Reviews by Nazgrrl
Summary: Merry and Pippin make Gandalf a youth potion as a joke, but everything goes wrong. Written for rockdude1066's challenge.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: The Fellowship
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1373 Read Count: 1395
Published: Nov 22 2007 Updated: Nov 22 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
That's a funny concept. Maybe you could try talking about what happens when Aragorn turns back to a person, if he ever does. . .
Date: Nov 22 2007
Mary Sue by wolf_fire355, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 3]
Summary: An answer to a challenge. A Mary Sue finds herself in a paradise of Lord of the Rings, but the other charcters don't find it so pleasant.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Humor
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 776 Read Count: 1802
Published: Nov 23 2007 Updated: Nov 23 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Awesome bashing!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the reveiw!
Date: Nov 23 2007
Retellings... by Junodog, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 4]
Summary: A slight retelling of a scene in The Two Towers.
And by 'slight' I mean I threw some sarcastic old guy in there just for the hell of it because I'm stuck in an airport and I have nothing better to do.
Now, if only there were a warning for sleep-deprived crack...
Categories: Crossovers Characters: Aragorn
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 225 Read Count: 1675
Published: Nov 25 2007 Updated: Nov 25 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
This could be interesting . . .

Author's Response: Good choice of words there...
Date: Nov 25 2007
Untitled by PirateDork3, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 5]
Summary: [[These are just versions I tried out and I still like...even if they leave things unanswered and don't make sense. If you want to see the latest version, check out The Secret Daughter]] Still a work in progress, feel free to review, it would help me out a lot. Thanks.

The story is a spin off of Luthien's last days and what if she had a daughter, this is her story and how she returns to Middle Earth.
Categories: Book-verse, Off Topic Characters: Original Character
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 7565 Read Count: 2073
Published: Nov 30 2007 Updated: Dec 12 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
hmmmm. I wonder where this is going?
Date: Nov 30 2007
To be a prince by Dae, Adora Rated: PG [Reviews - 2]
Summary: This is short story about young Legolas. During the trip to Imladris he faces the choice that would change his life.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: Legolas
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2595 Read Count: 1868
Published: Dec 13 2007 Updated: Dec 13 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Hmmm. That was an interesting story.

I noticed about five different sections that could be improved. While there was no incorrect grammar, there were a few areas that could be improved.

There was a sentence, " Sons of Elrond are skilled healers." It would make more sense to say The sons of Elrond are skilled healers. There were several other examples of the same variety.

Another thing I noticed was the first sentence started "Yang elf, mostly elfling . . ." when it should be The young elf.

I really enjoyed this short, so . . .

Keep up the Good Work!!
NZ

Author's Response: Thank you for your advices. Sometimes it\'s really hard to notice your own grammar. I\'ll try to be more careful.
Date: Jan 11 2008
Summary: At last, how Drogo and Primula really died. Rated with extreme caution.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Primula Baggins
Genres: General, Humor, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 673 Read Count: 1605
Published: Dec 22 2007 Updated: Dec 22 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Funny!

Author's Response: Thanks! I feel kind of bad writing a comedy about people dying, but oh welll...that\'s how it came out!
Date: Jan 04 2008
Summary: An account of how I became a writer of LotR fanfiction. These are just my opinions and experiences, so don't be offended if something rubs you the wrong way.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3140 Read Count: 4073
Published: Dec 29 2007 Updated: Dec 30 2007 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: My Knight in Rusting Armour Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
You have a very well written essay. While I do not share your infatuation with Orlando Bloom/ Bloom's characters, I do agree that Middle Earth is one of the best ways to escape the hum-drum affairs of Mild Earth.

NZ

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I escape to Middle Earth whenever possible. Real life is so dull and it makes me restless.
Date: Jan 25 2008
One Morning by Merry, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 2]
Summary: On the morning of Merry and Pippin's departure from the Shire, two creatures are watching.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Merry
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 230 Read Count: 1408
Published: Jan 02 2008 Updated: Jan 02 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Hmmmm. You portray a sense of melancholy with your word choice, without making it overtly sad.

Keep it up!
SMEE
Date: Jan 03 2008
I'm Here by Isilra, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 2]
Summary: Sam comfort's Frodo, during his illness.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Frodo, Sam
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 369 Read Count: 1378
Published: Jan 06 2008 Updated: Jan 06 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Hmmmm. You certainly have the right tone for Samwise. I might have used some different words, but I liked it.

Author's Response: Thanks. This was just a last min. thing. So it\'s not the best. Thank you so much fr your comment, and taking the time to read it! -Hugs-\r\n\r\nIsilra
Date: Jan 09 2008
Traitors! by Fishpaste, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 8]
Summary: While on the road to Mordor Frodo overhears a suspicious conversation betwee two 'allies'.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Frodo
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3664 Read Count: 5464
Published: Jan 11 2008 Updated: Jan 21 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Ughh! Creepy!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, it really makes my day! Cool name by the way. Hope you enjoy the rest of\r\nthe story!
Date: Jan 11 2008
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Yay! You updated!!

