Reviews by Nazgrrl
Summary: Response to Karlmir Stonewain's challenge: What's In A Name? R&R
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 352 Read Count: 1240
Published: Jan 19 2008 Updated: Jan 19 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: What's In A Name? Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Just out of curiosity . .. what was this idea that I gave you?

I was going back and reading my review ( I proof read them for rudeness, etc.) when I noticed that response.

Would you care to elaborate?
NZ

Author's Response: I think it was something about how people write their fics, what they believe, not sure now - Li
Date: Jan 21 2008
A World Apart by Enigma, Adora Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 47]
Summary: Two non-Sues end up in ME. Panic ensues, and Middle Earth is doomed.
Aoife is paranoid that she has OCD. Paula is as lazy as heck. Aoife’s a klutz. Paula’s a dreamer. Aoife is a hypochondriac. Best friends. Sisters in all but blood.
LOTR freaks.
But not so much that they’ve memorized every single line and Elvish phrase (well, not Paula anyway) but that they find the eye-candy . . . irresistible.
And when they find themselves in Middle Earth by some unforeseen twist of events, with massive concussions (Aoife is sure) things begin to get a little . . . out of hand.
Both will learn things about each other they never knew, never thought of . . . maybe they never wanted to know . . .
It’s not going to be easy. It’s definitely not going to be pretty. But it’s going to be one heck of a ride, and who knows what could happen next . . .
Categories: Movie-verse, Crossovers Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Balrog, Boromir, Faramir, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Haldir, Legolas, Merry, Original Character, Pippin, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, General, Humor, Other, Parody
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), First Draft, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 41450 Read Count: 25867
Published: Jan 20 2008 Updated: Apr 09 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - War Tactics and Pink Fluff Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
hmmm. This is rather interesting.

I'm afraid I don't understand some of the phrases you use in this, as I am not from Ireland. ( I am not sure I want to, though)

Anyways, I feel rather sorry for the Fellowship!

NZ

Author's Response: Oh, thanks! *eats proverbial hat*
When you say interesting . . . I feel afraid. Oh, and phrases . . . let me see, well, Paula tends to say \'like\' a lot, but you can figure that out, she\'s a 21st century chick. Crap. Ah. I can see. And crapped up. Well, let\'s just say the crap is a nicer term than the four letter word beginning in s and ending in t. And an extremely Irish thing, come to think of it. Well spotted. Let me see . . . feck. Yes. Well, you were probably correct about not wanting to know, but it\'s a fairly mild term for another word, which I\'m sure you\'ll guess. Hey, they\'re just normal Irish school-girls. Irish school-girls swear.
And yes, I feel rather sorry for the Fellowship too! Poor them!
Anywho, thanks so much for your review!! I appreciate it.
Enigma xxx
Date: Feb 23 2008
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Logic, Meet Your Match Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I got the Les Mis reference! Heehee. I like Boromir. =)

To continue the intriguing conversation a couple of weeks back, all of those words were ones I knew ( don't use, but . . .) the difficulty is something called ** glomping** and from the sounds of it, I don't want to know.

Keep it up!
NZ

Author's Response: YAY!!! SOMEONE ACTUALLY GOT IT!! *does the happy dance in a public place, dispite humiliation* I\'m likin\' Boromir too. *sticks out tongue at Tree*
Ah, yes, our little conversation. Wow, that\'s pretty cool! I didn\'t know Irish swearing had become international! Awesome!
AH!! Tackle-glomping, and glomping. Riiiiiight. Well, quite simply, I believe tackle-glomping is defined as attacking someone with a hug. Quite innocent, really. Except when Aoife and Paula use it. ;)
So there you have it! Glomping is all good. Quite an awesome word, too.
Why, thank you once again, and I plan to!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 12 2008
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - The Perfect Blend of Humiliation and Comedy Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Yeah! Cake is always good!

This was hilarious!!
KIU!!
NZ

Author's Response: I second that! Cake is always good!
And I am glad you found it so! I loved this one myself!!
KIU?? Well, there you have me. What is it? It sounds interesting. Possibly edible. *licks lips*
Thanks again!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 12 2008
Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - The Perfect Blend of Humiliation and Comedy Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Oh I love this chappie so much, I had to go back and re-read it!
NZ

Author's Response: Seriously?? Awww!!! I FEEL SO LOVED!! I\'m so glad you\'re likin\' it, especially as I was ready to murder this chapter if it had taken human form . . . odd as that sounds. Thanks a bunch, hon!
Enigma xxx
Date: Mar 19 2008
Labels by Celestial, Adora Rated: PG [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Responding to Karlmir Stonewain's challenge of What's in a Name?
How I threw away others labels and made a name for myself.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 388 Read Count: 1872
Published: Jan 20 2008 Updated: Jan 20 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Overcoming Labels Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Labels are such cruel, hateful things.

