Reviews by Spiced Wine
Summary: When Doriath fell, the twin sons of Dior were abandoned in the woods to starve to death. But maybe the forest did not want the young Elves to die.
Categories: Book Verse Slash Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, Romance
Warnings: Incest, Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 36851 Read Count: 18602
Published: Nov 19 2004 Updated: Apr 20 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 11: 11 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I love your writing. The Elder Days is much neglected, although it's my favorite time to read of and write in. ( Such incredible characters! How can they be so ignored! )

You really have a talent. Do you also post on the Silmarillion Writers Guild? It is an excellent site with some super authors ( the best, in my humble opinion, since Silmarillion lovers tend to be intelligent, mature-minded and write beautifully ) and hosts Silmarillion-based stories. ( I don't post there now, but I read there )

I touched on Elurid and Elurin, myself but not what happened to them, just within the story of the attack on Doriath. I like what you have done with their story very much.

I am not surprised you have not many reviews - and I mean that as a compliment, lol, strange as that may seem, since Silmarillion-based stories are not read as much as LOTR-based ones, although they are invariably written with marvelous skill and detail. It's a great shame, but those who do read them appreciate them. They tend to draw a more serious and mature readership in general. A lot of Silmarillion lovers read on the SWG, but it wouldn't hurt to have your work here and on there also; other authors such as heartofoshun, Kenaz and Ignoble Bard post on both sites, and you definitely belong with those writers.

Take care


Author's Response: Yes, I love the Elder Days too - the Elves of that time are so fascinating, both flawed and incredibly stubborn and determined, and so...busy! I haven't got round to posting anything to SWG yet - I admit I'm a bit lazy and am not terribly good at keeping up to date on more than a couple of archives! But yes, there are some excellent writers and wonderful pieces of work there. I wanted to write a story with hope. It was never going to be a happy story, considering how it started, but I like there to be a bit of light at the end of the tunnel! I guess I didn't post this fic in anticipation of reviews - it's always lovely to hear someone read and enjoyed it, but I wrote this fic because I quite simply adore my Elves! If I post it and one person reads it and enjoys it, I guess that's all I can ask for - and it sounds like you're one such person, so hooray! Thank you for the lovely feedback - it means a lot that you've enjoyed reading it, as I really have enjoyed writing it. The fic is actually 100% written now - I just need to run the final chapters past an additional set of eyes before I post. Best wishes (and apologies if the paragraph formatting plays up when I post this!) Enismirdal
Date: Oct 21 2008
Title: Chapter 11: 11 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
...but I wrote this fic because I quite simply adore my Elves!

I know exactly what you mean. :)
The joy of writing of them is why I write, although obviously, if some-one likes a story, that's such a thrill too. I'd write offline anyway, as I always used to -- it's all creating a story and feeling it open around you in the end, and living within it, watching as the characters grow and become so real they exist beyond you.

I also love the complexity of incest when it is dealt with well, and write of it myself, so both the characters and the mention of that interested me.

Giving up is so very simple. The greatest act of true love is not to die. It is to live for the one you love. In spite of the sorrow, in spite of the despair. Very beautiful, very sad, and very true.

I would have liked to nominate this for the MEFAS had I known about it. Not that my search skills are wonderful, but I couldn't find it on this years noms. Still, there is next year.

Author's Response: Incest...yeah, tricky subject. I know it's not something everyone can deal with reading about, and I can understand why. This was one situation where I could imagine it, perhaps, emerging due to circumstance - get two lonely adolescents together who have no one else in the whole world, and they might well turn to each other. I figure they're not hurting anyone else, so who can really judge them? As far as I know, this fic hasn't been nominated for the MEFAs - not least because it's still not posted anywhere in its entirety. I'm not all that big on awards these days - I think they're a great way to publicise good fics, certainly, and to encourage authors, they're just not my cup of tea!
Date: Oct 21 2008
Title: Chapter 11: 11 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
tricky subject. I know it's not something everyone can deal with reading about, and I can understand why.
It is, but there are some instances I can imagine it, and some which are irresistible to me d;-)
This one had not occurred to me, but the way you write these too, I shall forever more, now.

