Reviews by Ria
Evil Elrond by greywing Rated: PG [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Written for the March Prompt: E-- like an Evil Elrond. Mistreatment of Glorfindel by his lord. Not what it seems, really.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elrond, Erestor, Glorfindel
Genres: Horror, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 300 Read Count: 1618
Published: Mar 06 2007 Updated: Mar 06 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
I really enjoyed this. If only I could get Glorfindel to do MY paperwork.

Author's Response: I want him to do my paperwork too! Preferably in a glass enclosure where I can watch.
Date: Mar 07 2007
Resurrection by Dwimordene Rated: G [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Sometimes foresight is false. After Pelennor, the new lease on life is but the beginning. Halbarad, Aragorn, and the journey towards healing. AU.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Halbarad
Genres: Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1336 Read Count: 1290
Published: Mar 10 2007 Updated: Mar 10 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Resurrection Reviewer: Ria Signed
I enjoyed this one. I like the attention to the details of his emotional recovery.

Author's Response: Hi Ria, Sorry for the late reply. But I\'m very pleased you liked this story--it\'s certainly one I have, in a sense, been waiting to write. Dwim
Date: Mar 10 2007
Summary: Peace. Land. Life. Loyalty. A Kin-strife parable.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 29518 Read Count: 6679
Published: Mar 11 2007 Updated: Mar 11 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: The Eastshore Reviewer: Ria Signed
I like the vividness of your scenes. Also, the people's history approach to Middle Earth is novel -- nice one!

Author's Response: Thanks, Ria! (I think I owe you thanks for another review, too...) Writing from the ground and looking \'up\', as it were, was a useful exercise, and I\'m pleased it\'s paying off for you as a reader. I\'m glad the descriptions are effective, too. Thanks for your comments! Dwim
Date: Mar 24 2007
Summary: Constructed languages are made up languages. An essay explianing why I feel Tolkien was one of the best at making up constructed languages, and why most author's languages don't work.
Categories: Book-verse, Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay, General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2377 Read Count: 2229
Published: Mar 14 2007 Updated: Mar 14 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
Thank you for laying out the Quendi language tree: it's an excellent resource, and, as you point out, the very heart of Tolkien's creation. After reading this, I expect I'll never get confused between Sindarin and Silvan again.

I think your argument would ring stronger, however, if you cleaned up the grammar and spelling of the essay.

Author's Response: I\'m glad to know this helps somebody and didn\'t just confuse them more. ;) I\'ve been known to write stuff that makes perfect sense to me, but confuses everybody else. Could you point out any specific problems? Grammar and spelling have never been my strong points, I\'m much better at arguing. My mother would tell you that you can\'t win an arguement with me because I will come up with counter your arguement. Ex. One time I told her which Tolkien characters I wanted to marry and alot of them were elves. SO when she said the law prohibits you from marrying more than one person I countered that person was a term for a mortal and that because they were elves that I would not be breaking the law. Then she told me that Aragorn, Elros, Faramir, and Imahril were all men. I replied that the majority of their blood was mortal, but all of them had a percentage of elven blood in them and that this fraction no matter if it was one one millionth kept them from being classified as fully mortals and then that U.S. law wouldn\'t apply in Middle-Earth anyway, so why were we arguing about U.S. law in the first place. *blinks* What does that story have ot do with your review.
Date: Mar 16 2007
As Was Custom by Zhie Rated: PG [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Glorfindel always gets his way.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Erestor, Glorfindel
Genres: Humor
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: PPB-AU
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 28 Read Count: 3008
Published: Mar 17 2007 Updated: Mar 17 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: -complete story- Reviewer: Ria Signed
What a clever idea of Glorfindel's -- very in the spirit of "When life gives you lemons . . ."

Also, congratulations on breaking 90 stories! You'll be at 100 any day now. *Bows in awe*.

Author's Response: Thanks! This was written in honor of a very special friend and fellow fanfic author who recently passed on (crossed the sea west, as we like to say) and I guess that could be part of how that message got in there. And thanks for the congrats, however, it\'s more a matter of me not being so lazy to get the stories posted, lol... I\'ve been over 300 stories on my own archive (pounce.dreamelf.com) for some time... but... it will be nice to join Sivan up there in the hundred fic club officially ^_^
Date: Mar 17 2007
Unforeseen Circumstances by Zhie Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Galadriel/Surprise;
An oath leads to a journey, with hard times ahead.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Galadriel
Genres: Angst, Erotica, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Graphic Sex
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2002 Read Count: 1928
Published: Mar 17 2007 Updated: Mar 17 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: -complete story- Reviewer: Ria Signed
Oh, that IS surprising.
Date: Sep 15 2007
Summary: Arwen's best friend is wandering Middle-Earth 100 years after Aragorn's death. Her family are all dead or bound for Valinor, and she doesn't know what to do.



