You’re right; I was shocked!
What I like most is the parallel between Scratt and John’s lives – both once slaves, both “different” from the rest of those who are “good”.
I do like Scratt; he makes me somehow cheerful like in Redwall, when one the rats or ferrets turns out to be nice.
I have a suggestion: instead of right away explaining he is good, first let him seem as gritty any other goblin. That’ll add suspense. The reader will not know that Scratt is any different till he sees Scratt is actually trying to help John, then the reader will judge for himself that Scratt is good and wonder why… Then that’s when the flashback would come in.
Gandalf’s gift’s were cool. Will the goblin speech come in handy? Elrond’s reaction to his guests was to be expected but still I was shocked by his - understandable – outrage. Seems even Elrond can still learn something: do not be too quick to judge!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: I am glad you like Scratt. And yes the goblin speech will be useful, because Mor will then be able to understand what any goblin says. Scratt will play a big role somewhere in the story, I have a good idea, but I don't want to spill the beans, so to speak! i will try to update my other stories soon, so please keep reading! D.R.O.T.N. P.S.: I really like your name, Kitt Otter, did you get that name from Redwall?
Yeah, odd, so Scratt doesn't feel the ring's power at all? Just before he mentioned it I was thinking about it.
Scratt is right to teach Frodo some swordsmanship!
Hehe, friction between the Dwarf and Goblin. I'm dreading too his next meeting with his kind. It sounds as though it will be Not Pretty.
*nods* I bet Morion would be cold after being born and raised in the warm South.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: I had to add some tension in the story. So, um, sorry to nag, but when are you going to place your second chapter. (Smiles weakly) hey I said I was sorry about nagging ok! Hey thanks for encouraging Ar-feiniel, to do the challenge. I will try to keep updating my stories when I find the time, so please keep looking! Thanks, Dune
Scratt’s sniffing added a lot of tension to the scene. If that had been in the movie, I'd have been biting my nails; even just the approaching ripples in the lake could not compare to Scratt's certain knowledge of danger.
Oh, that’s very practical! It had crossed my mind that in a battle Scratt might by accident loose a limb from Anduril or Glamdring. Yes, most goblins would avoid like poison a dwarvishly adorned helm. Wait a minute, goblins like poison, so they’d avoid it like… flowers! Better comparison.
“Nay, Scratt, I still despise you, I just think better of you now than before” – Now that’s the Gimli I love! Gruff to the core, never frankly reveals his emotions.
That’s good they’ve learned something about Scratt’s sense of smell… but will they learn to make use of it before it is too late? The next chapter, I expect, will be tense, with the goblins and all. *eager grin*
Author's Response: Just wait and see! wait and see! Dune
I like the chapter's title. Very explicit!
A goblin with tears in his eyes - almost an oxymoron, but the image is a beautiful one.
So Scratt was able to stand up to his kind again! You know, I think it would be interesting if he could have a long interview with another goblin in a later chapter, like a discussion of orcish philosophy. (Wow, orcs + philosophy is weird.) : D
Author's Response: Glad you liked it Kitt, Thanks for the Review! I just Might do that! Dune
Inspiration seems to be treating you well!
I do love the calvary, in part because I have a softspot for JEB… though I admit, I really don’t know much about the Union calvary.
Liked their different reactions to nervousness.
Oooh. Owe. Painful way to die. It *looks* worse than being shot, but I assume it’s quicker than wasting away from a bullet wound.
Seriously, you are getting better and better with your descriptions. And YES, you know how to write something touching, I admire that a lot! That was a tough thing to break to them, that they’ll never see their families again.
I'm about done with the first chapter for your challenge... but I must warn you again, it's ridiculous. : )
Author's Response: I am glad you like this new story. And I still can't wait to read your story! chapter two is up as well for Riders of Arnor! D.R.O.T.N.
I don’t mind being nagged! : ) I hope to have more fanfiction time this weekend but I must finish homework I’ve, uh, been neglecting.
