Reviews by Nieriel
Innocent Eyes by Kim, Adora Rated: R [Reviews - 43]
Summary: Mia Adams is a twenty year old British dancer, determined to make her mark in the dancing world. After Orlando saves her from unwanted attention from a guy she doesn't like, he takes on the role as the older brother she never had. When he starts interfering with her relationships, is he really just being over-protective or is there something else bothering him? Inspired by the song by Delta Goodrem.
Categories: Actor Fics Characters: None
Genres: General, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 30308 Read Count: 18484
Published: Apr 17 2006 Updated: Feb 14 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter Eight: Saturday 18th November, Home Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
so good. yay! Elijah seems a bit crazy, hehe.
Date: May 15 2006
Summary: Two slaves drown in a swollen river in an attempt to outrun their master as they escape to the North. The world does not change. Life goes on. Two slaves appear in Middle Earth. The world changes.

...for not all slavery is just in chains...
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Horror, Mystery, Other
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2099 Read Count: 3739
Published: Apr 24 2006 Updated: Apr 27 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
geh, I had to review again because I wasn't really constructive the first time, lmao. anyways, this is the best short thing I have read in a long time. You have a really nice sense of flow and make pictures with words without over-stuffing it. Less is more, they say. hehe.

Soo goood. *tackles you and steals your writing brain*
Date: May 19 2006
Title: Chapter 2: I. River Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
So good, yay!
Date: May 18 2006
Title: Chapter 3: II: Capture Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
so nice, I like the characters. For some reason, I thought Isum would be the girl and Jovy the guy. lol. anyways, don't mind me, I'm sick ;)
Date: May 18 2006
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
gruesome, yet good. lol.
Date: May 18 2006
Summary: A newcomer with a perchance for Feanors treasure chest arrives in Mandos and decides to appropriate Feanor's rooms for himself and kill anyone who tries to resist him. Thankfully, everyone already is dead. Still, what with an oxygen-deprived Elf as an assistant, an idle wife, and a vain overlord! What's a Vala of the Dead supposed to do?
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Eonwe, Feanor, Gwindor, Namo / Mandos, Smaug
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4221 Read Count: 2657
Published: Apr 26 2006 Updated: Apr 26 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Problematic Dragon Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Quite lovely and entertaining, very well written. I especially liked the part when Namo was talking to Vaire. :P

Author's Response: Hehe. Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much.
Date: Jul 01 2006
The Red Book by LadyofLight Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 6]
Summary: A series of one-shot stories covering a wide bearth of subjects and characters, told from all different points of view. You will find a table of contents at the beginning, which will be updated every time a new story is added.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Elrond, Smaug
Genres: General
Warnings: Character Death, Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2711 Read Count: 4434
Published: May 07 2006 Updated: May 09 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Insane What Love Can Do Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
This was so nice! I always love it when people take a moment from the movies or book, and make it so that we see so much more of what a character was thinking during that 5 or 10 seconds. whee. =D

Author's Response: I know that that little moment in the extended edition looks like they\'ve both completely given up to most people, but I never always thought there was something different happening there. Thanks so much for your review!
Date: May 07 2006
Title: Chapter 3: Lonely Roads Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
soo good. :D It drew me in. There was not extremely long descriptions or anything, but in a way that made it better, especially using the First Person POV for Smaug.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Date: Jun 03 2006
Summary: Elrond has a duaghter, one not described in the books. Read and learn more :D
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gil-Galad, Glorfindel, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, Erotica, General, Humor, Mystery, Poetry, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1212 Read Count: 2248
Published: May 07 2006 Updated: May 07 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Nice so far, a spelling mistake: Celebrain = Celebrian. Also, you might want to have a more Elvish name for Alexandria.
Date: May 28 2006
Love Online by joshsgirl04 Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 17]
Summary: Shannon Cartwright is just your average college senior, well except for the fangirl thing. She meets a mysterious man in a chatroom. Her life will turn upside down when she finds out who he is.


Categories: Actor Fics Characters: Dominic Monaghan
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17779 Read Count: 9725
Published: May 08 2006 Updated: Sep 20 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Interesting story idea, I'll keep reading tomorrow when I'm not so dead *yawns* hehehe. me like.
Date: Jun 28 2006
Forbidden by Larien Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Nienna and Haldir are in love, but it is forbidden for them to be together, under the order of Nienna’s mother, Galadriel. Nienna’s niece, Arwen returns to Lothlorien with her husband, Aragorn, and Aragorn’s friend, Legolas. Nienna sneaks off with them as they leave, pretending to have an urgent message for Elrond for two reasons: Haldir is returning with them, and she wants to be with him, and she wants to be free, away from her strict parents.


