Reviews by Ria
Summary: Elf &hearts Man. What could possibly go wrong?
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Angst, Mystery, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 768 Read Count: 3578
Published: Dec 31 2006 Updated: Oct 09 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: Ria Signed
What a dramatic beginning: great start!

Author's Response: Yeah, maybe I overdid it a little. Thanks for your review!
Date: Jan 02 2007
Summary: Those who remain behind have to face the somewhat embarrassing consequences. A tale of elves lounging around in Ancient Greece.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Celeborn, Glorfindel, Lindir, Lindir
Genres: General, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1014 Read Count: 1555
Published: Jan 02 2007 Updated: Jan 02 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Mistaken Identities Reviewer: Ria Signed
Oh, very clever!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading :)
Date: Jan 06 2007
Summary: A response to Faramiriel's Culinary challenge. Faramir ATTEMPTS to teach Eowyn how to cook. Disaster ensues!!!
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Faramir
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1557 Read Count: 2733
Published: Jan 03 2007 Updated: Jan 03 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Mission: Traumatise Reviewer: Ria Signed
Well, that does end in disaster . . . I notice Arwen manages to stay far away from the kitchen. I bet Strider's a pretty good cook, though.

Author's Response: Oh, you really think that? Maybe I\'ll write a story to show you JUST how wrong I think you are!
Date: Jan 06 2007
Summary: Hey people the funny lotr story is back. Her eis part 2 out of 3
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Arwen, Elrond, Faramir, Galadriel, Gollum, Haldir, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 513 Read Count: 5001
Published: Jan 06 2007 Updated: Jan 07 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
I like the characterization of the Ring as vain. Maybe there's a Tenth Walker tale (with the Ring as the Mary Sue) in that.

I prefer narrative to screenplay style, but of course you chose to continue in the same style as the first part of the series. I'm curious to read "Feuding at the Fishing Hole" -- part 3.

RS
Date: Jan 06 2007
I Hate Yule by sylc Rated: G [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Glorfindel visits Erestor, who hates Yule. The pair bicker.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Erestor, Glorfindel
Genres: Humor
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1247 Read Count: 2006
Published: Jan 06 2007 Updated: Jan 06 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: I Hate Yule Reviewer: Ria Signed
This is quite an engaging vignette.

Author's Response: Thanks, Ria. I\'m glad you enjoyed it.
Date: Jan 06 2007
Pendant Of Life by sylc Rated: G [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Celebrimbor admires a pendant belonging to Annatar. Annatar promises to make him one.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Celebrimbor, Lindir, Sauron
Genres: Mystery
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 652 Read Count: 1778
Published: Jan 08 2007 Updated: Jan 08 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Pendant Of Life Reviewer: Ria Signed
What a lovely creepy idea! Would a gem like that be a feamir?

Author's Response: *laughs* I guess feamir fits it, huh! *hugs* Glad you enjoyed it, Ria. Thank you.
Date: Feb 16 2007
Summary: A response to Sharpe_and_Harper's "The Fellowship Meets the Fellowship." Pretty much the actors fall into Middle Earth and excitement ensues. Not a story I would normally do; I don't really like Actor Fics because I feel weird writing a story about a person who exists but I've never met. Please imagine that I do really know exactly what sort of thoughts Viggo Mortensen has!
Categories: Actor Fics Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10380 Read Count: 16334
Published: Jan 10 2007 Updated: Feb 20 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 10: The Turn of the Tide Reviewer: Ria Signed
I love the concept of the story, and I really admire your bravery in tackling it. So far, the characters are interesting and believable.

Author's Response: Thank you! I was a little wary of it myself at the beginning, but I\'m having fun now. :)
Date: Feb 04 2007
Title: Chapter 13: A Morning Without Coffee Reviewer: Ria Signed
Maybe you could name this chapter "A Morning Without Coffee". I can't but imagine that there will be repercussions to Sir Ian's missing his coffee. (!) This chapter seems good even un-proofread.