Hey, cool bio picture! Did you draw it? It took me months to figure out how to get my picture up… (hmm, and we’re supposed to be the Digital Generation.)
Surprising revelation about Henry and Josh! That’s like when ‘Lawrence’ scolded Tom for, you know, calling him Lawrence. Very wise: you shouldn’t be choosing favorites in a group of men, all ready to die for you.
Now splitting up is a good idea. I thought they might be a little conspicuous all together.
“Merry and Pippin both nodded as if they understood” – *laughs* Even I get confused, between Scots and Irish I mean. You’ve got the accent down. I can almost do it… but it doesn’t come easy.
I like to see them all with distinct personalities, even the horses. Their bantering is fun. But of all of them I especially adore quiet Mac. His song was… beyond moving.
*squeaks* Well, shooting an arrow at them IS one way to get their attentions. *whispers aside* Boys…
Worried about Josh. Being thrown into a rock by a Wraith is not, to say the least, healthy.
Author's Response: Well my roommate has a Scotch-Irish heritage, so he was my inspiration for Mac. I didn't realize that I was making a "Lawrence" example, I should have known that. Glad you liked this chapter. Can't wait for your next chapter! Dune
Hehe, Arwen's fiesty!
I like that: it's not Glorfindel, nor Arwen, it's Tom (and let's not forget Nightshade) who make the flight to Rivendell.
I hope there's no lasting damage to Josh, like, uh Morgul bruises. Seriously, I was very happy to see him up. *grinning*
Hopefully Tom can take it easy now... oh *choking back yawn* he's making me tired, though. : )
Author's Response: Well I would imagine chasing horses for many miles, you would be tired to! And also not to mention that, not getting a wink of sleep in 10 hours, I mean he would have fallen off of the horse sooner or latter! Thanks for the review! Dune
"while Mac cracked his knuckles." - I thought that was kinda funny, really. *claps hands excidedly* A fist fight in the Council! Yeah! Oh, why'd they have to hold Tom back... *pouts*
13 companions! Sounds a little unlucky. Perhaps they could use Bilbo to be the Lucky Number again! Ok, so that may not work... :D
Author's Response: I am not that suspicious so thirteen companions is ok with me! Glad you liked this chapter! Dune
This was beautiful. I can't begin to express how, exactly, but I see you put your whole heart into it. : )
Author's Response: Yes, I did. Thanks for reviewing it - I tried really hard on trying to get it right! meerkatalex
This was wonderful in its own way, like its companion poem. Precisely how I feel about my mom. How can we ever really appreciate all they do - birthing, raising, worrying, loving us?
I'm truly touched by this. *sniffle*
Author's Response: I hope that I worded it right, and I'm glad it touched you. I was trying so hard to put it in words that were right and grateful enough. Thank you for reviewing! meerkatalex
I was wondering! I had thought it sounded like Aradhel, but I then I thought with the Ar- it was Numenoric.
Maeglin *is* such an ungrateful little jerk, isn't he? I really like Aradhel too. Some say Tolkien never made strong female characters, and I'm like, nuh-uh!!! Every one of his female characters was strong: Galadriel, Lobelia, Shelob, on and on... But Aradhel's still one of the best.
You didn't tell Maedhros about Marilla Vanilla, did you? And DON'T tell Ulmo; he'll never get over it. (I won't tell.)
My name, Catherine is supposed to be Greek too. I never looked up what "pure" is supposed to be in Elvish. (Anyone except a teacher who calls me that must die. *Realizes sink is on. Turns around to see Lord of Wates dripping over shoulder. Slam of fishy-breath: "Catherine? Catherine! HOHOHOHO!" Ugh.* )
Really, I always thought "Fei" was a very cool nickname because it's so fun to say "Hi Fei!"
