Very enjoyable. I could picture Liv Tyler arguing with Hugo Weaving. Is a sequel in the offing?
Author's Response: Thank you. I really appreciate the feedback from an Arwenist. I hadn't planned a sequel, but I've discovered what an interesting character Arwen is, and I'll definitely want to visit with her again.
Yeah, I know where you're coming from. It sounds like me when I was in high school - the geek with the thick glasses who had his own telescope and studied astronomy. Such kids usually get picked on by the "cool" kids. Don't worry, Lira. All that will change when you become famous.
Author's Response: Well actually, it was the teachers as well : ( Do you really think i\'ll become famous? ^_^ Thanks for reviewing - Li
A beautiful ode to Three Graces of Arda.
Author's Response: You know, I was wondering if you\'d notice this one. It was the first one I wrote, and it took me a while to get up the courage to post it online. 8-) NZ
I'm not much for poetry, but I was really impressed by this one. In my own story, Galadriel's mirror is put to use again in the decade following the War of the Ring.
Author's Response: Intriguing. What is the name of your story?
That was like poetry. Well done!
Aha! Lira, I KNEW you had an obsession with Legolas. That's what I was teasing you about in my last review. There's nothing wrong with any obsession that moves you to write good fics. Keep obsessing and keep writing. I freely confess that I have a giant poster of Liv Tyler (as Arwen) in my living room. When guests ask who she is and why she's there, I always say, "She's my Muse."
By the way, did you get to visit Edoras?
Author's Response: Ahhhh, no offence to Legolas or anybody else who loves him as much as i did, he ran away, Ed\'s kinda sorta better, not to mention in Lira\'s Lies 6, he dies. Bitten by a vampire, poor bugger. Lucky person, you have a giant LOTR poster, i don\'t have one of those but i have a big Orlando Bloom poster, that counts, sorta. I haven\'t seen Edoras, i think that\'s in the North Island and i have never been there, besides, i haven\'t had time for sight seeing this year, my grandad died recently, i came for him and my gran. Thanx for reviewing - Li
Well, Lira, I've got to agree that you have a certain obsession with LotR, especially after reading all the stuff you've contributed to this website. You've also received your share of reviews. See? I told you that you'd be famous some day! Your journal is also a reply to my recent challenge. Access my bio to read it.
Author's Response: Hannon le, i\'ll put it on the challenge thingy in a second. Thanx for reviewing and thanx for all the other stuff you\'ve said, i really appreciate it. Thanx again - Li
It sounds as if you're writing some AU stuff as a bit of a diversion. Yes, schoolwork can get overwhelming sometime. I can remember two times when my fiction/fan fiction writing had to be curtailed for several weeks. First, when I was writing a term paper on the Battle of Gettysburg. Next, when I was writing my engineering thesis. Shucks! Was that REALLY over 40 years ago? Just keep on truckin' Lira. Summer will soon be here with more time for your Elvish adventures.
For your explorations of Wiccan mysteries, I would suggest The Witch Book: The Encyclopedia of Witchcraft, Wicca, and Neo-paganism by Raymond Buckland. It might be available through Amazon.
Author's Response: Too bad summer\'s already gone here, remember, southern hemisphere has winter during your summer. But i\'m going back to NZ in May so i might have some time then. Thanks for the bok titles, i\'ll have to look for them when i have money and i go to Borders or something. Thanks for reviewing - Li
Nice to see another installment of this essay. Are you planning to post Rolitaaria here?
Author's Response: Maybe, depends if people would like to read it I suppose . . . Nice to hear from you again though, I think I've kinda missed talking to everyone on here. Thanks for the review - Breia
Aw, the poor guy! That could have been me, but they didn't have cell phones thirty-five years ago.
Author's Response: Well originally I based it on the beatles song, but as I went on a found myself writing about myself waiting for my ex to call. :(
Good action. Well done! I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: Thany You Karlmir, always nice to hear your reviews as they are usually compliments and everyone loves that. \r\nThe next chappter will not be untill at least tomorrow as I have work and alot of college work to do. :( sorry
I enjoy the way you've interwoven personal rivalries and politics within the frame of the military campaign. You might also want to include a few scenes of camp life to make it more realistic. A soldier's existence is really long episodes of tedium. punctuated by brief moments of terror. I look forward to your next installments.
Author's Response: Without giving too much away the next chapter has less conflict and is more about Brego\'s personal feelings so it will contain more camp life, thank you for the comment though.
The second half of your story shows considerable improvement as your writing style develops. Keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the next part of the series.
Author's Response: Thank you, as I said, it may take a while though.
That was a fun history lesson. Lira sure is chummy with Legolas. Is there a hidden message there? ;-)
Author's Response: Um . . . can i have an explanation on that last statement (literally). I just sneezed so my minds messed up now. Thanx for the review anyway, i\'m in NZ at the moment and surprisingly i\'m pretty bored so reviews are good coz they get rid of the boring stuff until i don\'t get any : ( Merry Christams or whatever ya celbrate - Li
I don't know why, but I'm picturing Dr. Seuss characters as I'm reading this poem. It's certainly humorous.
Author's Response: I don\'t know who Dr.Suess is but, thanks any way! :)
That was certainly a happier ending than Tolkien's. The history of the First Age would have been somewhat different with Saeros still around. The eroticism was very artistic.
Your essay is very thorough and articulate. Thanks for responding to the challenge.
Author's Response: Thanks. Your challenge got me thinking. It's good to reminisce.
I'd like to offer a few suggestions: First, delete the superfluous stuff above the first chapter, especially your Email address. Weird salesmen often cruise sites like this looking for people to add to their mailing lists. Those who wish to contact you can do so through your bio page under 'Contact Author.'
Your story contains explicit sex, so change the rating to NC-17. Legally, underage kids have to be warned not to read this sort of thing.
There's nothing wrong with changing Middle Earth to suit your story, but give it an AU warning first.
I would also recomend that you develop your characters a bit more before you introduce the sex scenes, otherwise it looks as if your writing about sex for the mere titillation of it rather than serious erotica.
Other than that, you've got the beginnings of a good story.
At least their last years of retirement were comfortable in Minas Tirith.
Great Essay! The biographical information made it all the more interesting. Thank you for responding to the challenge.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Also thanks for putting out the challenges as I quite enjoyed working on that essay, If only the essays\r\nwe were asked to write in school were that much fun to write! ;) :)