I know how that feels.

You know, all of a sudden, Karlmir Stonewain's challenge has become popular. You are the fourth to respond to it in the last 72 hours.

8-)

Keep writing, I want to read your work; you have a wonderful tone, and from the essay you have just written, great storytelling voice.

NZ/SMEE

Author's Response: Thanks! I think they\'re becoming popular because they make people think, \"How did I get here?\" Writitng influences people, and their lives are changed forever having a creative outlet. So, being able to tell their own stories is a really good idea.\r\nThanks again!\r\n-C
Date: Jan 20 2008
Summary: Answering my own challenge as to why I write LotR fan fiction
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay, Humor
Warnings: None
Challenges: Middle Earth Forever!
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1467 Read Count: 3423
Published: Jan 21 2008 Updated: Jan 23 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Heehee. Nice social commentary on the many star-struck movie obsessed fgirls!

I might suggest that when Latinizing (okay, I know it's not a word) the word "Gondor" you have it come from the root word Gondor, Gondoris. This way, you have a less clunky sounding "Pax Gondorum."

Sorry, that's the linguaphile coming out in me.

I like the reason you write FF. I never would have thought to write a FF to inform others about political/economic reconstructionism.

Keep it up!
NZ

P.S. I like your comparison between Augustus Caesare and Elessar Telcontar!

Author's Response: I know that Gondoria wasn\'t the correct Latinization (Yes, Latinize is a legitimate word), but Gondoria rolls off the tongue better. My artistic license - my rules. I\'ll have more to say on how it turned into an adventure story and branched off into other writings in the next installment. Thanks for reviewing.
Date: Jan 21 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Well, I like your reasons for writing ff.

I most say, I feel quite a lot of jealousy for those writers who actually get reviews on a regular basis, so I try to allay that by reviewing others. Hmm. I might try using that reason to respond to a certain challenge I know of ;-)

A response to the response you gave to my original reasponse.

You seemed, a bit testy when I suggested another latinization. (My ____, my rules, remember?)
Anyways, that was my first reaction to reading your response. Sorry for any confusion I may have caused.

NZ/SMEE

Author's Response: I was merely stating the facts. I\'m too old and laid back to be testy. Email me some time and we\'ll chat.
Date: Jan 23 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
To respond to Ria:
I was thinking of Gondor, Gondoris, at the time from the third declension.

At that point, I was studying the third declension nouns for the midterm the next day, and my mind was a bit addled from the verb tenses that I was touching up on.

However, I do agree with you. My original latinization was in all likelihood, not correct.

Since Romanus, meaning a Roman, is a 2nd, the closest any could probably get is "gondor, gondori" from the same 2nd declension as vir, puer, and liber.

Sorry Karlmir! I'm just extremely obsessed with languages, so I am sorry for cluttering up your review site with my wanderings.

NZ

Author's Response: I\'m not going to get into the middle of this one. I suggest that you two \"Shield-Maidens\" battle it out on the Email pages. Watch out, Ria. You\'re dealing with the Chief Constable of the Canon Police. I think she takes no prisoners. :-D
Date: Jan 25 2008
Painful mistakes by Dae, Adora Rated: PG [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Another story about young Legolas. Mistakes that he and his father had made could cost the prince’s life.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: Elrond, Legolas, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst
Warnings: Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3992 Read Count: 2130
Published: Jan 22 2008 Updated: Jan 22 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
This was a very enjoyable story to read.

There are some missing words such as "a" and "the" (demonstrative), but besides that, it was a great story!

NZ

Author's Response: Thanks!!!
Date: Jan 26 2008
Summary: A very long poem. In four parts. I suck at summaries. : (-
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Angst, Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 178 Read Count: 1983
Published: Jan 25 2008 Updated: Jan 25 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Part One Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I like this!
Of course, I'm probably biased!
NZ

Author's Response: Hehehe...\r\n~Faramir\'s Eloped Daughter
Date: Jan 26 2008
Summary: After an argument with her father, Amara runs away and ends up in the hands of a ruthless slave trader. It's up to the twins, Estel, and Legolas to find her and bring her home.
Formerly called Somewhere Out There.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Torture, Violence
Series: In Her Eyes
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3985 Read Count: 5341
Published: Jan 26 2008 Updated: Apr 19 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Differnece Of Opinion Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
This could turn into an interesting story.

