I have chosen to read this story because it is on the top 10 most favourite list – so many others cannot be wrong! My reviews tend to be lengthy, I hope you don’t mind!
Wow! You open so quickly! Instantly the reader is thrust into the scene! It is almost like a curtain coming up at the theatre! Gandalf’s staff lights up and it’s go go go! Fantastic plot device! A hook with a nice big juicy worm on it to get a reader to bite!
Your hobbit description is perfect! Large feet and large hearts describes them to a T! The second paragraph just shows what a mish-mash of people have come together to fight against evil; the clashing of cultures and range of heights and abilities! I think a reader often forgets how different they all are – it’s nice to be reminded of the characters’ uniqueness!
You have to love the youngest hobbit and his knack of stating the obvious!
Is fate the woman who spoke to her? Is fate a synonym for one of the valar?
I can see why so many love this – you bring in the 10th walker easily, it isn’t so fake or cliche as many I’ve seen.
Her name, I think, is Gaelic – the spelling is quite old and her name should fit in nicely with Middle Earth. Perhaps it could be tweaked to Kaitwen, as ‘wen’ is a general female suffix for female in Middle Earth. It doesn’t stand out like many Mary Sue names.
I have an amusing thought of your OC calling Gandalf Dumbledore, and Legolas being called Lucius! *and I’m not going to go there any further, lol*.
Ah, a modern women dropped into a world where men rule. I love such dynamics! Though, the Biologist in her (and the Biologist in me) will know that everyone starts off Female, and (I think) 6 weeks after conception, a Y chromosome re-programs everything!
Don’t fret, you’re not really repeating what’s gone before! You’re setting a scene! Realistically, *every* fanfic tells you what’s gone before – we use characters created by someone else! I adore the films, I adore the books – and I have absolutely NO complaint about you setting the scene! If it aint broke, don’t fix it – you’re just doing a brilliant job of slipping a new character into a well-loved environment!
Oh dear, ‘What are orcs?’ isn’t a very good sign... though it shows sh has been relatively safe and not met any yet.
Ah... the OC has a detailed past; I do love depth in a tale!
One of my most favourite moments of FOTR was Sam smacking the orcs with his frying pans! Resourceful to the end!
Brilliant descriptions of the film scenes, it is often hard to write down what you and others have seen!
AWWWW! That's so cute! AWWWWW! Elanor's such a sweetheart, and Legolas is completely under her thumb.
On a more "Not exclaiming AWWWW at the top of my voice while people look on and think I'm mad" note; this shows another side of Legolas. We're so used to seeing him as the warrior and the dangerous killer, that to see him so relaxed, happy and tender is beautiful.
My first review on this site!
I thought your description of Spring was simply brilliant! The phrase was short and quite simple, yet it showed not only the renewal of the seasons, but how close the Elves are to nature and how they interact with their surroundings! Beautiful, simple and elegant writing!
I love a story that (a) makes me think deeper into things, and (b) has fantastic vocabulary and word usage. Tolkien was a master of words, and I love to see others using interesting language and different descriptions. This story just *feels* right – it is one of those things that strikes me when reading LOTR fanfics, some fics just *feel* as if they could have come from the original tales (some use too much modern language and syntax and just spoil the magic). *and I’m rambling, and probably not making much sense.*
I am sure you referred to the reins of horses with the twins, but I had an image of those that Mother’s use with toddlers when out in the street! I had an image of two grown lads with baby reins on and Elrond walking behind with the leads! I doubt that was what you wanted to get across, but it struck me as amusing. Sorry.
Is it said anywhere what the time gap is between the twin’s birth? Many authors refer to eldest and youngest – but surely there can’t be more than an hour between them? I’m no expert on Elven birth or Human birth for that matter, but that little description has puzzled me for years! It is no complaint, I was just curious and going off on another tangent.
The reading room sounds like a haven! Is it private or open to all elves in search of a text? I can imagine lots of little layers to this story, lots of small back stories behind a setting, an action, a description – just like with the original books. I think it’s what gives me *that* feeling.
Gosh! News travels quite fast between the elves doesn’t it! Twenty-five days isn’t really all that long for such a distance! It is also realistic and highly accurate for a society without any other communication system other than someone carrying a letter on foot or horseback. Yet another well thought out snippet that adds realism.
