I love this story. It's a truly beautiful, sensitive take on the OC -lover-for-Legolas idea. Your use of language is excellent - you've got a real gift for painting pictures with words, and the relationship betwen Ro and Legolas is realistically developed...and so romantic. Plus you write damn good sex ;p
One tiny, slightly negative comment, something I picked up on a few times during the story. I'm not sure how to explain it, so I'll use an example from your first chapter:
Eowyn lifted her head. Her tears already dry.
If someone knows better then please correct me, but I think this should be:
Eowyn lifted her head, her tears already dry.
I'm pretty sure the two phrases should be linked together in one sentence, as the second phrase has no verb.
However, it doesn't particularly detract from the reading; in fact, I was addicted. I read it all in one night, then overslept the next day and missed one of my classes! I'm so glad you gave Legolas and Rowannen their happy ending and can't wait to read more about their life together. Hannon le for a very enjoyable few hours gaping at my computer screen!!
What a beautiful story - I enjoy Aragorn/Legolas slash, and yours is more in keeping with canon than any other I've read. Also, your use of language is gorgeous - so poetic! - and your structure is flawless. I really enjoyed this, so thank you!
I can't believe that nobody has reviewed this. It's beautiful. I have a lump in my throat.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad it was able to touch you. It didn't take very long to write...I guess sometimes just picking up the pen is the way to go. A pity the formatting seems to be a bit buggered on this site though...I should go through and clean it up sometime.
Thanks for the review!
Fabulous. Gollum/Smeagol is one of my favourite characters, yet when I try to write him I never seem to do him justice. I love seeing what other authors do with him, though, and I think your portrayal of him in his youth is just right. It's also a great little gap filler; I've wondered before about the "teaching his grandmother to suck eggs" line.
Hi Melanye...I stumbled across your story whilst nosying in other people's Favourites, and was surprised to see it hadn't got a review yet, so I thought I'd leave you some feedback.
You've set up the action very well - no messing about, straight into the story. Excellent. I also think you did a good job evoking the panic that would have gripped the elves at such a time, and you leave the chapter on a lovely juicy cliffhanger.
Has this story been abandoned? I know a lot of people get irritated with this kind of story - female members of the Fellowship, OC romances with canon characters etc. - but this has the potential to bring something a little different to the table, as long as you're careful not to let Laileth turn into a Mary-Sue. If you have given up on it, it might be worth giving it another shot. AU's can be great fun to read
Oops, I accidentally knocked the mouse before I'd finished typing and it clicked on "Submit."
Anyway, what I was going to say was, AU's can be great fun to read as long as they're properly thought through, and by the sounds of things, yours would be. I'd be interested to see what happens.
Aww that was lovely! You really captured the bond between all the fellowship.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm pleased that you liked the way I wrote about the Fellowship's bond with each other.
Hehe that was fun to read, some great comic touches...but there was a definite dark side there as well. I actually felt quite sad at the end and guilty that I'd been laughing! Well done, great job.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! This was one my first fan...poems (was about to write fanfiction there - oops). I appreciate the positive feedback and am so happy you had fun with it. I had heaps of fun writing it.
Very touching, the relationships between all three are beautifully handled.
Author's Response: Thanks -- these are some of my favorite characters
After reading (actually, I think "devouring" would be nearer the mark) "The Official Fanfiction University of Middle Earth," I thought I'd take a look at your other stories, and was pleasantly surprised to find this. I've always had a soft spot for Gimli, and it made a refreshing change to see a Gimli-Frodo friendship story; in fact, I don't recall ever finding any others. I thought it was a particularly interesting touch that Frodo was glad it wasn't Sam who followed him out of the feast - an unusual choice to make, but the right one, I think. This isn't the kind of conversation Frodo could have had with Sam.
Thank you for this lovely, bittersweet little fic, - you've captured Gimli and Frodo perfectly - and thank you for a very enjoyable few days spent at OFUM. I haven't started with "Urple Depths" as I liked the place where you left the original, and I also noticed that "Urple Depths" wasn't completed; I don't want to get attached to/obsessed with the story in the same way I did with "OFUM" only to be left agonising over how it might have ended. Any chance you might finish it off one day, or have you permanently abandoned it?