But Aragorn finds out and makes sure that Nienna and Haldir stay as far away from each other as possible. He keeps her under the watchful eye of Legolas. Nienna never liked Legolas to begin with, but after spending so much time with him to and at Rivendell, he grows on her.


Haldir is jealous and wants nothing more than Nienna’s love. Legolas feels the same way. Nienna must now choose between Haldir and Legolas. Her love for Haldir is forbidden, but her love for Legolas would be welcomed with open arms by her parents.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Celeborn, Elrond, Galadriel, Gimli, Haldir, Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 7265 Read Count: 4793
Published: May 21 2006 Updated: May 22 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: To Rivendell Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Hi there -- I just had some comments about your fic so far. Well...your summary gives too much away, I think. You should give those details away throughout the story instead of right off the bat.

Also, this first chapter was a bit erratic. The characters emotions change extremely rapidly and their motivations are unclear (why exactly can Nienna not return until she has produced a family? Why can't Haldir return? Why is Galadriel so mean to Nienna -- surely it can't be because of Haldir only.) And when they are first walking through the woods, Nienna tells Haldir to "prove" he loves her by kissing her...despite the fact that they have already said "I Love you" before. It just makes her seem manipulative (and with the part that said "their lips crashed together" that was slightly strange vocabulary). Also...you don't really need tags at the end of the dialogue so much.

You have a great concept here, but I think you're dumbing it down a little too much (by focusing on cheap emotion like "crashing lips" or Arwen yelling after about a 10 second exchange for no reason really) without really explaining important things like how the heck she'd make it out of Lothlorien like that, for example. I don't mean to be harsh...just want to help :)
Date: Jun 01 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Return to Lothlorien Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
*in addition to the last paragraph of my first review - or without really setting the stage
Date: Jun 01 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Return to Lothlorien Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Nienna acts extremely childish...and why would Galadriel randomly decide to let them be together??
Date: Jun 01 2008
Title: Chapter 3: For the Love of Nienna Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Ok...well...why exactly would Nienna go insane if she found out that someone else loved her????? That kind of defies logic. And why would she go crazy and assume that haldir is lying and that he must not love her?? And where was there any indication, any reason, that she would go to Legolas over Haldir? I'm sorry...but this is all highly improbable and very strange.
Date: Jun 01 2008
Title: Chapter 4: Unable to Make up Her Mind Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Ok...um....yeah. She breaks up with him after one fight? She randomly charges back and forth between two guys for apparently no reason? And Haldir is acting pretty stupid if he just randomly accepts her back without saying "gee, maybe I'll get hurt again"? And why is Galadriel being so creepy to her own daughter?
Date: Jun 01 2008
Landing in London by Chloe Kay Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 14]
Summary:
Laughter.Romance.Coffee.Drama.Love.Hate.Friendship.Phone Calls.Trips.Moviestars.Money.Fame.



When Roxie's family moved to London as she was starting high school, she thought her life was over. That is, until she met Orlando. They became best friends, and now she finds herself living with him back in the heart of the city, 10 years later. Its almost like old times again...minus the fact that he's a superstar. Whatever.



This is the story of their lives. And no matter what happens or where they end up, they know they'll always be landing in london.
Categories: Actor Fics Characters: Billy Boyd, Dominic Monaghan, Elijah Wood, Liv Tyler, Original Character, Orlando Bloom, Other, Viggo Mortensen
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4610 Read Count: 5243
Published: May 21 2006 Updated: Jun 06 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Phonecalls and Flashbacks. Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
geh this is so good! please continue. I'll be more specific if you want ;) just too dead right now to do an analysis.
Date: May 29 2006
Title: Chapter 2: Calls After Midnight Are Strictly Prohibited. Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
hehhe, I do that trying-to-find-clothes thing a lot. I do discover things I thought I lost in my closet, and then I complain about having nothing to wear. :P I loove your story, it's so realistic and un-mary-sue like.
Date: Jun 01 2006
Title: Chapter 3: Sticky Ricky and Other High School Terrors. Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
teehee. I would have died by now. and that is the really great thing about this story -- you can relate with the characters and enjoy their story.
Date: Jun 01 2006
Title: Chapter 4: Chinese and Chickflicks. Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
tee, roxie is really one cool gal. nice job with this chapter.
Date: Jun 06 2006
Summary: A poem I wrote after seeing the Two Towers for the first time. There is mention of fighting and death but nothing serious. Just so you know.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: Death and Beyond
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 87 Read Count: 2185
Published: Jun 17 2006 Updated: Jun 17 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
this is really pretty and lyrical. it has a nice rhythm and it conveys the emotions of Helms Deep (and other battles) really well. Nice! (much better than I could ever write poetry, haha) :D

Author's Response: Thanks alot. I\'m very proud about this poem. But it\'s true! I did write this poem after watching the battle at Helm\'s Deep.
Date: Jun 20 2006
Summary: A beautiful stranger from the U.S. enters Middle Earth. With hair and eye color that changes with the seasons and a smorgasbord of special powers, the only thing we can say is "Add to Favorites!"

