Oh, gosh, Anwyn! This is an exciting start to the challenge, I can't wait for more. I wonder if Victoria is dead or if she's in a coma or...well, I'll stop speculating, I don't want the surprise to be spoiled :-)
I never know what to think in cases like these, with an elderly person who lives alone with hundreds of animals; I think it's terrible, but I can't help wondering if they've just lost the plot, if they're mentally ill or something. A sad situation for all concerned.
Your description of the state of the animals was heartbreaking.
Am now on tenterhooks for the next installment!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Narya! I do my best to kick things off to an exciting start when I can and this is not going to be a terribly long story, I think, at the moment so I want to keep things rolling along. It breaks my heart when I hear about an old house filled with cats but the thing is that yes the person is usually mentally ill, It is really a form of hoarding but with live animals which is terrible and in the last few years I have seen way too many stories of houses full of cats and dogs and most have to be destroyed as they are just too sick or mentally damaged, It is horrible, abseloutely horrible what people do to animals and I feel punishment should be stricter....Victoria just happens to share my views on this ;) As that will play a major part in the upcoming story. I will have the next installment up soon with any luck, I have a few stories going on but since I feel like I have some momentum going on with this one I want to continue as I feel I have a good idea of where I am going to take it but just working out the 'How' part of things. Thanks so much for the Review! :)
*Snorts* spot on, Caller. Love it.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Actually, though this IS funny, there's a very poignant note to it too. I think it's that last line, "Not that it matters." Maybe it's just me reading too much into things, but that feels like quite a sad, bleak closing line. That's not a criticism; it's a good thing, as getting more than one emotion into so few words is not easy at all! Well done :-)
Author's Response: I see what you mean, the ending can be sad, but I intended for it to be sort of like a shrug after a thought. Aragorn thinks about running, and how he needs to bathe and then is like, "Meh, I'm a ranger, and I'm down-wind." Thanks for the review!
A silly little poem.
Agree with Kitt :-) just like Sam!
Author's Response: Yeah, he really hates Gollum, doesn't he?
"That fool of a Took"...mwahaha! Poor Pip. Lovely job again :-D
Author's Response: Thank you!
Oh wow. Very sad.
You've got such a strong sense of Boromir as a character; I'd love to see you write a ficlet or one-shot based around him. But then again I know you're extremely busy.
Anyway, well done on this, it's beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you! I will write a ficlet about him once I'm done with the other stories I currently have going.
LMAO, last line just killed me...awesome work!
Just to let you know, I'm now back at home so computer time is limited, but I will be in touch as often as possible.
Yeah, I laughed over that line while writing it. I love Gimli, he's such a great character. My favorite character overall is still Boromir, though!
I completely understand the limited computer issue. Good luck getting computer time, and I'll look forward to your emails when they come!
The story continues. Brandon journeys with the Three Hunters as they continue their long quest to free Middle-earth of Sauron. Will Brandon be able to shoulder the new burdens placed upon him? Please read and review!
"Cold like frozen clay"...what a perfect way to describe Wormtongue's eyes :)
Another great chapter, brimming with atmosphere, perfectly evoking Tolkien's Middle-earth while bringing your own unique perspective to the characters and events. Well done. More, please! :D
OoOoOh, that was an unexpected twist!! Poor Laura :-( had she really sensed Brandon or was is her imagination? Will they get to talk to him again? Guess I'll just have to keep reading.
Great work, as always :-)
No, she really sensed him. I don't know if I'm alone on this, but I believe that some bonds span across death, mother-and-child bonds especially. I feel sorrier for his father, who has lost his son and has to deal with the mental and emotional instability of his wife on top of everything.
I'll email some spoilers your way, if you want, regarding possible plot developments.
Thanks for the review!
*shudders* ugh, The Ring, I hated that film!
A short but powerful chapter; it was good to see the interaction between Legolas and Aragorn, and their concern for Brandon. Can't wait for the reunion with Gandalf :-D
I STILL get nightmares from that movie. When I have my glasses off or my contacts out and it's all dark...*shudders* so scary.
Yeah, this chapter was shorter than I wanted it to be. I try to keep all my chapters at least one-thousand words long. This one eluded me, but I'm glad it still packed a punch.
