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Title: Chapter 1 Arthion's return. Reviewer: Ria Signed
That's a good start. The descriptions are well done. I really like that you describe the characters more through their interactions than their hair and eye coloring. I think you can improve it by proofreading a bit, particularly the direct speech.
Date: 01/30/07 01:43 am [Report This]
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