The last couple of lines seem kind of clunky, like they don't belong in the poem.
However, this sounds like something the Elves would write.
Author's Response: Thank you! NZ
Coolness! I can just see Homer/other old guy sitting down to pen the Odyssey, and instead coming up with this!
Author's Response: It was Homer, but I can\'t quite imagine him penning it. Oh well, I just like spoofing old stories, I guess. NZ
You've ruined Aragorn for the rest of my life!
Now when I see the other ffs, I will always have this funny scene in mind!
Author's Response: Heehee. GOOD! Seriously, I was just trying to spoof Faramiriel\'s icecream story. If you liked this, you should check hers out. NZ
Oh! This is so pretty!
You write sooooo well!
Author's Response: Ummm, thank you. NZ
This is so bittersweet, and sad! I want to cry! The elves have left, and the Pool is trying to bring them back!
Author's Response: Well, I didn\'t have it in mind that the Pool was trying to bring the Elves back, as the Pool isn\'t exactly alive, but I did start crying when I was writing this. NZ
You have a wonderfully wild outlook in this poem. Once again, I ask, how did you get so good?
Author's Response: I was trying to capture the earthy feel I get every time I read about Shadowfax. I think the movie did it horrible wrong to have Shadowfax be an Arabian, he is just so much more powerful than a slighty wimpy show-horse. Once again, I say, I write what I know about. NZ
No! The chocolate chips are mine, mine I tell you!
I feel so sorry for the D.L. The others are being stingy!!
Author's Response: I will have to duel you for the chocolate chips then, because I strongly contend that they belong to me! I really don\'t feel sorry for the Dark Lord, but you know, that\'s just me.NZ
I like the ending of this story, but I am not quite sure why an enemy arrow-case ( I'm drawing a blank for the proper name) would be such a trophy. I really enjoy reading these stories!
Author's Response: You have a valid question, OEG. Soldiers have a peculiar habit of picking up odd battlefield relics as souvenirs. The odder the better. An enemy quiver pierced by Captain Faramir\'s arrow would have been a sought-after prize to grace the mantlepiece of most Ithilien rangers\' homes and would have been the source of many a tale in later years. One real example of such souvenir hunting took place during the American Civil War at Gettysburg. The bullet-riddled fences on the battlefield were quickly sawn up by locals and sold to tourists as souvenirs. When I first arrived in Vietnam I met a departing soldier who was attempting to bring a bullet-riddled human skull home in a plastic bag. Now that was macabre! Thanks for your review.
Creepy! How do you write poetry so well?
Author's Response: Well, I write horrible poetry having to do with Mild Earth, a.k.a. reality. They say that to write good poetry, you have to write about what you are passionate about, and I guess I just know more about Middle Earth than about Mild Earth. NZ
I had shivers going down my back with that one.
When I read this, I see a golden sunset, with people around a fire being very pensive and serious.
Author's Response: That sounds a lot like the image I have, except mine is when the people are sitting at a campfire looking at the stars, and the sun has just gone down. NZ
I love your rhyming scheme!
This is an awesome poem!
**Adds to favorites
Author's Response: Thanks, OEG. I actually wrote it about 38 years ago when I was in Vietnam. Only recently did I think of adapting it as the work of a fledgling ranger in camp near the shores of the River Anduin.
Wowio! That was cool. I never thought about what was going on behind the scenes in FotR.
Author's Response: You didn\'t, did you? Yeah right...lol :D
Ooh! Izzy is in trouble! What will happen next?
I would never think there was such a sad history behind the girl who writes the beautiful poems.
Author's Response: Thank you, both for the review, and for the compliment. I really have changed, because you would guess from my name that I write horror or something 8-) NZ
Huh. That's an interesting comparison you draw between Elessar and Caesar Augustus.
Long live the frivolous fangirls!
Author's Response: Fangirls - You gotta love \'em!
Good ending! I like your essay, very well written.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. It wasn\'t supposed to be two chapters, but it was getting too late to do the entire thing at one sitting and I had promised myself that I was going to post something before I went to bed. I\'ll soon be working on a Middle Earth/Twilight Zone crossover actor fic starring Liv Tyler. Ain\'t gonna tell you any more, though.
Coolness! That was a realistic story! I never thought that Butterbur had a brother! Keep writing!
Author's Response: Your compliments are truly appreciated, oelberethgilthoniel. Part of the plot is a distillation of my experiences managing the forestland upon which I am dependant for fuel. I\'ve been heating my home with firewood for over 30 years. In real life, King Oak was really King White Pine, a 147-year-old tree that toppled in 1982. Barley Butterbur doesn\'t have a younger brother named Ulbar in the novels, but I don\'t think it violates the canon to create one, just so long as the original character doesn\'t change the course of Middle Earth history. Ulbar Butterbur originally appears in Arwen\'s Journey as Chief Constable of Dunland.
I couldn\'t help but notice your unusual pen name. How about responding to my pen name challenge?
Wow. I'm touched. Someone wrote a ff for me! Thank you so much, Naz!
Author's Response: You are quite welcome, OEG NZ