Cute! Mmm, I want chocolate now. Perhaps not from 3-year-old Estel's lips, though I suppose it wouldn't be so bad if he was older...or perhaps if he were Legolas. I could live with that. Alright, I'll shut up now. I'm getting a little carried away. Anyway, great little story!
Author's Response: I\'m pleased you liked it, ArwenUndomiel. He\'s so cute, i could eat him up even without chocolate! Thanks, love!
Very funny! I loved it.
Author's Response: thanks!
Beautiful story! I can just imagine Eowyn ending up like that after all she went through. Faramir was so sweet! Great story, I love it. Keep writing!
Well, it was nicely written. I thought the pairing was a little odd, but it was still good. I was a bit surprised though; I don't really think Legolas and Gimli (especially Gimli) would be that loving and, well, sappy towards each other. It seemed a bit OOC.
The bit about Legolas shooting that last orc...I swear I have read almost exactly the same paragraph, only in a different story on a different sight. Hmmn...
One other little criticism...I think you may have used the word 'cock' a few too many times. Another word occasionally wouldn't have hurt.
I'm sorry if this review sounds a little harsh, I'm just trying to help. Still a good story, well done!
Wow. Such a beautiful poem! I thought the way you started every stanza with 'I' was very effective. I loved it!
I loved it! Really sweet. Well done, I hope you will write more soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! I have completed 78 fic prompts so far and will be adding them here.
Cute! Very well-written, well done!
Author's Response: Oh thank you for the lovely and kind review! *smiles largely*
Very funny! I loved it. You write really well!
Author's Response: Wow--thank you! I\'m so very pleased you enjoyed it. Patty.
Very funny! I really liked it. Loved Glorfindel's attitude to all the other diplomats!
Author's Response: Yay! First review! ^__^ I\'m very glad you enjoyed it, Arwen. It was lots of fun to write. Thanks.
Loved it! Beautiful poem, and the little commentary was great as well. You write really well.
Author's Response: Thank you, Arwen, for your very self-esteem-rising comments. :)
Cute! I love fluff. It's also very well-written. Great!
Author's Response: Thank you, ArwenUndomiel for the kind compliment--I adore fluff, too and I had fun writing this one. *hugs* patty.
Cute! I really liked it. Short but sweet.
So beautiful! I really loved it, it is a beautiful poem! Well done.
Great story so far! Aula chilled me to the bone, she was just so terrifying! Poor Roth is going to get it now, isn't he? Poor thing. I love the plot. One thing that always amazes me about your stories is how good you are at coming up with evil plans...it's a little scary actually! Anyway, I really love this, please update soon! I can't stand cliffies, I have to read the rest now!
Author's Response: LOL! oh be very scared. lol :P Thanks for the review!! Hope you enjoy all the other updates!
Well, I really like the story. It's very well-written, and I love how you have incorporated the two different worlds so effectively.
I'm not trying to be mean or anything, but I think Elaine is a little bit of a Mary-Sue. The breathtaking beauty, the tortured past, the flirting, etc. There doesn't seem to be much character development happening. If she had a few faults, she would be far more likeable and believable.
Aside from that, I really did like it. Even if she is a little Mary-Sue, you wrote her well enough for it not to spoil the story too much. And I really love the plot. Please update soon, I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Oh, you\'re not beeing mean, on the contrary! I like constructive criticism! But I do feel like pointing out some things, since I am sure others probably feel the same for Elaine. You will find my answer at the next chapter, which will be posted in a while. I\'m sure it will be helpful for other people as well. Once again, thank you for your review and please feel free to let me know what you really think about the story. We can\'t improve unless we make mistakes... *wink*
I really liked this chapter! Honestly, I love the detail in which you are developing Lim Aear.
I believe you referred to the Lorien elves as 'high elves' at one point. If these are the same elves who inhabited the original Lothlorien, then they are not high elves, but grey elves. High elves are the ones that sailed away over the sea, or perhaps some in Rivendell. Just thought I'd point that out. Also, I just realised one other thing; Westron is not English, and in reality Elaine would not have been able to speak it so easily. That doesn't matter, though. The story is AU anyway, and creating language barriers would probably have been counter-productive to the plot.
