Hey GWE, I dunno if you read the beta topic again, but If you want, I'll beta this for you, also would you like to beta Far future? (I ask since I only just started it, and it would be nice to have a beta early on,) e-mail me if you want
Author's Response: sure!! I\'d love too!!
well, obviously I've already seen this, :D, but well done anyway
Insane, absolutely insane. Are you ever gonna... uh, you know, get the characters sorted out? I mean, crazyness is good but it is starting to wear a little bit thin...
Author's Response: I\'m sorry I didn\'t send this to you first. Its been really crazy at my house and I was so eager just to get this chapter in, I had to rewrite it from my lap top(there\'s actually a better chapter there, one thats written and way less crazy.) and was functioning with less than an hours sleep and a lot of sugar. I\'ll try and sort it out, again, I\'m really sorry. We\'ve had exams all week. Sorry :(
Just one thing, "your" is used such as "your cat"
However "Your a liar" Should be "You're" a liar" you are a liar see?
Other than that, I think it's a good take on the nature of some people, who might not be as nice as you think.
(not that I agree with the portrayal of Boromir, grr...)
Just kidding, keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your criticizm. My beta reader is currently not online so please excuse the spelling mistakes. I got worried at first about the Boromir thing... eep! I hope you enjoy what\'s to come! xxx
They are all major overreacters, that's all I can say he
Author's Response: Oh yes. Definetly. Thanks for reviewing! xx
Still doing the "your" thing but, well meh.
Elves are viscious, think of what happens when they capture defenceless orcs!
Author's Response: Damn that \"your\" habit I have! Grr! Oh yes. Elves are vicious things. I love that! Thanks for reviewing. xxx
there are two chapter thirteens
Author's Response: Ok. I\'ll sort that out asap.
Begun... hm... looks like it never got started to me
It's a bit brief at points, just some constructive critisism
It's "slew," not slayed.
Punctuation goes inside the speech marks, not outside.
Other than that, good, but just a bit too short.
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice!
I like it, but still remember, commas on the inside of the speech marks
Well, that was somewhat unexpected, Legolas and Gimli died, but Boromir didnt? I like the style, and you've extended it a little longer.
(although you didn't actually write anything for the first chapter, the wait was worth it)
Scary, I'd hate to have a nightmare like that!
Author's Response: Yes. It was very scary. I hope it never happens again. Thanks for reviewing! xxx
Haha, very funny
HAHAHAHA! Too funny.
A little too short, but it's good regardless
Author's Response: Thanks Note: That\'s why I called them \"Short stories\" ;)
Somewhat sort, but nicely written
YEEHAH! Frodo died Frodo died! *goes on crazy mad victory dance, reminiscent of an orc with two left feet, since he can't dance!*
I like it very very (X several billion) much, well done Sarah!
Author's Response: *sniffs and eyes water then face turns to utter rage and becomes uglier then it already was...* You better not have meant that!! :D *calms slowly* Either way, thanks for reviewing! hehe xxx
I refuse to read another word
Author's Response: *Falls about laughing* That\'s a shame... :D, it was getting interesting!
she was arrested for killing countless people, and was personally executed by me by using my coveted pen.
Author's Response: Hahahahahahaha!
Well, that ain't exactly a chapter, but it was what should happen
Author's Response: I agree...