I like the story, but I don't think the repeated Balian-abuse is exciting. It seems like he gets tied up and beaten or threatened every other chapter. =( He's such a Walter Scott hero, he should be able to find a way around it. Admittedly, that's all my personal opinion about the plot -- your writing is very clear and vivid, and I dig the way that you're really examining how he might see and understand Middle Earth.
Author's Response: Well, he's going to stop getting into so much of this sort of trouble from now on because all the misunderstandings have been cleared up now. It's going to be much more angsty in the later chapters when the war actually starts for real.
O.O Eomer was cruel! I had forgotten that Balian looked like a Haradrim!
Great chapter, please update soon!
Author's Response: Eomer doesn't really mean to be cruel. It's just plain bad luck that Balian looks like one of the enemy. Eomer will find out the truth soon enough, I promise.
By the way, on my last review what I meant by "the past coming back to haunt him" was that both Boromir and Balian's father got shot because of him. A sorta blast from the past
Hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks. I will be updating soon. I'm glad you liked it.
Congratulations on trying out a new literary technique! That's one of the most enjoyable aspects of writing fanfic. You surprised me in this chapter (a good thing!): I thought you were going to have Guy be the goat and die instead of Boromir.
Author's Response: Thanks. I had quite a bit of fun writing Boromir's stream of consciousness.
Good chapter. Poor Balian, the past came back to haunt him AND he got captured by orcs on the same day...
Author's Response: Well, it actually wasn't in the same day because I was naughty and skipped a few days between the discovery of Guy and the breaking of the Fellowship. But I agree, poor Balian.
really good chapter
does this mean guy is becoming good. he should hae met celeborn coz they are played by the same guy lol
anyway boromir sob but thanks for writing
Author's Response: Um, no. Guy is not going to become good coz I don't think he thinks he is bad in the first place so he won't see the need to change. Maybe he should've met Celeborn, but then it would be another moment of confusion when everyone goes 'He looks like you.'
interesting, but try not to repeat so much of the movies, like in chap. 14. Keep writing!!! :]
Author's Response: I'll try to be more original, but I can't guarantee it. Balian's not really here to turn ME upside down.
And here I thought they'd have found Paris, or Will Turner . . .! This is more drama for Balian, though.
Author's Response: Hmm, Orlando Bloom's good, but you can have too much of a good thing. :P Balian will just have to deal with his archenemy for the rest of the war. Poor him.
I can't actually remember who Guy is, but from this chapter I know he's a git (to put it nicely) Nice chapter, you make the reader feel Balian's emotions (Adds extra praise that has been trying to write for five minutes and has now given up as can't find the right phrasing) XD It's good
Author's Response: Oh, Guy is Balian's lover's husband and the man who has tried to kill him, twice. They hate each other. I'm glad you liked it.
Like it. Quite funny, yet cool. One question: why was Balian salty? Is this when he gets shipwrecked and he's covered in sand? *goes to read even more*
Author's Response: Well, he's salty coz he's been in the ocean since he's been shipwrecked.
Yay! I'm so happy Haldir didn't kill Balian. (ok, ok, it's obvious he wouldn't of. But still) And this chapter was really interesting! I'm so excited about the next chapter! I hope you update soon! (Possibly the randomest review I have ever entered... ^_^)
Author's Response: Thanks. I will be updating soon. Galadriel will be featuring a bit in the next chapter and she and Balian will do some talking.
Thanks for putting in the details about Balin, 'cause I havn't seen the movie. But I can not wait fo the next chapter!!! Please
Author's Response: You so have to see Kingdom of Heaven. It is so good! If you do decide to watch it, try and get the Director's Cut version. It's much better than the cinematic version coz it explains things in more detail.