Reviews by Spiced Wine
Summary: How I chose a pen name.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Challenges: What's in a name?
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 405 Read Count: 2536
Published: Feb 08 2008 Updated: Feb 08 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Stone Walls and a Gemstone Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I like it very much, it's one of the best names I have seen, it's not flowery, not overly ornate, or chosen from tv or film. [ Not that I care, if a story is good the pen-name does not matter, but the better authors tend to have * authentic * sounding and not overly gushing-fanbrat type names, if you know what I mean. It shows a certain maturity, which is what I look for in what I read ] I knew what the Stonewain Valley was, and wondered if your character might indeed be a '' real '' chronicler of Gondor who was writing the events in after years, as it sounded like that.

Author's Response: Thanks for the glowing review, xFanarix, especially the suggestion that my pen name sounds like that of a Gondorian chronicler. The history of Elessar\'s reign, as I envision it, is something I\'ve been trying to convey in Arwen\'s Journey and related short stories.
Date: Feb 08 2008
Summary: Response to the "Why I review Fanfiction" challenge put fourth by Karlmir Stonewain
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Other
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1607 Read Count: 2160
Published: Feb 10 2008 Updated: Feb 10 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Great subject Anwyn and a terrific explanation. A lot of that would apply to me. There are stories I must get around to reviewing, but some deserve very long reviews, [ often completed works ] while others I like to encourage the author onward and show I am enjoying it, but would probably wait until the end until writing a long review of my thoughts and feelings on it. I think you are a good * reviewer * in the sense you can encourage and offer suggestions. I know people sometimes see any critique of their work as a flame, but it is not. I think that is a case of '' It's my baby , leave it alone. '' But agents would be a lot more vicious in there criticisms, so I suppose it depends on whether the story is important to the writer as a means of gathering praise, or just something they like to do. When I was first reading work on here a couple of years ago, I did not even notice there were reviews [ blind as a bat ], or post counts. I determined when the site was upgraded that I would just put my writing on as a gesture to show I had done something and the idea of reviews was strange to me. I didn't care if I got any and would never ask for any, the writing is what I enjoy. I won't read stories where people put R & R! Although I will read stories when people ask politely for criticism and input, as that's entirely different. Like you I avoid the stories you have listed, people-from-this-Age-in-Middle-earth, tenth Walker, most Legomances , all self inserts, as they are done to death, and look for the longer, plotty, big stories, although I have read some superb one shots. But since I wrote for * mumble mumble * years alone and screamed when any-one tried to read my stuff, 0 reviews would not matter to me, I would still need to write. An interesting topic, I think I will do my own one on this. Take care.

Author's Response: Thank you very much :) It does seem like we are on the save wavelength in that I too have a huge back log of stories I have been meaning to review which is compounded by the fact I will have to also re-read the story to be fair in that I am not taking things from the top of my head. I really do not have the patience for anyone who takes critique and immediately screams that I am “flaming” them, because that to me is a show if immaturity and I just don’t have the patience for that. However, it is of course perfectly fine if they want to ignore me completely, that is their choice but I do get irked when someone accuses me of flaming when I am not. I think the last time I may have even come close to “flaming” though it was not about a story, but more when someone blatantly stole Anwyn, name et all and used her in his own little fantasy story without asking my permission first and when I confronted him about it he said that he felt quite certain I would be cool with it, I was far from ‘cool with it” lol, and ripped a shred off him…and he changed the character name very slightly and continued on anyways, can’t win them all I suppose. I get pretty turned off when I get the impression someone is demanding a “review” but they are just expecting praise for the story and really seeking attention more than anything else and really I am not big into stroking the ego, though if someone asks me to review a story and let them know what I am honestly think then I am always more than happy to do so but I am not interested in mouthing empty praises. Its hard not to come off as incredibly harsh when writing this, but the thing is that there is always something else to be done, I really love reading the stories of other people and reviewing what not but I do not have the time for *another* Legomance as its just been completely done to death and I don’t go for any kind of romance film or book related and while I realize if maturely written a romance involving Legolas can be quite good as we have seen but more often than not it comes off as wish fulfillment and self insets/mary sues. Though I am going to stop rambling now, and I am off to check out your response to this :)
Date: Feb 10 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I suppose I do understand authors taking constructive criticism as a flame. I remember endless essays I did for English, and I accepted the marks and anything the teachers said about them with equanimity, because they were not personal to me. I did not give a toss about Macbeth or hubris, or Romeo and Juliet. It did not personally touch me at all, it was * work *. A story is quite different, every-one does put a lot of themselves into it, and it then does become a personal affront if some-one says it is a pierce of cack. It is even more so, I think, when it is a self insert as it seems like an attack upon the writer, in a way it is as if the reviewer is saying: '' I don't like you. '', whereas it is probably more a case of '' Middle-earth does not need you in it. ''

