Very well done, Deep and Beatiful :) I have always been terrible at writing poetry but I really apprechiate the depth of this poem and the emotions and images it manages to invoke, Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank-you very much! I appreciate your kindness. It was a fabulous subject on which to write, and I really enjoyed it. Éowyn has to be my favorite character in Lord of the Rings; writing from her viewpoint is quite enlightening if you want to understand her better. Again, thank-you!
Awww. Very very nice, I really liked it and I am certain your friend will be very touched by it as well, Its a very thoughtful gift as its right from the heart.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I\'m glad that you liked my poem. I wrote this in November and never got around to posting it, and like I said, my friend has no inkling about its existence. But, yesterday, surprisingly, he wrote a poem for me and read it out to me on the phone. That was the sweetest thing I\'ve come across!! I still didn\'t tell him about this one. I doubt if I ever will.\r\nThanks again for your review!
If this was your first attempt at writing Fanfic I must say that I am very impressed as it was very well written and written with great depth and maturity. I do see a lot of stories that are written about young Estel but they are usually just to be “cute” and that doesn’t appeal to me but as in your other story you are really able to flesh out the characters with great skill and your little Estel (In the story) is indeed very adorable its not just a story about him getting into mischief with the twins, It touches upon deeper themes. I have to say I could really identify with Estel after his first meeting with the Orcs and feeling shaken afterwards, I dealt with my first real “life or death” emergency the other day and did feel like I was moving in a trance and didn’t truly realize it was over until someone pat me on the back and said to go get a juice because I fell over. Alright not *quite* the same as fighting the Orcs ;) Again its interesting to see more of a younger Aragorn because in the books we first meet a hardened and experienced Ranger but here is just a young man starting off and learning. Again I really like how you capture the twins and how Elladan copes with his guilt and how he blames himself for Arathon’s death and how it comes out in his dealing with Aragorn. Fantastic story, thank you for putting it up as I enjoyed reading it immensely and I really liked the very ending, Dear little Estel, trying to get some answers and only ending up with more questions!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind words! Well, I certainly don’t care much for stories of the “cute little Estel gets into mischief with those zany prank-pulling twins” variety either, so we have something in common. Apparently, we also have in common that we have both faced “life or death” situations, as I based Estel’s reaction to his first taste of battle on my own personal experience of defending myself against an attacker (and he was not quite an “orc” but close to it!), so perhaps that’s why it feels realistic to you. Thanks for reviewing again, I’m so glad to know that you enjoyed this little fic so much. There are more stories to come, so hopefully, at some point, poor Estel will finally get some answers! :-)
Abseloutely fantastic! So thrilling! After a very busy couple of days at work I am finally finding chance to get caught up on some of my reading and this story was high on my list of things to read and I am so incredibly impressed once more with the depth and feel or your writing. Estel and Elladan facing a troll...so exciting to read! Yet such a cliffhanger! I am on pins and needles! Please update soon! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and for your very kind words, Anwyn! I’m pleased to know that you enjoy reading my stories so much. You’ll get your wish soon—the new chapter should be coming later today. Thanks again!
Wonderful! Another fantastic chapater! I really apprechiated Estel's cleverness in this chapter in looking after a wonded Elladan, and air is running out! Now THAT is scary, personally I would rather be out facing a cave troll once more than trapped in a tiny space with no air! Also, a very beatiful touch with the foreshadowing, that was very, very well written.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing, Anwyn! I’m glad to know that you enjoyed the chapter. I agree completely—being trapped in a tiny space and running out of air doesn’t seem like much fun, does it?
