I thought your story was very interesting. I like it how you had Diamond meet Treebeard. I was very shocked at the part when Legolas and Gimli died. Another interesting thing is that Arwen went along with the Fellowship. Keep up the good work!
Well, that was somewhat unexpected, Legolas and Gimli died, but Boromir didnt? I like the style, and you've extended it a little longer.
(although you didn't actually write anything for the first chapter, the wait was worth it)
It's a bit brief at points, just some constructive critisism
It's "slew," not slayed.
Punctuation goes inside the speech marks, not outside.
Other than that, good, but just a bit too short.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice!