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Reviewer: Elvellon_en_Legolas Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/11/07 - 01:59 pm Title: Chapter 6: Journey to Lorien

Well, I really like your story ^^ , but I've got one remark: I think it's Thranduil in place of Tharanduil... I think I'm right, but when I'm not, you can tell me, oké?

Elvellon_en_Legolas

Author's Response: Ummmm... O!! I see what you mean! I truly have no idea. Maybe we should set up a debate! No, jk, I'll look at the book thanks!

Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/04/07 - 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 4:"I'm afraid I do not know."

..
heh. lol. wasnt expecting that :D

Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/04/07 - 09:44 pm Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger

woah. big blank space after the story
sorry
:P
its going well ^_^

Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/04/07 - 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue

oh cool dude.
lmfao.
dont know how they can know its a vampire
but .. yay
:D:D

Author's Response: Imfao? They know because Aragorn knows because he sucked that guy's blood.

Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/04/07 - 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger

Eh? There's a big huge space at the end of the chapter.. .it might just be a software bug. Anyway, I like it, although I feel you could go without the parentheses. It makes it more fun if we only half-know what the vampire's thinking. And I sent you an email telling you how to use HTML coding for italics.

Author's Response: thanx! yeah, that must have been a little (or big) typo

Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/04/07 - 03:04 am Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue

Oooohhhh.... cool.
Some points of improvement: I'd personally italicize the elvish, put space between paragraphs (already mentioned), check capitalization, and if you don't already I find reading through mine out loud seems to work really well. Go ahead and try that.

But great work so far! I can't wait to see more.

Author's Response: hey, good pointers, but i was wondering if you could tell me how to italisize? you can email me. thanx!

Reviewer: Susan Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/04/07 - 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue

Oh, I love the topic! Thuringwethil and the vampires of Arda do not get enough attention.

I won't quibble about your use of modern language and contractions in elf speech, but have you considered putting more white space between your paragraphs? I find it increases online readability anyway.

Author's Response: that might be a good idea, i think. I'll try it!

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