Although I have a hard time imagining Aragorn and Legolas betraying the Fellowship, you write it quite well.
8-)
SMEE

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Next chapter should be up on saturday where we *finally* find out about the betrayal.\r\nThis story was only going to be 3 chapters!
Date: Jan 17 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Yay! I'm glad Aragorn and Legolas aren't traitors!!!

I love the idea of 'Dan and 'Ro cutting off their hair!!

** Adds to favorites

NZ

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I simply couln\'t make the two of them traitors, their just not like that. Thanks for reviewing\r\n and suporting me with this.
Date: Jan 21 2008
Summary: Pocosin the scout and some of his mates are bivouacked on the Field of Cormallen on a crisp mid-autumn night. Long after his friends have fallen asleep, the fledgling ranger pensively gazes upon a cloudless sky as a crescent moon slowly sinks behind the distant Ered Nimrais. After a hasty breakfast, he buys a sheet of cheap paper from a peddler and eagerly dips his quill.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 124 Read Count: 2360
Published: Jan 12 2008 Updated: Jan 12 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
That's pretty good!

Usually, I find the obvious rhyming distracting and detracting, but this time, it nicely complements the idea of the poem.

NZ

Author's Response: At the time I wrote it, the rhyming seemed a bit self-conscious, but then I don\'t consider myself a professional poet. Nevertheless, the poem has already been published in a major newspaper and a local magazine, so it can\'t be that bad.
Date: Jan 12 2008
Title: Chapter 1: October Night: A Soldier's Nighttime Reverie Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
A response to Ria's review:

Orion is :
Menelvagor
Menelmacar
Telumehtar

It just depends on what language you are using when referencing the constellation.

Also, I think that it would be rather hard to find Elvish equivalents of our major constellations that fit into the rhyming, so I disregarded that part of the poem.

Happy reading!
SMEE

Author's Response: Actually, I thought about using Elvish equivalents to some of the constellations, but then I realized that Pocosin would be writing this in Westron, which would appear as English to us.
Date: Jan 12 2008
Summary: Stearcwyn is finding herself more and more attracted to the mysterious Eomer of Edoras. When Beorn gives her the cryptic message warning her against this attraction, can she pull her heart away before it is too late? Slight AU
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Eomer, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12055 Read Count: 7262
Published: Jan 14 2008 Updated: Jan 20 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
This is pretty good, but I think that you've got a mild case of Mary-Sueism on your hands.

It just seems a bit hard to believe that, with a wound of the ugliness you've described, the heroine could be up and walking about a day after being found with a horrible, probably almost infected wound, magic paste or no.

Other than that, you have a great idea for a story.

NZ

P.S. One way to combat the Sueism is to make some fault in your character: impatience, wicked gossip, etc.
Date: Jan 14 2008
Summary: This is a story, based on my original characters, but related to the king Thranduil’s family. No romance.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst
Warnings: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4353 Read Count: 6525
Published: Jan 18 2008 Updated: Dec 21 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Before the storm Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
anyone's notice, not anyone notive.

I am really enjoying this story. Keep it up, update frequently!! Please!

NZ

Author's Response: Thank you! And sorry for mistakes once more. I\'ll try to write more soon.
Date: Jan 21 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Before the storm Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
piece, not peace,

leave, not live

cursed, not coursed

I like where this is going.

NZ

Author's Response: Thanks! For both reviewing and pointing my mistakes. I\'ll mind them.
Date: Jan 20 2008
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 Captivity Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Some spelling mistakes:
plain, not plane

This is getting more interesting by the update!

NZ
Date: Feb 01 2008
Summary: Response to Karlmir Stonewain's challenge: What's In A Name? R&R
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 352 Read Count: 1248
Published: Jan 19 2008 Updated: Jan 19 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: What's In A Name? Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I highly suggest you read the books.

I read part of your "the lies before the truth" and decided to weep for canon.

Edro i phairf a hain isto!

The books are the best way to write accurate fan fiction.

An interesting way to come up with a name.

Pedin i phith i aníron, ar av-belich nin heniad

Nazgrrl

Author's Response: You\'ve given me an idea and i thank you for it. I know you\'re a true Tolkien fan and i admire that but the way i write my fanfiction is my way. My belief about writing fanfic is that you should make the world your own, tkae the world and mold it to what you would like. I don\'t really like canon but i try to stay as true to the story as possible. I\'m sorry if i sound a little angry but that\'s jsut the way the words came out, i\'m not actually angry. I know i need to read TTT and ROTK but i just can\'t get into them as much as i did with FOTR. Could i have a translation of the elvish please?? I\'m not that good with elvish . . . not translating it at least. Thanks for reviewing - Li
Date: Jan 19 2008
Title: Chapter 1: What's In A Name? Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
No offense taken. The first elvish translation is "Read the books and learn them." The Second is " I can say whatever I want and you can't understand me." 8-)
I understand your view on writing the world, but I have to strongly disagree with you.