Thranduil is definitely arrogant, but it is wonderful to see he’ll put his quarrels aside for his family. Even if he doesn’t like it, he’ll do what is best for his youngest. I have always wondered if Legolas has siblings, I’ve not found any evidence of them, though I confess to not looking too hard. There’s a phrase ‘the heir and the spare’ – no King in his right mind would send his heir off to war, even an immortal king. Friends and I have debated that. *and I’ve gone off on another tangent – it happens a lot with my reviews, you’ll have to forgive me that.*
Legolas has been estimated at somewhere between 2000 and 3500 by various sources – though, I do like reading about ‘baby’ Legolas. Every great man/elf/hobbit/dwarf has the same humble origins of childhood – even my favourite elf. The only characters I can imagine as children are Merry and Pippin – because they are mischief incarnate! I adore reading how fanfic authors have written the other characters as children!
And the ‘maturity’ ends with a childish squabble and something breaking. And the chapter moves full circle.
A fantastic start! I look forward to reading chapter 2.
Author's Response: So… I got home from work and after about fifteen minutes I got a call from one of my betas. She asked me if I had checked the LOTR Fanfiction website. Of course, I had just gotten home, so I said no. She then went on to tell me that I had gotten several reviews from someone named Utopia. I was totally psyched! I poured through your reviews and will respond to every one. Let me start by saying I’m glad I am the first one you reviewed on this website. Thanks so much for taking the time to review. It is greatly appreciated. I’m glad to hear that you liked chapter one. Thanks so much for your kind words about the language I use. I am speechless, which is a rare thing indeed! LOL!
Once again, a beautiful description of nature, reminding the reader of the beautiful world of Middle Earth!
The eldest doesn’t want to admit he’s curious as to what he let pass. Even the Elves are just like the rest of us! Lol.
Thranduil might be arrogant and complacent, but his sons aren’t. The danger is real, a seasoned warrior is just an enemy to an orc – and can be killed just the same. Glorfindel needed reminding of that, another little snip that gives so much depth to this.
Awww, so Legolas isn’t a ‘baby’ – and by baby I refer to anyone who doesn’t look like they’re in double figures yet, lol. Never mind, I can still get lost in your description of those beautiful blue eyes. Hmmm, why do I get the impression (from Legolas’s dismay) that his brothers refer to him as the baby?
*blink* Wow! A Legolas capable of sarcasm! He’s often painted as too serious for my liking, I am often given the impression that he doesn’t let his hair down! This fun Legolas is a refreshing change, and yet doesn’t feel out of character! Brilliant!
I don’t have siblings, but I am assured that a sharp tongue is a must have with them! The twins may have met their match! I wonder what Elven sibling rivalry looks like…
Another fabulous chapter!
Author's Response: Wow! You don’t have siblings. When I was a kid I would have been totally jealous of you. Yes, having a sharp tongue is sometimes necessary… especially if you have an annoying younger brother! And you’re right. The twins have met their match. (*Grins)
Legolas can tell them apart where others cannot, yet another little bit of depth that could be a fic in it’s own right!
I love your development of the Rivendell family dynamic! They make a point of having breakfast together, even if they won’t see each other until much later. Elrond might be leader of a realm, but he is a Father first, and takes his duties seriously. I can see why he told Legolas he was an extension of the family –he’ll probably heal faster if he feels closer to them.
I think telling the twins to stay out of trouble might be as much use as a chocolate tea pot! Trouble follows them like an obedient dog!
Does Legolas really need hair care advice? Lol.
Wow, Legolas the mediator. His skills seem practiced, is he frequently the one to dissipate his brothers’ arguments? Or does he break the quarrels between his Father and other politicians?
The relationship conversation was very interesting; at first it could have been any bunch of teenagers with the ‘She fancies you’; but later when they turn the conversation to courting and marriage you are reminded that they aren’t teens and are grown. It’s an oxymoron, but it works well. I can’t see the nobleman approving of his daughter’s choice, perhaps he’s dragging his heels with the talk. Elrohir is evidently a nice lad, but the nobleman probably wants someone less clownish for his daughter.
