I love the detail of her selecting her smile. Also, the song is quite funny.
I will definitely read on!
Author's Response: :D Thanks, glad to have an appreciative reader!
By the way, if you think the song is funny now, you should see my brother sing it, in a tutu and all frou frou things, complete with a blonde wig. Quite disturbingly hilarious.
I really like the line "Undill. Undominel. Whatever." Very funny!
Please, though, don't use repeated characters for line breaks, or if you want a graphic break, group them in groups of two or three at most. (** **)
I think you have a great idea (kind of like Glen Cook's Black Company character, the Lady), but the choppy style you chose makes it harder to take in. Even though it's humor, it seems like an epic subject.
I want to read your next chapters.
Author's Response: Thanks!
You should add this to the A Spy in Rivendell challenge! It seems perfect.
Great job writing a more nuanced Denethor. Also, the relationship between the brothers is very nicely drawn.
Hey, add this to my Valentine's Day challenge: it's perfect!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Ria. Patty.
Aralia, I like your idea. I would do some beta reading for you, if you like, though I can't commit to it all. I'm a grammar-waffe, if not a full on grammar Nazi. ;)
This is a great story about what happened after the War of the Ring, although it's sad to think of Bag End being abandoned.
Excellent! One thing I do like from the movie-verse is the moment of contact when Faramir wakes up while Denethor is burning . . . you melded the book-verse depth of Faramir nicely with the dramatic events of the movie.
Very recognizable Smaug, but a very creative and unexpected setting. I liked it a lot. I think you probably matched the spirit of Gondor's True Queen's challenge perfectly.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. *is pleased and touched*
This is very clear and intriguing. I would like to find out what happens next.
Author's Response: Thank you! I would like to know what happens next too. :) At any rate, it would be very different form the events in the Silmarillion.
This is my second time reading this witty story. I love the view of these two heroines it gives (especially Eowyn's pregnant munchies). The best part of the joke is that Arwen herself originated the myth that elves are allergic to iron.
Author's Response: thanks!
An excellent contribution to the over-myth, and you used the Legolas-Gimli friendship very charmingly.
Author's Response: Thanks Ria!
Very nice picture of their relationship! There would be fascinating power issues between them, wouldn't there? I've always liked the throwaway tragedy of Celeborn's last line in the Lord of the Rings, and you addressed it excellently.
Author's Response: thanks! So glad you liked it!
Yes, that passage in Return of the King is very tempting. I like the way you handled it -- it is a terribly sad scene, but not awash in angst-for-angst's sake.
That was perfect in tone and length, and I loved all the deliberate inconsistencies. I felt bad for Notice-Everything Reader, though. Will she recover?
You have a nice touch with the characters.
Author's Response: Thank you so much !I am hoping to post quite a long series about the same characters here.
Hehehe. I particularly like the authorial inserts ("**He then goes on to describe how Chess Is Like A Battle. This is sexy. However, it goes on for longer than we thought, and we scroll down past it.**")
Author's Response: haha thanks...i totally know how it feels to click on a romance fic and there be like a TON of explanations and descriptions, and you skip past them to get to the good stuff lol
That is funny. I like how you included the movie version of Scary!Galadriel, and the Sue-like changing eye colors of Movie Legolas (which continuity gaffe always irks me).