Reviews by Narya
Child of Storms by Anwyn Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 26]
Summary: Twenty and five years have passed since the Great Battle on which the fate of Middle Earth teetered in delicate balance. Much of the darkness has now been purged from the lands which grow green and fertile once more.

Far into the rolling lands of the North a child was born into this time of blossoming peace, to grow as homes are once again rebuilt.

This is the first story of my original character, Anwyn which I am putting together piece by piece, Its already finished but now I am bringing it together.

Please note that this story was written cooperatively with xFanarix whose fanfic is also posted on this site.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Eldarion, Elphir, Eomer, Eowyn, Faramir
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Drama, Fantasy, Romance
Warnings: Incest, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 87 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 200148 Read Count: 105108
Published: 09/09/07 Updated: 17/11/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Grief and Hope Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oh! :-( Poor Eowyn - and poor Eomer, but especially Eowyn, having to give away her child. I loved the way you portrayed the bond between them; as you probably already know, I have a soft spot for those two, and for the Rohirrim in general.

I've been meaning to read this for a while now, and so far I've loved it; on to chapter two!

Author's Response: Hello Narya! Thank you so much for the review! I just only now clued in that there were some new reviews, and that always makes me happy, new reviews :) Yes, I always felt bad about doing that to Eowyn but still while this story is pretty much AU I am still writing in the margins of what could have been but was not spoken of or known and so I had to do it though I respect Eowyn and Eomers characters a great deal I don't think such a thing would have been easy for anyone to do even the very strong. Oh yes, I definately have a soft spot for the Rohirrim, I find their culture so abseloutely fascinating. I am so incredibly pleased to hear you are enjoying it! It took me forever to write and then finish off this story but I enjoyed it a great deal so I am so pleased when I hear someone is enjoying reading it, It is the cherry on top for me :)
Date: 23/03/09
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: A forgotten acquaintance Reviewer: Narya Signed
Ooh, the plot thickens! I wonder who Armelle is?

"Lady Whitelocks"...cute :-)

Author's Response: It will only continue to thicken further from here on then, I could tell you who Aremelle is but that would of course ruin the surprise! ;) LOL, Thank you, I must admit that the name "Whitelocks" was inspired by Theodens mount who was also a grey and Anwyn adds "Lady" to it just to be respectful to the horse.
Date: 12/04/09
Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 12: In the company of the King Reviewer: Narya Signed
Hi, Anwyn - sorry for not reviewing in a while! I have been reading, but I've been extremely busy with university deadlines and consequently have been very lazy about leaving comments *slaps wrists*

Anyway, I'm still really enjoying this, and thought I'd better let you know! I like the tension and awkwardness that now exists between Eadbearn and Anwyn, although I miss the closeness they enjoyed in earlier chapters. Poor girl; I hope they can salvage something out of their relationship, though considering Eadbearn's behaviour I'm not sure how likely that is.

Elfwine seems like a very nice young man indeed, bold and cheeky but also sweet :-) do I detect a hint of romance?

Author's Response: Hello Narya! Oh please do not worry, I always apprechiate reviews but I do understand that you are very busy with your University courses so there is no need to applogize :) I am so incredibly pleased to hear you are still enjoying the story. I think that having tension and ackwardness between siblings as they grow older is a natural thing in some ways as Anwyn is no longer the young girl that only wanted to follow that Eadbearn has always known but has a mind of her own which she wants to follow so it is strange for them both as she no longer 'need's' her older brother as she once did. I don't want to ruin the upcoming chapters so I really cannot say alot more than that XD A hint of flirting certainly ;) Though you will find out in chapters coming up why nothing could really become of it. I always invisioned Elfwine being bold like his Father Eomer, but also sweet like his mother Lothloriel and having the usual cheekiness of being a young man.
Date: 03/05/09
Summary: A short story about what Gollum might have been thinking before he lost the ring and Bilbo found it.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Gollum
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 447 Read Count: 1592
Published: 20/09/07 Updated: 20/09/07 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
He thought they might be called flowers, but he couldn’t be sure.

This line is truly poignant - my personal high point of a very well-written story. Your grip on Gollum/Smeagol's character is excellent and you've clearly thought carefully about the structure of the piece - you haven't wasted a word. I think the way you chose to end it was perfect, too; the last line offers closure for the reader, because we know what comes after, but also a hint of sadness, because we know the agony this incident caused Gollum.

You are absolutely right that Gollum is a difficult character to write about - I've had several goes myself and got nowhere. Nevertheless, he's one of my favourite characters in the book, and I'm always interested to see what other authors make of him. I liked your interpretation very much.