I wonder if Legolas’s ability to ‘read’ people is similar to that of talking to horses. He was listening to the trees in Fangorn, animals have to be easier! He must be very gifted! Yet another little layer added to the mix!
Stallions are not the best horses, it is why so many are gelded; they can be hot-headed and unpredictable. Perhaps Elrond was sending a subtle message to Elladan to calm down and be more like the mare?
Well, maturity isn’t their middle name! I wonder what Thranduil would say if he saw his son rolling around in a stable, playfighting with Elrond’s twins! Not to mention the compromising position they ended up in!
Neither can sleep, and there is an obvious attraction. Perhaps the insomnia is some form of link? A cry for help from the prince. So far, he hasn’t appeared too ‘damaged’ – but the happy façade seems to crumble at night.
Another magnificent chapter.
Author's Response: Thranduil would probably be both shocked and angry if he saw Legolas rolling around on the ground grappling with Elrond’s sons. Poor Legolas, his problems are only beginning.
I always imagined that their hair was the only way to tell them apart. An enemy is an enemy on the battlefield, and any foe would aim for the leaders to cut the head off the snake. I always imagine them to be dresses exactly the same, with only their own personal weapons and hair. Your idea of Legolas’s hair being unique to Mirkwood makes sense; Middle Earth is literally an Earth – huge, Mirkwood is another country. You wouldn’t expect an army from *picks countries at random* Japan to dress exactly the same as one from France.
Ah, the fecade is demolished. And, just like Elladan, I want to cuddle him and tell him everything will be ok. Perhaps the eldest twin has his Father’s ability to heal and sense when someone needs healing – is that what had him go and find Legolas? Is that what drew Elrond to him? Is Legolas’s depression like a beacon to those who know how to help?
MAIDEN? Oops? Though, in the films it is only the males who have their hair tied up, though it tends to be much shorter. I think the Elleth might need Elrond to check her vision… *giggle*.
My other half laughed at me doing a tapestry, until I have him the needle and some wool (unthreaded) and told him to do it if it was so easy… he hasn’t laughed since! Though, evidently it isn’t a women-only thing, as your 2nd chapter mentioned Elrond doing it too. Perhaps the twins lack the skill or the patience to do it! Surely sewing would be a skill they’d need as rangers and healers?
Back on the hair issue – the herringbone plait (the one used by the elves in the films) is blooming difficult to put in! It took me ages to do it on a friend’s hair (and then it looked like she’d gone through a hedge backwards), I can’t imagine doing it on my own hair without help! I struggle enough to plait it! For that style, you need very nimble little fingers and the ability to not get lost as you follow the instructions!
The next day sounds like it will be interesting! Hasn’t anyone noticed he’s not wearing a dress yet? Or is clothing more neutral? I guess there’s nothing to stop an Elven woman dressing like a bloke, and vice versa. Robes look a bit dress-like.
Once again, fantastic!
Author's Response: Maiden? I totally agree. How could Ellaria mistake Legolas for a female? Oh well, the poor thing was so embarrassed. It’s kind of funny that you made a reference to Japan in your review, since that’s where I am currently living. Interesting, huh?
Ah, the Father-Son talk was very enlightening; but it didn’t tell all! There was just enough information to keep us satisfied, but enough suspense to keep us hanging!
Oh! I love the twin’s banter! ‘His bedchamber or yours?’ – would it matter? I wouldn’t care!
Legolas is one of those fellas who can charm anyone from child to geriatric! Poor lad! What is 150 in human terms? Best script reminds me of my Mum telling me to use my best handwriting on a Christmas card for my Grandparents! I was 6!
Goodness! The flirting’s getting heated now! Lol!
Complacency gets you nowhere! Legolas hasn’t grown up in Rivendell, Elrond has one of the Elven rings that helps to protect the area – Mirkwood is a dark and dangerous realm where It wouldn’t surprise me if every Elf is taught to fight for their own safety. I can imagine every Elf old enough to carry and wield weapons doing so – even if it was for a quick errand to the market or visiting a friend.
The Prince has just witnessed his Mother’s murder at the hands of orcs, it is sad that he feels he must be prepared for battle for an hour’s trip – but it is better safe than sorry. The Rivendell children don’t realise the darkness Legolas has grown up in, and their shock at his completely serious nature is a testament to Rivendell’s peace and to their naivety.
