This is a lovely poem. I wish I could write poetry, but I can't. If you ever stop writing poems AND POSTING THEM you will make my life dull. :-D
Author's Response: don't worry! I shopuld keep them coming! thanx for the kind review! iggybaby
The poem has a really true message, and cleverly expressed. My quibble: I don't like the enjambment of the first lines in most of the stanzas. I think it would be better to just have a long first line or cut it somewhere else.
Author's Response: I see. I'll go correct that now. thanx for the review! iggybaby
Nice! I love it... it's kinda like a poem I just posted, the story name is "Expressions," and the chapter is chapter two, if you care to read. I LOVE this poem... nice work. I'm adding it to my favorites!
Author's Response: thanx! I'll go read yours! thanx for the review! iggybaby