Aw, how cute. And Brethil's "he and he and he" description was highly entertaining. Poor Elf Lords, not knowing what the elfing was talking about and which or their sons had had what happen to him! I really ought to feel bad for them, but it's too amusing a mental image.
If Thranduil doesn't kill them, Elrond will. Another excellent piece!
"Which one do you think it is this time?" "It must be his turn, surely." Amazing; their resigned attitude to the mishaps of their sons was marvellously done. I'm really enjoying how you're developing them all.
*dies* That last line was simply priceless! I can just imagine everyone's faces! Hee hee hee! And Thranduil fell in? I would love to hear that story. Then again, I think I like it better with no one knowing. Either way, I'm highly entertained.
Hee hee hee--get what they deserve, indeed! *snicker* And the word "twincident" is pure genius!
Oh, no! Poor Arwen! What are they going to have her do?
Yes, they are in for it now. Poor little Arwen! ...and, for that matter, poor Imladris! Heh heh!
Ai, ai, a Balrog is come!
Beautiful, beautiful. I love how you're developing everyone and weaving their relationships. Nicely done!
Oh, man! Legolas, you dorkfish! Hee hee. This was a very fun little chapter. I quite like how everything's progressing, and I eagerly await the chaos of the archery contest tomorrow.
aaww! That was so adorable! Aw, Legolas is so sweet. I'm now in the midst of a cute-attack; that was beautifully done. Exceptionally sweet, but done skillfully enough that it doesn't seem forced or over-done. Good work!
Last chapter's developments between the twins was interesting; I liked how you wrapped it together this time around. The encounter with the troll was priceless. I was wondering how that was going to be done, and you proved more imaginative than I'd have come up with! And now, great, we have Legolas attacked by the river. Silly elflings, didn't see that coming. You'd think that, of all people, a Mirkwood Elf would know to be careful of enchanted rivers...
Hee hee hee! Elrond's closing admission was great. "If I had a choice, I would rather go to war again." *snigger* Can't wait to see what happens when the truth comes out...
Aw, very nice. I hope to see an update soon; I really enjoyed it. You have a great command of the characters and you're explored them and connected them very delicately. You command of the language, also, is excellent; good choice and arrangement of wording throughout. You made the elflings young but not modern, and kept the "tone" of Middle-earth even when dealing with children. Even your minor characters were more than names and had dimension to them, enough to easily appear as real people and not simply plot-fillers. Speaking of plot, it was very nicely arranged. Nothing earth-shattering or world-threatening, yet the mix of interaction, dialogue, action, and suspense worked out very well to weave a cohesive story from what could have appeared as just a series of isolate incidents. You also interjected just enouigh humor to both make it a great read and to make it fit the ages of the characters--and their mischevious natures! Very imaginative, very plausible, and very well done! I look forward to the rest eagerly!
Well this looks like a highly interesting AU. There's enough typos in this first part to be vaguely distracting, however, particuarly in the first two paragraphs; you might want to clean those up when you get a chance. The writing is well done despite that, however; and the premise looks like one that will indeed be an exciting and intriguing tale to tell. Arwen's foreshadowing was nicely done, and starting out by reviewing what had gone before was a good idea. Nice work with the characters, too, although of course I'll be able to say more of that after I've read a bit more...
Great sense of history. I particuarly loved the opening dialogue this chapter. Good descriptions as well, of both beauty and destruction. The dragon's attack was nice, too!
Buggered computer erased what I wrote...let's see if I can do it again... Well, I quite liked the bit with Frodo and Sam. It showed both despair and hope very well--that good old hobbit resiliency. Are you going to bring in any earlier Elves? There are a mind-boggling mess to choose from, but a brief allusion or two would be cool to see. Numenor was an interesting development; I have a feeling this "heir of Isildur" is going to cause some interesting problems to be overcome in the future. Speaking of interesting developments, the introduction of the Nazgul is certainly one! I can't wait to see what the secret is behind their return; I'm sure it's going to be anything but good for our heroes.
Nazgul on dragons. Wonderful! Just what we need! And the Black Captain, lovely! Poor, poor Merry. Once apparently just isn't enough for some people...er, wraiths... And yes, wraiths; they don't really have "flesh" so to speak. Ah, the Palantiri...that's a cool idea. I wonder if this has anything to do with Numenor? (Bloody Numenorians...always causing trouble...just can't leave well enough alone, can they?) And oh, lovely! As if all this wasn't enough to deal with, you give us Morgoth! *sigh* No lack of ambition with you, is there? ;) Melkor the fallen Valar; that is not good news. Speaking of the Valar, how are they taking all of this? And will the (what were they called?) Forgotten Caves and Ar-Pharazon come into play, or are we not yet at the Last Battle? Highly interesting...love the sense of history, both past and present, that you've pulled into your work. Very imaginative idea, too! Good job.
Ooh the irony! Such a lovely, innocent, beautiful story. Very sad in that it hints at what will come when the innocent fun fades with time and Shadow. Nicely written; I especially like the subtlety. Excellently done. I feel as though I must go read the original though, although I'm sure that I'll prefer this version. Quite beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you! *bows*