Wonderful story. I read it sometime last year and couldn’t get enough. Kudos! I love how you managed to stick so closely to the original plot while still having Balian contribute – although his injuries did make me wonder whether the timeline was being adjusted at some points. I also like how in-character the characters are most of the time. That’s a rare thing in this fandom.
I try not to adjust the timeline, as that makes things awfully difficult. Balian's just got this wonderful metabolism which allows him go heal very quickly XD. Thanks for the review. It brightened up my day.
First, the constructive criticism:
Jack seems a bit OOC in this fic – mostly, he seems to be less intelligent and articulate than he should be, and overuses his jokes a bit too much when they aren’t needed. I’m also not sure what his place is in the plot, though I could have missed something. Hopefully this can be corrected in the sequel, as it was the main thing that detracted from the story for me. As well, the later chapters seemed a bit lackluster or rushed, though that could just be me.
Otherwise, I loved Chance Encounter and this sequel. :) CE3 is looking very promising, too.
Author's Response: My interpretation of Jack is that something's not quite right with his head. I don't know, maybe each person interprets him differently. Thanks for the criticism. It's a bit too late to change anything in this fic, but it helps me improve my next one ;)
“My advice to you: Stay on land.” Good advice, yet somehow they never seem to follow it :) I love how this sequel is shaping up, keep up the good work!
They are definitely not very good at staying on land. Somehow, Balian always finds some valid excuse to go sailing :D Thanks for the review.
Sweet. Great chapter! :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review.