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Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: wtyw Signed
turned into a tree flowers, enchanting in every morning and evening; think about changing life trajectory, moving fingertip mottled years; think close to fragrant garden, ordered an Elixir of Love. Run over the Red joys and sorrows, bypassing the eyebrows do not regret, received beautiful quiet tip will meet. Those in the past and your sympathy with the idea, is the most fleeting deep soulful singing, is the soul of warm aroma is pupate into a butterfly dance. If your smile into a breeze, printed on the eyebrows, life will be able to warm. Even horizon right close, as long as well, is sunny. In Chihiro years, I met you, is this life worth consolation harvest. In the corner of the season, smile watch, as you stand in a tree form. After the Fruitful in thin and plump change, "Wide pine does not regret," "is merciless but affectionate." Miss at your fingertips condensed into an undefeated flower. Occasionally inventory that a page on your memory, will be the season that he was originally a Red spectators, wanted to do not pleased not to have compassion, after all, arrived, but the fireworks disturbed, refused to become both good and bad easily winking and color of infatuation lake people. Choose a Moonlit Night, sweet heart, shallow dream. Capture a ray of sunshine at your fingertips dance, that a warm breath of fun, a gorgeous twinkling of an eye wrinkle mood. Once, the other side of time, a tree that tree flowers bright, brilliant blooming, maybe all the good that is to wait for a grand colorful met. Month soft water, soft water moon. A ride the storm, with a ride landscape, not busy I, only fleeting warm, rest assured fly, accompanied by heating. A peek into the rain awakened the slumbering landscape vegetation, has awakened memories of past lives. The rain beat the sound of broken jade stone, such as a Zen sound, and if the fresh air, slowly into the quiet heart of the lake. Misty rain, you elegant figure wading. During leisure, always wanted to twist a clear charge to head Dai teaser, play a cordial smile, then laugh Allure. Should the can and would like to use the Jiangnan misty rain soaked Banzhan Chrysanthemum, write a prosperous marriage, take a trip to the end of time; Should you can, please allow me to read a persistent, spring waiting for you, waiting for you to hold me. Say five hundred years before Buddha bowed down to rub shoulders in exchange, that smile is eternal; life is past and continues; beautiful mountains and water. Think through the corridor of the season, able to precipitate into a beautiful smile. In the plume of incense and roll poetry in Qing Yin shallow sing in a toast with the drink, it is enough to warm the rest of his life. I just want to cut photos of life, taken under your smile; I just want Homecoming where you write into eternity. Until one day, we are getting older, offer of each character will be wearing in the past silhouette. Past that mark, in the heart of the Margaret emanation April day Huiyin pen. Rainy night listening to wind and rain lingering; clear night looking for a glimpse of the lights dim. Every trace of air flowing into all due love fragrance issued, joy
Date: May 14 2017 09:33 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 6: Journey to Lorien Reviewer: Elvellon_en_Legolas Signed
Well, I really like your story ^^ , but I've got one remark: I think it's Thranduil in place of Tharanduil... I think I'm right, but when I'm not, you can tell me, oké?


Author's Response: Ummmm... O!! I see what you mean! I truly have no idea. Maybe we should set up a debate! No, jk, I'll look at the book thanks!
Date: Nov 02 2007 09:59 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 4:"I'm afraid I do not know." Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
heh. lol. wasnt expecting that :D
Date: Apr 27 2007 05:56 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
woah. big blank space after the story
its going well ^_^
Date: Apr 27 2007 05:44 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
oh cool dude.
dont know how they can know its a vampire
but .. yay

Author's Response: Imfao? They know because Aragorn knows because he sucked that guy's blood.
Date: Apr 27 2007 05:37 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed
Eh? There's a big huge space at the end of the chapter.. .it might just be a software bug. Anyway, I like it, although I feel you could go without the parentheses. It makes it more fun if we only half-know what the vampire's thinking. And I sent you an email telling you how to use HTML coding for italics.

Author's Response: thanx! yeah, that must have been a little (or big) typo
Date: Apr 11 2007 05:40 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed
Oooohhhh.... cool.
Some points of improvement: I'd personally italicize the elvish, put space between paragraphs (already mentioned), check capitalization, and if you don't already I find reading through mine out loud seems to work really well. Go ahead and try that.

But great work so far! I can't wait to see more.

Author's Response: hey, good pointers, but i was wondering if you could tell me how to italisize? you can email me. thanx!
Date: Apr 10 2007 11:04 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: Susan Signed
Oh, I love the topic! Thuringwethil and the vampires of Arda do not get enough attention.

I won't quibble about your use of modern language and contractions in elf speech, but have you considered putting more white space between your paragraphs? I find it increases online readability anyway.

Author's Response: that might be a good idea, i think. I'll try it!
Date: Apr 10 2007 05:47 pm [Report This]
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