This was fun. The Hobbits think he had foresight! Haha! That'll make interesting conversations in the future.
I liked the description "just shrugged a dog shrug." I've not known many dogs but I can see what you mean. : )
Good job at placing Shawn in the battle, trying to protect the Hobbits and stop Frodo from putting on the Ring. He'll be kicking himself for not remembering sooner. I suppose he will feel a little guilty. It makes me wonder what else he may not remember... and will he remember before it is too late again?
-Kitt : )
Again Shawn’s grief is convincingly written.
Glorfindel and Aragorn were wonderfully in-character. I find it hard to keep them from talking too modernly, but you’re getting their voices down pat. I liked Aragorn’s line: “we can only learn from mistakes if we make them”. And then he tried to put the blame on himself; really, I could just see him doing that. Very well done!
So Max is a German shepherd? All the better! That’s my favorite breed. IF I had a dog it would be a German shepherd mix.
“He looked more impressive in person than he did in the movie.” – I’ll bet. I think if I saw Elrond I’d pass out…
That really is too bad the staff broke, since Fletcher did give it to him. Hm, I'd like to see how he is at sword-fighting, if he takes up Aragorn's offer.
Good chapter! I'm curious to know how the Council will go.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Glad you liked it Kit You know you are the only one who has been reviewing my story so far. Wait till chapter 7, you are going to be surprised by Shawn's next weapons, yep I said it in plural form, two weapons. Thanks for your Review. Cunedain Ranger of the North
Oh, I didn’t expect he’d get two axes. It’s clever they’re made from his staff – so I guess that means he still has Fletcher’s gift, and more beside. I’m fond of Gimli and Gloin, so I enjoyed their part.
Ha! Shawn tried to strangle Boromir. I suppose it *would* be hard to hold back, knowing what he does. Really, that is wise to not have everyone know his past… now that would throw things out of balance!
I like that Shawn and Frodo shared that look before Frodo made his decision.
Wonderful! Max is included as a companion (a role Bill the Pony does not share, alas). I look forward to more. : )
Author's Response: Just wait for the ninth chapter when they go through Moria it will surprise you even more. But first we have to get there in chapter eight Thanks for the review Dunedain Ranger of the North
And Happy New Year to you!
Hah! I enjoyed particularly the first scene. Gimli is *very* Gimli. His mode of speech is written well.
I did not think Shawn could long hide his secret from Legolas. I liked their budding friendship.
Does Frodo guess more about Shawn than he is letting on? Well, it’s good Shawn is not trying to make all his decisions, that he is giving Frodo space to grow. In Shawn’s place, I think I’d be tempted to be a *little* bossy. : )
“After yelling at Pippin for being himself…” – I like that line. Too true.
Author's Response: Thanks Next comes Moria and so on and so forth Thabks again Dunedain Ranger of the North
I like the fighting team of Boromir and Max. And I am glad Shawn and Boromir made up.
“The elf turned toward the boy with a huge smile” – had to grin at that; I like imagining a hugely smiling Legolas.
But not Max!!! Yes, I am sad (not quite mad at you, though : )). Yet on the other hand it seemed to seal Boromir and Shawn’s new friendship.
Really, I thought this chapter was beautiful: How Shawn dealt with it, the interaction of the other Fellowship members, and Galadriel’s comfort (which I liked especially).
“He is too young to be burdened with the power of foresight, he knows what is to happen and that is too much for one so young” – now that sounds very like Legolas of the books and I am impressed how well you have his voice down.
You say Max will return? *gleeful* I cannot wait to see how… a special grace of the Valar…?
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Kit, think of when Gandalf the white comes...that is all I am going to tell you about that. But trust me he will be back, you will also be surprised a bit by him for he will be a little different D.R.O.T.N. (Dunedain ranger of the North)
I guess the Rohirrim would not take to Goldenfang well... understandable but I hope it does not result in any bloodshed (with Gimli around, who can tell).
Goldenfang certainly has the right to be nervous. Old habits can be hard to break (i.e. eating people)... yet with his friend's help, Fang should be able to transfer into his new life well.