I would love my oldest uncle, who taught English for so long to come on and review, as he would '' mark '' stories as a professional teacher, without being swayed by anything except the content of the work itself. He would not automatically dismiss anything until he had read it, whereas I know I, for instance, hate Mary Sue's and girl-falls-into-Middle-earth and am harsh on them. Other people can't stand slash and are down on that, and some won't read anything AU, so personal taste dictate their reviews - well not so much on here, but places like FF.net where flaming is allowed. I might pick about 5 chapters of different stories and see if he has time to read them and * mark * them. He would do it without bias but purely as an English teacher and it would interest me since it would be some-one who is not a Tolkien fan judging the writing solely on its own merits. I look at the writing, but I am not a teacher, and not trained to see it as they do. And of course, I do love Tolkien. I actually like '' brainstorm '' reviews, not a round robin as such, but where people make suggestions of what they would like to see in the story - if any-one wanted to see anything of course. I think role playing for a few years has made me quite used to bouncing ideas off people. If I like a story I will review it, no-one needs to ask, but R&R!! is I feel a bit rude. How much time does it take to put something like: '' I would appreciate any comments, thank you. '' . Plus from looking at people on FF.net who put that and receive reviews like: '' Lolz u rock, plz updayte suun1111! '' What is the point of that except as an ego boost? It says nothing about the story or the writing or even what the reader liked about it.

I have got to say I was wondering for ages what R&R meant, I am such a twonk, I thought Why are they putting Rest and Recuperation at the end of their summaries? O.o. Was writing it that exhausting, then? Poor things. . It was only when I read Read and Review in full I thought: Ahhh, and felt really stupid. >.<

Obviously some Tolkien officiandos are going to slam well... everything, unless it is '' more canon than canon '' , although it would be more productive to look at any piece of writing as a teacher and mark it as an assignment or exam paper, and tell them how to improve, or what was good about it and what needed work. But Tolkien lovers probably are the hardest to please of any fandom. I know when I first discovered it, I thought it was solely '' gap filler '' type stories or '' what if? '' written by people who knew his works inside out and back to front. I didn't realize that the storm of enthusiasm which lead to role play sites had also birthed a plague of self insert/Mary Sue's. If I had not read 3 excellent stories at the beginning: '' For The Love of the Lord of the White Tree. '', '' To see a World '' and '' Annestel '' I probably would have never read any more and joined the purist side, some of whom think that all ff writers should be torn apart by wild dogs. I think that's an unfair view now, as there is some superb Tolkien ff around, it probably has the best writing of any fandom.

I rather think any absolute purist would deny the fact fanfiction even existed and not bother to review, even to flame.
I joined one forum around the time COH was released and a more serious, joyless bunch of stuffy, dusty people I have never encountered.
Ye Gods, Tolkien makes me wildly enthusiastic, these lot were so up their own backsides, so snobbish and so pedantic I used to read their prim, self important little essays with my mouth open. Somehow I always thought Tolkien's world was marvelous, rich and exciting and the managed to turn it into some old fossil kept under glass which was static, untouchable and actually boring. Tolkien had a mind for the epic - they did not, they rather reminded me of literary Scrooges.
I just shook my head and left. They sucked all the thrill from something I loved and I would have said that was impossible. But fanfiction - to them? Pish or plaguerism, take your pick, but so, so not done dear, no, no we don't associate with those sort of people.

Kiss. My. Bum.

They obviously have not read any good ff works, no, make that anything at all, but feel Tolkien should not be touched and when he himself said he would '' leave scope for other minds wielding paint and music and drama. '' that attitude is painful!
Yes, being the man he was of the time he was, there would be some stories he probably would have apoplexy over, but equally, I have read and reviewed some very canonical, book based ones which I think he would approve of.