I love to plug and recommend good authors, I don't go for awards myself, but I am enthusiastic about good fics and shamelessly plug them wherever I can. :D
Date: Oct 21 2008
Title: Chapter 12: 12 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is a truly wonderful story, and I love the relationship between these too. I was so glad to see an update.
The description of their seeing the battlefield was so very real, very sad and disturbing.
Wonderful stuff!

Author's Response: Thanks! There's one chapter and the epilogue to go, so it's nearly over, I'm afraid. When I thought about the wars in the First Age I just couldn't help but imagine how truly horrific they must have been, the extent of devastation and destruction. It must have been heartbreaking to see. At least the twins have each other to see them through it!
Date: Dec 01 2008
Title: Chapter 12: 12 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Such a pity it's coming to an end. Do you have any other Muses tapping you on the shoulder?

Author's Response: I've been a bit dry this last year or two, unfortunately - as I'm doing a lot of work-related writing it's kind of stifled my ability to write for pleasure. I've been focusing on writing *anything* at all recently, which has meant I've produced large amounts of self-indulgent and entirely unpostable tripe!
I did a recent audit and found about 4 fic-starts that I thought had enough potential to be worth continuing and finishing. Most of the other stuff I'm working on is original fic... There's a fic set in Gondolin that is probably worth a second look, and one or two other things, some of which might need a rethink but may eventually go somewhere. If only I thought I could get away with writing slash at work!
Oh god! I just found a fic I can't even remember starting. This one, I must's a ficlet about Glorfindel and Ecthelion as children. The things I have tucked away... *giggle*
Sorry, just rambling now! (And apologies for the fact that paragraph breaks seem to get eaten by the interface so all my replies come through as ugly blocks of dense text.)
Date: Dec 02 2008
Title: Chapter 12: 12 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I just found a fic I can't even remember starting. This one, I must's a ficlet about Glorfindel and Ecthelion as children. The things I have tucked away... *giggle*

This sounds excellent! I hope you do find yourself inspired to finish some you already have, or write more.
Take care!
Date: Dec 03 2008
Summary: The relationship between father and son is strained in turmoil of adolescence. But further estranged by a horrible revelation and a mistake of a buried past, Legolas and Thranduil must risk all to save each other and the love that threatens to be lost.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Arwen, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Galadriel, Glorfindel, Haldir, Legolas, Saruman, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 42957 Read Count: 21311
Published: Feb 01 2006 Updated: Jan 31 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 12: Assassination and Chaos – and a Discovery Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
It's rare one reads Elves written like this, and I have never read Thranduil ( whom I like ) as so beautiful and dangerous.

Gorgeous writing!! Quite apart from the plot and storytelling, your use of language is masterly and gorgeous.

Author's Response: It's a joy to hear you enjoy the writing! Thank you!
Date: Jan 11 2009
Title: Chapter 13: All That Weeps Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is an amazingly written chapter. I feel rather punch drunk after it in fact. ( In the best possible way ) There is a way you write battles which is so oddly intimate and beautiful that it's unique to any fanfic I have thus far read.

Author's Response: Ooooh, I am happy to hear that!!!! ;) I am drunk with your review, in fact. ;) Thank you!
Date: Jan 11 2009
Title: Chapter 3: An Unknown Enemy Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I am glad to find and read you on this site and many thanks for your reply. I do love the way you write, the emotional depth to this story -- and the mystery. I have only just started it, but I am very intrigued, you have a superb way with words and description. This is wonderful:

A splash of crimson hurled against the sky.

I love lush prose, ( so unfashionable, lol. I don't care, it shows language skills ) but short, sharp shocking sentences like that are incredibly effective when placed just so. Your writing also shows real gutsy, unashamed emotion, which I adore in writing.

Author's Response: Ooh, it's great to see you herer! I laugh when I see my prose of my teen years, and wish I could do it again - I guess I lost the guts over the years. But thank you for your encouragement, as I will push myself to get back that unashamed emotion and flourish. Thank you so much!
Date: Nov 29 2008
Title: Chapter 5: In the Night Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Don't follow all these sheep whom are taught that emotional and poetic prose is infra dig these days. The only books I remember and love are vivid with description and feeling and written from the heart and gut. The way they try to teach authors to write now caters for the dumbest comon denominator, the people who pick up a book on holiday or read magazines and have no real knowledge of language. Any-one who can write short, sharp sentences now can write a book. It is lazy, it is unimaginative. You have a gift for passionand you are not * untidy * with it, or purple or sprawling. If that passion for words and emotion is inside you, it's not lost, you may just have tucked it away after being told it's unfashionable, which is warg turd to be frank. Books are not written to be savored these days, they're written for an audience who is time-poor, but that is no excuse and will change.