I liked Sil and Shawn's talk on the wall.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Wait till next chapter, you will like it. But I must tell you now, when you get to the second part of the Battle of Helm's Deep, its short and I jumped around a bit to much! i will rewrite it some other time. Thanks for the Review! D.R.O.T.N.
I missed Halbarad sorely from the movie! An you've probably guessed... I'm overjoyed by Fletcher's arrival. More like ecstatic! Or bounce-off the walls happy! The whole scene was touching. Fletcher's a best friend and father rolled into one. Gimli's got to be right in saying Shawn now can be happy.
And yes I do read responses - one of my satisfactions out of reviewling is keeping in touch with authors.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, I always try to put as much emotion as I can describe in my stories! I keep wanting to start a third story but, I am afraid I won't be able to finish the first two that I wrote. What should I do, write the third or not? Anyways thanks for the review D.R.O.T.N.
“Narmo!” laughed Gandalf, “A clue will be right under the enemies nose, and they will not see it!” - That is Gandalf all over. *shakes head* Never goes a day without thinking how he's going to pull a fast one on the Enemy...
I really, really liked Fletcher's protectiveness of Shawn. They are so sweet together!
Yay, Fang’s a stallion! I shouldn’t laugh, but that Fang can’t eat meat anymore is kind of funny. Poor wolf! And good old Max is his old self.
The end was intense, just walking out on the steward like that. Oh, but Shawn really DOES understand what Denethor is going through; will Denethor ever find that out? I hope they'll have a chance to talk to each other.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Yah, well, I couldn't think of a better name to give Fang as a stallion, I tried to look up the translation for golden One, but nothing came of it! So 'wolf' was better than nothing(and I thought it would be a good joke to have Fang be called wolf when he is a horse) Yah, of course Fletcher would be protective of Shawn, I mean just earlier he had became his new father! I am not going to say anything about Denethor talking to Shawn! Thanks for reading! Dune
I read the first chapter. You have my sympathy. I haven’t lost a grandfather, though the autumn and winter was full of close calls. I’m not a great consoler, but I know that it is tough, and I am impressed by your commitment in that time to writing. When my cat died, I felt utterly bottled up till I wrote, and I wrote like crazy and… that seemed to help. I hope you’re doing alright.
Katie, eh? That’s my name when I’m not Kitt. : ) Seriously, I am very fond of cocker spaniels. They have very compassionate eyes.
Now, on the latest chapter… So Shawn’s in charge of men; a moment for him to shine or fall (but I think he’s doing good so far). I should have suspected that Denethor would send him on a death mission! I like it when a “Thom” actually does have a twin. Silent is Michael is cool. Is there a special reason behind their Hebrew-ish names?
And no, you’re not pestering me! I like the distraction from essay writing and problem solving. Though I’ve taken courses here and there before, this is my first full semester in college. Freetime is scarcer and that’s taking some getting used to. I did, however, just finish a poem I had to write before Friday. Finally I can write fanfiction!: D
And God bless you, Dune!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Well met, Kitt, and don't worry I am dealing with my grandfather's death really well. I didn't know they were hebrew names, I just made them up! I am looking forward to your story and I am adding chapter 23 to the story now so please be ready. Dune
Faramir and Shawn worked well together. Very like Faramir to "stand by his oath" though only he recalls it.
Yay! Anything to make Fletcher happy! Of course I'm glad that Shawn and his men came out alright - that in Denethor's face.
I shouldn't be so hard on Denethor. There's a big difference between his movie and book versions. At least in the book he had the Palantir, which explained his suicidal madness to a degree. Will you be combining the book and movie Denethors? *imagines a mutated, slimy Frankenstein-ish Steward... ew, where'd that come from?* : )
Author's Response: Don't know, maybe! I will have to see when I get there. So, how is your story coming along? Just thought I would ask! Thanks again! Dune
Oo, Denethor really is crazy (and nasssty, gollum, gollum!) In Shawn's place, I would have done more than just slam the doors. Rrr, I'd have... done something I'd regret later. *lets out breath*
Well, so - wonderful that Shawn has such loyal friends! They got to have a strong trust already to believe his story. I like Michael's words: few but each packed with meaning.