Author's Response: It is my experience that some people will take anything against their character quite personally and that applies to both RPG’ing and fanfic and its nothing personal but if the character is a huge flaming sue then its not so much a personal flame as the character has fallen into a dangerous stereotype of everybody loves and wants to marry her, especially Legolas.\r\n\r\nIt would be interesting to have someone look at a story for how it is structured and so on and not be swayed by the fact it’s a LOTR story since I know I absolutely could not do it because Middle Earth feels like too much of a second home to me, and I know I would definitely be in trouble, lol, as often I just get going on something and have to stop myself to make sure it all makes sense and I have not invented a bunch of new words XD\r\n\r\nLike we do all day long in the OR, I honestly loose count of how many times someone will say something pause and then go “Is that actually a word that I now just used?”\r\n\r\nI have never really joined any of those sites such as those you mentioned because I know truthfully that they would end up boring me to tears and would probably make me feel 3 inches tall because they know every last date or everything ever kind of thing and that is rather intimating to someone, I love Tolkien’s work but it would upset me to find it so “dry” and more like they are mourning it than actually celebrating and enjoying it.\r\n\r\nShort forms, I have to admit I hate them for the most part though I was very guilty of using them a lot when I was charting at the Nursing home just because I never ever had enough time no matter what I did so anything to save sometime was a great help but they are dangerous in that you think you have learned them all and then new ones always spring up, PRN, A and C, A and P, A and D. It does look a better than just throwing in a couple letters if the writer outlines abit more clearly what they are looking for, that way I feel better prepared to oblige them. \r\n\r\nPeople write fan fiction for really different reasons, Some people do so because they want to self insert themselves into Middle Earth and personally I stay as far away as possible from stories like that but that is just person preference while others do not want to change Middle Earth but explore it through there own writing. There are proably just as many reasons as to why people write as there are stories out there because everyone is so unique.\r\n\r\nI remember in the documentary “Ringers” it talked about how Tolkien reacted to fans reacting to his work and he said something along the lines “The younger population have identified to my stories in a way I will never understand” Something alone that extent, I can’t find the direct quote online but that one quote about leaving it to the scope of other minds is truly my favorite because I honestly believed he didn’t want his world to disappear from imagination as soon as you finished the book, that his stories would live on.\r\n\r\nTolkien’s Fandom is undoubtedly the most difficult Fandom and I would say it has the most hardcore fans as well because while some people want to say Anime has much stronger fandom’s I adamantly disagree because you see it in the way that every week there is a new “Flavor” whether it be Sailor Moon, Pokemon, Nauroto it changes so often I loose track and its mostly kids that outgrow it anyways while “Ringers” I find grow and mature into it and enjoy the books on an entirely new level as they grow older. They are not something you read once and toss aside, you know you will come back and read them again and again through the years and I agree that Lord of the Rings has the best Fanfiction as well. \r\n
Date: Feb 12 2008
Summary: One shot crossover with the Pirates of Penzance by Gilbert and Sullivan
Categories: Off Topic, Crossovers Characters: None
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 173 Read Count: 3189
Published: Feb 16 2008 Updated: Feb 16 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: First Four Verses Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
She is definitely an improved one, if she knows geography and anything about Elendil, Gil galad and the Lay of Leithien! O.o. Lol, that is extremely clever.

Author's Response: Thank you! I was thinking this would be something of an advertisement for the new! Mary Sue Deluxe Package. NZ
Date: Feb 17 2008
Summary: Where do ideas come from? Here is one answer.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Fantasy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4900 Read Count: 1689
Published: Feb 18 2008 Updated: Feb 18 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Companion Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Lol, my Muse speaks to me, too, I wrote it for Jules 14 to put in Arda Dreams, but it's also up somewhere else, as a review answer probably. My Muse is an OC, however, and does not have long conversations, he riddles, and teases and tells me basically to do the work myself, but then I will get flashes, as from a film, of '' scenes '' and write around those. It is a hypnopompic hallucination [ the kind you get when you are just waking up ] combined with sleep paralysis, but the two combined produce something incredibly * real *. I do know they are hallucinations, but as they also produce ideas, I may as well use them d;-). My muse just wanders in to the room, like a supervisor, and after I get flashes of '' dream-scenes ''. Annoying git, he is. >.
Date: Feb 19 2008
Laer by Glassiel, Adora Rated: G [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Even the wisest can learn.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4281 Read Count: 1961
Published: Feb 19 2008 Updated: Feb 19 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Laer Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Exquisitely written and very beautiful. I have never written of Finrod, but I do like to read good fanfiction about him.
Date: Feb 19 2008
Summary: A poem of the thoughts and feelings of a Haradric village shortly after the attack on the Black Gates.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: Three things were given to the Elves under the Sun: Poetry, Prose, and Song
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 205 Read Count: 2266
Published: Feb 22 2008 Updated: Feb 22 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Well, I'll tell you how I feel!
I truly like this, because it is written from the perspective of the '' Axis '' rather than the ''Allies '' .

