is too powerful, she doesn't fit in with the story. You should tone down a little on the descriptions of how 'lethal' she is with her many weapons.
Yeah...again, you need to be more original. You don't have to recount the movie to us in such detail, you should try and have more of your own original ideas rather than a regurgitation of the film script. You could really have just skimmed over this section of the story, if you weren't going to change anything in it.
'Give the gold to the poorest person in Gondor. That is what I would want.'
Ack. Now she's selfless and kind on top of everything else.
If you must make them think she's weak because she's a woman, at least make them gentlemanly. They would be polite and courteous to her, not discriminatory and rude.
Sorry, but Solaris is completely wrong about the gap of Rohan. Saruman would never have been so lax as to stop watching it, even if they were already half-way across the mountain. Remember, he has more than enough forces to watch every route across the mountains, and he wouldn't take such unnecessary risks when he doesn't have to. To be honest, that argument just makes her sound a little foolish.
There seems to be very little new content in this chapter. We've all seen the movie, I don't think anybody needs it retold to them.
As I've said though, your writing style is fairly good if you discount a few grammar errors.
All the chauvinism is getting on my nerves a little. Again, it's a typical Sue thing, having to battle prejudice against her gender. There may have been some subtle sexism in Tolkien's writings, but nothing nearly so blatant. It doesn't really work in Middle-Earth.
Elrond would not just forgive Solaris' threat to Gimli. Her conduct was completely inappropriate in the council setting, and she should have at the very least been reprimanded for it.
'You have my bow and all the skills I possess'. Sheesh, couldn't she just offer her bow and leave it at that? The rest of the Fellowship only ever offered their bow, or axe, or whatever other weapon they could wield. You shouldn't try to make her seem more powerful than any of them.