Oh, and I forgot to mention, that bit at the end was really funny. 'methnin...melthin...' It made me laugh.
Author's Response: LOL, yeah, I\'m sure Belwen wanted to laugh too, but elves are always so considerate of other people\'s feelings! :-P
Once again, you have me speechless. This whole chapter was so, so beautiful and romantic!! They are finally together. I am just insanely happy now, I can't stop smiling!
I loved how you managed to make it, well...smut, without it seeming smutty. Hang on, does that make any sense at all? What I'm trying to say is that you handled it really well without just making it a pointless PWP chapter like a lot of authors seem to end up doing. Instead it really enhanced the plot.
Welll, it's official. You have me completely hooked on this story. It's just so beautiful, and romantic. Please write more soon!!
Author's Response: Hello mellon nin! I\'m so glad you\'re enjoying the story so much!! Thank you very much for all the compliments... Now *I* can\'t stop smiling!! :-P I have to confess I wrote and rewrote the chapter quite a few times to make sure it didn\'t sound like... well... porn! I\'m glad it turned out good! I promise I will update as soon as I can... until then, namarie!
Aww, SO cute! So she's a princess now? Heck, I had completely forgotten about that part as well!
This chapter was fantastic! I loved it. Please write more soon mellon-nin!
Author's Response: Hello, mellon nin! Well, as you see, Elaine had forgotten the \'princess part\' just like everyone else! How not to, with the gorgeously captivating character of Legolas beside her? I\'m glad you enjoyed the chapter and I thank you for your review!
Great chapter! I liked the twist in her first appearance as princess. She's not perfect after all, and I really like that. She seems a lot more real now. You're also developing their relationship really well...giving them these obstacles like the wedding discussion, not just making them a fairytale couple.
Oh, it's 'clung' and not 'clang'. 'Clang' is an onomatopoeia.
Still, I really liked this chapter. The character development seems to be really improving. They are just so sweet, the two of them! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hello mellon nin! Thank you for your review! I was sure you would like her first official appearance as a Princess. It was my purpose to make her look like an everyday girl and not some perfect being... because she\'s not one. I\'m glad you like the development of their relationship. I tried to make it slow and believable, although I risk making some readers bored... Thank you for pointing out the typo to me, it\'s already corrected! I will update as soon as I can!
Whew. That was intense. Loved the way you wrote the scene in his office; I could practically feel his anger.
I was also impressed at how you showed his struggle with his pride and jealousy, and eventually giving in to his curiosity. It made his behaviour seem realistic and believeable.
The scene with her in the bar was really good, it served as a reminder of the contrast between Elaine's life on Earth and her life in Lim Aear. When she's in LA all the time it's easy to forget about her old life. But that scene sort of brought it to the surface again.
Please update really soon! I just can't wait to see what transpires. Poor Elaine! Bet she's going to be one confused woman when she gets back and finds her husband in a jealous rage. Something tells me this isn't going to be pretty. Great chapter!
Author's Response: Hello, mellon nin! Well, I\'m glad you understand the issues I\'m trying to bring up in the story! A reviewer was furious at Elaine\'s behaviour, because she found unrealistic the fact that she would leave her husband in Lim Aear and go clubbing... But I guess she failed to see exactly what you pointed out: the fact that, although she\'s now married, she has a life outside Lim Aear and she cannot disappear from the face of the Earth all of sudden! Elaine is CERTAINLY going to be one confused woman! :-P LOL you\'re reading behind the lines, aren\'t you? Thank you very much for your review, I will try to update as soon as I\'m finished with replying to reviews!
First off, sorry about your medical problems! Hope it's all alright now.
That was fantastic, mellon-nin! Again, I loved the intensity of it all.
I'm not sure what your opinions are, but I'm personally inclined to take Legolas' side entirely. Of course, in a modern-day setting, his behaviour would be atrocious and inexcusable. But this isn't the modern world, and he is behaving in perfect accordance with the customs of those times. I think Elaine was extremely immature, actually. As a modern woman she has at least some understanding of customs in ancient times, whereas the Elves can't be expected to understand any of her culture. I'm all for compromise, but she really should respect his beliefs when it comes to such important matters. Sorry about ranting on like that. =P Just felt the need to explain my opinion. I love Elaine, but I will never look on her as one of the brightest crayons in the box.
However, I sort of agree with you on the author's note. Elaine cannot just vanish off the surface of the planet without explanation. She's young and human, and has every right to a bit of fun. I just think that now, as a woman married to the prince of Lim Aear, she needs to show a little more propriety. When you take into account the standards and values of the society he has lived all his life in, Legolas' reaction is not unreasonable. Not saying I support chauvinism or anything like that. Just in the context.
Well, I'm pretty sure you've heard enough of my opinions to last you the rest of your life now, so I'll move on to the actual story. I've been meaning to mention this for a while, but it keeps slipping my mind. The translations at the end of each Elvish sentence are actually a bit of a no-no in fanfiction. They interrupt the flow of the story, annoy all those readers who can translate the statements unaided, and make the use of Elvish language pretty redundant. Translations are good, as most people don't speak Elvish, but they should be put at the end of the chapter.
