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Learning To Fly by presnieboer Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 11]
Summary: Orlando’s cousin calls in a favor and asks Orlando to let a friend room with him for a while. Orlando agrees thinking that having a roommate might be nice now that he’s by himself and away from filming for awhile. But when Liz shows up at his door, Orlando has no clue what to do. And when she turns his world upside down challenging everything he knows- maybe for the better- he realizes that he's not dealing with any ordinary woman. When their awkward start morphs into friendship and possibly something more, is it something they can handle? Will Liz help Orlando rediscover some of the things he’d forgotten about the beauty of life?
Categories: Actor Fics
Characters: Original Character, Orlando Bloom, Other
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Graphic Sex
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2747 Read Count: 2704
[Report This] Published: 09/10/05 Updated: 25/03/06
Reviewer: Adoralyna Signed
Date: 25/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: We All Do It

This is a wonderful prologue and 100% truth. Excellent way to begin your story.

Author's Response: Why thank you; your opinion always means a lot to me!

Reviewer: Adoralyna Signed
Date: 25/03/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter One: Calling In A Favor

I really don't like stories written in the first person but you've executed this well.

Just one thing- we all know he's British so try not to turn him into a cliche. The word "bloody" is already severely overused. If you want to throw in the occasional Brit slang word, that's fine. But try going with something like "bollocks" instead. A bit less obvious, that one.

Re-read your lst sentence, I think you omitted some words.

Author's Response: I\'ll take a look at that first sentence but if I remember correctly, it\'s broken up like that on purpose. Kind of done as a stream of thought more than a coherent sentence. And about the bloody thing, you\'re right, I need something less obvious. Plus it\'d be nice to have some more slang at my disposal. Do you happen to know where I could find some?

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Categories: Orphan
Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: Into the West
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
[Report This] Published: 01/01/70 Updated: 01/01/70
Reviewer: Adoralyna Signed
Date: 14/11/05 Title: None

Hello,

I'm afraid I have to give you a negative review for your story. Quite honestly, your spelling, formatting and lack of punctuation make it almost impossible to read.

Its one thing to have a couple of errors throughout your work but virtually every line of this story is fraught with errors. Please correct this and use proper spelling, capitalization, punctuation and formatting for the sake of your readers. If you need help with this, I'd be glad to either send you links to some guides or help you find a beta reader.

~Adora

Author's Response: hey, this was my frist story and i'm only 13 but i will try harder next time. pippinrocks

Summary: Tolkien meets Austen. Marriage is in the air in Minas Tirith. Faramir contends with a gossipy aunt and a fusty servant, and finds out he is to organize the King's wedding. Pippin, Sam, Elladan, Elrohir and three Rangers tell tales over ale and meat pies--and what about that mysterious Captain from Gondor's past?
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Faramir, Imrahil, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7842 Read Count: 1101
[Report This] Published: 08/09/06 Updated: 08/09/06
Reviewer: Adoralyna Signed
Date: 11/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

What a fantastic story! You write with such natural talent and grace and I think the plot of this piece is unique and beautiful. I must say, I'm proud to have it on my site.

Author's Response: Why, thank you! I\"m very pleased you enjoyed it so much, and also pleased to be on the site! I hope you read the rest of my tales as I post them. G.A.