Reviews by Nieriel
Summary: After Aragorn is crowned king, he has to deal with the family of a traitor lesser king. He soon has a bandit catcher to prove herself, a young boy to be a page and an old woman who seems to know far too much. Naru, a newly instated Bandit catcher, has to prove herself for the sake of her life and those of her family's.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Faramir, Gimli, Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: Rape, Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 19857 Read Count: 21983
Published: Apr 11 2006 Updated: Dec 27 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Well, Raleon considers himself quite the ladies' man, does he? Somehow I don't think Naru is just going to give in to him. lol.

Author's Response: Do you, now? Well. So do I. :D
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I am extremely confused. The scene with Dami and Aragorn mentioned a Lord Faulk, though he never said a word in the scene. Some of the dialogue also made no sense at all. And what exactly is the cliffhanger in this chapter? I don't understand.

Author's Response: I\'ll try to fix this, Thanx for your opinion!
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
A very intriguing beginning, and I shall continue. You draw the reader's attention in and keep it successfully.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Date: Jul 15 2006
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
naru is really interesting, I like her.

Author's Response: *grins* I tried.
Date: Jul 15 2006
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I enjoy this fic a lot, your details have a good way of entertaining the reader, but something that would add even more to it would be spelling. There were 64 typos in this chapter alone, and none of them were particularly complicated words.

Author's Response: Sorry. *cringes* i have no word on this computer and haven\'t got internet on mine. I will go try to fix them.
Date: Jul 15 2006
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
This was good, a delicious conflict ending to the chapter. However, this one sentence makes no sense: "Naru, in quite a good mood, if she did say so herself, but all that abruptly fled when she saw what sat beside The King." You should say "Naru was in quite a good mood, if she did say so herself, but all that abruptly fled when she saw what sat beside The King."



Author's Response: Thanx!
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Raleon is a real dumb guy, :P. I think Naru should just punch him. And a more proper word would be "womanizing" rather than "vandalizing".

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'ve fixed alto of things in this so far!
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
This does not make sense: "Her grandmother was staringn at a man who had to be at least ten years older, with a stately air about and a polished teak cane in hand as he walked proudly through the courtyard. "I have to go, Damun.I think I have to sleep."

All the respnes Naru got was a distracted, "Of course, dear," before she left her grandmother to her staring."

Is Naru saying "I have to go, Damun"? or is the grandmother? Because it doesn't really make sense for her to say she has to go to sleep when she then walks out into the garden. Also, she would not say Valar. Because she opposes (or opposed) Gondor, that means she was essentially opposing the Elendili, the Faithful Ones, who followed the Valar. Those who opposed the Elendili did so because Sauron poisoned their thoughts into thinking the Valar were holding them captive in Numenor. So...yeah, she would not use Valar that way.

Author's Response: I am currently trying to find something that she would swear by, but for now it\'s just fate that she could blame.
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I thought everyone except Naru, her grandmother, and a little boy died. How did Loel survive? Other than that, it was good.

Author's Response: All members of the immediate royal family died, and the extended family that was present at the castle.
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Gah, why doesn't she just tell Aragorn about Raleon?

Author's Response: I believe it\'s a matter of pride.
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Hmm...you might want to make the setting of this new scene a bit more specific. It really isn't good to jump in in the middle of a conversation, as I have no clue what is going on. Hope you update soon :)

Author's Response: okaay *runs off to do that*
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I liked this chapter a lot, my favorite thing (the thing that was most powerful in terms of character emotion) was talking about how the hunters reminded Aragorn of the old Strider. I always thought he'd miss his life to some degree, and it gives him something to hold on to.

Also, sorry if I was somewhat harsh and snappish in the other reviews, I was just in a really pissed mood that day and...yeah. lol. ;)

Author's Response: it was no problem, really, it made me go back over every thing and change and fix a lot of things. I wanted to make Aragorn more a part of this story and hopefully i can do that. Thanx for the reviews!
Date: Jul 17 2006
Hero by Aranel Elanesse Rated: G [Reviews - 7]
Summary: Arwen is really mad at Aragorn and she's locked him out of the bedroom.Poor Aragorn gets some help from a certain elf prince to appease her.Fanfic/songfic combo based on Enrique Iglesias' "Hero".
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Legolas
Genres: General, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1087 Read Count: 1521
Published: Apr 16 2006 Updated: Apr 16 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Hero Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Really nice =D
Date: Apr 21 2006
Innocent Eyes by Kim, Adora Rated: R [Reviews - 43]
Summary: Mia Adams is a twenty year old British dancer, determined to make her mark in the dancing world. After Orlando saves her from unwanted attention from a guy she doesn't like, he takes on the role as the older brother she never had. When he starts interfering with her relationships, is he really just being over-protective or is there something else bothering him? Inspired by the song by Delta Goodrem.
Categories: Actor Fics Characters: None
Genres: General, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 30308 Read Count: 18464
Published: Apr 17 2006 Updated: Feb 14 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I like =)
Date: Apr 21 2006
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
hehehe I like it when people aren't rabid leggy fans, lol. good job so far.
Date: Apr 21 2006
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I like how you write first person, it's not like you're swimming around in the character's inner thoughts all the time, so it's good. not like when I try to write first person, lol.
Date: Apr 21 2006
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
haha, my family is pretty embarrassing too...can't wait for you to continue!
Date: Apr 21 2006
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five: Out In The Open Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
you updated, yay =) I liked it, as usual.
Date: Apr 22 2006
Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six: Hungry Eyes Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
nice again =) you are the fastest updater I have ever seen.

Author's Response: I\'ve been updating fast because it\'s the Easter holidays. Believe me when they end, the updates will come a lot slower lol. Trying to write as much as I can before I go back!
Date: Apr 24 2006
Title: Chapter 7: Chapter Seven: "He's Just Some Guy.." Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
hehe that would be one funny video to watch.

Author's Response: lol yeah! There probably is a video like that out there somewhere!
Date: May 08 2006
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Eight: Saturday 18th November, Home Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
so good. yay! Elijah seems a bit crazy, hehe.
Date: May 15 2006
Summary: Two slaves drown in a swollen river in an attempt to outrun their master as they escape to the North. The world does not change. Life goes on. Two slaves appear in Middle Earth. The world changes.

...for not all slavery is just in chains...
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Horror, Mystery, Other
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2099 Read Count: 3717
Published: Apr 24 2006 Updated: Apr 27 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
geh, I had to review again because I wasn't really constructive the first time, lmao. anyways, this is the best short thing I have read in a long time. You have a really nice sense of flow and make pictures with words without over-stuffing it. Less is more, they say. hehe.

Soo goood. *tackles you and steals your writing brain*
Date: May 19 2006
Title: Chapter 2: I. River Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
So good, yay!
Date: May 18 2006
Title: Chapter 3: II: Capture Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
so nice, I like the characters. For some reason, I thought Isum would be the girl and Jovy the guy. lol. anyways, don't mind me, I'm sick ;)
Date: May 18 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
gruesome, yet good. lol.
Date: May 18 2006