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I like this, would you count it as a paraody? I'm not sure as quite alot of it is in the film, alot of parodies go out of character, trying to make things funnier than true to the books, you manage to do both, bravo!
lol very amusing, I love the audineces input throughout te story
brilliant, i read uruk first and i think you shoud make them all into a series. the only problem i would say is you should build up the tension a bit more..
Is this part of a series? i think it is a brilliant short story but it should link to another one
Brilliant little poem/song. I am a fan of Evanescence myself (although not as much as you it seems), I can also relate to this song as I feel the same way about Soundgarden.
i found myself smiling as i read this stroy, which i havent done since i broke up with my girlfiend about 2 months ago. a briliant read, dont stop.
Author's Response: Belkar!\r\n\r\nThank you for reviewing! And I am so glad to have made you smile! :-) Yeah!! It was a funstory to write as well!\r\n\r\nY.
Beutiful yet sad story. I found the paragraph on the deserted Rivendell particulary moving, briliant work.
Author's Response: Thank-you very much!
judging by the other comments i would say you have heard enough of this, but this is a good story, the only critisism I would give it is that the item given to Pocosin isn't clearly describe. I realise this has been done perposely but even at the end it is hard to figure out why it was seen as such a coveted prize.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, Belkar. No, I never tire of getting reviews. Yes, Faramir\'s trophy isn\'t described until the end of the story because that would deflate the surprise. Pocosin\'s friends recognize the trophy\'s importance for two reasons. First, it serves as an award from a commanding officer to one of his deserving men--sort of like a medal. Secondly, soldiers often put a souvenir value on rare battlefield items. In this case, the scout walked away with two: an Orc\'s quiver and one of Captain Faramir\'s arrows. The two combined would be an odd battlefield relic, indeed.
im not good at translating poetry but it sounds sad, is it based entirely on you and this other person or does it relate to lord of the rings?
Author's Response: Thanks for you comments, Belkar. The poem is based on my brief relationship with Andrea. It can only be linked to LotR in the romantic sense. Hence, my comparison of the mossy knoll near my house to Cerin Amroth, the hill where Arwen and Aragorn pledged their troth. Also, Andrea was Elvish in appearance.
A brilliant piece of writing, the only critism I can give it is that there are a few spelling mistakes and after two thousand words of Frodo in pain new ways to show ti become hard to find and you repeat youreslf. Other than that this sounds almost as if Tolkien himself has wrote an alternate ending to the story. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, for taking the time to read! And thank you very much for the advice, i do need to work on my spelling. ^____^ Thank you again for your kind worlds.
OOOOOO! I feel the beginings of a saga of some large story coming! Is this some a guide to different original charcters you have created.
Author's Response: Heya, Thanks for commenting.The introduction was just a way to introduce the characters.The new chapter is the startof the story! Trinity-Rose
Haha, time off from homework does you good, less boring that way too. : ) I like the lack of detail, weather doen on purpose or accident; it makes you eager to read the next enstallment. Even so it's a bit short, maybe the next shorter could be longer? Just a suggestion.
Please don't leave as you said you may, I see alot of potential in your writing - sorry that sounded quite hypocryitical as I haven't long since joined but I couldn't think of another way to say it -
Don't stop writing!
Author's Response: Heya, thanks for the comment. The next part will be longer but my Geography homework prevented me from makin\r\nit longer! lol. I will carry on writing! Anyway better carry on with my ICT work. The teacher keeps walking round!\r\nTake care! Trinity-Rose
I must agree with gemini...please update soon! The end of chapter 4 is a briliant cliffhanger
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I\'m glad you liked my cliffie. If I was really mean I\'d abandon this story her *g*\r\nLuckily I\'m not and next chapter will be up on saturday, *fingers crossed*.
Is this suppose to be from the dwarves point of view? The dragon being the lord and not giving any of thier treasures makes it seem this.
Author's Response: To be honest with you, \'hoard\' rhymed with \'lord\' and i was too unimmaginitive to think of anything else. Sad, isnt it? Hehe, thank you for reviewing.