That's a funny concept. Maybe you could try talking about what happens when Aragorn turns back to a person, if he ever does. . .
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the reveiw!
This could be interesting . . .
Author's Response: Good choice of words there...
hmmmm. I wonder where this is going?
Hmmm. That was an interesting story.
I noticed about five different sections that could be improved. While there was no incorrect grammar, there were a few areas that could be improved.
There was a sentence, " Sons of Elrond are skilled healers." It would make more sense to say The sons of Elrond are skilled healers. There were several other examples of the same variety.
Another thing I noticed was the first sentence started "Yang elf, mostly elfling . . ." when it should be The young elf.
I really enjoyed this short, so . . .
Keep up the Good Work!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your advices. Sometimes it\'s really hard to notice your own grammar. I\'ll try to be more careful.
Author's Response: Thanks! I feel kind of bad writing a comedy about people dying, but oh welll...that\'s how it came out!
You have a very well written essay. While I do not share your infatuation with Orlando Bloom/ Bloom's characters, I do agree that Middle Earth is one of the best ways to escape the hum-drum affairs of Mild Earth.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I escape to Middle Earth whenever possible. Real life is so dull and it makes me restless.
Hmmmm. You portray a sense of melancholy with your word choice, without making it overtly sad.
Keep it up!
Hmmmm. You certainly have the right tone for Samwise. I might have used some different words, but I liked it.
Author's Response: Thanks. This was just a last min. thing. So it\'s not the best. Thank you so much fr your comment, and taking the time to read it! -Hugs-\r\n\r\nIsilra
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, it really makes my day! Cool name by the way. Hope you enjoy the rest of\r\nthe story!
Yay! You updated!!
Although I have a hard time imagining Aragorn and Legolas betraying the Fellowship, you write it quite well.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! Next chapter should be up on saturday where we *finally* find out about the betrayal.\r\nThis story was only going to be 3 chapters!
Yay! I'm glad Aragorn and Legolas aren't traitors!!!
I love the idea of 'Dan and 'Ro cutting off their hair!!
** Adds to favorites
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I simply couln\'t make the two of them traitors, their just not like that. Thanks for reviewing\r\n and suporting me with this.
That's pretty good!
Usually, I find the obvious rhyming distracting and detracting, but this time, it nicely complements the idea of the poem.
Author's Response: At the time I wrote it, the rhyming seemed a bit self-conscious, but then I don\'t consider myself a professional poet. Nevertheless, the poem has already been published in a major newspaper and a local magazine, so it can\'t be that bad.
A response to Ria's review:
Orion is :
It just depends on what language you are using when referencing the constellation.
Also, I think that it would be rather hard to find Elvish equivalents of our major constellations that fit into the rhyming, so I disregarded that part of the poem.
Author's Response: Actually, I thought about using Elvish equivalents to some of the constellations, but then I realized that Pocosin would be writing this in Westron, which would appear as English to us.
This is pretty good, but I think that you've got a mild case of Mary-Sueism on your hands.
It just seems a bit hard to believe that, with a wound of the ugliness you've described, the heroine could be up and walking about a day after being found with a horrible, probably almost infected wound, magic paste or no.
Other than that, you have a great idea for a story.
P.S. One way to combat the Sueism is to make some fault in your character: impatience, wicked gossip, etc.
anyone's notice, not anyone notive.
I am really enjoying this story. Keep it up, update frequently!! Please!
Author's Response: Thank you! And sorry for mistakes once more. I\'ll try to write more soon.
piece, not peace,
leave, not live
cursed, not coursed
I like where this is going.
Author's Response: Thanks! For both reviewing and pointing my mistakes. I\'ll mind them.
Some spelling mistakes:
plain, not plane
This is getting more interesting by the update!
I highly suggest you read the books.
I read part of your "the lies before the truth" and decided to weep for canon.
Edro i phairf a hain isto!
The books are the best way to write accurate fan fiction.
An interesting way to come up with a name.
Pedin i phith i aníron, ar av-belich nin heniad
Author's Response: You\'ve given me an idea and i thank you for it. I know you\'re a true Tolkien fan and i admire that but the way i write my fanfiction is my way. My belief about writing fanfic is that you should make the world your own, tkae the world and mold it to what you would like. I don\'t really like canon but i try to stay as true to the story as possible. I\'m sorry if i sound a little angry but that\'s jsut the way the words came out, i\'m not actually angry. I know i need to read TTT and ROTK but i just can\'t get into them as much as i did with FOTR. Could i have a translation of the elvish please?? I\'m not that good with elvish . . . not translating it at least. Thanks for reviewing - Li
No offense taken. The first elvish translation is "Read the books and learn them." The Second is " I can say whatever I want and you can't understand me." 8-)
I understand your view on writing the world, but I have to strongly disagree with you.
If you have read my bio, you will realize that I am a member of the canon police, and don't like uncanon stories.
Not saying that I won't read them, they just have to be very realistic to sell the story to me.
Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Well, each to their own i guess, i just hope that this will not sabotage, could you say, our not exactly a relationship but something of a muchness. I shall keep on writing and hannon le for the encouragement - Li