There is some fanfic written from the viewpoint of the * other side * , but not a great deal. I suppose that is because we can only * guess * at the cultures [ I always write the northern Haradhrim as rather Ottoman ], whereas we feel we know the people of Gondor, and Rohan and the Elves much better and feels more familiar to write in.
Harad, Rhun etc are unknown territory, and after reading the Pelennor in the book, you do tend to cheer when the Axis are soundly trounced, ditto with the film.

But we forget, though these Men are called Men of the Darkness, they had families and wives [ perhaps more than one ] and still could love and live and be mourned.

Excellent idea, love it!

Author's Response: Thank you! Two nights ago there was a lunar eclipse, and I felt kind of sad about it, and the line \"the music died that day\" with various themes about next line. Anyway, this poem came out, and I really like it (if I do say so myself). I\'ve always thought of the Easterlings as vaguely Ottoman, but I can see how the Haradrim might be considered that way. ( If the Haradrim are Ottoman, are the Mumak riders the Janissaries?) Once again, thank you for the nice review. NZ
Date: Feb 22 2008
Summary: This story tells of the beginning of Awin's life
Categories: Book-verse, Off Topic Characters: Original Character
Genres: Other
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1228 Read Count: 1751
Published: Feb 26 2008 Updated: Feb 26 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Life as a Princess Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
You need to space out those huge blocks of text a lot as they are very hard to read like that. And when you start a conversation, also use a new paragraph, or new line, do not push the speech into the middle of the sentence.

I know in published books this is done, but reading on a screen is a lot different than picking up a book and it is daunting to see enormous blocks of writing.

You also need to put AU as a warning, as Haldir etc were not royalty in Tolkien and there is no such thing as a Fae in Tolkien.
Readers need to know as some will not read AU, they prefer canon-based work, it's only fair to warn them.

Just space out those blocks of text a little, into more readable paragraphs, and I would advise not using words like '' Mom '', as it is very un-Tolkien, the word for mother in Sindarin is '' naneth '', or '' nana '' for '' Mum ''.

It is very hard to comment as yet, since it makes my eyes hurt, even on larger text size. If you break it up, it will be far easier to follow.

take care.
Date: Feb 27 2008
Summary: A new little twist on an older idea..."The Rant" was a very, very popular commercial from the Molson Brewing company back in 2000, Its been redone many, many times and tonight just for a laugh I tweaked it once more and it gave me a giggle, I hope you may get a kick out of it too.

"The Rant" as it is known belongs to Molson and anything Lord of the Rings related belongs to the Tolkien Estate.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Other
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 356 Read Count: 4395
Published: Feb 27 2008 Updated: Feb 27 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: "The Rant" Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Lol, I have never seen that advert - not surprising, being in the UK. But I like it, and your take on it.
And yes, it is ZED not ZEE! d;-)
That was Land of Hope and Glory in the background. Makes me think of Last Night of the Proms.

