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Title: Chapter 6: Journey to Lorien Reviewer: Elvellon_en_Legolas Signed
Well, I really like your story ^^ , but I've got one remark: I think it's Thranduil in place of Tharanduil... I think I'm right, but when I'm not, you can tell me, oké?


Author's Response: Ummmm... O!! I see what you mean! I truly have no idea. Maybe we should set up a debate! No, jk, I'll look at the book thanks!
Date: 02/11/07 - 09:59 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 4:"I'm afraid I do not know." Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
heh. lol. wasnt expecting that :D
Date: 27/04/07 - 05:56 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
woah. big blank space after the story
its going well ^_^
Date: 27/04/07 - 05:44 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: XoGiggles Signed
oh cool dude.
dont know how they can know its a vampire
but .. yay

Author's Response: Imfao? They know because Aragorn knows because he sucked that guy's blood.
Date: 27/04/07 - 05:37 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2:The Stranger Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed
Eh? There's a big huge space at the end of the chapter.. .it might just be a software bug. Anyway, I like it, although I feel you could go without the parentheses. It makes it more fun if we only half-know what the vampire's thinking. And I sent you an email telling you how to use HTML coding for italics.

Author's Response: thanx! yeah, that must have been a little (or big) typo
Date: 11/04/07 - 05:40 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: Dav Flamerock Signed
Oooohhhh.... cool.
Some points of improvement: I'd personally italicize the elvish, put space between paragraphs (already mentioned), check capitalization, and if you don't already I find reading through mine out loud seems to work really well. Go ahead and try that.

But great work so far! I can't wait to see more.

Author's Response: hey, good pointers, but i was wondering if you could tell me how to italisize? you can email me. thanx!
Date: 10/04/07 - 11:04 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ancient Evil, Prologue Reviewer: Susan Signed
Oh, I love the topic! Thuringwethil and the vampires of Arda do not get enough attention.

I won't quibble about your use of modern language and contractions in elf speech, but have you considered putting more white space between your paragraphs? I find it increases online readability anyway.

Author's Response: that might be a good idea, i think. I'll try it!
Date: 10/04/07 - 05:47 pm [Report This]
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