Once more, amazing.
Author's Response: Yeah, in many ways, Legolas is really different from the twins. He has had a harder life. Yet, through it all, he has been able to stay level-headed and not become hardened.
Oh dear, that went ‘well’ didn’t it. *laughs* Though, I dread to think what Legolas would have done if the groping and rude comments got out of hand… two dead men wouldn’t have been very good PR for an ‘angelic being’.
Legolas was going to faint… when did he last eat? Or sleep? He can’t be healthy.
Ah! Feelings admitted, and an almost kiss… spoilt by the arrival of the siblings. Though, I don’t think the village could cope watching two women kissing, or two angels kissing for that matter!
Again, brilliant – not to mention hilarious!
Author's Response: Thanks for saying that the chapter was hilarious. It was really fun to write. I must admit, Elrohir’s comment about Slash and Kill had me in stitches while writing it, so it’s nice to know that others share my sense of humor.
See, complacency solves nothing – and it is a good thing Legolas made them arm themselves! Though, his reaction isn’t brilliant; poor Legs is lost in hideous memories and completely useless in a fight! But, things must get better, or he wouldn’t be a match for Gimli at Helm’s Deep in the future! (Or just a few paragraphs down, for that matter, lol, the price for reviewing as I read).
Where did the goblins come from?! Or is it a synonym for orc?
Perhaps someone will give Arwen a bit of training, if orcs are creeping close to Rivendell, she’ll need it… that goes for the other ladies too – it would make a nice group activity, and will be more exciting than needlecraft! Though, I can see it becoming parody.
Arwen’s shaken up, but not quite as much as her Father! His actions to Legolas, claiming him as family was simply BEAUTIFUL! Though, would that make a relationship between the twin and Legolas a strange form of legal incest?? Not that I’m complaining!! Bring on the relationship!! *panics that I’ve put author off relationship with mentions of legal incest.*
I’m going to have to consult a thesaurus on this, I’m running out of synonyms to say how good this is! How does superb sound?
Author's Response: That’s actually a good question… is goblin synonymous for orc? I read that they are one and the same, but apparently this is a hotly debated topic among cannon-savvy readers. In my story, I use the terms interchangeably. Thanks so much for yet another wonderful and thought-provoking review. You’re great.
The chapter title is scaring me already...
Guilt plagues Elladan, but the village has been safe before – as Elrond said. He’s blaming himself for something that couldn’t have possibly been his fault!
The elves dream as they walk in the day, then their hallucinations have to be just as ‘real’ and probably follow him in his waking hours. His blacking out can’t have helped matters. I just want to cuddle him! Though, the fighting isn’t very good for a cuddle.
I don’t know what to say! Legolas is in such a state! No wonder Thranduil sent him to Rivendell! They’ve had to anaesthetise him for his own safety!
Wonderful, but so very sad.
Author's Response: Yeah, poor Legolas. As I said before, things are going to get even worse for him. Stay tuned.
Ah, the morning after…
Elladan is trying his best to play the jester and put Legolas at ease; but the perceptive Elf can see straight through it! Though, the lies were rather good, and would probably be convincing to anyone who knew the siblings!
No! He can’t leave! He’s going to end up hurting someone or himself!
Can I personally go to Mirkwood and garrotte Thranduil? Or am I at the back of a long line of others who want to do it before I get there? You have developed Thranduil’s character – and he hasn’t even appeared! Fantastic!
Has anyone bothered to tell the Rivendell people that Legolas is actually dangerous? Or does Thranduil want to keep his precious image intact and keep mum? Gosh! I’m so blooming venomous! You’ve created a monster of a reviewer with this fic!
Ooops, by defending the Prince, they’ve dropped Elrohir in it! This is going to take some very diplomatic sorting out! Both the Elleth and Elf are not going to be happy! I can only guess what those ‘special treats’ are…
Oooh… slashy special treats, or not. Elladan is right, but I wish he wasn’t! *puppy dog eyes unleashed*
Was his Mother the last person to cuddle Legolas? Or was cuddling banned from the image too? The last lines were another wonderful image!