Uh, hi Fei!!!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: I know, right! I’d slap Maeglin if I could. He has too much of his Daddy in him. *Shakes head sadly* Such a pity for Aredhel. No, I didn’t tell Maedhros about Marilla Vanilla. We haven’t been talking to each other lately. We’ve been fighting a lot. *Shrugs* Drama, drama, drama. Catherine = Manwathiel in Elvish. That sounds a lot better than Marilla. Actually, now that I think of it, Marilla kinda sounds Italian. Well, if you try to say it with an Italian accent. Which, I am terrible at. I’ll get Van to say it with the accent. That should be amusing. (Oh, you know what Ulmo? *Scowls at the laughing Vala, and then exchanges a mischievous look with Kitt. Kitt tries unsuccessfully to repress a smile. Fei’s scowl turns into a smirk when she runs to closet down the hall. Ulmo shrugs in her absence then throws his head back and chuckles so hard that Kitt falls out of her chair. Fei now returns with a The Ghost Busters Vacuum-cleaner thingy. “Suck on this Lord of the Waters!” Fei exclaims, flipping the “On” switch. The Vala that once swallowed Cirdan is now swallowed by Fei’s Vacuum-cleaner thingy, but before he is gone completely he growls, “I’ll get my comeuppance on you, Marilla Vanilla and Catherine!” Fei and Kitt’s eyes widen as they exchange a worried look*) Kitt’s fun to say, “Hey Kitt!” to… Hey Kitt! Danke!!
Fun answer to your own challenge! Hmm, don’t we all wish to find websites like that?
Whew, that’s weird having sudden memories of - what can they be called? – not-real-memories. That’s original that he didn’t just APPEAR in Middle-earth, but that he had an actual other life there that he’s only just recalled.
Mark is hugably-squeasably cute! *sappy grin. smacks self. ahem* And Gimli’s cool!!! How many modern-day people are ever found by that (wonderful) Dwarf?
I’ve a cat named Mith, short for Mithien – grey-lady, though in practice she’s Mimi. I don’t think Mark would appreciate THAT nickname.
I look forward to Mith and Gimli's adventures!
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, Kitt! I am also adding chapter 2 tonight as well so hope you can read it soon! God Bless, Dune
Seeing Gimli so sentimental is something different. But it’s so sweet. Hmm, Gimli + cute is almost abnormal… : )
I’m almost waiting for Gimli to send Mith after Legolas. Hehe… *imagines Legolas running up a tree, screaming like a girl, Mith at his heels*
In Mith’s place I’d probably yawn too. I’m sure almost everyone on this site can honestly say they’ve watched the movies enough to be able to recite the Council word-for-word. (But isn’t reciting it so much fun? : ) )
Interesting that he cannot remember his life before becoming a wolf. I hate when I just can’t remember something I ought to; (makes me want to tear at my brain) I can relate to Mith’s frustration!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it Kitt, I may add another chapter tonight or tomorrow morning! Thanks for the review! Dune
Hey, Gandalf's an.... internet wizard! I really liked him here. He was so kindly and, well, wise. And yes, to Aragorn, he'd be doing his riddle-speech! *sighs* Gandalf just doesn't realize people can't understand half of what he says. Of course, he could just be talking out loud. : )
I thinks that's cool that Legolas is softened toward Gimli by seeing his relationship with Mith.
That really is scary that Mith's memories are real! But that makes this story very, very interesting. *high five*
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted to put something in there that would confuse some people. I am glad you liked it! But Gandalf is not an Internet geek, he just knows what the website is (Hint: remember he did say Valar) Riddle me this, riddle me that, that is usually Gandalf's way(laughs) Thanks for the review! (High fives Kitt, but she slaps his hand to hard) YEEOOWWCH! not so hard, (smiles and laughs) just kidding, thanks again! :) Dune
Ah! Frightening: more memories! Sam’s not the only whose going to cry if those keep up. It really is so sad!
Interesting that Mith knew Balin. I enjoyed Frodo and Sam’s teasing. *laughs* Sam is right, though, Mith is acting like an overgrown puppy. :D
So, what is Gandalf’s secret plan? It’s suspenseful; you just can never tell what he’s up to. *pouts thoughtfully* I give up. I can’t guess.