Author's Response: Thank you! :) Yes, as far as I know it was only in Canada though it inspired lots of other commericials and parodies, There was\r\nanother take on it that I saw on youtube that was \"I am NOT a Canadian\" and it was abit of a risky one done by some guy\r\npretending to be a Quebec Sepertatist. The guy in the video \"Joe\" became an abseloutely huge celebratiy after that \r\ncommercial and ironically then moved to LA, lol. Though he did abseloutely nothing there and quietly moved back\r\nto Toronto and now does a couple of series for the history channel. I called a 1-800 number the other day and I had to give the\r\noperator a code and I said \"Zed\" ad she corrected me \"Its Zee\" and I just thought \"Oh no, we are NOT starting this!\" lol\r\nI remeber they played \"The land of Hope and Glory\" at my Elemantary school graduation but not at my highschool grad \r\nceremony becuase there was a couple of *hundred* of us graduating, lol.
Date: Feb 28 2008
Summary: Sam meets Frodo for the first time, and Frodo learns a thing or two.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1359 Read Count: 1777
Published: Mar 15 2008 Updated: Mar 15 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oh, how lovely. I do like Sam; how can you not like some-one so loyal, who can also tend a garden and cook. A lovely, cozy, hopeful piece of writing.

Author's Response: I\'m rather fond of Sam myself... : )
Date: Mar 16 2008
Summary: To give hope to her people, a young widow must face many changes and learn to relinquish her greatest treasure. Gilraen, Elrond, the twins, young Aragorn, Glorfindel.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Gilraen, Glorfindel
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 20000 Read Count: 7286
Published: Mar 19 2008 Updated: Apr 01 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 4: A Garden of Sorrows Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is beautifully written, both Gilraen's feelings, which are so natural and Elrond's. It was a chapter of deep emotions and ominous hints and forebodings but ended beautifully with the last paragraph, with Hope! Love it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind words, fanarix! Your reviews certainly bring a smile to my face, and, I must admit, motivate me to keep on posting. I’m so pleased to know that some are reading and enjoying my writing.
Date: Mar 30 2008
Title: Chapter 2: The Shelter of the Storm Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Wow, you have a gift! I do not usually read stories centered around Men, but since Aragorn was raised and loved by Elrond, I do like those stories.
Beautiful portrayal of Glorfindel, who of course had seen his city fall, his king and so many he loved die before dying in battle with a Balrog himself.
Also a superb portrayal of Elladan and Elrohir; after Celebrian's death they were driven, it seems and I hate seeing them written as the * two pranksters of Imladris*. Their argument with their father sounds most realistic. I look forward to updates.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Fanarix! I, too, see Elladan and Elrohir as driven and relentless in their hunt for orcs following the capture and torture of their mother. I’m glad to know that you enjoyed my portrayal of them, of their conflict with their father, and of Glorfindel. I wouldn’t say that my stories are necessarily centered around Men, nor Elves, but rather, my true passion lies with those most fascinating peredhil, hence my very creative screen name. ;)
Date: Mar 26 2008
Title: Chapter 3: A Home in a Stranger's House Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I still love the way the story is going. And so realistic too with little Aragorn spilling something. He is such a sweet little tot.
Gilraen's emotions - poor thing - are beautifully written and her feelings of being cast somewhere which is alien, even if safe for her and her son among people she is not quite comfortable around.

Author's Response: I’m glad to know that you are continuing to enjoy the story and that Gilraen’s emotions, her sense of isolation and alienation, comes through so clearly.
Date: Mar 28 2008
Title: Chapter 5: To Give Hope Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Well this was a wonderful chapter.
Gilraen's strength of character shows through her grief and her resolution is so beautifully written.

I am thrilled by your portrayal of Elladan and Elrohir and your insights into their age and grief's and their almost obsessive, fierce hatred of the orcs who harmed their mother.

As I said before, too many people forget what is written of them in the books and because they are twins write them as something of a pair of clowns. That makes me wince considering the sorrow they bore, which in them manifested itself as this driven desire for action against the creatures who wronged Celebrian.

Elladan's remorse and grief is palpable. Yes, those orcs could have been * ignored *, but I get the impression that he sees each one of them as one who tormented his mother. I obviously do not think they would be blase and ignore them anyway, but this is like a personal vendetta - and I can understand it.

Although there are only a few chapters, the twins characters are already magnetic ( and the others are portrayed superbly ) and make me long to read more, so I hope it will be forthcoming soon!