Another fantastically exciting chapter! I have to agree with Fanari’s earlier compliment about just how well you capture the twin sons of Elrond in writing, I really cannot find the right words to praise your portrayal quite enough, Its absolutely brilliant and very inspired. I am not sure where this notion came from that the twins were perpetual pranksters and while I do confess I love a touch of humor in a story, I have seen one too many stories of “Elladan and Elrohir play yet ANOTHER nasty prank” and your story that portrays them as complex and interesting is like a breath of fresh air. I want to blame the Harry Potter books because the twins, Fred and George Weasley are huge pranksters and that has seemingly to migrated into our fandom somehow. Another thing I must say is that I love how you write the twins but they are not identical (Appearance aside of course) but they have distinct personalities as well as the bond between them, and they do react different in that Elladan comes of as quite stern, and Elrohir, well, I don’t want to say soft but he has a touch more “give” in his personality, though if duty calls to him of course he will step up as he did in this chapter. Another thing that stood out to me in this chapter in this chapter is Elrohir’s battle with the remaining Troll. Often when I read any piece where a character is engaging a foe, any foe, in battle there is not such great detail and thought given to the *why* as the attention is shifted completely to the main character, which in this instance would be Elrohir but you went even further to give some insight into the troll that he was fighting, that the trolls brother had just been slain and while I will not for a moment argue for a single moment that trolls are terribly intelligent I just want to say that this extra touch of insight, I personally felt, gave an even greater depth to the detail of your writing and really that is saying a lot because your writing is absolutely fantastic but I have to mention that as it stood out in my mind. Also, the way that Elrohir was moved to not allow the floundering troll to simply writhe in agony and quickly put an end to its suffering, was another touch of realism to the story as that felt very real and *right* and even more so for a moment he even felt empathy for the great brute. This chapter was simply thrilling, and I feel like I have latched onto the smaller details alone but I am at times the kind of person who could have a tremendous feast set before them and still just still there complimenting how pretty the silverware is, ha ha ha, so do not mind me. I am looking forward to reading the next chapter, I am hoping Estel and Elladan get out as I am feeling a touch breathless just thinking about it!
Author's Response: Okay, Anwyn, are you and Fanarix down there competing to see who can leave the longest and most flattering reviews? Not that I’m complaining in the least! :-D And I’m with you, I think that we can all blame those Weasley brothers for the unfortunate reputation that has befallen OUR twins in fanon. Seriously, thank you so much! I’m so glad that you like my portrayal of Elladan and Elrohir, and that you can get a feel for them as the individuals they are, rather than just as “the twins.” And thank you too for your comments about the battle between Elrohir and the troll. I’m pleased that you enjoyed the details about their thoughts and actions. I agree, of course, that trolls are not terribly bright, but I wanted to show that there was just a little bit more to the creature that pure blind evil, and it seemed to me that a desire to avenge his dead brother seemed like a base enough emotion that it was at least somewhat realistic. I don’t mind you commenting on particular details—I like to see what parts of the story held the interest of different readers the most. Anyway, thank you again so much!
An excellent end to a fantastic story, I really enjoyed reading this, your writing is beatifully detailed and your potrayl of characters very realistic in that you capture not only their strengths but weaknesses and doubts as well which just adds to the realism in that "nobodys perfect" I am very much looking forward to your next story :)
Author's Response: Thanks Anwyn. I’m glad to know that you have enjoyed my characters. I do strive to create complex and multi-layered characters, for, as you say, nobody is perfect. Another story is coming soon.\r\n\r\n
I think a few of us are going off to shower after that one, lol. Very good funny!Legolas fic and angsty!Aragorn making an apperance as well and their "special bond" LOL, I loved this intentional parody becuase it hit the nail on the head, I look forward to seeing more! :)
Author's Response: What Aragon / Legolas friendship fic would be complete without some good old Aragorn angst? Thank you so much for reviewing! Chapter two is on its way with a veritable buffet of fanon clichés to be savoured. Please do let my know if you enjoyed!