Author's Response: Thanks! Haha, great idea. :) I will do so.
Date: Apr 07 2007
Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 Reviewer: Ria Signed
I hope you'll update this soon. I've actually reread several chapters just to stay in touch with the story, but I'd rather have MORE.
Date: Feb 15 2008
Summary: And here's how the story begins. The rating's been changed more out of keeping things on the safe side than anything else. If something really nasty comes up, there'll be a warning. Completed
Categories: Crossovers Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, Fantasy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: Shamballa
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 64171 Read Count: 21422
Published: Jan 12 2007 Updated: Apr 15 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Exchange Reviewer: Ria Signed
That's a great start to your story. I feel for Beregond, though: shot, stabbed at and hit by a car, all in the first chapter.



Author's Response: Yeah, I\'m mean like that. *whistles innocently* And, like Havoc said - that\'s just the tip of the iceberg.
Date: Jan 12 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Exchange Reviewer: Ria Signed
I finally finished this story, and it's great. I like how Beregond developed alchemical powers without becoming so powerful that he disrupted the plot. I've never watched the anime (alas), but I got a real sense of its characters and world through your writing.

Author's Response: Well, yeah, I\'m not really in favour of all the: \"ZOMG! I now have a new convenient power and now I\'ll magically solve everything.\" After all, powerful or not, Beregond is still new in this alchemy business and he lacks the confidence. This will be more evident as the story goes on.
Date: Jul 15 2007
Summary: the story closely follows the tale of five friends and the paths that fate leads each of them down as they face illness, wounds, separation in battle, and loss. one in a search for healing of old wounds, one to find courage and independence, one to find a purpose in life, for another one a peaceful end, and one along for the ride.



Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2657 Read Count: 1013
Published: Jan 16 2007 Updated: Jan 16 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Arthion's return. Reviewer: Ria Signed
That's a good start. The descriptions are well done. I really like that you describe the characters more through their interactions than their hair and eye coloring. I think you can improve it by proofreading a bit, particularly the direct speech.
Date: Jan 30 2007
Summary: A few decades after his defeat on the Isle of Werewolves in the First Age of the Sun, Sauron goes back to Angband and after seeing Morgoth, enters a pub. A rather inquisitive balrog (who is left unnamed because Tolkien never named him *sobs*) starts to chat him up.
Categories: Book Verse Slash Characters: Balrog, Glorfindel, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Other, Sauron
Genres: Humor
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1985 Read Count: 2633
Published: Jan 16 2007 Updated: Jan 16 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Angband Pub, Second Class Reviewer: Ria Signed
I really enjoyed the character of the Balrog bartender. Somebody ought to draw you up a picture of him. (I don't have the skill, unfortunately.)

Author's Response: *grins* Glad you like him; I also like him. :) Thanks, Ria. Happy you enjoyed the fic.
Date: Jan 17 2007
Summary: This story was written for a RMH list fic-challenge, which dared us to use the purple prose phrase "The dragon of his desire writhed beneath his tight-stretched trousers" in a fic and keep a straight face. Here's my quick stab at it. Starring Thranduil.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Thranduil
Genres: Erotica
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2443 Read Count: 1427
Published: Jan 19 2007 Updated: Jan 19 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
Nicely written -- I like how you worked the dragon reference into the conversation so that it didn't seem hideously purple.
Date: Aug 02 2007
Chance Encounter by Mordaen, Adora Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 115]
Summary: During their journey, the Fellowship meet up with a stranger not of their world. Will he be of help to them or would he hinder them? Kingdom of Heaven/LotR crossover. Mostly movie-verse with some book-verse
Categories: Movie-verse, Crossovers Characters: Aragorn, Balian of Ibelin, Guy de Lusignan, Legolas, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Torture, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 35 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 90467 Read Count: 50857
Published: Jan 21 2007 Updated: Sep 01 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Campfires and Whirlpools Reviewer: Ria Signed
I really like the beginning. Your characterization of the Fellowship is clear and entertaining. I hope you put in some more paragraph breaks in the last chunk of the story, though.

Author's Response: I definitely will try to improve my formatting. I haven\'t gotten the hang of html yet. I\'m glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reviewing.
Date: Jan 25 2007
Title: Chapter 15: Unexpected Guest Reviewer: Ria Signed
And here I thought they'd have found Paris, or Will Turner . . .! This is more drama for Balian, though.

