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There were typos and stuff, but overall I enjoyed.
Interesting, and I liked it, but one note: you absolutely cannot go from third person Point of View and randomly inject yourself into the story by saying stuff like "Now, I'm not talking one of those..." etc. It's extremely distracting, and doesn't make sense either. Why would the author be saying this anyway? You could just as easily say: "It wasn't just one of those..." etc.
wowza. I like. *continues on*
This is really v. good...
whee, I like the alternating POV.
ahh! must...keep...reading...
I really really liked this story! goood job.
Very good! I like your Thranduil, hehe. I especially like your writing style; it is very fluid and smooth and engaging. Keep up the good work! :D
Author's Response: I love Thranduil, so I try hard to make him appear to others the way I see him. I\'m happy you think my writing is easy to read. I try hard at that, too. I will keep going as long as I\'m able to. Thank you very much.
Soo...goood...you really are quite talented.
Author's Response: Why, thank you! Very much so!
HA this was definitely the most amusing almost slash thing I have ever read. Whooo. :D
Author's Response: Thank you, so glad you enjoyed! :D
woo ya. It's kind of funny how they thought that she was some magical thing, hehehe. all mary sues should be shot.
Author's Response: Can you imagine Saruman sending out hordes of MS\'s to make the Fellowship\'s lives miserable? That would be evil, even for him! ;) Totally agree about the shooting. More than once, even!
I really liked this a lot, it was very compelling. The emotions were real, Ireth was real. Although Arwen seems to have forgotten that she is the daughter of a great lord, too, and she didn't listen to him when he didn't want her to marry Aragorn! Yet she expects Ireth to do so with a Haradren prince. -_-
Great job though :D
Eek, Eomer is so odd, lol. One minute he's sensitive, the next he's oblivious. Sort of how guys are though, haha.
it was good, your choice of first person was good. However, when Eowyn was "thinking" to herself, obviously, you switched back and forth from present and past tense alot, which can get confusing.
HA, "I demand a recount" hilarious. Okay, I think possibly you should change the "we have decided that you are a dwarf." it's more taking Treebeard's line than originality. Also, Galadriel is a very influential Noldo, but I doubt that they would let a dwarf into Aman just because she wanted them to. lol. I liked reading it though, it was quite amusing. teehee ^_^
Author's Response: Who says I\'m original? I\'m a thief!
Perhaps Galadriel\'s not that<\\i> influential, but oh well, she had to be for the sake of the story.
Thanks for reviewing!
Faramiriel
This is certainly a good story idea, but it would be a much more pleasant experience if it was formatted better (more paragraphs instead of blocks). Also, I could beta read for punctuation for you if you'd like :) I always like to help.
Basically, though, it was a good start. :D