Very emotional, no kidding. I always need a tissue box handy reading/watching RotK and this is no different. *blows nose*
I hadn't been counting on him to leave the city. But now... *clapping* Fletcher's in for a surprise! Yay!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I will try to add more! Dune
"he would always be, as long as Merry was there to comfort him."
- A perfect ending. It's always so hard to end short stories, but you always do it brilliantly.
I've heard writing a scene from several POVs is a good exercise, so if you've the urge to write from Pip's, go for it! It would be a good contrast for Pip to comfort the "so much more mature" Merry from a fear (like, uh, squirrels? :P).
Altogether, another cute display of their affection!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Hehe! Squirrels! I'm trying to think of a good but not too silly fear for Merry, and may write from other people's POVs. I hope that you enjoyed reading my stories!
I've got 2, 3, 6, 11 and 13-17. Yay! I'm a freak! Thanks for sharing this. : )
Author's Response: Yay! I'm a freak too! I think most of the reasons apply to me (I can't really remember; I think I have short term memory loss or something). Anyways, thanks for reviewing! Glad you liked it.
I always DID wonder about the name. I've liked meerkats too since The Lion King (though personally I still prefer otters : )) And Alex is a cute name; and one can always say it is short for something illustrious like Alexandria. *g*
Author's Response: Ah-ha. I love meerkats but Timone is one of favourites, although I think that Hobbits are cuter! Thanks for reviewing!
I've been meaning to read all week; spring break didn't give me near as much "free time" as I hoped it would...
I'd almost put this chapter in a horror genre. Kevroar's murderous rampage was worthy of the most sadistic zombie, Those townspeople weren't dumb, any way, not trusting him. It's just sad that their act of kindness to him got them killed.
I was almost forgetting about the gnomes. What'll they do when they catch up? Very good question. I don't want them to have to kill all the Hunters either.
Author's Response: yup, that is a good question :) youll just have to read on and find out :)
This is almost like The Hobbit, yet different, in a good way. It’s got a lovely fantasy ring to it and it’s very original. I particularly love the names. All the characters are fascinating. “door opened merrily” is a line I especially liked.
I want to know more about Ricgretor and the rest! I will continue to read as free time comes to me. : )
Author's Response: True.. but as the story goes on you will see that it changes..
I always like scenes with the Elves, though this one was very solemn. Hobbits burned from their homes is just so... wrong. Tragedy is not something I usually associate Hobbits with.
Very bad situation, being joined up by an Orc! Sitting on an Orc's back is one of the last things I'd want to do... just imagine the smell. Oh, this just makes the gnomes' lives more difficult, doesn't it?
Author's Response: The gnomes chose to go down that path lol. its his fault that the orc caught him.
Exciding chapter! The Candera were creepy and the jump over the crack part... I was as nervous as the hobbits could have been. Jumping over pit without seeing where you're jumping to is simply nightmarish!
The inn made a stark contrast after being underground, like they just emerged into a whole new world.
I cannot wait to see this Elven city and how their new guides will lead them to it.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Thanks kitt :) the candera are my own creation and have some other parts to play in the story :) so watch out for them :)
Packed chapter! I need to think for a moment to soak it in.
Hmm. So, I surely wasn't pleased those guys decided to surrender to Grafalcon. Probably a stupid move in the long run.
I was shocked by how Graendithas was impaling people left and right. Err, I guess he's a little frustrated with the king right now?
All this talk about needing food makes me... *gasp! Oh no!* ...hungry.
Yes!!! The Elves are back! They just have to be able to hold the men back! They're cool, after all. I can suffer a little hunger for that. :D
Author's Response: yup :) elves are here to save the day.. and it was the mayor and not the king.. we havent seen the king yet :)
Yeah, I know, the wizard can't be hasty trusting people... this is why I would never be asked to lead an epic save-the-world quest. : P
It was almost eerie when the hunters saw the village because for a while the two stories, one of the hunters, the other of the townsmen, had been kind of distant from each other. (That's not bad of course; I like a multi-layered story!)
*sighs in relief* So they escaped from danger again, and... *squeals excitedly* They're getting closer to the diamond!!!
And it's sure to get ever more dangerous! Yay!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: yup :) escaped again.. and the diamond is very very close :D