This little parody was so much fun! I really enjoyed it, espically the second part becuase it is so true! Poor Elrond always seems to get the short draw in most stories where he is just there to brood and heal, he is not really given most of a life in most fanfics beyond that. Its either that or he falls into the constant "Daddy Role" for anything Arwen/Her OC Sisters are involved in, I have seen ALOT of Daughters of Elrond characters written as well. I admit that alot of those plots DO sound VERY familar but well written they can work in that the consequences are long lasting in that as you write, LOL, Legolas does not loose an arm and grow one back, I like seeing cause and effect in writing. It also really irks me when in stories its made to feel that there are fully equipped Hospitals with Doctors and Nurses up and running able to tend too some ghastly and life threatening injuries, and if there are such places...I want to transfer! lol. Poor, Poor Elrond...No one ever wants to listen to him but he is the first person they expect to fix their messes! That was very very funny! I hope you write some more little stories along this line again :)
Author's Response: Yep, that sums it up very neatly, and I agree completely—in order for a fic to be believable, there needs to be cause and effect. I find that so many of these Lego/Aragorn friendship angst/adventure fics seem to happen in a vacuum—what has gone before has little effect on what occurs in the present, and their experiences in the present seem to be forgotten by the time their next misadventure rolls around. Character development over time is what fascinates me very much, and there seems to be precious little of it in many of these fics. Thanks very much for your comments Anwyn, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Orphaned, their land destroyed, twins Elfhild and Elffled struggle to remain defiant against their foes. Goldwyn, stern and proud, refuses to surrender to despair's throes like so many others have done.
Each step on this journey of sorrow takes the Rohirric captives closer to Mordor, the Land of Shadows from which there is no return. Is there any hope of escape, or is slavery to be their doom?
The second book in "The Circles" - an alternative universe tale exploring what might have happened had the ending of The Lord of the Rings been different.
Characters: Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Horror, Tragedy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: The Circles of Power
Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 81107 Read Count: 25608
This chapter was abseloutely heartbreaking to read but I really enjoy the style of your writing, it flows beatifully along even when writing of moments as bleak as this. The realization of loosing one dear, When I lost my grandfather I don't recall crying, though I am most certain I did, but just really wanted to go to be with him, no matter where he was now but of course I see now I was really too young to understand. As strange as this might sound, I am going to just go ahead and say it that there is a beauty to this chapter, in that it is very strong and stirring, not "over the top" but beatifully captures what it must have been like for the captives to behold the remanants of such a horrible battle and now that remains of so many is only memories...and bones. Though the poor captives are heading off to what I would consider a far more grim fate, Its just chilling to consider for even a moment. While I dread to even begin to guess at what they may encounter next I will faithfully follow this story as I find it all abseloutely enthralling. You writing style weaves the story together so beatifully, I really do not think I can even begin to praise it enough.
Author's Response: Anwyn, thank you for your kind remarks. They are more than appreciated. As one who was born at the beginning of World War II, scenes of carnage and misery are part of my formative memory. From the radio broadcasts to the newsreel footage at the theatre, I was surrounded by war\'s grim horror at a very early age. One uncle served in the Pacific with the Navy, and when the war ended and he came back, his mind was scarred with horrible memories. To a little boy like me, he seemed very strange indeed.
I was three years old when the Dachau concentration camp surrendered to the American army in 1945. Years later I remember one of my father\'s friends who was part of that liberating army telling my father, \"The stench was so bad we could smell the camp miles away.\" As I grew up and saw the horrifying pictures of Dachau, Auszwitz, Buchenwald, and the many other death camps, I was repulsed and frightened. Even today when I look at these pictures, I can still have flashbacks to the time when I first saw them.
Growing up during the Cold War, every day I worried that we would all be killed by an atomic bomb. You can\'t grow up like that and not be affected by the gristly face of war. Perhaps some of it shows in my writing.
My co-writer, Elfhild, is decades younger than I am and she is fortunate that she grew up in a more enlightened era. I rely heavily upon her to add the perceptive of young women and children who have been wrenched away from their homes and are having to face a future filled with uncertainties set against a tableau of war in all its horrors.
Again, thank you for reading.
