Loved it!!!!!! A great start. I look forward to the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: thanx, it is nearly finished, but on my computer at home! ARGH! so it will take another four days to get out to the public! ~*Sweetie*~
Great story so far! Seriously, I love it. I really like the way you've portrayed the relationship between Nerwen and Aeroniel; the sort of girlishness that I'm sure any female teenager can relate to, yet it fits really well even into such an old-fashioned setting.
I've checked in my copy of the Silmarillion though, and it's definately spelt 'alqualonde'. You skipped an 'l'. Just thought I'd point it out...I can get really particular about the tiniest of errors sometimes.
As I said in my review of your other story, make sure you start a new line for each speaker.
This is a fantastic story. 'Teleporno'...I have always loved that name. lol. It certainly brings a little comic relief to the story of the Silmarillion...though I'm not quite sure that's what Tolkien intended. =P Anyway I really, really like this, you're doing a great job. Please update soon!
Author's Response: okay, can you be my beta? I will email you and ask, cause it would be soooo good for someone to pick these things up that I miss BEFORE I submit the chapter!!! And you have proved yourself a good beta from what I have heard! Thanks for the compliments, and even more for the critisizm. It REALLY helps. ~*Sweetie*~