Nice angst! The sorrow is believable and not overblown, and the cliff is a great metaphor for their stage of life. (Although, NB, the fall over the cliff is in the movie but not the book.)
Author's Response: I\'m so glad you liked it!!!
Heheheh. I knew it would be funny -- thanks for rising to the occasion. (Sorry, I couldn't resist the pun.)
I really enjoyed this. If only I could get Glorfindel to do MY paperwork.
Author's Response: I want him to do my paperwork too! Preferably in a glass enclosure where I can watch.
I enjoyed this one. I like the attention to the details of his emotional recovery.
Author's Response: Hi Ria, Sorry for the late reply. But I\'m very pleased you liked this story--it\'s certainly one I have, in a sense, been waiting to write. Dwim
I like the vividness of your scenes. Also, the people's history approach to Middle Earth is novel -- nice one!
Author's Response: Thanks, Ria! (I think I owe you thanks for another review, too...) Writing from the ground and looking \'up\', as it were, was a useful exercise, and I\'m pleased it\'s paying off for you as a reader. I\'m glad the descriptions are effective, too. Thanks for your comments! Dwim
Thank you for laying out the Quendi language tree: it's an excellent resource, and, as you point out, the very heart of Tolkien's creation. After reading this, I expect I'll never get confused between Sindarin and Silvan again.
I think your argument would ring stronger, however, if you cleaned up the grammar and spelling of the essay.
Author's Response: I\'m glad to know this helps somebody and didn\'t just confuse them more. ;) I\'ve been known to write stuff that makes perfect sense to me, but confuses everybody else. Could you point out any specific problems? Grammar and spelling have never been my strong points, I\'m much better at arguing. My mother would tell you that you can\'t win an arguement with me because I will come up with counter your arguement. Ex. One time I told her which Tolkien characters I wanted to marry and alot of them were elves. SO when she said the law prohibits you from marrying more than one person I countered that person was a term for a mortal and that because they were elves that I would not be breaking the law. Then she told me that Aragorn, Elros, Faramir, and Imahril were all men. I replied that the majority of their blood was mortal, but all of them had a percentage of elven blood in them and that this fraction no matter if it was one one millionth kept them from being classified as fully mortals and then that U.S. law wouldn\'t apply in Middle-Earth anyway, so why were we arguing about U.S. law in the first place. *blinks* What does that story have ot do with your review.
What a clever idea of Glorfindel's -- very in the spirit of "When life gives you lemons . . ."
Also, congratulations on breaking 90 stories! You'll be at 100 any day now. *Bows in awe*.
Author's Response: Thanks! This was written in honor of a very special friend and fellow fanfic author who recently passed on (crossed the sea west, as we like to say) and I guess that could be part of how that message got in there. And thanks for the congrats, however, it\'s more a matter of me not being so lazy to get the stories posted, lol... I\'ve been over 300 stories on my own archive (pounce.dreamelf.com) for some time... but... it will be nice to join Sivan up there in the hundred fic club officially ^_^
Oh, that IS surprising.
This is very poetic, and you're addressing a part of the story that is not often written about. I think there has to be a more elegant way of signalling a flashback than saying "flashback". Roger Zelazney once said that telling the readers less makes the story better, or words to that effect.
Author's Response: thanks foe that, i was never actually happy about the flashbacks. i\'ll do something about it know...
Author's Response: done it! three starry thingys is flashback [***]. one starry thingy is going on. ok?
I like it that your character brings up the book (quite funny). I've reread your bio information and I am !impressed! that you are writing this well in a second language. Nice job, Anariel. Oh, and what languages are the most common in Indonesia?
Author's Response: Everyone speak Bahasa Indonesia here! English was also spoken but usually not in everyday life. We have a completely our own language and we pronounce everything completly different from English. Well, it\'s quite similar to Malaysia\'s Bahasa Malaysia. Thanks for your compliment and review!
Author's Response: thanks! your respond means much to me, especially you are my first reviewers. the next chapter will come soon, i promise. hope you\'ll read it. :)
You wrote a great poem about a great book. Thanks very much!
Author's Response: Sure you can! Just don\'t claim it as your own work! *wink wink* Thanks for the review! ~Mel
You did ample justice to the challenge. I couldn't wish for the hand buzzer to be in better hands.
Author's Response: *laughs* Wow, thanks so much. And hey, thanks for issuing the challege- definitely a new promter.
What a fabulous ending! "And there was much rejoicing." I also really like the characterization of her as a miniature Balrog.
Author's Response: I\'m a little surprised at how easy it was to create a character with absolutely no redeeming social characteristics whatsoever. Thanks for the feedback!
This is well-written. I really enjoyed reading a non-joking treatment of the twins.
I'm not sure it's gritty enough to deserve an NC-17 rating (and that's a good thing!). I think maybe an R would be more accurate.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I was not sure whether to use R or NC17...but I will heed your advice.
What an intriguing concept! I imagine the Sue level would be very hard indeed, with as many superpowers as they have. Your story does sort of make me want to go play video games, though. Alas . . .
Author's Response: Glad you were inspired. Look up the \"Cow Level\" in Diablo II sometime. It\'s a scream and incidentally, very hard.
I like how you developed some canon characters here. I'm surprised at how much fun the orcs can be.
Author's Response: I prefer canon. Maybe it\'s a crutch to rely on Tolkien to give me characters, but I develop some of my own here and there. I\'ve always been curious about the people Tolkien didn\'t have the chance to introduce to us properly (orcs included), so I\'m really glad I found fanfiction so I can bring them to life as I see them.
Thanks for the review and thanks for the challenge. It was fun!
A most efficient exercise in story-telling, and pleasing too. Maybe you could make a series of similar narrative haiku.
Author's Response: Why, thank you! :) And that sounds like a great idea, only I am not fond of poetry. Perhaps more condensed 100-word stories?
Go! Go! Go for ninety! And does your muse do Tai-Bo or something? 'Cause your productivity kicks butt.
Author's Response: Ha. Thank you. :) I\'ll try. Am currently on the verge of 90 K for Rationalising MPreg too so maybe I\'ll do a double whammy. Hee.
Congratulations on posting your first story here. You've chosen some great characters and a very dramatic start.
In Legolas' last line, do you mean adjoin as in "be next to"?
Author's Response: Ah heh I can see where that could cause confusion... heh... :P he meant join sides with. i\'ll change that... thanks. :)