This is actually book-verse as well as movie-verse, but my computer refuses to die multiple categories at the moment.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2910 Read Count: 12074
Published: Mar 18 2007 Updated: Aug 03 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 Reviewer: Ria Signed
This is very poetic, and you're addressing a part of the story that is not often written about. I think there has to be a more elegant way of signalling a flashback than saying "flashback". Roger Zelazney once said that telling the readers less makes the story better, or words to that effect.

Author's Response: thanks foe that, i was never actually happy about the flashbacks. i\'ll do something about it know...

Author's Response: done it! three starry thingys is flashback [***]. one starry thingy is going on. ok?
Date: Apr 26 2007
Summary: former title: Starlight. An elf was raised in our Earth and knew the future of Middle-Earth. Her presence was unknown though she was transported back to Middle Earth 500 years before the Ring War. Now, the war has begun. Will she keep continue on hiding her knowledge and her true identity to her newfound friends? Mary-Sue, NOT tenth walker. Legomance.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Celeborn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Eomer, Eowyn, Faramir, Frodo, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Gollum, Gríma, Haldir, Imrahil, Legolas, Merry, Namo / Mandos, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character, Orophin, Pippin, Rúmil, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship, Théoden, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 37321 Read Count: 21907
Published: Mar 18 2007 Updated: Nov 25 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: The Arrival Reviewer: Ria Signed
I like it that your character brings up the book (quite funny). I've reread your bio information and I am !impressed! that you are writing this well in a second language. Nice job, Anariel. Oh, and what languages are the most common in Indonesia?

Author's Response: Everyone speak Bahasa Indonesia here! English was also spoken but usually not in everyday life. We have a completely our own language and we pronounce everything completly different from English. Well, it\'s quite similar to Malaysia\'s Bahasa Malaysia. Thanks for your compliment and review!
Date: Apr 01 2007
Title: Chapter 1: The Time Has Come Reviewer: Ria Signed
Nice start!

Author's Response: thanks! your respond means much to me, especially you are my first reviewers. the next chapter will come soon, i promise. hope you\'ll read it. :)
Date: Mar 18 2007
Homecoming by Aerlinniel Rated: G [Reviews - 3]
Summary: A song about a book I read for English class. Written to the tune of My Immortal by Evanescence.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 193 Read Count: 2097
Published: Mar 20 2007 Updated: Mar 20 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
You wrote a great poem about a great book. Thanks very much!

Author's Response: Sure you can! Just don\'t claim it as your own work! *wink wink* Thanks for the review! ~Mel
Date: Mar 26 2007
Justification by HeroinEyes Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 3]
Summary: A silly litle fic written for a humor challenge.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 709 Read Count: 1632
Published: Mar 21 2007 Updated: Mar 21 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Justification Reviewer: Ria Signed
You did ample justice to the challenge. I couldn't wish for the hand buzzer to be in better hands.

Author's Response: *laughs* Wow, thanks so much. And hey, thanks for issuing the challege- definitely a new promter.
Date: Mar 21 2007
Summary: A little ficlet I thought of while reading jules14's MST series. I wondered what would happen if a real teenage girl showed up on the edge of Mirkwood with all the worst traits of the animal.

Rated "R" for language and adult situations.

I did add this as a response to BookLuva7's "MAJOR Mary Sue" challenge, however it doesn't really qualify because the only member of the Fellowship who meets her is Legolas and Elrond is only mentioned. Should I delete it from the Challenge?
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Gandalf / Olorin, Legolas, Namo / Mandos, Original Character, Other, Thranduil
Genres: Horror, Humor
Warnings: Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6878 Read Count: 5536
Published: Mar 23 2007 Updated: Mar 23 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: What to do with Mary Sue? Reviewer: Ria Signed
What a fabulous ending! "And there was much rejoicing." I also really like the characterization of her as a miniature Balrog.