Author's Response: yey first review!!!

Author's Response: yey first review!!!
Date: Jan 26 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Loss Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Hmmm. This is getting pretty interesting.

The title of the piece reminds of a song from a sickeningly cutesy kid's animation that talks about wishing on stars, etc. ( It's also called Somewhere Out There.)

Please update.
NZ

Author's Response: wow that sounds kinda corny now that i think about it.
Date: Mar 13 2008
Summary: Two decades after the War of the Ring, the Bombadils bid farewell to an old friend of the forest.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Goldberry, Original Character, Tom Bombadil
Genres: Angst, Drama, Poetry
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3098 Read Count: 2203
Published: Jan 28 2008 Updated: Jan 28 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: King Oak Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Wow. That was very impressive.

I have a hard time imagining the decline of Bombadil ( he just seems to be), but I think it would be a lot like how you've just described it.

Keep it up!
NZ

Author's Response: Thank you, Nazgrrl. At present, I\'m not familiar enough with the Bombadils to form an opinion on whether they eventually left Middle Earth, albeit very reluctantly, or remained after the last ships departed and became mortal. Then again, because of Tom\'s unique and mysterious history, they may have passed into another world altogether. Tolkien may have been deliberately vague on this issue. One thing I\'m sure of, however, is that Tom and Goldberry would have noticed a decline in their ability to control nature as the world inevitably changed around them. Their nemesis, Old Man Willow, would certainly have faded or drastically declined in power by the time of my story.
Date: Jan 28 2008
Summary: She was born last of all, both in age and power. The weakest of the Ainur she was, yet to her Eru All Father had given the greatest gift : freedom.
Here is the story of Dia, the smallest of the MaÔa and companion of Annatar, whose loyalty always dwelt only to men and ultimatly Iluvatar.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Eru / Iluvatar, Feanor, MŪriel, Morgoth / Melkor, Namo / Mandos, Original Character, Sauron
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 8835 Read Count: 9206
Published: Jan 31 2008 Updated: Oct 15 2010 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: AinulindalŽ Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Wow, that was great!

You have a dreamy way of writing this, and it really does seem as if the story happened outside of time!

NZ

Author's Response: Thank you very much !\r\n\r\nIt is probably THE big problem when you try to write about the Ainur before Arda is made : we know they communicate, but did they already had words ? And one thing we are sure is that they were not physicals. I imagined them as great clouds of lights, but \"to see\" did not exist yet : there was only \"sounds\".\r\nSo, well... clouds of sounds of light. \r\n\r\nThank you reviewing. Chapter 2, ňa ! may soon be posted ^^
Date: Jan 31 2008
Title: Chapter 2: ňa ! Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
grand, not grant

In the middle, when Dia and the rest go down, the modern language really upsets the idea of the story. They wouldn't have used words like "sucked" or phrases like "bored to the bones." We read along, and all of a sudden, *bam* back to the modern world, and the seriousness of the story is gone.

However, this is a beautiful story, and I am really enjoying it.

NZ

Author's Response: Thank you for the criticis, I\'ll try to find something more accurate for these parts. The \"bored to the bones\" might be the wrongest part of it, because Dia had no bones at all at this time. \r\n\r\nThe \"it sucked\" part is now replaced with this one :\r\n\"What had Dia expected, she did not know ; but surely she was hoping for more. If her form had been physical, her heart would have sunk from disappointment alone. Yet she seemed to be the only one to appear so disenchanted with the newly born Arda. \"\r\nI\'m not sure about the \"sunk\" there : would it have been \"sank\" instead ?\r\n\r\nI also corrected the paragraphe which followed :\r\n\"And it was true she was the only one. Only few discussions were needed to set everyone at work, including an overzealous Annatar. Dia was just feeling again like the Smallest, unuseful and unable to do anything at all. She was finding, minutes after minutes, that there was just nothing for her to do : everyone was gone to its own task and her, feeling she had no part to take in the shaping of the world, could not figure out of a task to take. Soon she wondered why she had left her Father ; so bored was she, she actually fell asleep right where she was, and thus invented the mere act of sleeping. \"\r\nA few other minor corrections were made in the Great Music part. \r\n\r\nI hope it is better now and that the vocabulary isn\'t too repetitiv ; I sometimes lack synonyms for words who come often, like \"light\", and for this chapter, \"bored\". Aw. I really need to remember were I put my dico T_T\r\n\r\nThank you for reviewing, your comments were really helpful,\r\nAurwendŽ
Date: Feb 01 2008
Title: Chapter 1: AinulindalŽ Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Yes! Now this story has wonderful, consistent terminology!
**Adds to favorites**