I am very, very behind in leaving a much overdue review for this abseloutely incredible story, and I applogize for that. I do not think I can praise this story enough for it's realism, espically in the way that you capture the behavior of the Rohirrim women, specifically Elfhild and Elffled of course and I did enjoy the way they compared Garavegion to a proud gander strutting about and then proudly reminded him that hey are daughters of Eorl, It was a wonderful touch that sadly, they are now slaves to Mordor but they are still proud and have not forgotten who they are. I found the character of Garavegion intriguing, and he had quite an intresting chemistry going on with the girl's the way he was so shamelessly flirting with them, he was kind but I honestly found myself expecting him to snap at any moment, In him you have created yet another fascinating character and I hope to learn more of him in future chapters. This story abseloutely fascinates me as the victory of Mordor is not really something I can imagine with any comfort but you write this with such wonderful realism that it makes for an abseloutely gripping read which I always look forward to reading whenever it is updated. Kindest regards to you both.
Author's Response: Anwyn,
Sometimes those who seem fair are really foul. Not everything is as it seems, especially in enemy territory. Unfortunately, the girls are finding out that their foes do not always have to be a hideous orc or a leering man with stray hands. A lowly scribe can do just as much damage with a mere signature. At least the girls got to watch someone write - a refreshing change from the dismal monotony of marching.
Elfhild is proud and defiant, but her sister just wants to survive and go unnoticed by her captors. Even though they are frightened and grieving, both girls possess a subtle strength. Many of the captives do - it is the only way they can survive. Poor Breguswith was not so fortunate, and went insane when her baby died. It would be very difficult to keep from falling into despair and just giving up in such a horrible situation.
Garavegion might be back sometime in the distant future.
We strive to make our story as realistic as possible, excluding scenes where there is magic, of course. Thank you for your wonderful compliments. :)
Firstly, I must applogize for my utter lack of reviews when it comes to this fantastic story. I have been following it and a new update to the story is met with delight but I have been neglectful when it comes to actually leaving reviews which is the least I can do for such a wonderfully thought out and deep AU story.
This story I feel is one of the hidden gems of this site. Everytime I read a new chapter I am drawn completely into it and always find myself longing for more afterwards as your writing style is so incredibly rich and detailed. Though I must admit that at the mention of lice I do tend to squirm in my seat quite abit!
I really admire how you portray the Rohirrim and the Men of the South, often in stories the writer tends to take an over sympatehtic stance towards one side but you manage to portray both cultures extremely well and it is fascinating the interaction between the two groups as it comes as completely realistic.
I am always reading this story, even if I do not review it as often as I should, and I have been throughly enjoying it and as always I am looking forward to reading the coming chapters.
Author's Response: Anwyn,
Don't worry about not reviewing. Angmar and I are glad you are enjoying the story. We try to put a generous dose of realism into our fantasy, incorporating elements of real world history, culture and customs. I think just about everyone squirms a little at the mention of lice - it's the power of suggestion. *laughs* It is very common for people who are forced to live in close quarters, such as the captives, to become infected with lice or contagious diseases, such as dysentery and influenza. Luckily, there have not been any outbreaks of the latter two among the captives - yet...
We try to portray both sides in a neutral light. In real life, things are seldom black and white, but varying shades of gray. Although there are people who are considered by many to be "evil" or "good," whole cultures cannot be "evil" or "good," because they are comprised of many people with varied standards of morality and personal codes of honor. Even though the Lord of the Rings is a work of fiction, the people of Middle-earth should be portrayed in a realistic fashion. After all, Middle-earth is our own world, but with an alternative history and origin very different from our own.
I hope you keep reading The Circles!
I do not usually like stories that are written in the first person perspective but you write with this method extremely well in that it flows quite nicely. "There is no hope" at the end is very chilling and I am quite curious to read more of this story when you have the chance to work on it some more becuase I quite enjoyed reading this "teaser" part of the story! :)
Very fun! I enjoy this, Its a very intresting thought as to what fanfic characters do when they are left unattended, even just trying to imagine it made me giggle, very well done! Very original :)
Thank you so much for your review, I am glad you liked it. It is thoughts like this that keep me awake at night sometimes or distract me at work. Small, stupid ideas that are constantly nagging my mind and do not grant me any rest. Well I guess the only way to solve the problem is to release them and write them down.