Author's Response: Hmm, Orlando Bloom\'s good, but you can have too much of a good thing. :P Balian will just have to deal with his archenemy for the rest of the war. Poor him.
Date: Apr 13 2007
Title: Chapter 16: Reaching an Understanding Reviewer: Ria Signed
Congratulations on trying out a new literary technique! That's one of the most enjoyable aspects of writing fanfic. You surprised me in this chapter (a good thing!): I thought you were going to have Guy be the goat and die instead of Boromir.

Author's Response: Thanks. I had quite a bit of fun writing Boromir\'s stream of consciousness.
Date: Apr 22 2007
Title: Chapter 18: A Big Misunderstanding Reviewer: Ria Signed
I like the story, but I don't think the repeated Balian-abuse is exciting. It seems like he gets tied up and beaten or threatened every other chapter. =( He's such a Walter Scott hero, he should be able to find a way around it. Admittedly, that's all my personal opinion about the plot -- your writing is very clear and vivid, and I dig the way that you're really examining how he might see and understand Middle Earth.

Author's Response: Well, he\'s going to stop getting into so much of this sort of trouble from now on because all the misunderstandings have been cleared up now. It\'s going to be much more angsty in the later chapters when the war actually starts for real.
Date: May 14 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Campfires and Whirlpools Reviewer: Ria Signed
Hurrah! Balian at Helm's Deep!
Date: May 14 2007
Title: Chapter 27: Voices and Headaches Reviewer: Ria Signed
I'm glad you're using so many of the great scenes from the extended edition. I liked it that they managed to include Saruman and Grima's ends even though they didn't have the Scouring of the Shire. You've really managed to take the movie's words and scenes and make them your own through the lens of Balian and by adding more -- it flows very well.

That said, I thought Legolas and Gimli were acting a mite childish in the last chapter.

Author's Response: I love the scenes from Extended Edition. The childish behaviour were all for the sake of comedy and they always struck me as being rather immature.
Date: Jul 29 2007
Title: Chapter 31: The Second Wave Reviewer: Ria Signed
Your preview sounds rife with hilarity. Maybe you can rescue the movie Troy from its dogginess. Please, though, include Hecuba.

Author's Response: I shall definitely include Hecuba and some other major characters which they missed out from the film i.e. Cassandra and Aeneas as Hector and Paris\' cousin.
Date: Aug 14 2007
The Warlord by Scribe Rated: G [Reviews - 5]
Summary: A ringwraith's history.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 708 Read Count: 1317
Published: Jan 21 2007 Updated: Jan 21 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Warlord Reviewer: Ria Signed
Very nice! You could do a series on this theme.

Author's Response: Ha, thank you so much! I plan to write a story involving that character as well as the rest of the Nine.
Date: Jan 21 2007
Secrets by Scribe Rated: G [Reviews - 14]
Summary: The Witch-King has a secret.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Witch King
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 166 Read Count: 1642
Published: Jan 21 2007 Updated: Jan 21 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Secrets Reviewer: Ria Signed
That's unspeakably cute. Terry Pratchett says, "Do deformed rabbit. It's my favorite." Small quibble: Yet, to the residents' relief,
would be better punctuation.
Date: Jan 21 2007
Summary: Just a story I thought up, will have short chapters, but it is all original character!
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: None
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 749 Read Count: 6764
Published: Jan 22 2007 Updated: May 15 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Ria Signed
This is a great start. The typos I see in this section are "Ihad", "prepard" "stay out notice" and "who I saw". You have my deep grammatical admiration for using lay correctly *fawning*.

Author's Response: Thanks for the info! *Don\'t ever use school computers to check spelling!*
Date: May 14 2007
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Ria Signed
Ooh, who is he? I like the suspense!

typos: "lay him"; the commas in "understand, why" and "confused, who" and "frightened, how"; missing comma: "your voice, Luthien,"; "love and longing flow out"; "he move"; "corradors"

Author's Response: Thanks, I will try harder!
Date: May 14 2007