-Kitt : )
Author's Response: Well what do you expect, here in Middle earth, Mith is only 5 years old! But when it comes to fighting, well, you will have to wait and see! Gandalf always has something on his mind, this one is actually pretty simple, (Hint: What are all of Mith's memories about?) Think about that and then think about what Gandalf could do to make Mith feel more at home in Middle Earth. I will leave you at that! Thanks for reading. The next chapter should be up soon( I am working on it right now). Farewell! Dune
I don't mind short chapters. : )
You had be scared for a minute when Mith was buried in the snow. I like mountains, but avalanches just freak me out. *shivers*
I can picture poor Mith, cold and miserable... makes me want to give him a... big hug! *dodges Gimli's iceballs "Stay away from my wolf, you fangirl lunatic!"
Kitt starts waving white flag "Alright! I give up! Can't I at least give him a pat?"
Gimli grumbles, considering.
"I'll give you, uh, Galadriel's comb!"
Gimli squeals: "Done!"
Kitt pats Mith's scratchy-spot. "Hehe. (I don't have access to Galadriel's hair utensiles, after all.)"*
Author's Response: (Snickers) Shhh, don't let Gimli hear you say that! But I am glad that you liked this chapter and even though I wrote it, I really wanted to help Mith myself, YEEOOWWCH! (Glares at Gimli) what was that for? "For talking about my wolf like he is yours!"(I laugh) Uh, Gimli, he relly is mine, this is MY story and all! Wait what are you doing? put that ax down! Hey come on let's not be hasty! (ducks under a swing) Oh, crap! (Turns and runs away with an ax wielding Gimli chasing him). (Turns and shuts back to Kitt) Glad you reviewed Kitt, but I've got to run! OOWW! Gimli watch it! Dune
I really liked the first part. We got to see Frodo, Sam, Legolas talking; I thought it was well done. Sam's relationship with Mith is sweet - well, his with Gimli is too, but Sam's is in a, equal yet different way. : D
I'm curious about how Mith will get along in the Mines. I'm just thinking about in the Books where Tolkien describes deep trenches they had to jump over. *shivers* Scary stuff. But then Mith is a wolf... he'll probably have an easier time of it than any of the Hobbits.
Author's Response: Yes he probably would have an easier time in the mines than the others. I am glad that you like his friendship with Sam. How are you liking Friends Till the End, my Redwall fan Fiction? thanks for the review! Dune
Ooh, scary female voice! I liked this image you gave us of the empty room with the book's pages "waving in an invisible breeze."
Interesting you make the point that Gandalf and Frodo look waaay different from their movie counterparts.
I'm in suspense to know what animal Alex turns into. : )
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing - I made that point as the story will run along movie and book verse - Arwen will not rescue Frodo, Glorfindel will. I don't like it that they changed that in the movies. Oh, by the way, despite what some people will think, (*points to anonymous person, glaring,*) Alex will not turn into a meerkat, and he is not based on me! Keep reading and reviewing, please! Thanks again, meerkatalex
*laughs histerically* A lemur!!!
I liked how Alex gave Sam the fright of his life! Seems to have completely wrecked Sam's spying plan, though.
I wonder how you can keep yourself dignified with a lemur on your head? This is wonderful! :D
Author's Response: It did wreck Sam's spying plan, teehee. Anyway, just to tell you that Legolas does not manage to keep himself dignified with a lemur on his head. ;-) Please keep reviewing, Kitt! Thanks! meerkatalex
That's true. I feel a secret shame in fanfiction and I don't know why. It's a giant chunk in my life, after all. What you both said about fanfiction being like a training ground is just one of the many things I find apealing about it. There shouldn't be shame. Hmm. Err. I know, we should declare an out of the closet fanfiction writers day! All fanficion writers should go out into the streets and shout out what they do. Yeah! Ok, maybe not. But I HAVE been encouraged by this. Next time someone asks what I'm doing all the time online, I'm going to (try to) say it and proudly. Hah!
Thanks to both of you for putting out your thoughts. : )