Thinking of this made me giggle as well and certainly my colleagues at work thought me mad when I was wearing a rather wicked grin all day. I left those two sitting on the frozen lake for quite some time, there was no time to write on and after musing about this I almost felt a bit guilty. No not really, why should they not suffer a bitß
This story was incredibly touching, I am a Nurse and I used to work in a Nursing home and more specifically an Alzheimers Unit of a Nursing home and I think you captured well, though the reality is abseloutely heartbreaking, the disease and the first paragraph of someone hurriedly reaching down her pant's to check to see if she is wet, that was upsetting but I have seen that done by Nursing Aide's and I made a point of taking them aside if I saw it done as it is a huge invasion of the persons privacy not to mention it takes away their dignity. This story broke my heart becuase it rang true in so many tones about how most of the residents have so little to wear as their families just abadandon them to the nursing home and families provide clothes though I know where I used to work sometimes people would pitch in, my mom has on several occassions bought slippers for people she noticed had none, or nighties to wear to bed if theirs are falling to bits, my mom worked at that nursing home too. Beatiful story, wonderfully told even if it breaks my heart to read it as I know first hand how much of it is true. If you still need a beta for your LOTR story my e-mail is in my profile, I would be happy to help you out.
Oh how sad! Very beatifully written though, It is just a very sad thought to think of such a beatiful place dead and whithered :(
This is a very intresting theory and I certainly bow to your knowledge of foresty as that is something that I lack completely and also your knowledge of ships but from my perspective, and I admit that often my perspective is shaded by emotion more than fact I do not think I can buy into the belief that mail was sent back and fourt on any kind of a regular basis from the Undying Land's that the Undying Land's has often carried a strong resemblance to heaven and that it is a place of beauty and peace and that those who choose to go there never returned and went to heal and possibly even forgot much of their former life. So while it is a nice thought that Sam and Frodo exchanged letter's and so on it is not something I can really accept as I feel it takes something away from the end of the story as of course Sam was heartbroken he still returned to his wife and children and lived a full life in the Shire, the thought of him having a penpal in Frodo while Frodo was in the Undying Lands healing, To me it takes away alot of that bitter sweet ending. Though again, I truely do admire the pratical knowledge you put behind this theory and it is definately something I will be giving more thought to.
Author's Response: Actually, my idea of Frodo and Sam communicating between Valinor and Middle Earth was probably more of an emotional one at first, rather than factual. I've been separated from close chums many times in my life and always stayed in touch through correspondence whenever possible. It seemed likely to me that Frodo and Sam would do something similar. It was only after I started researching Middle Earth history and geography for "Arwen's Journey" that the idea actually began to look practical.
Thanks for your input and review.
This was great! Such a wonderful twist at the end! My dad snores quite loudly, to the point where if I am being Night owlish and the house is quiet I can hear him snowing from the main floor even with his bedroom being on the top floor of the house, I can not take some comfort in that he can proably scare most things away with his snoring! Abseloutely deligthful little story, Thank you for that nice little read.
Author's Response: I'm glad to offer a silver lining and doubly glad that you enjoyed the story.
What a lovely little short story, It is very sweet without being mushy as sometimes stories involving character's as young children but young Eowyn is just so sweet and you have captured what I feel is Eomer so well too and the bond between them all. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you!! I was trying to keep their characters in line with the adults they develop into, and I'm so happy you thought Eowyn was sweet - I did worry I might have overdone the cute factor :p glad you enjoyed it.
I like this, I felt it was quite realistically written of the birth though poor Rheda, unfortunately such complications are not uncommon but only our knowledge of how to best deal with them has changed. I like stories written around OC's and so I will follow this one as this first chapter has already drawn me in and I look forward to seeing more of this story, though the fact it is written as a challenge really makes this intriguing. Also, I learned a Rohirrim curse word, It is good things all around! LOL! Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it...I put the warning about the OC's in the story notes because apparently a lot of people prefer to read stories mostly about canon characters, so I thought it was only fair to let people know what I was doing. About the cursing, not sure what the Professor would have to say about that, but I didn't think "Oh my godness!"-type exclamations would have been appropriate in that situation!! Thank you for your review, please keep me updated on your thoughts as the story progresses.