This is very good so far, especially for your first story. I like the way you handled the suspense; you let us know there was something wrong right away, then you drew it out (to the point where I imagine it would have been infuriating and painful if the reader had to wait for updates!) slowly and realistically, dropping just enough bits to keep it going. A little slow perhaps at times, but the realism made up for that. I also like how you picked up the story, so to speak, in the middle, not bothering with needless exposition or introductions but diving right in. I hope to see more character evolution as the story progresses, but you have everyone's relationship very well defined so far; nicely done. I'm particuarly fond of your Thranduil's sudden mood swings and the others' reactions to him; great touch. ;) This Mordraug sounds interesting, and again, good job with the suspense there. I can't wait to see what happens to poor Legolas (and the others) next! ~Tathrin (who is unfortunately retiring for the night as she has an early class--grr! Bloody idiot, starts reading a 61 chapter story late at night...only myself to blame...)

Oooh...what a threat! Loved the part with them at the campfire. Perfect dialogue.

Awww! Heartbreaking. A very impressive chapter, and a highly realistic farewell. Beautifully done.

Ah, bugger...sixty-one chapters...class tomorrow...grr! Anyway, this is being very well done. I'm highly impressed. Everyone's emotions are so poignant and moving. And the scientific detail--wow! How are you doing that? It's amazing! I swear, if I see Elrond in a lab coat next chapter, I won't even blink an eye. The detail is absolutely amazing, and it really adds a whole new element to the story--which is, by the way, beautiful! Great, great fic!

I love this story! I'm glad you posted it on this site, too! :)

Whoah...that was, just...wow. I didn't know my eyes opened that wide. My throat's tight with the emotions you've conjured up. *swallow* I can't believe how sad that was...It's one of those can't-even-feel-like-crying sads, where you just sort of sit there with a lump in your chest and stare...

Author's Response: Yes, I am quite mean to poor Gimli and Legolas. *looks down in shame*

My my, so she's not dead...now that's interesting! Trust little Undomiel to charm even a Vampire into falling for her. ;)

That was a great last line! Awesome!

Heh heh, nope, not the end of Faye after all...nicely done. Seeing it through Mur's eyes and then only arriving to find the aftermath adds a nice element of--well, not really mystery, but something akin to that. Poor little Arwen, getting snapped at; Elrond's just frightened and worried, but she's too young to know that...methinks a conversation or two will be needed to heal that.

That was beautiful. Quite often, all we see is straing between Legolas and his father. It was nice to see how much Thranduil loves him. I like how you put in so much background exposition without bogging the story down with it--nicely done. It was a great insight into Thranduil and how much he cares for his children, and I liked the foreshadowing you give about how Legolas will grow up. Great interactions between all three of them; you really get a sense of how close they all are. Great story!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like the story. The one thing I always tried to do in all of my stories is to show how loving Legolas's family is. I think that is a strong basis for him being who he is. I hate stories that go into so much detail the story gets boring. I try hard to reach a good balance. Thanks again.