I love the way you write and I'm an avid reader, but of the tens of thousands of Tolkien fanfic stories out there on many sites, I am impressed by only a small percentage. You're in that percentage, so please keep on!

Author's Response: How right you are. Your words are great encouragement - it is so endearing to know that there are readers and writers out there who still do value the passionate and lurid. I shall treasure your words and come back to them whenever I am in need of strength. Thank you again!
Date: Dec 01 2008
Title: Chapter 6: Ominous Footsteps Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is becoming most intriguing, that is all I can say. Lovely descriptions and a lot of mystery.
Which I like :)

Author's Response: That is good to hear. I hope it keeps up ;) Thank you!
Date: Dec 02 2008
Title: Chapter 15: Hell Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Fascinating. Terribly intense, dark, gut-wrenching and addictive. Good grief, how well you write!

Your portrayal of Thranduil is also the most beautiful I have read without a doubt!

Author's Response: Good grief, how you do encourage me so! ;) Thank you so much. I'm glad you're finding my portrayals enjoyable! I hope you enjoy the next chapter as wel. ;)
Date: Jan 28 2009
Title: Chapter 17: Lonely Pilgrim Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I'm so sorry it's finished, but I have been enthralled by this. Just reading you could teach so many writers how to set a scene, how to write deep emotion, how to describe beauty and pain. It has a depth which is not often seen, and more's the pity.
Thank-you very much!

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much for keeping me company through this journey! I have immensely enjoyed hearing from you, and hearing you were pleased by my story excites me to no end. Thank you!
Date: Feb 01 2009
Summary: Slash. On a diplomatic mission to Lothlórien, Legolas gets separated from his kin during an Orc attack. He wanders lost for several days until he comes upon a human, stabbed and left for dead by thieves. When the man’s relatives find the elf covered in his blood, the elf is captured and accused of the crime. Will the injured man live long enough to clear him or will the Prince pay the price for the misdeed of unscrupulous men? Aragorn/Legolas main Pairing.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse, Lord of the Rings Slash, Book Verse Slash Characters: Aragorn, Aragorn, Aragorn, Aragorn, Arwen, Arwen, Arwen, Arwen, Boromir, Boromir, Boromir, Boromir, Celeborn, Celeborn, Celeborn, Celeborn, Denethor, Denethor, Denethor, Denethor, Elladan, Elladan, Elladan, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrohir, Elrohir, Elrohir, Elrond, Elrond, Elrond
Genres: Angst, Drama, Erotica, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Graphic Sex, MPREG (male pregnancy), Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 72760 Read Count: 31263
Published: Mar 03 2006 Updated: Apr 26 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 11: Restitution Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I spent yesterday and today reading this and you are a classy writer! Your descriptions are luscious and your characters deeply drawn and you spin an absorbing tale! I mostly review on this site but I will copy this to your LJ to make sure you get it.

Author's Response: Thank you for wonderful review and feedback, xFanarix--I so appreciate it! I am truly pleased that you enjoyed reading this odd little tale. I hope to update soon. *hugs* Patty.
Date: Apr 26 2008
The Black Rose by Gemini_Elf Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 55]
Summary: This story has been completely and fully edited. Several chapters have been taken out and re-written and others have been collapsed to make shorter, and an OC has been cut out. If you have read this before, I advise re-reading it to catch up
Enemies from the past are coming back to haunt Elrond and Thranduil, and what better way to get at a Father, than to kidnap a son? Aragorn and Legolas are in trouble. Big Trouble

Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Glorfindel, Legolas, Thranduil
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Character Death, Torture
Series: Eternal Mellyn
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 15896 Read Count: 22998
Published: Nov 05 2006 Updated: Jul 05 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 13: How to say goodbye Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I think this reads neatly, taking out unneeded characters usually does that. Is this one of your earlier works, as '' Chains '' has more description and less dialogue, I recently read a piece ( non Tolkien ) which was incredibly dialogue heavy, and excellent so I don't find that a bad thing in short bursts, but I think in Chains you balance dialogue and description very well and I do like reading a nice mix of both. I think Chains was spot on for the balance.
Well done, hugs, you worked hard and really made it much neater.