Nice, Merry - this fits exactly with how I'd imagine Merry to be feeling at this point. I like that the thoughts aren't quite coherent, and how very hobbit-like to end on a (fairly) positive note.
*Nitpick* - "probally" should be "probably."
Good job, though - keep it up.
"I think my readers need a break from the sheer horror."
Not so much from the horror as from the side-splitting laughter, jules14...
Author's Response: Well, I´m glad you thought it was funny. Thanks for the review.
Oh, ouch!! I identify completely, with both sides - for a very long time, I had an unrequited crush on my then-boyfriend's best friend (yes, I know, very bad). And I've also recently had to disappoint a friend of fifteen years who told me he was in love with me. Neither situation is easy to be in.
Aw no, poor Shadowfax! What an awful way for him to die after all he did in the War of the Ring! Great writing, though, Nazgrrl's spot on about your sentence structure. Well done.
Aww. That was really sweet. I liked the end especially - it's nice to think that such a little thing might have helped Frodo after all his trials. And Elanor was just so cute.
LOL aw poor Elrond...that reminds me of myself around exam time...
Author's Response: Argh, you have my sympathies. Thanks very much for the review. I really appreciate it.
Lovely. Absolutely lovely. You've captured their voices perfectly; I hope you post more soon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. ^^ And ... I rather hope to write more LotR soon. *crosses fingers*
I love this, it's sensitive and emotional without being maudlin, and fits perfectly into canon. Also think you've captured Arwen and Elrond's voices brilliantly. Beautiful.
Author's Response: Excellent. I'm glad you liked it.
"one would need to remember that the blind bald pup could grow into a great hunting hound, or the spindle legged foul one day grow into a strong stallion worthy of carrying Kings into battle" - I loved the imagery in that part! Very Rohirric. I really like the character of Brunhild as well, and her name fits right into the Rohirric culture, it sounds just perfect. I wonder if/when Beorn and Brunhild will find out who their new daughter truly is?
Awesome work, Anwyn; *hugs*!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am so glad to hear you like the imagery there, You write the Rohirrim incredibly well so it is so flattering to hear :) Well Beorn does know the child is proably the unwanted off spring of some nobilty as I do imagine it was so unheard if a noblewoman found herself not too conviently in a "Family Way" that she would go abroad for a few months until having her child and then coming back and the child would be given to someone though I think since Eomer personally is dealing with this Beorn would have his doubts while Brunhild is just so lovely and maternal that she would not care if the child had simply fallen out of the sky she would be so taken that she would love the baby no matter what...fortunately for that baby ;) Thanks Narya! :D *Hugs*
Awww yay, more brother-sister bonding! I like your OFC; even though we haven't seen much of her yet, she comes across as strong and loyal, but not in a super-cool-warrior-maiden-Mary-Sue--ish way. She just seems like a loving and grounded woman with a quiet kind of strength. I can't wait to read more about her.
Author's Response: Wooo, thank you, It is always a major relief to hear when someone likes my OFC becuase I am always so paranoid tof fall under the sue cloud which hangs over all female characters and that is just not right, It can be a real witch hunt sometimes! Do not worry, Anwyn will certainly make herself more vocal in the following chapters I wanted to ease her into the story at first but she will be in it more and more and yes she is quite strong and loyal but also stubborn to a fault, It proably all balances out somewhere ;) No, she is definately NOT warrior at all as from the beginning I refused to fall into that trap and while I imagine her having some knowledge of weapons and such it was more I can envison Rohirrim woman being responsible for helping clean weapons and mend armour and so on, but not use such things themselves. I always felt Eowyn being a Shieldmaiden was only really said in passing sometimes in the book and too many people seemed to take that as ALL Rohirrim women were trained how to use a sword and since she was raised in relatively peaceful times there would have been less and less need for such a thing. Thank you so much for another incredibly kind review, it honestly makes me so happy to know you are enjoying the story.