Oh, very clever!

Author's Response: Thank you for reading :)

I like the characterization of the Ring as vain. Maybe there's a Tenth Walker tale (with the Ring as the Mary Sue) in that.

I prefer narrative to screenplay style, but of course you chose to continue in the same style as the first part of the series. I'm curious to read "Feuding at the Fishing Hole" -- part 3.

RS

What a lovely creepy idea! Would a gem like that be a feamir?

Author's Response: *laughs* I guess feamir fits it, huh! *hugs* Glad you enjoyed it, Ria. Thank you.

Maybe you could name this chapter "A Morning Without Coffee". I can't but imagine that there will be repercussions to Sir Ian's missing his coffee. (!) This chapter seems good even un-proofread.

Author's Response: Thanks! Haha, great idea. :) I will do so.

That's a great start to your story. I feel for Beregond, though: shot, stabbed at and hit by a car, all in the first chapter.



Author's Response: Yeah, I\'m mean like that. *whistles innocently* And, like Havoc said - that\'s just the tip of the iceberg.

That's a good start. The descriptions are well done. I really like that you describe the characters more through their interactions than their hair and eye coloring. I think you can improve it by proofreading a bit, particularly the direct speech.

Nicely written -- I like how you worked the dragon reference into the conversation so that it didn't seem hideously purple.

And here I thought they'd have found Paris, or Will Turner . . .! This is more drama for Balian, though.

Author's Response: Hmm, Orlando Bloom\'s good, but you can have too much of a good thing. :P Balian will just have to deal with his archenemy for the rest of the war. Poor him.

I like the story, but I don't think the repeated Balian-abuse is exciting. It seems like he gets tied up and beaten or threatened every other chapter. =( He's such a Walter Scott hero, he should be able to find a way around it. Admittedly, that's all my personal opinion about the plot -- your writing is very clear and vivid, and I dig the way that you're really examining how he might see and understand Middle Earth.

Author's Response: Well, he\'s going to stop getting into so much of this sort of trouble from now on because all the misunderstandings have been cleared up now. It\'s going to be much more angsty in the later chapters when the war actually starts for real.

I'm glad you're using so many of the great scenes from the extended edition. I liked it that they managed to include Saruman and Grima's ends even though they didn't have the Scouring of the Shire. You've really managed to take the movie's words and scenes and make them your own through the lens of Balian and by adding more -- it flows very well.

That said, I thought Legolas and Gimli were acting a mite childish in the last chapter.

Author's Response: I love the scenes from Extended Edition. The childish behaviour were all for the sake of comedy and they always struck me as being rather immature.