Author's Response: Yes, this was my very first fic, so it still has some bugs in it *Pokes it annoyed* It'll be right one day! Thanks for reviewing! And ypu've given me more confidence about Chains, but I'm still editing it tommorow
Date: Jul 05 2008
Summary: In the near future, as the Age of Men begins to crumble, the truth is revealed about a long-vanished world that no one, except perhaps a few, even knows existed. MEFA 2008 third-place winner, incomplete AU category.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Gandalf / Olorin, Maglor, Original Character
Genres: Drama, Mystery
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 52101 Read Count: 46901
Published: Nov 19 2006 Updated: Aug 06 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 29: Being Had Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
What a wonderful chapter. The innocence and curiosity of the hobbit children is such a huge contrast to the pain and emotional weariness of Alex and Katie, which is beautifully written and comes across vividly. the caress given by two life-long friends who find themselves together at the end of all things. And both friends knew that it was truly the end. Super phrasing, and brings a lump to the throat. :(

Author's Response: Thank you. I tried.
Date: Aug 01 2008
Title: Chapter 26: Cowering in the Forest Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I was looking at my - very short - list of stories I read again and again and there are four. That's not many in a fandom which has thousands. I do read new stories of course and look for others when I have time, but certain ones just don't become '' over-read ''.
They have to have a great plot, atmosphere, be quite long and have a good knowledge of Tolkien. That's not actually as easy to find as it might sound, in published books either, 99% of mine go to charity shops after I've read them, 1% get read to death.

The Iraqi president the Mouth of Sauron? O_o. Whoo boy.

I'll be very sad when this is finished, but I will still read it. I'm also glad you said in your bio you had plans for other * serious * stories and possibly a prequel to this.

Author's Response: Thank you. It means a lot to me. I may or may not start my new stories--and the prequel/companion to this--before this is finished, but in case I do, keep an eye out.
Date: Mar 31 2008
Title: Chapter 30: Kindness Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oh, I am very sad to see this come to an end, it has been an epic journey. Well done. I especially like that it is open to both a prequel and possibly a sequel, there is a lot of room in this story to go back, onward or even within it, if you wished.

I think you mentioned a sequel first, and I would love to see one, since especially Maglor's journey to the New World sounds very interesting, and the people he was involved with in America and how they tied in to those in this story.

( Oh, I was watching some documentary where it showed that if mankind vanished, everything would crumble after 1000 years and there would be no visible sign of modern man, - they pyramids and the wall of China would last, but nothing we have built - so eventually those who survived would at least live in a beautiful world again. :( ) You could turn this into a future Middle-earth if you wished.
Well done!

Author's Response: Hmmm...I'll have to think about it. Those are some good ideas you have. I think I was planning to write a prequel about Maglor's journey to the New World, and perhaps I'll write something about Gandalf's time back on earth.
Date: Aug 06 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Legends and Lost Worlds Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is the story you said you were overhauling? I think it's terrific! I would love to do something like this, but I would be pants at it. It brings together two subjects which I am disturbingly enthusiastic about , '' Lost Civilizations '' a la Graham Hancock, and Middle-earth, as an actual historical fact. I love your parodies of MS's but this '' serious '' story is wonderfully written. Whether you amend it or not, I am going to read it. It's so much more intriguiging than '' Falls into Middle-earth ''. Wow, two subjects which I have enthralled me since I was small in one story! First it was Atlantis, which fascinated me, then of course after the Silm it became Atalantë and Beleriand somewhere under the north Atlantic. Just... ooooh!! ( jumpy up and down oooh ) I've only read these two chapters as yet and I'm engrossed!

Author's Response: Glad you like it. I\'m not truly \"overhauling\" it; I\'m mostly going to revise some dialogue, because a lot of it sounds like it comes from \"The Final Sacrifice\" (a cheesy movie advertised as \"the worst thing to ever come out of Canada.\" Watch the MST3K version of it on youtube; I guarantee it\'ll give you a laugh).
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 3: What Was Nonsense is Real Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I have to laugh, Katie is so like me, so petrified of basically everything in RL, and a coward, antisocial, hates small talk, cringes at the idea of ' hanging with friends ' ( unless they talk Tolkien ). If she's like that at her age, she'll be the same at mine. Terrific story, and believable too!