NZ
Date: Feb 02 2008
Title: Chapter 5: And the Children came ! Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I am really enjoying this story.
NZ
Date: Mar 24 2008
The Mirror by Celestial, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Someone asked me if I was interested in writing a poem about Galadriel's Mirror after the Fourth Age...so here it is!
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 125 Read Count: 1356
Published: Feb 03 2008 Updated: Feb 03 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A forgotten pool Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Wow! That was lovely.
For a second, I thought I was reading the long lost twin to my poem!
Thank you!
NZ

Author's Response: No problem- this one challenged me. Thanks for reviewing. Wow-that makes two reviews in an hour....Cool!
Date: Feb 03 2008
Summary: A response to Karlmir Stonewain's challenge.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: First Draft
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 280 Read Count: 1414
Published: Feb 04 2008 Updated: Feb 04 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Well, that seems like a good reason to choose a screen name. I like reading essays that don't include a traumatic past!
NZ
Date: Feb 04 2008
Summary: Another response written again to answear one of Karlimir Stonewain's wonderful challenges, this time its "Whats in a name"
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Other
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1083 Read Count: 2280
Published: Feb 04 2008 Updated: Feb 04 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
This was a beautiful essay.

NZ

Author's Response: Thank you very much :)
Date: Feb 05 2008
Summary: How I chose a pen name.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Challenges: What's in a name?
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 405 Read Count: 2187
Published: Feb 08 2008 Updated: Feb 08 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Stone Walls and a Gemstone Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
That is a very nice way of choosing a pen name, you know, nice and logical.

I would agree with one of your anonymous friends: Your screen name definitely sounds both a.) Gondorian and b.) poetical.

NZ

Author's Response: Thanks, Nazgrrl. My interest is writing LotR fan fiction came far too late in life for the vicissitudes of my youth to have any relevancy in choosing a pen name, hence my story was not as dramatic as yours. My anonymous friend will gain recognition of a sort soon. He and I will make a cameo appearance in Arwen\'s Journey.
Date: Feb 08 2008
Summary: Response to the "Why I review Fanfiction" challenge put fourth by Karlmir Stonewain
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Other
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1607 Read Count: 1831
Published: Feb 10 2008 Updated: Feb 10 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Those were some interesting points you brought up. I would have to disagree with you on the point of authors asking for reviews. I know I do it, and although I never really sat down and though about it, I would have to say that I want to know what reactions I get from readers.

Anyway, I had better stop now while I'm ahead, because I am sure you don't want to hear my ramblings.

Overall, a thought provoking essay.

NZ

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. Absolutely feel free to disagree with anything I have said in here, these are just my own views and opinions and I realize that not everyone is going to agree with them and thatís fine and I can respect that. I have come to review asking for reviews and asking for critique as two completely different things, and again this is my personal opinion but it seems when reviews are demanded it feels too much like someone is just looking for attention and wants to be told how fantastic their fic is while a more serious writer wants to hear what the writer honestly thought and while I may go on about how much I loved the story I do try to include specific examples of what truly stood out in my mind so that the writer can really see what stood out in the story and realize that whatever technique they were using was effective.\r\n\r\nI am with you in that I love getting reactions from readers as well, as to what they liked, didnít like and so on about the story, I always find that helpful so that I can make changes so I am definitely with you there.\r\n\r\nLOL, feel free to ramble on, I donít mind, I do it quite abit myself ;)\r\n
Date: Feb 11 2008
Summary: Men came out of the East in the time of Beleriand.... fleeing from what?

Alternate Future, Alternate Universe
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2926 Read Count: 7811
Published: Feb 15 2008 Updated: Dec 24 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Introduction Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
I would suggest that when you are introducing the character and the setting you do the old "show don't tell" idea. Something along the lines of "As Ben sucked the air into his lungs, he stared blindly out at the stunning vista before him, not even seeing the distant mountain range."

I love the last sentence!

Keep it up!
NZ

Author's Response: Thanks for the tips! I'll keep that in mind, I do have a tendency to make things a bit too blatant :)
Date: Feb 18 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nazgrrl Signed
Hmmm. The plot thickens. I would suggest the same as I did in the prologue, but you have been improving.

I like this idea that your story is taking place in the 2200's!

NZ
Date: Feb 18 2008