Scansion's probably not quite the right word. It's how the poem scans, the pattern of stresses in the line. It's like meter, but the actual result, not the theoretical pattern.
Author's Response: Oh, okay! Thanks for explaining that.
Good questions, faramiriel, and a nice scansion.
Author's Response: What\'s a scansion? Am I clueless?
Author's Response: XDXD Thanks, Ria!
I like the idea of orc hangman quite a bit. One always wonders what the orcs do when they aren't massing for some apocalyptic battle. Personally, I prefer narrative to the screenplay style of writing, but you've got funny stuff here whichever way you write it. (Can there be orc bowling?)
Author's Response: Orc bowling? sounds like an oppurtunity for more near death experiences. I\'ll see what I can do. Thanx for the review!! :)
The authorial interruption "due to the graphic punishment . . ." is very Monty Python.
Author's Response: hmm....hadn\'t thought of that. oops
A very well-written chapter, Gandalf's apprentice! I really like the way you show the worries that plague the Dunedain and Aragorn's struggle to be what his family needs him to be.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you\'re enjoying the story. It will be a long one, with many complicated plot developments. G.A.
Wow! This is a great start, and I like how you manage the angst element delicately.
Also, I liked your characterizations of Gilraen, Elladan and Elrohir particularly.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you stick with the story--it will be a long one! I plan to update every two weeks. G.A.
I want you to write the scene where he is given or gives himself the name "Strider". It would go really well after Aragorn says, "And I walk in out of nowhere."
Also, with the name The Hidden Fortress, there should be a little Akira Kurosawa reference in here. (Maybe there is, and I just didn't get it -- I've only seen the movie The Hidden Fortress once *hangs head*.)
You continue to make your world and your characters vivid. Good stuff!
Author's Response: The \"Strider\" tale will come later....keep reading! I didn\'t mean any reference to Kurosawa, rather to Tolkien\'s reference to a \"hidden fastness\" where Aragorn was supposed to have been born. Glad you like the story! Thanks, G.A.
Very nice. It's sort of a companion piece for Tolkien's grim joke from Beren that he's got the Silmaril in his missing hand.
Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Oh, sad. Perhaps there's a follow-up piece to be written about their next meeting.
Well, perhaps he could find love in Aman. That would be interesting enough -- there's room for many cultural confusions.
I don't know that he needs to fall in love, but he definitely could use to be shocked out of his surety in some way.
I have to agree: I love the refrain, "You cannot be serious, Legolas!"
I like the way it's starting . . . reading Legolas' casual assumption that he knows exactly what Mardil needs, I rather hope he gets his come-uppance.
Very funny! I particularly enjoyed the comment on MPREG, since that's a convention I just don't get -- but it is "quite common in some parts."
Author's Response: Hehe. Thanks, Ria. Glad you enjoyed it and yup, that\'s totally why I added the MPREG reference. :)
It's certainly a novel idea. Please continue! However, are Lothiriel's eyes green or silvery? I'm a little lost.
That's a very dramatic place to leave us. I really enjoy the details that give us a picture of the difference between the two cultures.
Author's Response: thanks! More soon :)
Great start! I like the dramatic way you open your story. I've been thinking about writing for this challenge too, but I'm glad you've got such an interesting story on it.
Author's Response: Thanks, I enjoyed writing that first part. More soon. =)
Duty-free shire weed . . . mithril key-chains . . ."Balrogs make me HOT" tee shirt . . .
You have a very funny list.
Hmm, a very Eowyn moment. I like the form you chose.
Author's Response: Thanks! It wasn\'t really supposed to be Eowyn, but I guess it could be.
You've become amazingly prolific: next stop 100 stories!
Author's Response: ^^; I was on holiday in Jan and Feb so had lots of time to write. Hee! Thanks, Ria. :)