Oooo. This is great! I don’t think you should polish it, either, it’s incredible the way it is. I think you did a very good job with exploring the thoughts that would go through Aragorn’s mind after fighting in so many battles, and ending so many lives. This may be “raw”, but it is powerful and deep with emotion. Excellent job with portraying Legolas and I love that description of his eyes. I also like your portrayal of Legolas’ relationship with Aragorn (I so want in on that hug). Overall, absolutely beautiful. *Clapping*
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you!! It's been long since I wrote that piece and it embarrasses me to read it, but am I glad to hear you enjoyed it so! ;)
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful poem. Great job!
Whoa. Random... but a good random, I assure you. I wonder what will happen in later chapters. Alright, if we have Sirius, Sparrow, n’ Aragorn, then aren’t we missing Skywalker, Spock, and Wolverine? If they join the party, then we’ll have all the fantasy genres together! HA! Get it?!
I really like this idea. It is a very interesting concept and I really hope that you continue with it. I really like your character's thought shots and general attitude. Very nice work. Please continue with it!
Aw, this is so cute. Is Lalaith, the Lalaith from the Children of Hurin? Because, if it is, then Hurin is totally the father… if it’s not… oh well. This reminds me of the things I used to tell my sister. Le hannon for posting it!
Oh, and I am in the middle of reading Council of Deception and I absolutely love it! It is so darkly brilliant! I feel so bad for Faramir and Aragorn. I love your portrayal of everyone and the Shadow-men are awesome. I also really like Faramir and Aragorn’s relationship – especially when Faramir pulled Aragorn into the River. I loved that! Keep up the GREAT work!
Author's Response: Aw! thanks so much! glad you liked the story! I'm not telling if Lalaith is the same as in Children of Hurin, just because it makes it more fun for me when people try and guess. lol. I actually wrote this story for my little sis when she was sick and didn't want to take her medicine. (might have mentioned that already but oh well.)Your welcome for posting it, lol. Really glad you liked it! Also glad you like Council of Deception! Thanks so much for the review! ~Hennie Elsilim
I love this story, very nice work!
Wow! Elrond and Thranduil-secret lovers?! I didn't see that one coming! I never would have guessed it. I mean, I knew something really bad must have happened since Thranduil was so angry at Elrond, but I thought it was a really bad argument or something. It makes perfect sense that they secretly liked each other, though.
Valar, I love being taken my surprize. Good job. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind review. I’m glad you were surprised. Yeah… there’s nothing worse than a scorned lover… especially a scorned king! LOL! I hope you enjoy the next chapter. McKenna
Aw, the story is over. No! I *almost* feel bad that Thranduil and Elrond just stayed friends. Then again, if they hadn’t well… things would get a bit weird. I loved the joining hands thing when Thranduil gave Elladan and Legolas his blessing. BEAUTIFUL ending!! I really liked this story and I’m sad that it’s over! Very, very good job McKenna! I will look forward to future stories by you. : )
This is amazing Linorien! I love the part where Aragorn is laughing, as Gandalf is writing.
I was laughing along with Aragorn.
Me: *Laughs wildly* Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha!!
Aragorn: Ha… ha… ha… It’s not funny anymore. You ruined it, Fei.
I really like how you portrayed Gandalf, I thought this was going to be hard to read (you know, Maia and all) but I really liked how it was accurate as well as humoress (I think I made up a new word). *Laughs* I loved the “7 reasons”. I wonder what jokes Merry and Pippin are playing… ? *Grins evilly* “(I hope no one notices my uncanny impression of the Nazgul!)” – I love this line… I never picked up on that! Really, really great job, Linorien!
Balain na le,
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed that part. There is indeed a reason that part gets the honor of beeing the chapter title. And I'm happy you picked up on Nazgul impressions. Balain na le!
Hilariously silly! I LOVED it! I can’t say what the best part is because it was all so funny! But if I had to pick my absolute favorite parts they would be Aragorn’s “Gandalf died :(” text message, Thranduil’s many texts to Legolas, Boromir complaints on getting a new phone, Aragorn texting Legolas when he is standing next to him, “Stupid spammers!” and Pippin’s text “Hello? Where u@? R u there? ANSWER ME!! I got a great laugh by this! Very nice work! Please continue!
Author's Response: I definately will! Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it! :D
Hilarious! Please do more!
Nice story so far. I love how you have a story where vampires come to Middle-Earth. Interesting and creative. lol, Aragorn and his anti-climatic-ness(if that's a word) when Legolas tries to kiss Annabeth, nice going. :P I look forward to reading more...
You know, after reading this...I got this....* Gulps *
I can't believe I'm saying
* Looks down at chest where heart should be *
And I thought it was all cobwebs...
Cute story, though.
Author's Response: Thanks!!!
Poor Orlando. Nice cliffhanger! I think this is an interesting idea. I like how you have it where Orlando’s sickness is never mentioned (Unless it is; is it?) and he that is forbidden from the outside world. It makes him more tempting to talk to and get to know. I like how you portrayed Viggo and Sean, very nice. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you're liking it. Orlando is actually not ill anymore during the events of this story. But his childhood illness will be talked about a bit more in future chapters.
Okay, why do I have a sudden urge to write a poem now? I am terrible at writing poems. Oh well, guess that is what happens when I read a poem that is utterly beautiful and well written. Great job. Fogive me for asking, but what is/are "the trenches"?
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, I’m really glad you enjoyed it. That’s always good to know! During World War 1, the soldiers lived and fought in trenches in France. These were like very long holes in the ground (terrible description, but I can’t think of how else to put it!) and were often in very poor condition. You can still visit them if you go to France or Belgium, I think. I went last year and it was so moving I had to write about it. Thanks for reviewing!
This is the time of day where I slap my forehead and exclaim, “Silly Fei! Trix are for Hobbits!” Uh…sorry about that; that was very random of me…
Thank you for explaining the trenches. I knew what there were I just didn’t know what they were called.
Author's Response: It's ok. Thanks again for reviewing. If you liked this poem, I've written a few more, you can have a look at them if you want to!
I loved it! So pretty! I like the italic/non-italic effect. It adds more epic-ness (Hey! I made up a new word!) to it.
Author's Response: Great new word! Thanks, it was to show the personal effects of the eathquake on the girl, and the geographial effects at the same time. Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Is Lego gonna split or are they
gonna make up??
Denothor is EVIL!!
Never liked that man, either.
Nice chapter, though. :)
So far I like it. :)
Is her mystery partner, Legolas??
Author's Response: Maybe... ;D
Decode,like that song too.
Great chapter, love the diologue.
Can't wait for the next!