Author's Response: Elladan is so mischievous and there’s more where that came from. He’s awful for dragging Elrohir into his messes, but that’s my Elladan for you! LOL! Thank goodness he went and apologized to Ellaria or Elrohir may not have forgiven him.
Their dynamic is so innocent, yet the passion simmers, waiting to boil over when Legolas is well again.
Well, innuendos ‘r’ us… Does Elrond know what mouths his sons have? Lol. Its probably a good thing that Legolas’s senses are out of it at the moment, overhearing them wouldn’t have helped his frustration.
Twin swapping! Lets hope the Fathers don’t hear of this! Though, it’s nice to know the Duchess knows what’s going on, and finds it amusing.
How old did you say Legolas and Elladan were? 9? 10? Lol! The Prince is certainly ruining his image by throwing mud! Not to mention the bad manners of laughing!
Oooh… mud wrestling… that’s an image to cheer a girl up! Mmm!
Shirtless elf… kissing… touching… rolling around on a bed… wriggling… writhing… INTERRUPTIONS!!!!! *gah!* I know it’s not good for the I-won’t-greave-because-my-Father-says-its-bad-for-the-image Legolas, but that’s just torture!
I just wanted to answer Elrohir’s question of ‘Why have you not coupled with him’ – because you walked in on it! *innocent face*
The confession was fantastic, Elladan is just as injured emotionally as Legolas, and perhaps they need each other so they can both heal? I hope Legolas doesn’t search out comfort elsewhere!
Once again, marvellous!
Author's Response: Yeah, I must admit… I like the mud wrestling idea too. I’m also glad you noticed how emotionally injured Elladan is. In many ways, he is just as wounded as Legolas… maybe even more so.
I wondered when the abundance of testosterone would explode! The phrase ‘jealous much’ comes to mind. Good grief! Those two are going to be sending sparks at each other at this rate!
Is hussy an Elvish word? *blink*
Can I give you a round of applause, nay, a standing ovation for this: "Elladan! Are you really that dense?" Elrohir asked sarcastically. "You need to be bedded… and bedded well. You are courting the most handsome elf I have ever seen and you won't even touch him! You are so sexually frustrated that you are frustrating me!" FANTASTIC! But is Elrohir not getting his ‘special treats’ anymore? How did the talk go?
Oooh *shudders* dominant Legolas. He could order me about any day, night, morning, afternoon… lol. Sexual tension makes Legolas a very horny bunny.
Well, that brilliantly written slash scene is enough to send Legolas into the deep sleep he needs. I hope the sleep is peaceful and helps him heel. Both Elves need to sit down, cuddle together and have a blooming good cry!
Once again, fabulous!
Author's Response: LOL! Is hussy an Elvish word? Yeah, you’re right… no it’s not. It is, however, a really old word. Did you know that the word hussy came about in the 16th century? I guess that’s why I thought I could get away with it. Plus, something about the word is a little comical to me, as opposed to whore or tramp (which are also really old words) but sound harsher somehow. Thanks again so much for all of your wonderful reviews. You and the wonderful Gemini Elf have made my whole week!!!!!!!!!!!! I hope you continue to read and enjoy my fic. I will update on Monday night, Japan time. Thanks again! See ya!
Many apologies for my absence, but I’m back for a bit.
‘Dessert’ for breakfast… hmm, I could live with that. Lol. Though, I’d want to curl back up and go back to sleep afterwards.
Hmm… so Legolas in everyday terms is calm and controlled, but between the sheets is ‘aggressive’… yet Elladan tends to be hotheaded and a little unpredictable, but transforms into a diligent lover. Interesting.
Public sex, and getting caught by Dad too… that’s not a nice thought.
I wonder why Elrond and Thranduil fell out? It must have been something very grave for him to lose Elrond’s friendship! And if Thranduil still holds a grudge, then Elladan doesn’t stand a chance!
What is it with men and a lack of crying?! Have a good cry and get it out of your system! I could slap Thranduil – his pride has meant that his son hasn’t grieved! Legolas needs to grieve, not stand proud with a stiff upper lip!
Author's Response: Yeah, I’m with you about the whole men not wanting to cry thing. It can be so frustrating sometimes. It must be tough though, to always try to maintain a strong image.