I can't wait for the reunion either. Brandon will be yanked back onto an emotional rollercoaster, poor guy, which will probably result in...
Oh, I'll let you read it for yourself when I post the newest chapter in a few days. :-P
Oh, wow, what a fantastic chapter! The language and imagery is gorgeous - "the magic of approaching dusk riddled with his senses" - and Brandon's hearbreak that it isn't Boromir who returned is agonising to read. I love the slightly subdued note you end the chapter on, too. It's hopeful, but sad as well.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked the chapter, even though this particular chapter felt strangely elusive. I wasn't able to fit my thousand-word quota again. :-(
My imagery has nothing on yours, so this is one of the best compliments I could've gotten! Thanks for the review! Hopefully there'll be time to post another chapter soon...school started today, ugh.
Oooh. Moody chapter ending.
I like Galadriel's words to Brandon - they feel highly appropriate, and totally in keeping both with canon and with the feel of your Middle-earth.
Will email later with more :)
Thanks! I spent a good half-hour typing and re-typing what Galadriel was going to say to Brandon. I tried to rhyme it like Aragorn and Legolas's messages, but it ended up sounding trite each time I did it.
Can't wait for your email!
Well, that was a short hiatus :p what was it, 24 hours?
LMAO. Nice. Really smooth, checking out a pregnant married woman!
Cool cliffie at the end; I await the healing of Theoden and the promised romance with baited breath!
As soon as I sent you the email, ideas hit me full force. Life is strange! Still have to figure out how Brandon meets her/what her name is/what she looks like.
Really smooth, checking out a pregnant married woman!
He really didn't notice until after she ran inside. Still, it's awkward, haha. She's most likely going to come back in the story, but not as love interest.
Healing of Theoden is on its way. Maybe after another "hiatus" lol.
This chapter is just full of win :) I've said it in the email, but I'll say it again - I LOVE the way Brandon's character development is essentially summed up in his speech to Theoden, it really shows how far he's come. I feel so attached to Brandon as a reader; I desperately want all this to turn out well for him, although I know there's a long way to go yet.
Great stuff, as always!
Nice touch with Thorostan there, and the observation that Hyld is a dead man's horse. Terrific last line, as well - your chapters always seem to end on the perfect note!
Oh gosh, I hope he's OK! Spoilers please, Caller (via email, of course - don't want anyone accidentally stumbling across them on the review threads). This was really well-written; I love the little details, like your observation that he'd need to hold his sword differently to fight on horseback. I also think that you've described the complex seething surge of emotions perfectly, shifting the balance between fear, anger and grief in all the right places. You create a real sense of chaos and confusion, especially after Brandon's been hurt.
The silence was even more agonizing than the noise. It sat heavily upon his shoulders, thick with the promise of slaughter. Brandon felt his hope dissolve in the tension. A keening howl cut through the stillness, followed by the hollow roar of battle.
Absolutely stunning. Powerful, claustrophobic imagery loaded with tension, perfectly phrased and rhythmically satisfying.
Another terrific chapter. Glad to see this updated.
An update well worth waiting for :) I liked your thoughts on the pain of injury outweighing glory in battle; it's an attitude I haven't come across in fanfic before. Your description of the dead was all the more harrowing because you refrained from sentimentality, and Brandon's situation seems to get bleaker all the time. Wonderful writing.
A couple of continuity points - Lynstan seems to become Lynhelm partway through the chapter. Also, it could just be because it's been a while between updates, but I'm not clear on the relationship between Dunnoth, Hilenna, Silwith, Thorostan etc. - who is sibling/cousin to whom? Hilenna is Silwith's daughter I think (I'd go back and check but then I'd lose my review :P ) but how are the others all related? Sorry!!
Author's Response: Thank you! Looking back, it is rather confusing, and I did my best to clear up who's related and who's not. I'll make it clearer in the next update, I promise! Fixed the name issue too...whoops! Again, thank you for finding these mistakes and letting me know! And the review was lovely. :)
Argh! An update! How did I miss this?
Short, but powerful. Poor Brandon - I hope he soon settles in to his new home. Your writing is wonderfully atmospheric, as ever. I wonder how the story is going to change now that he's away from Aragorn and Legolas and Gimli?
Aww, that was cute :) short and sweet! Nice work.