As for your wanting to be an author - I think you've got the talent there. Just keep practising.

Author's Response: le hannon, Narya! All I can really say is thank you. I am so glad you liked the story. I really did give it a lot of thought, even though its just a short piece, and I'm glad to know that you enjoyed it. Thanks for your encouraging words! ~Hennie Elsilim
Date: 25/02/09
Summary: While on his way to visit his old home in Imladris, Aragorn is captured. Elrohir, Elladan and Legolas have to rescue him before its to late.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Glorfindel, Legolas, Orcs/Uruk-Hai
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 17297 Read Count: 22949
Published: 29/09/07 Updated: 01/11/07 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Captured! Reviewer: Narya Signed
Well done again, Henoluin; the combat scene is gripping and tightly written, and Aragorn's longing for his family is very touching.

I don't have time to read all of this now (it's nearly midnight here in Scotland!) but I'll come back and read the rest soon, I promise.

Take care,

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Narya! Take your time reading the rest. Its not going anywhere! :) I have never had one of my combat scenes called "gripping" before. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks again! ~Hennie Elsilim
Date: 23/03/09
Summary: Alianariasėaefala Oenalarsafalothanarien Jaharanalercotania is the most beautiful girl in all of Middleearth. As are Zenara Warrior Princess Ranger of the North, Brittney Julia Rebecca Mary Sue Sarah Brianna Forest, and Aquamarine Moonbeam Sunlight Stardust Flowerpetal Fairyglitter Waterstone Firebird. They are slowly taking over the world . . . and none have the power to stop them . . . except for one.
Enter Gimli Son of Gloin.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Gimli, Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Horror, Humor, Parody
Warnings: Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1425 Read Count: 2272
Published: 04/01/08 Updated: 04/01/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: "Not more of them!" Reviewer: Narya Signed
Nice job Freya; this is really funny :) several different types of Mary Sue in one eyes ache from the beauty...well done.

Author's Response: Thanks! The most fun was trying to think of a sue, and then think up the names... :D
Date: 13/02/09
Summary: I wrote this for a Tolkien class I took in the Spring of 2007. It wound up getting me a 4.0 in the class too! :D Anyway, it's a oneshot about Boromir and Faramir when they were younger, and how their relationship was.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Boromir, Faramir
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1783 Read Count: 3008
Published: 08/01/08 Updated: 08/01/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
That made me cry. It's not something a lot of writers manage, believe me. Sibling stories always have a big effect on me as I'm extremely close to my own brother and sister, and you wrote so convincingly of Boromir and Faramir's bond. Also, your portrayal of Boromir himself was excellent; too many fanfics paint him as a straightforward villain, which does him a huge disservice.

Thank you for this. Take care,
Date: 18/02/09
Gondor by Henoluin_Elsilim Rated: G [Reviews - 3]
Summary: A short poem.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 76 Read Count: 1330
Published: 31/03/08 Updated: 31/03/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: GONDOR Reviewer: Narya Signed
I like this a lot. Your depiction of Gondor inspires a real sense of pride and awe in the reader; nice work!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm always a little iffy about letting people read my poetry so your review helps me a feel better about it. =)
Date: 23/03/09
Heart of Rhūn by Formegil Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 24]
Summary: Two thieves and foster-brothers from Minas Anor get the job of their lives when they are hired to steal the legendary Heart of Rhūn. Or so they thought... The quest proves to be harder than they ever expected, sending them on an eventful and dangerous journey across Middle-Earth. The story starts in late 1304 Third Age (1700 years pre-LOTR).
14/06/2009 - This story is nominated for Middle-Earth Fanfiction Awards (MEFA) 2009 competition.

Categories: Book-verse Characters: Gandalf / Olorin, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 96924 Read Count: 29344
Published: 01/07/08 Updated: 05/08/11 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Stranger in the Night Reviewer: Narya Signed
I don't think the idea of a Thieves' Guild is particularly far-fetched; I like it as a concept :)

I see this got nominated for a MEFA - congratulations!! How did you do, if you don't mind me asking?

Author's Response: Oh, I don't mind in the least. Frankly, I didn't do too well, since my story was the last one in its category. I don't feel bad about that, though. My competitors were quality writers and I felt honoured enough when my story got nominated. I also suppose it would have been too ambitious to expect an award from the first ever writing competition I entered.
Date: 01/02/10
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Sarge's Visit Reviewer: Narya Signed
Nicely nicely...I enjoy reading about OCs and areas of Middle-earth that Tolkien didn't give us much canon info on. You've created your own little "world-within-a-world" here, which I love; you evoke the atmosphere of working-class Minas Anor perfectly, and I'm enjoying the banter between the two brothers. Well done.

