This was a beautiful essay.
Author's Response: Thank you very much :)
That is a very nice way of choosing a pen name, you know, nice and logical.
I would agree with one of your anonymous friends: Your screen name definitely sounds both a.) Gondorian and b.) poetical.
Author's Response: Thanks, Nazgrrl. My interest is writing LotR fan fiction came far too late in life for the vicissitudes of my youth to have any relevancy in choosing a pen name, hence my story was not as dramatic as yours. My anonymous friend will gain recognition of a sort soon. He and I will make a cameo appearance in Arwen\'s Journey.
Those were some interesting points you brought up. I would have to disagree with you on the point of authors asking for reviews. I know I do it, and although I never really sat down and though about it, I would have to say that I want to know what reactions I get from readers.
Anyway, I had better stop now while I'm ahead, because I am sure you don't want to hear my ramblings.
Overall, a thought provoking essay.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. Absolutely feel free to disagree with anything I have said in here, these are just my own views and opinions and I realize that not everyone is going to agree with them and thatís fine and I can respect that. I have come to review asking for reviews and asking for critique as two completely different things, and again this is my personal opinion but it seems when reviews are demanded it feels too much like someone is just looking for attention and wants to be told how fantastic their fic is while a more serious writer wants to hear what the writer honestly thought and while I may go on about how much I loved the story I do try to include specific examples of what truly stood out in my mind so that the writer can really see what stood out in the story and realize that whatever technique they were using was effective.\r\n\r\nI am with you in that I love getting reactions from readers as well, as to what they liked, didnít like and so on about the story, I always find that helpful so that I can make changes so I am definitely with you there.\r\n\r\nLOL, feel free to ramble on, I donít mind, I do it quite abit myself ;)\r\n
I would suggest that when you are introducing the character and the setting you do the old "show don't tell" idea. Something along the lines of "As Ben sucked the air into his lungs, he stared blindly out at the stunning vista before him, not even seeing the distant mountain range."
I love the last sentence!
Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks for the tips! I'll keep that in mind, I do have a tendency to make things a bit too blatant :)
Hmmm. The plot thickens. I would suggest the same as I did in the prologue, but you have been improving.
I like this idea that your story is taking place in the 2200's!
Hmm. This is getting "curiouser and curiouser" in the words of a great author.
You express a certain element of timelessness in this piece.
I really enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Thank-you very much! I am glad you enjoyed it!
You have a couple of spelling mistakes in here:
Smiling, not smileing
Vanished, not vanised,
Rumors, not rumer
Sometimes, not somrtimes
However, barring the spelling mistakes, I really enjoyed this poem. It captures something indescribably sad, yet hopeful.
One critique I might make is the single word "But..." in the middle of the poem: It works well as a leading line to the last stanza, but I think there might be some more "in character" synonyms . . . Maybe "However" or "Still" or something along those lines.
I hope you write some more poems!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always have with spelling.
Heeehee! This is funny, as I have got the image of a teenage Aragorn involved in this discussion!
Author's Response: that was the idea =)\r\nglad you liked it, NZ!
Huh. That was an interesting impressionistic poem ( as I call it).
You have a way with words that seem to imply a timelessness and melancholy.
Author's Response: wow, really? I didn\'t know that, I thought I wasn\'t that good, *smile* YAY!!!!!!!! THANX!!!!!!
It was an assonance.
I like this poem!
Author's Response: Thank you. I like it too! :D hehe
Heehee. This was funny. It's actually the second time I've read this. . . I forgot to R&R Whoops!
This reminds me of the Lumberjack Song from I believe it was "Monty Python." Either that, or Brave Sir Robin's song. . .
Anyways, I really enjoyed this!
Author's Response: Thank you! Sorry, I totally missed your review until just now, unless something pretty much bonks me on the head I usually\r\nmiss any new reviews! Its funny you should mention the \"Lumberjack\" song from yes, I think its Monty Python becuase when\r\nI was little my grandfather always use to sing it to me, and I thought it was a funny little song he had just made up and \r\nhad abseloutely NO idea where he had gotten it from, It wasn\'t till may years later I realized he hadn\'t creatred it, lol.\r\nAgain, thanks very much and I am very glad you enjoyed this :)
This is a rather interesting story.
I haven't quite figured out what is going on here, but I assume that you will clarify in the upcoming chapters.
Will there be an update soon?
Wow. This looks like it could turn into a really interesting story, Karlmir.
Camp Stonewain . . . I like it!
Author's Response: Get ready for a little bit of horror later on. This is, after all, a \"Twilight Zone\" episode. Camp Stonewain is from \"Arwen\'s Journey.\" Located in the Stonewain Valley a few miles from the Great West Road, it\'s an up-to-date military installation for the training of Gondorian and Ithilien rangers. King Elessar had it built as part of his modernization program for the Gondorian military after the War of the Ring.
You know, I just had a feeling that this Camp Stonewain might have been from Arwen's Journey. =)
Update soon? Please?
Author's Response: Right you are! For those readers not familiar with Camp Stonewain, see Chapters 29, 32 and 34 of \"Arwen\'s Journey.\"
Yes, Nazgrrl, I will update \"Elven Ears\" soon.
Thank you for clarifying. I have never seen this "Twilight Zone" but, I do look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: \"The Twilight Zone\" was a TV series during the late 1950\'s to the early 1960\'s hosted by Rod Serling. It featured stories, often with bizarre plots, involving Sci-Fi, the supernatural or the occult. You can see reruns on YouTube. I hope to update in a few days.
Hmmm. This is getting "curiouser and curiouser . . ."
I don't seem to like Aragorn's family very much . . . they seem a bit rotten inside, and I'm not sure if this is a good thing.
Also, I feel kind of worried, both for Liv's safety, and the King and Queen's sanity if things keep on spontaneously appearing around Liv. =)
Author's Response: Luthirien may seem a bit arrogant, but you have to remember that she is wielding a magistrate\'s power at a very young age and is prone to smugness after a cleverly won success. As for her ambitions--you must keep in mind that she\'s the offspring of Elessar and Evenstar, of whose own ambitions there should be no doubt. In my various stories, I\'ve tried to portray both of them as hands-on rulers who would surely pass their hard-working idealism on to their children. Luthirien\'s ambitions are not truly selfish.
I\'m glad you feel a certain tension over Liv Tyler\'s safety, as well as the sanity of the royal couple. That is, after all, my intent. Remember, Liv has travelled to Middle Earth via the Twilight Zone. Stranger things have yet to happen.
I would say the effort to rhyme every line makes it a little distracting . . . other than that, it's a great poem.
Author's Response: Yeah...I was testing new rhyming methods :D didn't really work. Hah, thank you Nazgrrl.
This story is so beautiful: beautiful writing, beautiful characters, everything.
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words, it is most appreciated!
Will Elladan run into Aragorn on his way out? He should, and then he'd really "find hope." =) Sorry, I'm really enjoying this.