COMPLETE
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Legolas, Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Humor, Parody, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2903 Read Count: 3970
Published: Jun 20 2006 Updated: Jun 21 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Scene One Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
HA! this was hilarious. I especially liked the part about sticking your head in the over and the other choices. roflmao *can't stop laughing* it's so absurd and yet so true, how can you not help but cackle? **We trust him. Wrongly** *cackles off into distance...*

Author's Response: Nieriel, Thank you for your review. However, these stories are not meant to be comedic. In my opinion, they provide characters with much depth that remain true to Tolkien. The œhumor setting under œgenre must have been a mistake. Clearly these are deeply dramatic stories with compelling undertones that show the desperation of the times. Excuse me while I write a slash fic to better illustrate my point. Much Love, KimberlyJane P.S.- Thank you for the nice review. I think I want one more chapter for this story, parody one more genre, and then maybe try to write a real fic. By the way, I just started \"Stolen Desert Gold\" and am really enjoying it, even if it lacks the unquestionable depth and intensity that is present in my works of dramatic genius.
Date: Jun 20 2006
Title: Chapter 2: Scene Two Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
wtf? (a good wtf) lmao. I have no clue what corner of your mind this fic came from but it is hilarious. hurry and update! :D

Author's Response: As I stated previously, naught but dramatic genius.
Date: Jun 20 2006
Title: Chapter 3: Scene Three Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
:P good job, hehehehee. *glomps you*

Author's Response: Thanks so much! It was a ton of fun to write, and got my brain back in shape for summer AP work (bleh). Six books and six assignments to go along with them for two months. Really only one month because I\'ll be at Ithaca ALL of July for a musical theater thing...so I\'m going to try to post two more stories before I go...if I can ever decide on my next genre to parody.
Date: Jun 22 2006
Changing View by KelseyWhiteleaf Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 4]
Summary: A gift, or a curse? After being abducted, tortured and a lot more a young gifted girl of a lost race still lives on. She joins the fellowship to destroy the ring. But this journey has more effects on her then only the rescue of ME. Chapter 3 up.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Elrond, Faramir, Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy
Warnings: Character Death, Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3084 Read Count: 3600
Published: Jun 29 2006 Updated: Sep 05 2006 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: 1, The Birth Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
I hope you continue this, but some points: We already know all the races, you don't have to explain them. Orcs are spelled with c's. And "1 girl had survived," and other instances where you used the number 1, you should type out the word.

Also, if you want to hook your readers a bit better, show, don't tell. This means don't give us a summary of Kelsey's ability and life and all the races, write a scene where it is shown to us by words and actions.

Author's Response: I thank you very much for your review. I know I wrote orcs with a K but that may come because I\'m Dutch and we write it with a K. The scenes that you mention will come. They are on the way but aren\'t ready yet. I\'m writing this while the second came in so i\'ll tell you also some things that you said in the second. Kelsey was a name that I just made up. I liked the name so I just used it. I hope that doesn\'t bother you. With emotions I\'m not so good. Also not with details. I\'m trying to perfect that but because this is not one of my newest it isn\'t that great yet. The bad guy died in the second chapter so I can\'t make him very evil anymore =P And I know that Haldir comes from LothLorien. But I like him and in later chapters I need him like that. If you don\'t mind =P Thanks again for your reviews and happy reading =D KelseyWhiteleaf
Date: Jul 16 2006
Title: Chapter 2: 2, The truth and rescue Reviewer: Nieriel Signed
Ok, if Kelsey is an elf, Kelsey would not be her name. It's quite unrealistic. Haldir lives in Lothlorien, not Rivendell. It would also be nice if you could try to make the emotions a bit more real by smoothing out and lengthening your sentences so they aren't choppy, as in the beginning when he was interrogating Kelsey. Otherwise it jerks the reader.

Please make that guy a better bad guy than your typical generic evil person? *bats eyes* please?

Show more of his point of view, his motivations, etc. Don't just go "he grinned evilly." "he slapped her." Go past the generic bad guy and make a really good one. :)
Date: Jul 16 2006