You have been added to my favorite authors and stories so I will be notified when you post your next one.
Lol, be warned, if I love something I gush over it. It's so rare to find really splendidly written Tolkien fanfiction that I am afraid I imitate a Legolas fangirl when I find it - only my lust-object is a story. d;-)

Author's Response: That’s okay, Fanarix, go ahead and gush if you want to, I don’t mind! :-D Honestly, your wonderful reviews have given my flagging spirits a needed boost over these past few days, and I really do appreciate it.\r\n\r\n.\r\nThank you for your faithful reviews of each chapter and for adding me to your favourite authors list. I’m glad to know that you are enjoying my characters so much, for I have put a lot into them and, in fact, I feel quite attached to them. I’ve been writing fanfiction now for about a year and a half, and I have quite a bit more to post, and you won’t have to wait long between stories, at least for a while. It’s very nice to get some new reviews for my older work, and I’m hoping that it will help cure me of my current funk and writer’s block. I have many more tales about Elladan, Elrohir, Aragorn that I wish to tell and I hope very much to get motivated and inspired to start writing again soon!\r\n\r\n
Date: Apr 02 2008
Summary: The tale of Miriel, Daughter and rightful heir of King Tar Palantir whose throne was usurped from her and she would be amongst those at the heart of the last dark days of the once great Númenor.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elendil, Eru / Iluvatar, Míriel, Sauron
Genres: Angst, Drama, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death, Graphic Sex, Incest, Rape, Torture, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4085 Read Count: 4936
Published: Mar 28 2008 Updated: Apr 12 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Nimloth Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oooh, I never knew you were doing a story about this time! There is certainly enough treachery and intrigue and terrible things happening in Númenor at this time to make a great story; I always thought the image of Miriel trying to get to the summit of Meneltarma was very sad. Great start , Anwyn, I don't see many stories of Númenor.

Author's Response: LOL, Truthfully, I didn’t realize I would be writing this story until sometime late yesterday afternoon and I didn’t even get a chance to start it until the evening because I offered to stay late and finish a case hoping to make abit of overtime and overtime starts at 4pm and we finished at honestly 3:59, lol. Anyways when I did eventually make it home and got supper and everything over with I was able to sit down and make a start at it, and ended up finishing the first chapter as well though I didn’t think I would be able to, but I wanted to get it started at the least. Númenor has always fascinated me, I found its history written so vividly, In that before its gradual decline that it was a place of art and beauty, and that even the *weather* behaved as they needed it to and still there were some who were not content and I believe that says a lot about the nature of men that no matter what we are given we are never content and for that those of Númenor lost it all. But the time this story takes place in, yes, there would certainly be a lot of intrigue and treachery abounding and while Tolkien says, to para-phrase Tar Palantir did his best to heal some of the damage that had been done by those that had come before him but it was too late for the worst of the damage had already been done. I have not seen many stories written of Númenor earlier, In fact I cannot honestly think of any just off the top of my head though it was a very interesting place in any part of its history. I have read a few different theories as to why Miriel was so desperately trying to get to the summit of Meneltarma, because she would not have been saved but I have a few of my own theories. Thanks for the very, as always, its very much appreciated! :) I will ultimately probably end up going between this story and the other two I am working on as well, lol, I guess it means I will always have something to work on!
Date: Mar 28 2008
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Nimloth Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Anwyn, there's a story on the Silmarillion Writers Guild called Full Of Wisdom And Perfect In beauty. which seems to be set toward the end of Númenor. I think the author mentions she models her Númenor on the Phoenician's, I haven't read it but one of the author's on there I like recommends it so it is probably worth a look! She is not on here, I did look.

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I will definately check it out! :) I suppose one could also write of Númenor in its days of glory but I find\r\nit more fun to write when everything is starting to fall apart...becuase I am strange like that, lol. Well, I should not use the term\r\n\"fun\" really, but I find it more dramatic that everything that had been developing for years really started to come to a point\r\nthat they were every pushing outwards and there came a point where they just started invading as they pleased. Thanks\r\nagain, I will go have a hunt for that other story now :)
Date: Mar 29 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Erukyermë Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I really like this Anwyn. Númenor is, I suppose, my least-read subject, mainly because I concentrate on the Elves. But I do know there is a lot there of huge interest and potential stories. Really looking forward to see how this plays out!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! As always, your reviews mean alot :) I have always has been fascinated with Númenor, as I view it\r\nas an \"Eden\" and how it does seem to be in the nature of Men that even if given so much they will still want more, and\r\nin this case they wanted for immortality though it was partially Saurons fault for making them believe death was something\r\nto fear, but he will come into the story abit later on...somehow, I have not gotten that far yet, lol. I have a feeling that this\r\nwill be a story that will proably come along very slowly, and just as it wants becuase Númenor is just so vast and complex\r\nand I have read Akallabêth so many times now, and everytime I do I still manage to find something that I had missed before.\r\nThanks again! :)
Date: Apr 12 2008
Summary: Seventeen year old Estel seeks answers from his brother Elrohir...
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3244 Read Count: 2207
Published: Apr 02 2008 Updated: Apr 02 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Answers and Questions Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I really loved this. I know you say it is your first piece, but I see only that it is remarkable. We seem to hear a lot about Arwen loving Aragorn and what that means to her and Elrond, but only rarely this kind of insight into the twins feelings.

