I love "they'd none of them be missed"

Intriguing, though at the last update, I would think that you are getting into more of a PG/PG-13 rating.

Oh well, that's me being nit-picky again.

I like the way you write the monologue from 2 points of view.

~Nazgrrl

I envy Mary Sue! A LotR summer camp? Lucky! ** pushes jaw shut**

Cool

teehee!

Really, this is a very movie-versish critique, as in the books, it is Glorfindel who finds the Fellowship, and I don't believe Tolkein ever says that Arwen does or doesn't look good in green.

Also, I don't think Elrond ever adopted Aragorn, but I could be wrong on that point.

Anyways, I agree that the Arwen in the movie isn't very good.

Author's Response: You have no idea how many times i\'ve been told that. Thanx for the review and i\'m glad you agree on the Movie-Arwen point. Thanks again - Li

Sigh. Okay, I just finished archive-binging on this and "the Black Rose." I have a few thoughts, if you want to hear them.

In "Black Rose" and "Chains" there are a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes . . . the one that is prominent at the moment is "He excited the cave." Can caves feel emotions? Hmmm. . . . Sorry-getting off track. The point is, it should be "exited."

At the moment, I find all of the OCs running around a little distracting, and with another one added, I think it will just get worse.

Brownie points for you for keeping this under PG-13 for the most part!

I'm more interested in this "dark elf" who started the avalanche, then the rather pathetic sounding elf on the farm. ( elf, elf on the farm, where people are treated with harm . .. *sung to "Home, Home on the Range." =))

Which brings up another point: In the last couple of paragraphs on this update, it seems that the action isn't clearly presented. I have no idea who is speaking, and then all of a sudden, another OC comes and starts arguing with Mr. Pathetic Elf-guy! ( sorry, that's my rant for the morning.)

Seth should be killed by drowning in a vat of poisoned beer, a la Tower of London.

One last thing, if you do a werewolf thing, stay away from full moons, and make the vampires ugly, because otherwise it will seem like they're good, and all of the bad characters were never very attractive. (Honestly, can you think of Legolas falling for Shelob? No? Neither can I)

So there is my very long list of responses to your stories.

Keep it up!
NZ

Author's Response: lol, first off, thanks for reviewing!\r\nSecond *groans* stupid errors, yeah, I saw somewhere before I wrote \"week\" instead of \"weak\" I really need to read over\r\nmy work and check for errors.\r\nYeah, it ended up with a LOT of OC\'s *Blushes* Sorry, it\'s just my ideas change a lot, and I find it hard just to stick\r\nto cannon characters\r\nMm, I agree with you, the Dark Elf IS interesting and I should really write more about him...\r\nOk I\'ll try fixing up the last update!\r\nlol, drowning hm? The idea holds promise!\r\nStaying WELL away from full moons! That\'s just BORING and the sunlight issue...I disagree, some bad characters\r\nCAN be VERY attractive, think Sauron in the form of Annatar! \r\nThanks for the majorlly long review, much appreciated =)

Hmm. This was a thought provoking piece, though I found the musical directions (chorus, bridge) a bit distracting. Good job!

NZ

Author's Response: Mmmm. I can\'t remember the tune but I think I made it up on the spot. Thanx for the review!\r\niggybaby

I have to agree with Katarinna: I have no idea what the significance of Xerxes, etc. is, but I am probably not older than you. Anyway, you have a great storytelling voice.
NZ

Author's Response: Oh, well, for Xerxes, it\'s part of the FMA storyline. It\'ll be fully explained later on in the story. I hope.

Awww, cute!

Author's Response: Frodo is cute no matter what age. He is fun to write about.