I love "they'd none of them be missed"
You know, I've never really understood that poem, why it is called a poem, or anything else about William- whats his name. Anyways, I greatly prefer yours to the original, so I guess it comes out alright in the end.
Author's Response: *laughs* You prefer mine to the original? I think that\'s one of the best compliments I\'ve ever heard. Thanks, Nazgrrl, and thanks also for the lovely review.
Intriguing, though at the last update, I would think that you are getting into more of a PG/PG-13 rating.
Oh well, that's me being nit-picky again.
I like the way you write the monologue from 2 points of view.
Yay you! I love it when a brother/sister stands up and declares their faith! It is certainly encouraging to find a.) a Christain and b.) a Boy Scout on this site.
Keep up the cute & humurous work.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the reveiw!
I envy Mary Sue! A LotR summer camp? Lucky! ** pushes jaw shut**
Regrettably, I have not completely read the Silmarillion. . . . . Anyway, I like monologue, monologues are (almost) always good.
Author's Response: Hi, Nazgrrl. Heh. I like your penname. The Silmarillion is great! It was a little hard for me to get into some parts of it at first, but now I\'m enjoying the Lay of Leithian and am confirmed as a crazed fan (as if you couldn\'t tell). ;) I read some good fanfiction that helped me get some of the characters and events straight in my head. That made it a lot easier to appreciate. Thank you, I\'m glad you enjoyed my story. ~Still Anonymous
I like this; a bittersweet, view of what might have happened to Merry and Pip.
Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank-you for reviewing! I am glad you like it!
Very Enjoyable! I like the POV from Bilbo, very hobbitish!
Author's Response: Thank you. I identify very much with a hero who stops to think about food in the midst of his adventures.
Really, this is a very movie-versish critique, as in the books, it is Glorfindel who finds the Fellowship, and I don't believe Tolkein ever says that Arwen does or doesn't look good in green.
Also, I don't think Elrond ever adopted Aragorn, but I could be wrong on that point.
Anyways, I agree that the Arwen in the movie isn't very good.
Author's Response: You have no idea how many times i\'ve been told that. Thanx for the review and i\'m glad you agree on the Movie-Arwen point. Thanks again - Li
Oh, I love this. Your poems capture an elvish essence that really explain Lorien.
I have also done a poem about Lorien, but focusing on the Mirror.
Would you care to write a poem about Galadriel's Mirror after she departs for Valinor? I would love to read it.
Sigh. Okay, I just finished archive-binging on this and "the Black Rose." I have a few thoughts, if you want to hear them.
In "Black Rose" and "Chains" there are a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes . . . the one that is prominent at the moment is "He excited the cave." Can caves feel emotions? Hmmm. . . . Sorry-getting off track. The point is, it should be "exited."
At the moment, I find all of the OCs running around a little distracting, and with another one added, I think it will just get worse.
Brownie points for you for keeping this under PG-13 for the most part!
I'm more interested in this "dark elf" who started the avalanche, then the rather pathetic sounding elf on the farm. ( elf, elf on the farm, where people are treated with harm . .. *sung to "Home, Home on the Range." =))
Which brings up another point: In the last couple of paragraphs on this update, it seems that the action isn't clearly presented. I have no idea who is speaking, and then all of a sudden, another OC comes and starts arguing with Mr. Pathetic Elf-guy! ( sorry, that's my rant for the morning.)
Seth should be killed by drowning in a vat of poisoned beer, a la Tower of London.
One last thing, if you do a werewolf thing, stay away from full moons, and make the vampires ugly, because otherwise it will seem like they're good, and all of the bad characters were never very attractive. (Honestly, can you think of Legolas falling for Shelob? No? Neither can I)
So there is my very long list of responses to your stories.
Keep it up!
Author's Response: lol, first off, thanks for reviewing!\r\nSecond *groans* stupid errors, yeah, I saw somewhere before I wrote \"week\" instead of \"weak\" I really need to read over\r\nmy work and check for errors.\r\nYeah, it ended up with a LOT of OC\'s *Blushes* Sorry, it\'s just my ideas change a lot, and I find it hard just to stick\r\nto cannon characters\r\nMm, I agree with you, the Dark Elf IS interesting and I should really write more about him...\r\nOk I\'ll try fixing up the last update!\r\nlol, drowning hm? The idea holds promise!\r\nStaying WELL away from full moons! That\'s just BORING and the sunlight issue...I disagree, some bad characters\r\nCAN be VERY attractive, think Sauron in the form of Annatar! \r\nThanks for the majorlly long review, much appreciated =)
Yes, Annatar was probably extremely attractive, but for goodness sake! He was a DARK LORD after all! =0
Anyway, I'll stop cluttering up your reviews with long and probably boring conversations. I learned my lesson after doing something of the kind with Karlmir Stonewain's "Pax Gondoria" or was that the name I suggested . . . ** jolts back to reality** Sorry. I'll stop now.
Author's Response: lol, it\'s quite alright, Shadow Ranger used to do the same thing until he abandoned FF for RPG sites *Growl*\r\nlol, so what if Annatar was the Dark Lord? *winks* It\'s quite writing as a villian, I\'m going to be doing a fair bit\r\nof that in Angeles y Daemons...Thanks for reviewing!
Hmm. This was a thought provoking piece, though I found the musical directions (chorus, bridge) a bit distracting. Good job!
Author's Response: Mmmm. I can\'t remember the tune but I think I made it up on the spot. Thanx for the review!\r\niggybaby
Oh, this is so funny! I wish you'd correct the spelling mistakes!!
I say he should go after Legolas, nasty elf, tying him up in a stable!
You might want to have a running gag that Horsie!Aragorn only picks on Legs. and 'Ro.
Keep it up!
I have to agree with Katarinna: I have no idea what the significance of Xerxes, etc. is, but I am probably not older than you. Anyway, you have a great storytelling voice.
Author's Response: Oh, well, for Xerxes, it\'s part of the FMA storyline. It\'ll be fully explained later on in the story. I hope.
True, but I love the way you have him caring for "mummy." Oh, and a question: Was the "Fauntling" supposed to be referring to a baby hobbit?
Author's Response: I believe that a \'fauntling\' is a toddler hobbit, not an infant. Somebody correct me if I am wrong.
Author's Response: Frodo is cute no matter what age. He is fun to write about.
I like this poem.
As usual, I found the rhyming a bit distracting, but you have a wonderful idea.