Author's Response: I\'m a little surprised at how easy it was to create a character with absolutely no redeeming social characteristics whatsoever. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: Apr 13 2007
Back to stay by orleans Rated: R [Reviews - 11]
Summary: Elladan and Elrohir just returned from a hunting trip.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond
Genres: Angst, Drama, Tragedy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3322 Read Count: 2163
Published: Mar 24 2007 Updated: Mar 24 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
This is well-written. I really enjoyed reading a non-joking treatment of the twins.

I'm not sure it's gritty enough to deserve an NC-17 rating (and that's a good thing!). I think maybe an R would be more accurate.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I was not sure whether to use R or NC17...but I will heed your advice.
Date: Mar 24 2007
Summary: A quick one-shot for all you gamers out there.
Rated "PG" for suggested sex between husband and wife.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Eldarion, Gimli, Legolas
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1623 Read Count: 1926
Published: Mar 24 2007 Updated: Mar 24 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Eldarion's Day Off Reviewer: Ria Signed
What an intriguing concept! I imagine the Sue level would be very hard indeed, with as many superpowers as they have. Your story does sort of make me want to go play video games, though. Alas . . .

Author's Response: Glad you were inspired. Look up the \"Cow Level\" in Diablo II sometime. It\'s a scream and incidentally, very hard.
Date: Mar 24 2007
Summary: Response to "A Salute to Jules" challenge by Ria, if I tell you which one, it'll ruin the surprise. Suggested slash, if you believe all orcs are the same sex.
Categories: Book-verse, Book Verse Slash Characters: Orcs/Uruk-Hai
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 863 Read Count: 2021
Published: Mar 24 2007 Updated: Mar 24 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Happy Birthday Shagrat! Reviewer: Ria Signed
I like how you developed some canon characters here. I'm surprised at how much fun the orcs can be.

Author's Response: I prefer canon. Maybe it\'s a crutch to rely on Tolkien to give me characters, but I develop some of my own here and there. I\'ve always been curious about the people Tolkien didn\'t have the chance to introduce to us properly (orcs included), so I\'m really glad I found fanfiction so I can bring them to life as I see them.

Thanks for the review and thanks for the challenge. It was fun!

Date: Mar 25 2007
Romance by greywing Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 7]
Summary: The shortest romance story, ever. 100 words.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Eomer, Lothiriel
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 101 Read Count: 1859
Published: Mar 24 2007 Updated: Mar 24 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
A most efficient exercise in story-telling, and pleasing too. Maybe you could make a series of similar narrative haiku.

Author's Response: Why, thank you! :) And that sounds like a great idea, only I am not fond of poetry. Perhaps more condensed 100-word stories?
Date: Apr 24 2007
Lindir's Pillow by sylc Rated: PG [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Lindir lurvvvs his Glorfindel pillow.
Categories: Book Verse Slash, Book-verse Characters: Glorfindel, Lindir
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 846 Read Count: 1441
Published: Mar 26 2007 Updated: Mar 26 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Lindir's Pillow Reviewer: Ria Signed
Go! Go! Go for ninety! And does your muse do Tai-Bo or something? 'Cause your productivity kicks butt.

Author's Response: Ha. Thank you. :) I\'ll try. Am currently on the verge of 90 K for Rationalising MPreg too so maybe I\'ll do a double whammy. Hee.
Date: Mar 27 2007
Reminisce by Dragonfly Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 3]
Summary: In a time when the rule of Middle Earth is open to anyone's hands, the memories of one are could be found crucial and fatal. Whoever has that person in their power contains the key to what the future will bring: Ruin or the remainding light.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Legolas
Genres: Action/Adventure, Mystery
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2455 Read Count: 1122
Published: Mar 28 2007 Updated: Mar 28 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Dark Elf Reviewer: Ria Signed
Congratulations on posting your first story here. You've chosen some great characters and a very dramatic start.

In Legolas' last line, do you mean adjoin as in "be next to"?

Author's Response: Ah heh I can see where that could cause confusion... heh... :P he meant join sides with. i\'ll change that... thanks. :)
Date: Mar 28 2007
Asfaloth's Toilet by sylc Rated: PG [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Rhyming poem in which Asfaloth chooses Erestor for his toilet.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Asfaloth, Erestor, Glorfindel
Genres: Humor, Poetry
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 127 Read Count: 2346
Published: Mar 28 2007 Updated: Mar 28 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Asfaloth's Toilet Reviewer: Ria Signed
What amusing scatology! It sounds as if you've been spending some time with a five-year-old.