Author's Response: Ah, so I succeeded in what I was trying. I went purposely for more gritty and vulgar atmosphere than in Tolkien's writing. The old Professor was a wonderful writer, but to my tastes he didn't give enough space to the average man of the street of Gondor or Rohan. I mean, we learned more even of the lives and attitudes of the Orcs! When it comes to dialogue, it's sometimes a sort of Achilles' heel for me. At times I tend to write it too heavy and preachy, so I give special attention to it. It's a particular challenge to give every character his/her own "voice", but a challenge I really enjoy.
Date: 01/02/10
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: An Unexpected Visitor Reviewer: Narya Signed
He wondered again why a fortune-teller or magician had to be dressed like a fool to be believed

This made me giggle!

I'm sorry I've come to this story so late; I kept seeing the summary and meaning to read it, but other things always seemed to get in the way. Anyhow, I've got a bit of time now, so I can work through :) I'm enjoying it so far; I love your characters, and the sense of humour in the tale!

Author's Response: No reason to be sorry, I'm always glad to have new readers. I'm happy that the story is to your liking. As for the characters, I strive to make my characterization believable and as non-Sueish as possible. It's actually more fun to write that way. Also, sometimes I can't resist putting a little pun or gibe in the narrative. Sort of lightens the mood IMHO.
Date: 01/02/10
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: The King of Pentacles Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oooh. Creepy. Falasmir's collections were most unnerving; I love the way you build atmosphere in this story, I had goosebumps for much of this chapter.

I also enjoyed the brothers' nostalgia for their home in Chapter 4 - a nice touch that added depth to both their characters.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Chapter 5 was definitely one of the most fun to write this far. At first I feared Falasmir was a bit over the top, but it seems many readers like him. I originally intended to make him less psychotic, but this version was more intriguing.
Date: 04/02/10
Orc Talk! by Kitt Otter Rated: PG [Reviews - 9]
Summary: Young Legolas learns a new word and his older brother learns to be more prudent. MEFA 2008 Nominee.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Legolas, Thranduil
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1721 Read Count: 1908
Published: 03/07/08 Updated: 03/07/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Orc Talk! Reviewer: Narya Signed
"The others murmured in grim agreement – never minding none of them had ever seen an Orc up close."

LOL - sounds like a lot of guys I know at uni (though generally they aren't talking about Orcs ;-D )

A sweet little short fic, and I loved the ending. Well done.

Author's Response: Heehee. Uni guys... Yeah, the adolescent Elves were modeled largely on my brothers; honestly, the things they'll say when they think no one's listening... Danke for reading! Finding this review was a nice surprise. :D
Date: 15/05/09
Summary: In Moria, Legolas takes his watch and something watches him. MEFA 2008 nominee.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Gollum, Legolas
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 725 Read Count: 1838
Published: 03/07/08 Updated: 03/07/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Hidden Watcher Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oooh...creepy stuff, very atmospheric! Well done.

Author's Response: I hoped to make it a little creepy. Thanks! Now the way Tolkien did it always gave me the creeps: tons of rock over their head in abandoned mines Gandalf knows well is overrun by demons and one wrong step and they could be lost forever… and then they hear a distant doom, doom… Sorry ramble. *g* I appreciate your comments. -Kitt
Date: 25/11/08
Difficult by meerkatalex Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 6]
Summary: This is just an attempt at what happened after that big battle when Merry defeated that Witch-King. What if there were side-effects? Pippin will find it difficult to bear the consequences and Merry will feel vulnerable. Sequel up soon!
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Eowyn, Faramir, Merry, Pippin
Genres: Angst, Drama, General, Tragedy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Series: Cute Merry-Pippin stories!
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1920 Read Count: 1468
Published: 06/07/08 Updated: 06/07/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Merry awakes. Reviewer: Narya Signed
Yes, you have captured the characters perfectly, not just "alright" :-) I loved the Faramir/Eowyn moment (two of my favourite characters there!) and the part about Farmer Maggot giving the hobbits free carrots made me chuckle.