I thought you showed Legolas' behaviour very well indeed. Elaine's reaction was also well done, though I did think she could have been a touch more intimidated. Overall though, their behaviour was realistic and well handled.
This chapter moved at a good pace. I loved the way you had Elaine breezing in, excited and cheerful, only to find her husband in a state of mad fury.
Yet another cliffie at the end. If this story didn't have me so addicted, I would hate you for leaving me in such suspense. You do pull cliffhangers off very well, I have to admit.
So yeah, I really enjoyed this chapter! I was really anticipating that scene, and you've risen well above my expectations. Please update soon! And sorry for prattling on so much. I'm in a rather talkative mood right now. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hello, mellon nin! Thank you so much for your helpful review! I\'m glad you take the time to give me constructive criticism everytime! Concerning Legolas and Elaine\'s behaviour, I have to agree with you. I don\'t find fault in either and Elaine is certainly not the brightest crayon in the box... quite the contrary actually! She is very immature, that much was obvious from the early chapters, but that doesn\'t make her behaviour unrealistic, as a reviewer *twice* pointed out. As for the elvish translations, I gave it much thought before posting the story, believe me. In the end, I decided to use my personal experience and act accordingly. I once happened to read a story, which used the Quenya dialect that I\'m not very familiar with, and had the translations in the end. I found it extremely frustrating that I had to interrupt my reading to go at the end of the chapter where all the translations where, and in the end I ended up skipping off the elvish dialogue missing vital parts of the plot during my first reading, which did not let me enjoy the story. So I decided, that since most of the readers do not know the elvish language, I would have the translations at the end of each sentence, so that people wouldn\'t get as frustrated as I am; and those who knew the language, would just ignore them. I am really sorry it\'s inconvenient for you, but I have to think about what the majority would prefer. Thank you for taking the time to point it out to me, however! I\'m really glad the chapter did not let you down; most people were waiting for it with great excitement and I was so nervous about how it would turn out! I\'m sorry I haven\'t updated yet, but I promise I will try to do so today! Thank you so much for your kind support throughout the story!
Fantastic! I loved the little twist at the end. I knew it wasn't going to be how it seemed at first because of the PG rating, but it still took me by surprise. You've given me cravings now. I'm off to find some chocolate...
Cute! I liked it! This probably sounds incredibly stupid, but I actually have no idea who Rumil is. Still, good story and well-written. Update soon?
Author's Response: Well... Rumil is Haldir\'s brother. Thank you for your review, i\'m glad that you enjoyed of it, parts 3 & 4 are ready, hope you love them as well. Keep smiling, Sivan Shemesh
So, so cute! I really loved it. Well done!
So sweet! You are a fantastic writer, I hope you will keep adding!
I loved it! Really good story so far. I loved the way you portrayed Arwen, as more than a helpless, dainty female for once. It made a nice change. And I also liked your portrayal of Legolas, and the two hobbits. That midnight snack scene was so cute! When will there be more?
Delightful! So funny. I loved it!
Really random, but funny. I'll show it to my sister, she loves stuff like this! I really liked it as well.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad your sister liked it. I love randomness!
Yep, I showed it to my sister and she was laughing psychotically thoughout. She says great story as well.
It was pretty good, it made me laugh. I thought it was a little weird that Glorfindel could see him so easily though. And I thought the title was a little confusing, I would probably call it something a bit more concise. Still, good story. I'm sorry to hear you are leaving the site, you are a good author and I have really been enjoying your stories. Well done with this, it is very funny!
Author's Response: I am glad i made you laugh, i always thought humour wasn\'t one of my qualitites. I am wondering how you found the title confusing? Yes as i said in my profile it is too painful to have lost so much feedback and reviews and losing so many stories. Thankyou very much for the review, i just hope the 3 authors i dedicated it too see it! Yun Btw Glorfindel is a very elder elf, his senses are more heightened then that of the twins.
It is really good! I ordinarily shy away from anything that suggests Aragorn and Legolas as a couple, as I've never exactly been a huge fan of slash. It is still a really good poem though. Just one thing; 'strickly' is 'strictly'. Apart from those little nit-picks, it was beautiful. Well done.
Author's Response: thank you for the review. i fixed \'strictly\' by the way, thank you. i very much appreciate the feedback, another \'thank you\' to you.
Really sweet. I loved it. You are a really good writer!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot!
Wow. That was such a beautiful poem! I loved it.
Author's Response: Thank you again. If you like this, watch for another poem by me...I\'ll be reposting it under this username soon. ~Mel
Wow, that was so sad! And beautiful. You write really well.
Author's Response: Thanks. I will try to write more fics like that in the future. ~Mel
Fantastic! Really, really funny. I especially liked the ten cars and the laptops. Great story, keep it up!
Author's Response: The laptops were the hardest...I love the cars too. But my absolute fave is the starbursts, because I can always hear Smeagol actually saying the lines! Thanks for reviewing! ~Mel