*gobsmacked* You don’t open someone else’s post! What the heck is Elladan up to! No good will come of this!
Is the teasing and accusations a way of coping with whatever he’s just read? Is he being insulting because he’s upset – and given a ‘convenient’ method of ‘revenge’ (even though Legolas is innocent in all this)?
Wow, straw can be erotic. Though, prickly if you’re the one on the bottom.
Though, I like the smell of straw – it’s a clean and organic smell. I used to work in a pet shop, and I actually used to like cleaning out because by the time I’d finished there was a lovely… what’s the word I’m looking for… clean? Summery? Fresh?... anyway, it smelled lovely after I’d finished! I find the scent of straw relaxing, like Summer’s days and clean rain. It doesn’t make much sense, but I hope you catch my meaning.
I always had the impression that touching elf’s ears was the equivalent of shoving your hands down their leggings… and Elladan is licking those ears! I wonder if an elf could climax just from having their ears played with?
You don’t make love and then run for it! Poor Legolas is confused enough as it is – and right at that moment he was so vulnerable! Elladan leaving him with only a few words that weren’t endearments was awful! Who cares about who’s leggings you’re wearing? Who cares if they need washing? Legolas needed some post-coital cuddles and reassuring about his nightmares!
Elladan thinks he’s doing the right thing – and he might be in the long run – but he’s going about it the wrong way! I think Legolas would appreciate being told honestly face to face – rather than this veiled rejection without reason!
And what is in that letter that has Elladan so spooked?
Author's Response: Elladan isn’t very smart sometimes. He, unfortunately, is going to have to learn the hard way.
Avoidance? Is that the best Elladan can come up with?! What a coward! Not only is Legolas upset, but Arwen and Elrond are too! His actions are going to create a rather large rift between a everyone he cares about! And Elladan made it sound (from reading Elrond’s words) that it was Legolas’s fault!
How old is Tialise? (in relative terms) I’ve got her pegged at somewhere around 16-17 in our terms. She’s blooming quick to get her words in! In case they can’t make it up between them she’d have him… I know Legolas was kind, but that’s rather presumptuous on her part!
Has Legolas eaten anything during the day? He’s going to make himself physically ill on top of his mental and emotional wounds if he carries on like that!
Oh well, Elrond’s trying – even if the books a bit topsy-turvy. I can’t imagine Thranduil doing that, the comforting that is, not reading a book the wrong way up.
Author's Response: Hmm… I kinda pegged Tialise as a young and very naïve. I have always pictured her little older than you mentioned – anywhere from 18-21 in human years. LOL! Yep, she knows what she wants and goes for it. I wish I were as brave as she is. Again… Elladan is going to have to learn the hard way. It sucks, doesn’t it?
Ah, the chapter title is reassuring.
FINALLY! He has a good cry. That’s been 15 chapters in the making, and sorely needed!
Elves can die of a broken heart, and after all Legolas has been through, he has to be pushing it… poor elf.
I wonder if Thranduil has any true friends? I wonder if Legolas’s Father distanced himself from everyone for some reason or other? Perhaps Thranduil did the same as Ellrohir – offending to protect his friends? Mirkwood is very dangerous, perhaps he feared people visiting?
Oooh, was Thranduil the true love then? That would explain a lot. Such a shame that Royalty end up in marriages of convenience because they have bloodlines to continue and duties to so many people…
I wonder if Elrond is aware that Elladan stole the letter and parcel? (I hope there was no food in that package! His room will smell awful!). Elrond is rather sneaky sometimes, and this might just be one such occasion.
And Elladan is made to be more of an enemy by withholding something of Legolas’s Mother’s from him… stupid elf.
Author's Response: I laughed when I read the “stupid elf” comment. Elladan is making a lot of mistakes… poor guy. At long last – Legolas cries. BTW – more to come on the whole Thranduil and Elrond falling-out-of-friendship drama.
Legolas is too polite to say anything! I bet that they’d tell him if he asked and not be offended!
I was close, but not close enough – Elrond and Thranduil fought over the same woman! I can see how that would cause a huge rift.
Oh dear, he’s babysitting… and probably going to have to defend her honour too!
Author's Response: Yup, you’re right. Tialise isn’t very bright sometimes.