There are a couple of little spelling nitpicks, but they're few and very minor, more a job for a beta reader than a casual reviewer; overall this is a wonderful little one-shot, touching and sensitive. I think you've depicted Pippin's anxiety and the bond between the two hobbits in an extremely realistic way; Merry's fears for Pip brought a lump to my throat. I also think you've written the voices of all the characters accurately as well - they sound like they do in the book, whereas too many authors put modernisms and awkward phrasing into their mouths. You've avoided this trap and told a lovely story. Well done.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you for the review Narya! The constructive critisism is welcomed with open arms; and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Again, thanks for reviewing and I hope you enjoy my other stories!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you for the review Narya! The constructive critisism is welcomed with open arms; and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Again, thanks for reviewing and I hope you enjoy my other stories!
Date: 03/05/09
Summary: A poem on eowyn's thoughts throughout the two towers and return of the king.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Eowyn
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1260 Read Count: 1517
Published: 01/09/08 Updated: 01/09/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
Hi, elfenears! Nice to see you did post some of your work in the end, I hoped you would after I read your review for "In Defence of What We Do."

I see you're from Leeds - do you mean Leeds in the UK? If you do, that's where I was born :) I'm living in Scotland at the moment though.

Anyway, about your poem - I liked it. Eowyn is one of my favourite characters, but that wasn't the only reason; you've clearly got a strong grip on her personality and thoughts, and I felt the last two stanzas in particular showed a lot of insight into her feelings. In places I felt that you almost wanted to go into prose, though, and in places your tenses were slightly mixed up, but nothing too serious - that's the kind of thing that improves with practice.

A really good job for your first poem. I'll definitely keep my eyes open for your stuff in the future.

Author's Response: yes City of Leeds, i'm a Yorkshire lass. glad you liked my poem, i've always loved the character of eowyn and wanted to write about her ever since i first read the books. i'll work on improving and should be posting some stories in the near future. thanks for the review x
Date: 16/02/09
Summary: Legolas and Arwen have been friends since infancy. They discuss thoughts and fears under a moonlit sky.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Arwen
Genres: General
Warnings: First Draft
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 866 Read Count: 2311
Published: 17/09/08 Updated: 01/11/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
Hi, just wanted to say well done with this; you have a real way with words and your descriptive passages are gorgeous. Something to bear in mind for your next post, though - be careful with your capital letters. I'm sure when you omit them it's just a typo, but it looks slightly jarring on the page...well, screen, I suppose.

I liked this a lot though, xFanarix is right, you do have a gift. It would be good to see more from you soon - I'll keep my eyes open for your stuff.

Take care.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's great to hear from you.I'm hoping to post more soon. Thanks again!
Date: 25/11/08
Summary: The top 5 most annoying things for characters from LOTR.
Categories: Movie-verse, Crossovers Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Balrog, Boromir, Elrond, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Legolas, Merry, Pippin, Sam, The Fellowship
Genres: Parody
Warnings: None
Series: Parodies
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 632 Read Count: 20418
Published: 24/09/08 Updated: 11/01/09 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: Five Ways to Annoy Gimli Reviewer: Narya Signed
Gimli as Sanat - I love it!!!
Date: 28/10/08
Title: Chapter 1: Five Ways to Annoy Legolas Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oops, I meant Santa. *Blush*

Author's Response: te he he, yeah Gimli's face would be sooooo funny!
Date: 28/10/08
Summary: Valinor/Middle Earth communications in the Fourth Age.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Celeborn, Frodo, Galadriel, Sam
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: Arda Musings
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 507 Read Count: 1865
Published: 02/10/08 Updated: 02/10/08 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Letters from the Undying Lands Reviewer: Narya Signed
I never thought of that aspect of Middle Earth ship building before - in fact I never really thought about ship building at all, to be honest - but now that you've pointed it out, I agree that it does make sense. A logical explanation for one of the Professor's loose ends that opens up some great plot opportunities.

It bugs me when purists start harping on about violations of canon. This is fan fiction, for crying out loud, people! We are free to do what we will with our versions of Middle Earth. My philosophy is just don't read it if you don't like it; it seems unfair to leave a review just to tell an author that they haven't followed canon to the letter.

End of rant.

Author's Response: Most of my stories take place in the Fourth Age, so I think I'm justified in introducing technical innovations which I believe are within the abilities of Gondorian engineers. I think it likely that Tolkien would have done the same if he wrote later sequels to "Lord of the Rings".

I confess that I've occasionally pointed out minor canon violations to new authors, but I've also advised them, if they haven't already done so, to give their story an AU warning if they wish to change Middle Earth history. I'm certainly not a purist and never tell anyone in my reviews that they can't write a story exactly the way they want it to be.
Date: 16/01/09