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Reviewer: Ria Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/01/07 - 06:43 am Title: Chapter 1 Arthion's return.

That's a good start. The descriptions are well done. I really like that you describe the characters more through their interactions than their hair and eye coloring. I think you can improve it by proofreading a bit, particularly the direct speech.

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