I am not emo and certainly not a fan of emos, but if you are going to write a story about them you might try to be a bit more mature about it. As in, at least have good punctuation, and refrain from saying the same thing over and over. Unless this isn't a story, and just a rant.

yup, I read all the way to chapter 18, because I'm naughty and didn't review along the way. I started reading this because I was bored and it sounded good, but then I was like, "hmm, I don't like Legolas/Arwen" but I kept reading because you have a wowza writin' style. :P

but anyways, at first I was like, "legolas is sentimental and pissed. legolas is obsessed with arwen. lawd, this is going to be one heck of an odd fic." but I kept reading because like I said, you write well.

But then when you jumped to the flashbacks, it made it so much more convincing. The legolas/arwen relationship thing. I don't think I would have believed it if you hadn't done that little "insight into the past". That and that alone was the one convincing factor that made the story all the more heartrending for their separation. if you had not done that, I would have been like wth? and stopped reading. but you made a great choice, so, yay! :D

The emotions were soo good, Eowyn so conniving, and a really original twist on the Aragorn/Arwen relationship. Parts with Arwen being all depressed and sad about her fate yet trying to be glad SO good (probably because of the flashbacks, lol) but also because you are a good writer. Loofed!

:) can't wait til the end.

Author's Response: First, thanks so much for your review. Second, let me just say that when the idea first occured to me, I thought it was a little odd too. But once I got to thinking about it, it really bothered me that Arwen was just a pretty little carrot that motivates Aragorn to do his thing and then shows up again at the end to be his brood mare. I kept thinking about how she\'s already hundreds, even thousands of years old when Aragorn is born and how if we\'re just going on the bare outline of a relationship that Tolkien wrote for them, they don\'t even know each other all that well at the time of their marriage. So I hooked her up with Legolas and voila! Personally, I can\'t wait until the end either! IM me sometime (if you ever see me on :)).

I'm sorry, but you really need to lengthen these chapters. Tell us what happened in the year. Create sympathy for the characters by showing us events that occurred. I don't think Legolas would be that ambiguous...and please...get a grammar checker. Not to trying to flame you here, trying to help.

There is no character development here, again. Too short and talky. FIVE YEARS!?!?! it's been like...6 since he first told her he loved her. o.o why would they wait that long?

lol it was funny

It was veery good ^_^ I like your characterization, like when you said, "...could tell she wanted to say something, so he sat there quietly for a moment..." things like that are good, they tell you about the characters and their personalities.

Author's Response: *bows* thank you! That chapter took me longer to write then I thought it would. . . Glad you liked it!

Hehehe, me like (just realized I forgot to review this chappy) lol. Ok. Theodred so nice, never read a fic with him before.

Author's Response: Me glad you like. :) Yeah Theodred is a sweet heart, but I made him up so that would be why you haven\'t read any other fics about him. Theodred (the canon one) is Eomer\'s cousin. However the one I write about is Eomer\'s youngest son named after his dead cousin.

Commenting as I go along...okies. I liked how you havent just been like, œTheodred said, œI am your husband. Because that would be really blatant, it shows his nature well with that line œWith a soft, but sad smile he said to her, œMy name is Theodred. You are in Meduselds infirmary.



Also, the personification of pain is, as in most stories, quite effective. =)



Um...Éomer is more of Theodreds cousin...not his father. O.O



Hehe, œhe didnt need these kinds of problems this early in life. It shows Heulwyns older, wiser nature. Nice overall. muahaha.

Oops, lol, did not realize Theodred was his son, although I was sort of confused as to why Eomer was the king. haha. ok. moving on.

Author's Response: yeah I guess I didn\'t make the time very clear. Aragorn and Arwen married in 1415. this story take placein 1453 - about 38 years later :)

I don't know if you should rate a slash story, despite the fact that it is mild, as G...

Author's Response: Hi. I appreciate your concern about the rating and I may change it; however, this is clearly listed as slash in the category and in the warnings. I thank you for reading my story. Patty.