It is sobering and poignant to think of them knowing so many generations of Mortal's and befriending them and having them pass away over thousands of years. One can understand that with that constant grief Elves would not enter easily or lightly into friendship with a Mortal. But as the Peredhel, of course they do carry Mortal blood. The way Elrohir explains this to Estel gives such a sense of those long years of sorrow.

Lovely bit of writing, I think you are judging yourself a great deal more harshly than any reader would!

Author's Response: I’ve spent a lot of time thinking about what it would actually mean to be immortal, and it made perfect sense to me that an elf would not be so quick and eager to form friendships with mortals as some fics would have us believe. And then I got to thinking about what it would be like for Elladan and Elrohir, who Tolkien tells us “rode often far afield with the Rangers of the North” to watch so many men that they obviously counted as friends die while they themselves remained unchanged. This theme, amongst others concerning the unique nature of the peredhil, and the sons of Elrond in particular, will be continued in some of the fics to come.\r\n\r\nThanks so much for reviewing again, fanarix! I’m pleased to know that you are continuing to enjoy my writing.\r\n
Date: Apr 03 2008
Touch by peredhil lover, Adora Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 7]
Summary: Elladan’s thoughts when he first sees his mother in the orcs' lair.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elladan
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 624 Read Count: 4269
Published: Apr 04 2008 Updated: Apr 04 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Touch Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I don't think I have ever read anything which dealt with the twins finding Celebrian. I can feel his horror and his rage and his grief through this. There is nothing which makes one feel more helpless than seeing one you love in pain and fear and being unable to do anything. After such an experience no-one would ever be the same, not only Celebrian of course but her sons who found her.
Wonderful one shot!

Author's Response: Thank you again so much for another generous review! I must say, you are certainly inspiring me to continue posting here! :) I believe that I have seen two or three fics in my years of reading fanfiction (although I have been writing LotR fanfiction for about one and a half years, I have been reading it for over five) that deal with the twins rescuing Celebrian from the orcs. I find that rather surprising, considering how interesting the subject matter is (at least for me). Here is a real, canon friendly opportunity for angst and for exploring such darker themes as the impact of torture on the characters. I’m glad that I was able to portray Elladan’s feelings believably.
Date: Apr 04 2008
Summary: Glorfindel leads a patrol and Estel is included despite Elladan’s objections. When trapped in a dire situation, Elladan discovers that there is much to learn from this human youth.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Glorfindel
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 21700 Read Count: 9240
Published: Apr 05 2008 Updated: Apr 21 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 7: Day and Night Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
A wonderful end chapter. I especially love Elladan and Glorfindel's conversation; it rings with such portents of the future and the sense of sorrow which is in the Elves of Middle-earth. I loved this story and think that the way it ends is perfect - to go on to other stories.

Author's Response: Thanks for your faithful reviews, Fanarix. There are more stories to come soon!
Date: Apr 22 2008
Title: Chapter 4: The Dark of Night Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
This is a great chapter. I love Estel's healing of Elladan and this part, Elladan's vision: he saw on Estel’s head a magnificent white winged crown, bejeweled and glowing, and there before him in the image of a young man was a vision of the kingdoms of men restored to their former glory and of all that was pure and good in men.
I really loved that!
Now hurry up Elrohir and the others, the air is running out!!