I'm sorry if you took offence to my Mary-Sue comment, I wasn't trying to offend you. I am aware that Mary-Sue is something of a grey area, and largely a matter of opinion.
One other little correction I have; I did notice that you missed a lot of commas in the story. Many sentences would flow better if they had commas, as some of them don't sound quite right.
I really like your characterization of Legolas. You are doing a god job bringing him to life. And I liked your description of Galadriel. She sounded just right.
Ooh, the story is getting so tense! I just wish they would get together already *sigh*. Still, I really love it. It is a great story and I can't wait for the next chapter! Please update soon!
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked the chapter! I didn\'t take offense to your review, as I said. I\'m glad to have constractive criticism. Elaine doesn\'t know much about Elven history, only as much as Legolas was able to tell her in one night. So it\'s only natural for her to have misunderstood some things and make mistakes. That makes her much more realistic than having a perfect knowledge of Elven history out of nowhere. And they certainly do not speak Westron. The story doesn\'t take place in Middle Earth, but in modern Earth and it\'s only natural that the elves have adopted to the new dominating language (English that is). As I said, they are not totally alienated from the upper world. I cannot account for the lack or misplacing of commas, I\'m afraid. My BETA is doing that job for me. So any complaints should be addressed to her, although I DO believe she does an amazing job. Once again thank you for your review and helpful comments. I will update as soon as possible!
Really sad! It was great to finally hear the full story of her past. I loved the way you kept it in suspense like that for so long, then finally let the story out in this chapter.
I'm afraid I can't help really disliking Elaine. She frustrates the hell out of me, she is so immature! I know she thinks she is doing the right thing...but, argh! I'm really sorry, please don't take that the wrong way! I don't like her personality, but you are an excellent writer, and you have characterised her really well all the same. So I'm not criticising you.
I think you have a wonderful writing style, and this is a great story! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Hello Arwen Undomiel! As I have told you, I never take offense from your reviews! It\'s really good news that you don\'t like Elaine... it means she\'s a character of her own and she has her lovers and haters as everybody does! She is really immature and hasty in her decisions, it\'s true... which is what makes her so \'human\' and \'real\' in the end! I\'m very glad you\'re enjoying the story! Thank you once more for your review and your compliments, I will update as soon as possible!
Oh, Elaine is such a stupid girl! I'm glad she's finally seeing sense.
Ack, what's going to happen to the Elves?! Just one thing though, I'd try to avoid having Legolas survive the trap but end up getting back mortally wounded, with her crying and berating herself, etc. It would be too cliche. I'm not sure if that's what you are doing here, but it happens in pretty much any romance you care to read, to the point where it becomes way too cliche.
I only noticed one spelling error. In one chapter near the start, I believe you called Legolas a 'warriorr'. Just thought I should point that out.
This was a really good chapter. Short, but still fantastic! I like how this story is moving. Can't wait to read the rest! Seriously, it's turning into a great story! Update soon, mellon-nin!
Author's Response: Hello mellon nin! I\'m so glad you are enjoying the story! Yes, Elaine is finally realizing her mistakes... let\'s hope she won\'t make the same ones again! I have no intention of having Legolas come back wounded or anything like that, there are only minor injuries in the menu (just to make the battle and its consequences a little more realistic). Thank you very much for letting me know of the spelling mistake, I have already corrected it! Talk to you soon!
Oh, that's good, I'm glad you're not going to do that. I didn't think you would really, but I have seen so many stories building up to that, and frankly it gets a little boring. I'm extremely glad you have more imagination than that! Oh, I sound horrible, I already know you have more imagination. Anyway I'll say it again, please update soon! I really can't wait to read it!
Author's Response: LOL I know what you mean! Although tending a wounded Legolas sounds very appealing, it wouldn\'t serve any purpose in my story... So I hope you like the way I have decided to handle the plot! You won\'t have to wait long for an update, coming in a few minutes! :-)
Oh, so so SWEET! Honestly, I can't stop smiling now! That has to be your best chapter yet! For once I am completely speechless! Which, judging by the long-winded reviews I have been giving you, is quite something. It is absolutely beautiful, I loved it so much. It's just so romantic!
Author's Response: Hello Arwen Undomiel! My, I\'m so happy that you liked this chapter so much! Thank you very much for your compliments! I really hope you will enjoy the next one as much as this one! Thank you for your review!