Author's Response: I haven\'t... so I guess this means I was thinking like a 5-year-old at the time? Hehehe. Thanks, Ria. Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Date: Mar 28 2007
Summary: It's a pretty dark poem. Basically tells how everyone sees the bad in life when there is actually good.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 150 Read Count: 1456
Published: Mar 29 2007 Updated: Mar 29 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
The poem has a really true message, and cleverly expressed. My quibble: I don't like the enjambment of the first lines in most of the stanzas. I think it would be better to just have a long first line or cut it somewhere else.

Author's Response: I see. I\'ll go correct that now. thanx for the review! iggybaby
Date: Mar 29 2007
by Rated: [Reviews - ]
Summary:
Categories: Orphan Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
Published: Dec 31 1969 Updated: Dec 31 1969 [Report This]
Title: None Reviewer: Ria Signed
I have several thoughts: First, this is a very exciting concept for a story; second, "Jacob" is a name out of the Bible, and so not very likely for someone who associates with Alasse (I can't off the top of my head think of any root-Hebrew names that JRRT uses -- Even Sam, that sounds like Samuel, is rationalized from another source); thirdly, you should add the story to GreenWoodElleth's "Bad Girls" challenge, as it's spot-on topic and she's a great reader to have in your corner; but, fourthly, it needs a little editing for spelling and grammar.

Date: Apr 01 2007
Summary: Legolas is depressed after the fellowship of the ring and his longing for the sea is getting him down. Can a beautiful she-elf save him from his depression? Or will she cause him even more misery? My first fan fiction, so please read and review. Thank you. CHAPTER 4 IS NOW UP. Don't forget to review then I can make my story better!



Okay after reviews made, and I thank you for it, I have adjusted my story slightly in my style and added slight hunts as to the story further. If you've already read my story these changes do not really require you to re-read, although you may wish to, you will still understand the plot as the outline is the same. Thank you so much.
Please read and review.
Alex
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Categories: Book-verse Characters: Legolas, Other, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2814 Read Count: 15307
Published: Apr 01 2007 Updated: Apr 05 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 4: The King's troubles Reviewer: Ria Signed
Spacing the paragraphs made it much easier to read: good idea! I think you could improve this chapter a lot by cleaning up the little spelling, punctuation and grammar typos. I like your take on Thranduil's angst. Gaelruin certainly doesn't make it any easier on him with his answer.

Author's Response: Thanks, I know I\'m pretty bad with the typos but all i\'ve got is spell check on microsoft word and we all know how shit that is. Thank you, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story too!
Date: Apr 08 2007
Lyra's Warriors by ZeroAkiha Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 1]
Summary: In this world full of demons and fantastic creatures. A great Evil arises. A green haired young boy steps out along with his companions, to vanish this evil back to the Twilight Realm. will he survive this dangerous adventure?

You be the judge!
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Humor
Warnings: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2672 Read Count: 1238
Published: Apr 01 2007 Updated: Apr 01 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Adventure begins Reviewer: Ria Signed
Congratulations on posting your first story here. It seems action-packed.




Please do two things:


*Credit any co-authors appropriately


*Please do clean up your grammar, punctuation and paragraph breaks. That will make it easier for everyone to read and get you more reviews!


Author's Response: ^^\' yeah about that how bout some pointers... i kinda suck at this, i really really really need to know when to stop but i get Anxious and forget \'bout stopping... any help or pointers would be very much appretiated, and thank you for reading my post! ^^
Date: Apr 02 2007
Summary: It is the Fourth Age, and the magic is fading, leaving everything a great deal more ambiguous – sometimes happily so.

Aragorn and a very old friend meet up one last time.

Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Halbarad
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1134 Read Count: 993
Published: Apr 02 2007 Updated: Apr 02 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Ria Signed
It's a fugue -- and I like it.

Author's Response: Thanks, Ria! - Dwim
Date: Apr 02 2007
Mistakes by Asa13 Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 5]
Summary: Aragorn visits Mirkwood, and things go... differently than planned. THIS ISN'T SLASH!
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elrond, Legolas, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Mystery
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1925 Read Count: 4494
Published: Apr 02 2007 Updated: Apr 26 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3:Spiders Reviewer: Ria Signed
You chose a great topic: I want to see more of Aragorn and Legolas' first meeting. I think maybe an AU label may be appropriate for Legolas being a teenager. By his comment at Edoras about the leaves having fallen 500 times, he's probably at least 1,000.
Date: Apr 08 2007