Author's Response: Thanks Fanarix! Yep, for his brothers’ sake Elrohir better hurry up! But, unfortunately, he may have his hands full too! ;-)
Date: Apr 13 2008
Title: Chapter 1: The First Day of March Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
What can I say? I think it's clear you have truly captured the spirit of both Men , Elves and the Peredhil in your writing. Therefore it flows elegantly and effortlessly from one to the other and makes me think of being an invisible observer to the things which happen in your works.
This is the kind of writing I always look for and rarely find. There is no trace of awkwardness as some people tend to show - many people - in writing of races which are not their own. The characters are beautifully drawn. I am only left wondering what Elladan's presentiment means! O.o

Author's Response: It’s nice to know that I have managed to capture the spirit of Men, Elves, and Peredhil, as I assure you it is something that I have given a lot of thought to! Thank you once again for your high praise, I’m so pleased that you are enjoying my work so much. As for Elladan’s foreboding, well, you’ll just have to wait and see, but I assure you, you won’t have to wait too long. I will tell you that this story will have quite a bit more action than my other works that you’ve read so far. Of course, there will still be a healthy dose of angst thrown in, for I do seem to love it so much! Thanks again so very much for reviewing, I really appreciate it!
Date: Apr 05 2008
Title: Chapter 2: Dawn Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I love the interaction you have between the characters; it is very vibrant and the emotions underlying it, whether tension or affection really impact me as I read them. You can always tell emotions under words between people when you see it personally, but when you have no visual and are reading, it takes a really good writer to take all those little gestures, the body language and intonations of the voice and paint those images with words alone.
Terrific!

Author's Response: Thank you again so much for your regular and encouraging reviews, xFanarix! Knowing that some are reading and enjoying each chapter really helps motivate me to keep posting. And thank you too for your comments about the character interaction. Really, exploring characters and how they interact with each other is my main fascination when I write and I’m glad to know that I can convey their emotions so clearly
Date: Apr 07 2008
Title: Chapter 3: Twilight Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
Oh yes, you can write action, alright, as well as wonderful dialogue, description and characters! But fancy leaving it like that O.o. I hate it when authors do that! Grrr! d;-)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Fanarix! I’m so glad you enjoyed the chapter. As for leaving it like that, I’m testing the theory that cliffhangers really do get more reviews! :-p
Date: Apr 10 2008
Title: Chapter 4: The Dark of Night Reviewer: xFanarix Signed
I have to comment that I almost experience a sense of relief at your portrayal of Elladan and Elrohir. I have read - started to read rather - so many * prankster * stories that I was beginning to despair of any-one writing them as I envisaged them myself. Not that I think of hem as humorless, miserable gits either! But I love this complex and very adult characterization. It is both so realistic and so refreshing. I don't know where this image of them pouring honey down peoples breeches or acting like perpetual fourteen year olds originated but I grew tired of it around about the sixth story and gave up.
It was never in book lore or even in the film, so it is a strange * fanon * idea which has seemed - horribly - to become * canon * ( I have read a couple of stories where they are part of the cast and much more serious and adult ) But fandom seemed to have claimed them as the * joker twins * . Possibly when young and before their mother died - but why any more or less than any other young Elves I do not know.

Anyway - I just need to say that your stories should be a * must read * for people who write Elladan and Elrohir ( and young Estel actually ) since you have hit the nail on the head, I believe. Apparently other people * claim * them as their Muses. I don't think so, I think they've chosen you as their voice.

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No. Joking!

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Oh yes...... I hope you have many more stories bubbling away. I'd like to see sequels, prequels and expansions because I am just greedy like that. d;-)

Author's Response: All I can say is WOW, what a review! You better watch out, such reviews might start going straight to my head! But seriously, thanks so much Fanarix. I’m very touched, I really am. I’m thrilled you feel that way about my portrayal of the twins, because I’ll tell you honestly that it was my dismay over the far too common portrayal of the sons of Elrond as juvenile delinquent pranksters that was the main motivator to convert me from a fanfiction reader to a fanfiction writer. Elladan and Elrohir have always fascinated me. From what little is said about them, they seem to be such tragic, complex and interesting characters, and in all honesty, I thought they deserved better than they were getting in many fanfictions. So I thought that I would set out to at least offer an alternative image of the sons of Elrond, and, hopefully, change some minds about how characters with the history that the twins have might behave. Thank you again so much. Words can not express how much I appreciate it, but I will say that thanks to this wonderful review, I am moved to post the next chapter tonight, so it will be coming along shortly!
Date: Apr 15 2008