If you have read my bio, you will realize that I am a member of the canon police, and don't like uncanon stories.

Not saying that I won't read them, they just have to be very realistic to sell the story to me.

Keep on writing!
NZ/SMEE

Author's Response: Well, each to their own i guess, i just hope that this will not sabotage, could you say, our not exactly a relationship but something of a muchness. I shall keep on writing and hannon le for the encouragement - Li
Date: Jan 20 2008
Title: Chapter 1: What's In A Name? Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Just out of curiosity . .. what was this idea that I gave you?

I was going back and reading my review ( I proof read them for rudeness, etc.) when I noticed that response.

Would you care to elaborate?
NZ

Author's Response: I think it was something about how people write their fics, what they believe, not sure now - Li
Date: Jan 21 2008
A World Apart by Enigma, Adora Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 47]
Summary: Two non-Sues end up in ME. Panic ensues, and Middle Earth is doomed.
Aoife is paranoid that she has OCD. Paula is as lazy as heck. Aoife’s a klutz. Paula’s a dreamer. Aoife is a hypochondriac. Best friends. Sisters in all but blood.
LOTR freaks.
But not so much that they’ve memorized every single line and Elvish phrase (well, not Paula anyway) but that they find the eye-candy . . . irresistible.
And when they find themselves in Middle Earth by some unforeseen twist of events, with massive concussions (Aoife is sure) things begin to get a little . . . out of hand.
Both will learn things about each other they never knew, never thought of . . . maybe they never wanted to know . . .
It’s not going to be easy. It’s definitely not going to be pretty. But it’s going to be one heck of a ride, and who knows what could happen next . . .
Categories: Movie-verse, Crossovers Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Balrog, Boromir, Faramir, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Haldir, Legolas, Merry, Original Character, Pippin, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, General, Humor, Other, Parody
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), First Draft, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 41450 Read Count: 25973
Published: Jan 20 2008 Updated: Apr 09 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - War Tactics and Pink Fluff Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
hmmm. This is rather interesting.

I'm afraid I don't understand some of the phrases you use in this, as I am not from Ireland. ( I am not sure I want to, though)

Anyways, I feel rather sorry for the Fellowship!

NZ

Author's Response: Oh, thanks! *eats proverbial hat*
When you say interesting . . . I feel afraid. Oh, and phrases . . . let me see, well, Paula tends to say \'like\' a lot, but you can figure that out, she\'s a 21st century chick. Crap. Ah. I can see. And crapped up. Well, let\'s just say the crap is a nicer term than the four letter word beginning in s and ending in t. And an extremely Irish thing, come to think of it. Well spotted. Let me see . . . feck. Yes. Well, you were probably correct about not wanting to know, but it\'s a fairly mild term for another word, which I\'m sure you\'ll guess. Hey, they\'re just normal Irish school-girls. Irish school-girls swear.
And yes, I feel rather sorry for the Fellowship too! Poor them!
Anywho, thanks so much for your review!! I appreciate it.
Enigma xxx
Date: Feb 23 2008
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Logic, Meet Your Match Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I got the Les Mis reference! Heehee. I like Boromir. =)

To continue the intriguing conversation a couple of weeks back, all of those words were ones I knew ( don't use, but . . .) the difficulty is something called ** glomping** and from the sounds of it, I don't want to know.

Keep it up!
NZ

Author's Response: YAY!!! SOMEONE ACTUALLY GOT IT!! *does the happy dance in a public place, dispite humiliation* I\'m likin\' Boromir too. *sticks out tongue at Tree*
Ah, yes, our little conversation. Wow, that\'s pretty cool! I didn\'t know Irish swearing had become international! Awesome!
AH!! Tackle-glomping, and glomping. Riiiiiight. Well, quite simply, I believe tackle-glomping is defined as attacking someone with a hug. Quite innocent, really. Except when Aoife and Paula use it. ;)
So there you have it! Glomping is all good. Quite an awesome word, too.
Why, thank you once again, and I plan to!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 12 2008
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - The Perfect Blend of Humiliation and Comedy Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Yeah! Cake is always good!

This was hilarious!!
KIU!!
NZ

Author's Response: I second that! Cake is always good!
And I am glad you found it so! I loved this one myself!!
KIU?? Well, there you have me. What is it? It sounds interesting. Possibly edible. *licks lips*
Thanks again!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 12 2008
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - The Perfect Blend of Humiliation and Comedy Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Oh I love this chappie so much, I had to go back and re-read it!
NZ

Author's Response: Seriously?? Awww!!! I FEEL SO LOVED!! I\'m so glad you\'re likin\' it, especially as I was ready to murder this chapter if it had taken human form . . . odd as that sounds. Thanks a bunch, hon!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 19 2008