The short and choppy sentences are such an effective way to show us Shadowfax's feelings! I loved it! Oh, and by-the-by, how did the Orcs survive the fall of Sauron in the first place? That would be an interesting story.
Keep it up!
Author's Response: Yay, you finally um...did something! Great to see you. I don't know how they survived, but pretty much all authors have orcs all over the place post WR.
Aside from the relationship of Legolas and Aragorn in LOTR, I loved the role of horses in the books. Shadowfax in this story has no master, but the image of a magnificent stallion running free is still how I think of him, rather than Gandalf's mount.
In this brief story, you get the sense that another great light is burning out in the land of Horses, and while there is no refuge for him, there is the vengeance he brings on his torturers before he draws his last breath. He fought no less bravely than his human and elven brethren did to defeat Sauron. Sadly he did not survive, but a legend was born in the blood of this horse, to serve as his avenger.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!
This is absolutely amazing! I've loved this story and you wrote it beautifully! I wish I could do as well as this! xxx
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! You're a good writer too!!