Author's Response: Actually, I look back at my story, and I realize that Katie is quite a bit like me as well. I never even realized it until I wrote a few chapters about her. I\'m relatively confident she\'s not a Mary Sue, but I\'ll run her through the Mary-Sue litmus test, just to be sure. ;)
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 5: The Guitarist Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oh lord, is it Maglor? If it is I am going to cry more buckets than I currently am anyway, by just reading this. I know I need to read on, and I will after walking B in the morning. Gods, I am so impatient! That's so sad .
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 8: The Cowardly Fool Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is so good, why the hell is it not up in the top tens? I would LOVE to see a film of this, and it just sounds - so authentic. I love the way you have out so much thought into this, the geography, how old tales distort distances, where Mordor was located, and the huge difficulties of researching anthing which is as old as - well almost - the first city-culture levels. Marvellous, but it ought to be well up in the most read, sheesh! It's so well written and original and I'm just reading it and nodding; '' Yep, yep, aww! yep '' I should be in bed and am I? d;-)

Author's Response: Thank you! Man, your compliments are making me so happy I can\'t concentrate on anything else--and it\'s exam week at school. As soon as the semester ends, I\'ll get going on chapter 17. I will actually be making some adjustments to chapter 10 as well, but it\'s only a question of some characters being overhauled whom I could not fit into the story, no matter how hard I tried.
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Madness Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I just put this on, but I really don't like that site from the brief looks I have had, and why not put it here too?
So engrossing! I've been oo-ing and sqee-ing over ir ( and I'm far too old for that ) . I can't bear Middle-earth meets modern day, I can't stand it. It almost makes me want to stab some-one, I don't know why, but that is always the '' girl falls into Middle-earth '' plotline. Makes me twitch, so it's put me off. But this story - you know it reminds me of the Dark is Rising series, which are some of my favorite books even though they were aimed at older teenagers. No your writing does not sound '' teenage '' and nor does Susan Cooper's, it's just a very rare atmosphere and not many people can blend '' myth and magic '' with modern day. It's apparently quite hard to make such a thing work. And with Tolkien, I would imagine even harder. But this does, and going by what I have read on the other site, you've really spent some time considering this. I'm going to continue reading tomorrow, as I am thoroughly hooked. It's different, and intelligent and very well written, and it's one of those stories that grabbed me by the collar and dragged me in. It's a first, first story that has '' now '' and '' Middle-earth '' and that I like. The first story with young people, i.e. teens in it, that dosn't make me cringe. I like these characters a lot! It's wonderful. Oh Gods, shall I go mad and start typing !!!1111? I hope you post the '' re-done '' one on here, as gives me the creeps, but this version is great.

Author's Response: The Lord of the Rings fandom on is a complete mess. You literally have to dig through piles and piles of garbage to find something decent. Every single summary is a variation of \"Mary Sue, lost elf princess of watchamacallit, goes to Middle-earth to fulfill her destiny. Will she find love along the way? 10th walker, LegolasOC\". Did you know that I\'ve memorized every word of dialogue from the movie version of the Council of Elrond, not because I\'ve watched the movie so many times, but because EVERY single Suethor in the fandom copies it.\r\n \r\nDon\'t worry; I\'ll be updating on here before I update on I just put my stories back on because I remember that a lot of people on that site liked them. Anyway, your reviews mean a lot to me, just so you know.
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 10: Little Bones Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I can almost imagine going to somewhere that smells '' clean ''. That's a lovely, subtle bit to put in. Few people would realize that. In developed countries we mostly don't notice pollution unless it's intense, but if I go say from this town to relations in North Wales, the difference is marked and to breath truly clean air...that would be remarkable. The mass grave gave me a chill, :(. Excellent, let me read on.
Date: Dec 10 2007
Title: Chapter 15: The Elf's Tale Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Dear, dear Maglor, I always tear up thinking of him.
The things we say when we've had a few, Alex, lol, whoo dear. And as for Tilton, ditch the missus and the selfish daughter, mate, some things are more important. ( lol, you can tell I'm so into stories when I start advising the character's d;-) )
Date: Dec 10 2007